You...Scare me okay!
“There's only six of you!”
Stan flinched at the princesses outburst. He could of sworn he saw her eyes go red for a second. “C-calm down, I meant there’s only six of us that are not incapacitated, the rest are either injured or...well, you know.”
“Dead…” Celestia said in a grave tone of voice. She was beginning to understand why it was just him who came. “But what about Chrysalis?”
“She’s...she’s okay, she's just...um…” Stan didn’t want to tell her about the queen, he still didn’t trust her. What if she was just getting information so she could plan an attack. Fear or no fear, he wasn’t going to tell her.
Celestia bent down to eye level. “Please tell me chan- Stan, I need to know if your queen has survived or not.”
“Why, what will you do if she’s dead?” Stan looked both suspicious and scared at her, he was beginning to think that she would have an easier time getting rid of his race if she found out.
“Because I need to know if I can talk to either her or whoever is second in command in your hive.” Celestia continued to look as serious as possible to Stan, making him still shake in fear.
“I honestly don’t-”
“Just tell me you bug!” Stan started seeing her monstrous face again, making him reel back in horror.
Stan’s eyes started going wide again. “O-Okay okay!...She...she’s...she’s so injured that she can’t even move without any help from us.” Stan blurted out before shielding his face with his hooves incase he angered the princess to the point of her taking a bite out of his face.
“So it isn’t possible for her to come here?” Celestia said in a more calming voice.
Stan looked through the hole in his hoof to see she was looking at him with a different, more serious face. “Um..yup..hehe, no way for her to make it...completely immobile. C-can I go now?” Stan put on a smile in hopes she would understand she is currently freaking him out, and that he didn’t want to tell anymore secrets to her.
“But why did she bring you here?” Celestia asked, making Stan’s smile vanish.
Stan sighed and pointed at the paper. “She wanted me to bring you that.”
“This?” Celestia grabbed the paper with her magic and looked at it. “It has nothing on it.”
“It use to, it told everything. I just wish I could’ve read it before I soaked it in a puddle.” Stan looked down on the floor, it was getting really hard to stare at her, the more he staired, the brighter her red eyes got.
“I’m sorry for that, but I must know what it said?” Stan was starting to hate how this mare continued to talk like this. That motherly tone was scaring him more than usual.
“I-I don’t know exactly, b-but I do know that she said it was a treaty.”
“A treaty?” Celestia let go of Stan and looked at the paper, trying to find some source of information about their surrender. “You expect peace?”
Stan flinched. Did he hear that right? “W-what?”
Celestia faced him again. “I asked if your queen wanted peace between my little ponies and her changelings.”
Stan shifted his hooves. “W-well, we...don’t really know what else to do…we..” Stan was starting to back up a bit from Celestia constantly looking at him. Her face was starting to return to that look of pure evil.
“You what? Can’t she find others who can help?” Celestia took a step forward every time Stan took a step back, and with her having longer legs, she was getting closer.
“F-finding help is...hard…” Stan started seeing the red in her eyes again.
“Why didn’t you ask for help the first time, we would’ve given it to you!” Stan started hearing that low voice of her’s again to, it sounded just like his brothers when they did their impressions on her.
“We...we...we were...just…just.” Stan yelp one he felt his flank hit the side of wall, had he really been backing up this quick?
“Or were you just trying to enslave us?” Stan was at the point of cowering in fear with this alicorn walking closer and closer to him.
“We...I...she...us…” Stan and sunk to the floor and Celestia had her shadow looming over Stan.
“Well, we’ll kill you before you even try to-”
“PLEASE DON’T” Stan grabbed her hooves and started crying, making Celestia look down in shock. “D-don’t p-p-please, we didn’t do anything, sure we tried to capture your kind to use as food, and we even put you in a cocoon, and r-r-ruined that captain’s and that other alicorn’s wedding, but you need to understand that we had tohohohohooo.”
Celestia started feeling her hooves get wet from the constant crying. She couldn't comprehend what she was seeing. All she asked was why they came here, and why attack, and why they didn’t just ask for food. She opened her mouth to say something, but Stan stiffed snot into his nose and continued talking. “We..we...we weren't even going to attack in the beginning, the plan was to just replace the princess long enough for our queen to get the love that we needed, b-but it was like she changed or some *sniff* something.” Stan hiccuped and continued to cling to Celestia’s feet like a hatchling.
Celestia knew she had to say something to calm him down. She could ask questions later. “W-why did-”
“SHE TURNED EVIL! OKAY!” Stan yelled as Celestia regretted even thinking that. “She said that there was plenty of love to go around.” He said while extending his hoof in the air. “And that if we forgot the plan about sneaking and blending in with the rest of the ponies, than we could have all the love in the world if we went for a full frontal assauhahahhahalt.” Stan made another roar of cries at Celestia’s hooves again.
She tried to think of something, calming him down was the first step to figure this all out, but now it was like she broke him, he wouldn’t let go of her feet, and his constant cries of mercy only made her think that this changeling was...afraid of her.
“Stan…”
“W-we were just following orders…”
“Stan.”
“And...and...and she realized her mistake once we were out.”
“Stan.”
“All we wanted was to live!”
“STAN!” Celestia took hold of him with her magic and brought him to eye level. “Please calm-”
“For queen’s sake DON’T KILL ME!” Stan covered his eyes with his hooves and continued to tremble in fear.
Celestia’s jaw dropped once he said that. “Why would you say something like that? What? Do you think I’m some sort of-”
“Monster.” Stan lowered his hooves to look at her with eyes full of tears. “Y-yeah...I...I do.” Stan looked down in both shame and fear. He was sure that now she was going to-
“So all of this is because you’re...” Celestia looked at him in worry and motioned her hoof for him to answer her.
Stan sighed. “Because I’m...I'm...afraid of you.”
Celestia gave a slight gasp, but Stan ignored that and continued. “You've...you've scared me since I was a hatchling...you...you’ve been in my dreams where you would...try your best to...scare me, or you would just flat out kill me or my friends” He looked down, not wanting to even look at her while he was explaining all of this. “I’ve..I’ve been seeing visions of you throughout this entire journey…I” He looked up at her. “I just hope the stories are not...not…”
Now Stan’s jaw dropped, he had never thought he would see something like this, this was something the others said the white tyrant would never do, something that she would cause only to others. Something that a pony like her can’t do.
She was crying.
Celestia wiped a tear from her eye and held Stan by his sides. “W-where ever did you hear such things little one?”
Stan then remembered just why he was afraid of her. “My...my older siblings, they told me stories about you, how you...killed our kind and ate our bodies and...”
Celestia’s mouth gave a slight wiggle before pulling in Stan for a hug, burying his muzzle in her chest and slightly crushing him while doing so. “I am telling you right now, that I would never do something like that to any creature. I don’t care what you did or what you do. I will never hurt anyone like you.” She closed her eyes and continued her embrace.
“T-that's nice.” Stan grunted. “Now can I...Breathe for a sec?…”
Celestia shot her eyes open and pulled him out from her hug, he let out a gasp of air before she let go of him. “Sorry, I was just...caught up in the moment.” She blushed a bit and looked down at him. “Are you, still afraid of me?”
Stan had to think about that for a second. This alicorn had been haunting him for years, almost every few months he would have a dream of her scaring him, forcing him to sleep with the queen that night, but now he finally understood just why this happened. He knew for a fact his siblings were gonna pay for this.
He looked up at her again. Her face wasn’t scary at all, her teeth weren't sharp, her eyes weren’t glowing red, and she had a smile that didn’t make him afraid, but made him...happy. It was making him smile. So, after a quick laugh, he said. “No, I don’t think I’m scared of you anymore.”
Celestia gave a sigh of relief. “Good, so, now that that's out of the way, can you tell me more about what state your kind is in?”
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“What is taking them so long?”
Carl continued to walk back and forth in front of the double doors, hoping that they would open soon. Shining was also there, tapping his foot impatiently, as for the rest of the guards, they went back to their posts, not wanting to wait for something like this.
“I don’t know changeling.” Shining said, making Carl glare at him in anger, Shining then realized his mistake and said. “I-I mean, Carl.”
Carl just rolled his eyes and continued walking back and forth. “Stan should’ve come out by now, he’s great at talking his way out of things...or was that Sally who did that?”
Shining tilted his head. “Sally?”
Carl stopped in the middle of the doors and faced him. “Yeah, I think it was her who was good at talking out of stuff, like this one time, she talked her way out of doing her chores."
Shining rubbed his chin and smiled. “Pretty talented girl, were you good at anything?”
Carl smiled, he knew that now noling would stop him from telling his story. He leaned against the doors and rubbed one of his hooves on his chest. “Me? Well, how about I tell you from the beginning.” He cleared his throat. “Now, when I was born, I-”
*SLAM*
Carl was then pushed off the doors and went flying past Shining and into the wall. “I’m okay.” He said, sliding down the wall.
Shining cringed and looked back at the doors to see that they were open. With an alicorn and a changeling beside one another. “Princess, Stan. How did it go?”
Celestia smiled. “It went very well,” She looked down at Stan, who smiled back. “me and Stan were able to-”
“Stan? Stan!” Carl turned around to see his friend, who he then tackled and spun him around while hugging him. “Oh. It’s nice to see you again.”
Stan pushed him off while rolling his eye, but with a smile this time. “I was only gone for a few minutes.”
“Try like, half an hour,” Carl nudged. “and the whole time, I thought for sure that changeling chomper would chain ya up and send you back to the cells.”
Stan looked at the princess, who was raising an eyebrow at his friend. Stan laughed nervously and pulled Carl’s ear stem to his mouth. “Um..Carl, you know she’s not a ‘changeling chomper’ right.”
Carl pulled his ear away from Stan, closed his eyes, and waved a hoof in the air. “Yeah yeah, I know. So, what's the news, did you guys talk it out?”
Stan looked at Celestia, who just winked at him and smiled. “You could say that.”
Carl raised an eye and smiled. “Oh...I see, so how was the ‘negotiating?’”
Stan smacked him again. “Not that kind of talking!”
Celestia walked up to them and pulled them in with her wings. “We just talked about how your’s and our kind are now at peace, and that we will be helping the changelings get back to health.”
Carl looked at Stan in confusion. “Wait...you guys are hurt?”
Stan just smiled at him and looked up at Celestia. “Not for long I hope.”
Shining walked up to the three of them. “So...now what. Will you be going back to your hive?”
Stan nodded. “Yup, and I’ll be sure to tell the queen that we’ll be getting help from you guys. Right?”
Celestia nodded and looked at Shining. “Indeed, and I’m sure your team can aid them, correct?”
Shining crossed his hooves and glared at both the changelings. “I don’t know, they destroyed my wedding and their queen practically brainwashed me.” Both Stan and Carl flopped their ears down, thinking this captain still held a grudge, but Shining just smiled and extended a hoof. “But I’m sure they won’t do it ever again, and will make up for the mistake, right?”
Stan and Carl came out of their wing hug and shook his hoof. “You can count on it.” Stan said.
“Well, lets get a move on.” Shining craned his neck to the doors leading outside. “Your queen's waiting.”
Celestia started walking out, Stan was about to do the same, but Carl tugged on him. “Should I stay here? I don’t want the queen to hate me when she sees me, I hate it when others hate me?”
Stan tugged him back and started walking again. “Oh, come on man, I’m sure she won’t hate ya if you come with us. She might even praise you for what you've done.”
Carl tilted his head. “But, what did I do?”
Stan shrugged and put a hoof on the outside door. “You helped me get here, that's enough for an achievement.”
Carl smiled and held his head high. “You're right, and I will help you from here on out. No matter what the danger is, I will be at your side.”
Stan laughed and opened the doors. “Carl please, I don’t think there’s anything else that will...w-w-wi-will….” Stan froze, making Carl curious.
“Uh, Stan, you’re making that face again.” He stepped outside and looked where Stan was looking. “What are you even looking a-a-ahahaaahahaaat…”
Both Stan and Carl went wide eyed as they saw what was next to Shining and Celestia at the bottom of the stairs. It was the most horrifying thing they had ever seen. Both of them had heard of this creature from their older brothers before, how it chewed on bones, how it ripped flesh, how it drank blood. It was the...the-
“Oh Stan, Carl. Nice of you two to finally come out here.” Celestia waved at them and turned toward to what Stan and Carl were looking at. “I’d like you to meet a...friend of mine. His name is Discord. He’s, well...nice when you get to know him.” Celestia smiled nervously while Discord flew up to the changelings.
“Ah, you must be the fresh meat right off the street; name's Discord, recently reformed, so tell me a little bit about yourselves.”
Both Stan and Carl held one another and screamed. “I-its...its..its El Discordtalantilo!" Stan said while pointing at him.
“HIDE YOUR HATCHLINGS!" Carl screamed as they ran back inside, shutting the doors behind them.
The others stood there in amazement once the doors closed. Discord looked at Celestia and shook his head. “You meet the strangest creatures princess. I’m surprised you haven’t scared any of them yet.”
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I'd like to thank you, you, you, you to the right, you in the back, the person reading this, and the rest of you I can't really point out.
You have all made me put a lot of effort into this story, and that's a good thing.
I've only been proud of two fics out of the others I wrote.
And with this being one of them, I can't say anything more without being cliché.
So I hope you liked this story.
And I hope you like the other one's I'll create in the future.
In the mean time. I leave you with a smile on my face.
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Very well done.
Damn it, Discord!
Great story, it's been fun. Though I wish we could see what happens after, I understand that the whole premise of this story was a changeling terrified to death of Celestia, and now that its done anything else would be dragging it out.
*snerk* Discortalantilo!
Your*
that's*
Some of those changelings have a wild imagination don't they...
Lol
Omg I pray that's an opening for a part 2
But anyway good story I enjoyed reading it though a few things did make me think
1:shinning armor too eager to help I could get it if he said he wanted to make up for killing a lot of them
2: discod. You opened this up for a part 2 lol and I'm sure discord would love to scare them hehe
3.what happened to the changelings? That's something that should be answered in a part 2. Or epolog . I mean what happened did they make it ontime or is the race dead?
But all in all good story enjoyed reading it a lot and for a first story it was well done ^^
Awesome. Laughs and feels from start to finish. I don't think I could want much more from this fanfic (other than a cure for the common cold).
That ending was just so wrong. I wonder what else older changelings tell the younger ones?
Pretty good story, though I did find several things you may want to edit.
That should be a question mark.
I think that should be "tried".
You're missing a quotation mark at the end of this sentence.
That should be "queen's".
And that should be "name's". I really hope to see more.
I love it!
...........................................this so needs a sequel.
There was no other way this story could have ended.
LOL! From one scare to another. Poor guys. I both feel like laughing and feeling sorry for them.
Hide yo hatchlings, Hide yo workers!
And hide your drones, too, because everyone is getting discorded tonight!
Stan was a character we all could love, and following him on his journey was a lot of fun. I don't see any reason it wouldn't be featured. We need more simple fun for everyone stories like this. I was actually excited for these updates, they where a bright part of the day.
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Dude you just made a sequel for yourself in the part of the chapter with El Discordtalantilo.Lmao this story is so good.
That ending got me. Oh Discord. Made me laugh for like 5 minutes. Oh lordy!
A perfect end to this great story! Stan over comes his fear, ponies and changelings find peace, and Chrysalis gets redeemed... and then came the punchline of Discord. Since you already got received my overall opinion on this story, so without repeating myself, I'll just add that the ending was indeed fantastic and that I wish you luck with your next one.
Very amusing and entertaining. Poor Carl never got to tell his life story or why he left the hive. A sequel staring Carl is in order!! XD
Are you making a sequel? Dont say no to Fluttershy...
I liked this story a lot, but by far my favourite thing was the changeling names, truly awesome
I for one would love to see a Sequal to this depicting the intergration of the Changelings into pony Civialation!
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
Best. Name. Ever...of all time.
Great chapter by the way. I've been waiting for a Stan/Celestia moment the whole story! My brain, for some reason, keeps saying "So much yes!" to this actually being an episode (Only, you know, with less death).
Keep up the talent!
Loooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooolz
Discordtalantilo
Discord-tal-ant-ilo
Discord the ant lion
pleas tell me i wasn't the only one who's mind went in that direction.
Sequel please!!! Discordophobic!!!
Outstanding.
Hey, but this story needs an epilogue! How about the trip back to Crysalis and settling things with her? What about a heart-warming moment with all of them sharing a group hug?
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So you guys want a sequel...
well...I have an Idea for one....I guess I can show you a sneak peak
but not here...The spoilers at my place.
bring jawbreakers
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ROFLS!!!!!!!!THAT WAS HILARIOUS!!!!!!!!! *pant* *pant* Awesome ending amigo, I can't wait to see if you do that sequel idea. I hope its as funny as this was.
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It seems to me the changelings must have read all the Tyrantlestia and Psycho Discord grimdarks fics on this site.
4531933 Have an internet.
A fitting end to a nice little slice-of-life-y story.
*Pats on back* Well done you.
Oh, but while you're in between stories, work on your goddamn grammar!
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But seriously, there has been an improvement since the first chapter. Oh, and have a follow while I'm here.
What did Discord do to make the Changelings so scared of him too? DAMNIT I WANT TO BE THOSE CHANGELINGS!
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I can't stop laughing! XD
This was a great story. I especially loved the scene between Stand and Celestia; a very heartwarming moment. All I can recommend is work on your grammar and punctuation a bit more and you can really write great things.
4534349 lol ok cool!
4523872 Now I've seen everything. On a unrelated note.
Good Job. Talking to you, Doc Atlas
Adorable.
Madre de dios! it's El Discordia Diablo!!
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Ouch
Just...ouch...
When I see a notification about someone commenting on a story, I'm usually happy to see what they say, but you.
You just....
where to start with you...
First of, where in the rules of writing does it say to not use normal names.
I just thought using regular names would be better than nag'su or masu'ses or chic'era.
I've seen way too many changelings named stuff like that, so I wanted to use something original by being unoriginal.
Plus, I thought it would be ironic for them to have normal names while ponies had silly ones, but it seems you hate that, so I apologizes for it.
Second, I was just ten seconds into your comment, and I already knew it was gonna be bad, maybe if you actually pointed out the mistakes I made instead of just saying them. (like, examples of where you think I could do better in your eyes.) That would be helpful instead of just saying how 'god awful' it is, and I, again, apologize that its a bad fic, I just thought of something off the top of my head and decided to write it down, but I guess that's wrong too.
And its pretty disgraceful to look at the bad instead of the good of a story.
Like the idea of the story,
or the characters,
or the sense of humor,
or the other seven chapters, that are probably better than the three, you decided not to read...I think...
I understand its your opinion, and your criticisms, but I'd rather not hear it.
tch about it.
As a narrator once said.
I don't need your advice.
I don't need your ratings,
and I certainly don't need the validation of a person who decided to comment on how bad s/he thought the story was and provide their own opinion just to make the writer b
Yes, I was quoting the Stanley parable.
Hopefully you're not one of those TL;DR types and made it here to know that I do have someone to help with the rest of my stories.
So, if you wan't to continue talking about what else I can do to 'improve' my story in your eyes, or you just want to say *your* or "must of...its must've you idiot." or whatever I need to do to correct my story, then go ahead.
I honestly do not care about what else you have to say. I have heard it before.