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There once was a time, long before the ponies came together to build their great nation, when spirits and fae creatures roamed the land. A man, little more than a boy, was brought into the land as a sylvan, a soul locked into a tree. He has a tale that the Sisters do not want their subjects to know. Thus they ensnared him, tricked him, and wounded him greatly as to keep the then ancient beast silent. But little did they know that no one can silence great forest he called his home, his kingdom

The Everfree...


Any and all Olde Tymey style dialouge is written by NewKidOnTheBlock He is also my editor. He is the TITS!
Yeah, jumping on this bandwagon with the LoHAV gang. Seems that I can't seem to get away from the wood motif. This was initially inspired by Headless, Not Heartless and various others, but only now do I actually get to it.

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Comments ( 87 )
Sue

Wow, pretty good. But what's "LoHAV"?

4466079 It's an abbreviation of the name of a popular group/multiverse called League of humans acting villainous.

Sue

4466194 Oh shit, I forgot I was in that group.

OK then, interesting chapter, nicely done with the intro to the forest, and I also like the idea of slenderman acting sort of the chief guard. Great job, keep goin and stay golden^^

The Brazilian whore thing seemed out of place...

More plz this looks promising

Another one joins the bandwagon. Welcome, welcome.

I'm surprised this bandwagon can fit any more passengers. Still, it was... a good read. I'll give it a follow.

oh ho ho ho
slendy is there aswell?
what a suprise
i shall wait for more to come

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I didn't intend for that to happen, but I got the idea after listening to the Slenderman Song over and over

4466725 IT really isn't if you actually know me. I use that A LOT in similar phrasings.

4467087 PLease, the bandwagon is made of rubber, it just keeps on stretching!

Picks up a twig and becomes an ent, best start to one of these stories I've read so far :pinkiehappy:
Is he with the breezies atm?

Well this is a good start! Your Early Modern English is... oddly done, to say the least, but it's all technically correct. Except for that use of "ye"; one does not use "ye/you" in the same passage of "thou/thee" without the speaker gaining respect for the addressed. I suppose he could respect Scootaloo suddenly a lot more, but it's doubtful. Basically, it should be "and now must thou return'st home", I think. I'm not too sure how that would work, to be honest. I've not encountered it in my memory, and I can't think how it might work.

Nicely done, other than that. I can't wait to read more!

4468796 Huh... I don't remember using ye.... I'll have to take a gander at that. And mostly his speech is more of a farce to make himself seem wiser and older. And to also fit in when he last had contact with the outside world.

Edit: Found it! Yeah, it should have been a thee.

4468361 No, in the early years, when the fae creatures roamed the land, the world was afr mor heavily immersed in magic, but due to things that will be explained later, many of the fae types had to relocate to another "world". More like a pocket dimension or something.

4468989 Huh. In that case, call artistic license and be done with it! Or you could call (i.e. PM) me and I could try to rewrite it to make it more old-timey and still have the same meaning.

4469006 I might have to take you up on that offer some time. Possibly with the Lunas.

4469015 By the Night Angels, please. Please do that. I'm sick of seeing bad Luna-talk. It makes me sad when people don't bother to either get help or Google how to speak in EModE.

Also, feel free to take this as an application for the generic position of editor if you want, for any of your stories.

TGM

The everfree forest itself- in the LoHAV verse. :rainbowlaugh:

This should be interesting. Looking forward to more!

Isn't that the tree thing from Dragon Age?

4470177 Why, yes indeed! You know, funny story, I recently was replaying DAO and after I finished Headless, not Heartless and I got to the Grand Oak, the idea for this story took root and swiftly grew into what you see now.

This is pretty awesome!

Love it! Hope to see more.

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What the eff? I thought you only frequented the cheezburger site.......learn something new every eons eh?

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Bitch please, I started a whole group here dedicated to the destruction of your show!

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And there it is, the uber we all know and love; good luck on your blam spree

4472385 good luck you say?:rainbowhuh: eh nothing to do here.

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A series of some of the most entertaining stories I've had the pleasure of reading on this site.

Basically only click on this cause i recognized Dragon age: Origins from the picture is that the old rhyming oak or just one of the random trees?

4476684 Yes, that is a picture of The Grand Oak, though I will not be using him at all. It is more of a place holder for awhile.

How does this manage to have no character tags? :rainbowhuh:

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xD
I just didn't think it was possible to upload it without them(same goes for the genre tags). I've never left them out but I guess I just assumed it wouldn't let the story get posted unless it had at least one of each.

I liking just for the cover image:pinkiecrazy:

The title caught me because it's one of the lyrics in Marilyn Manson's the beautiful people

4488233 Oooooooohhhh.... I have something else to listen to when writing.

Why can't it all just be in the third person perspective?

Other than that, while it is a LoHAV, you are using an original character, and not just stuffing yourself into an established one.
So what, is Slendy another convention goer who chose the melted wax?

4488928 As to the first question, it is more for practice than anything else. I usually write first person, but I wanted to try third person a bit, so I made the flashbacks into third so that I didn't have to redo the entire thing.

To the second thing, I tend to do that. it makes it so I can break away from the group and still have a mostly original story.
As to the Slenderman question, I can't answer that without giving away something interesting.

Call me intrigued. Will this be more of a anthology and will have the Rhyming Tree narrating the distant past of both Equestria and the Everfree? If so, there are quite a few things you could do.

4489848 No, and yes. No to the rhyming because I am HORRID and rhymes. And yes to the second because stuff. Expect lotsa world building.

I looked at this cause I recognised the ancient sylvan from dragon age and was like gasp.

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See if you can catch the subtle message conveyed in that song-- really gets you thinking. Now if you'll excuse me, I'll be listening to a few hundred other songs because I am going through a playlist of 600 songs.

4492827 Oh yes, I caught onto that whole 99% revolution thing.

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It has numerous ways to be taken IMO: equality/political/pro/anti. I always thought of it making fun of people who complain about other people having it better than them, and thus complain and gripe, eventually grouping together to strip the greaters (Oaks) of their power through violence (hatchet, axe, and saw) and other nefarious means under the guise of "equal rights" and "unions." Of course, maybe it's the exact opposite, but I always took the "And the maples cried "oppression!"/and the oaks just shook their heads" as the "Maples" complaining about nothing, and the "Oaks" just sighing and shaking their heads because it's an absurd accusation.

Am I wrong? No, but am I right? No. :trollestia:

4492897 One of those open interpretations, but still great music

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Aye, I like Rush because it's open interpretation. Whereas "One" (Metallica) and "Hotel California" (The Eagles) are rather obvious in their meaning, "The Trees" as many. Of course, the writer was very Libertarian, but that still leaves room for many interpretations. Kinda like "Stairway to Heaven" :3.

Nice:pinkiehappy: liking the world building back story

IS Anthrocraft the IP?

I'm geekoid and I want to join

Love this story, and I need more of it.

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