Equestria is in the middle of a nightmare, between the ruler Celestia and her rebelling sister Luna. Metyllisk, G.A.A and head of the PROTOMAK divisions, is the only one who can help end the war. As much as he wants to fight without help, one of his proteges, Rainbow-347, birth name Rainbow Dash, softens him enough to have him swallow his pride and get some help from her.
This story follows these two ponies as their own hooves weave the threads of fate for a war-razed Equestria... but at the ultimate price...
Chapters (1)
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Nah man, see the light of The New Eclipse Alliance. The NEA will guide you!
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Some pretty good feedback, I must admit. Let's see if I can't handle this...
1.) I did rush it, I will admit that. I was trying to decide pretty early on if I wanted this to be short or long. I decided short, because 15 pages is longer than most of what I write, anyway. It was a tough decision, and I feared it would impact the plot development, but I tried my best without getting boring.
2.) By the very nature of this being... well, not Earth, but rather, Equestria, a war would be very different. And this really wasn't what you'd call an "exciting" war. Pretty much all that was happening was destruction, death, and the general disintegration of Equestria. Think of it as an End of Times war,
3.) I didn't really notice that at first. I primarily do that because I use a 4-7 line paragraph writing style, and my font size restricts how much anypony could say in one paragraph.
4.) Oh, to hell with the Lunar Republic.
Just going to contribute my 2 cents with the Argument above.
FUCK THE SOLAR EMPIRE, FUCK THE NeW LUNAR REPUBLIC, FUCK THE NEA, AND FUCK YOU GUYS.........OH AND FCK DISCORD!!!!!
Elements of Chaos and Elements of Harmony, and Elements of Anarchy are were its at.
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You see that comment above?
Thats for YOU guys.
415352>>416086>>415981
You're all wrong. You wish to know who's really gonna win out in the end?
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I shall now actually go read the story
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What Now?
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About the story: all in all I agree with Emerald up there. A little rushed and the dialogue is screwed up. Otherwise, not too bad
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The explosion AIN'T AN Argument, its an ACTION!!!!
SO< your argument is Invalid son.
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I see your point, and I respond to it with this:
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ITS TOO LATE.
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But... But..
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ITS TOO LATE!
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It can't be. It just.... CAN'T BE!!
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Well...IT IS!!!
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Oh please. I eat randomness for brunch. That's right. Brunch. Because brunch is epic and no pony should live without it. Also, deliciousness in food form. Of course, most deliciousness comes in food form. Other deliciousness comes in sex form but that's a tad off topic. Of course, I'm not trying to stay on topic. Or am I? Wait, what was the topic again?
416275: FUCK THAT.fuck you, fuck Celestia, fuck her parents, pizza will overrule us,then theworldwillcometoastopwhenallthewaterisgonesothenwewillhavetodrinkthebloodofoursiblingstosurvive,itssurvivalofthefitetsdude,sowehaveonlysomesurvivorsmeincluded.
Whatknowyoudouche.ramdomnessdefeated
416288:SEX......IS THE bEST.Withoutsextheircannotbelifesinceweneedittorepreproduce.Thenagainwecouldalwaysrapesomepersonbyutthatsagainstthelawandyoucouldgotojailandgetrapedintheassbydudestherewhichisjustwrong.
416288:Picture Fail.
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Edit. Win.
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Fail.
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25%of all americans own dildos. Most of mexicans don't own jobs, most african americans are blamed for crimes they had nothing to do with. Asians clame to be intelligent but everyone else says that they have a small penis. How would they know this without them looking at it in the first place, so that makes most americans and other people from other countries who have ever said this gay. Japanese are the most hostile of countries, yet they are the suckiest of places as well. Chinese have the hardest language to understand yet know a shit load than us.
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I don't bow to anybody......NOBODY!
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416352: HAH, you think Pinkie/Pinkamina can do anything to stop me?
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How did I get 30 comments on a story with NONE of them being about the STORY?
Great story, I love it, it could be made to be longer, but still amazing.
I always had such a problem with length. My longest work was 72 pages, and it has an ENDLESS plot.