All I can say is, wow.  I always hated the "Cupcakes" concept, but you've turned it into something that is clever, intriguing, and all around entertaining.  This is a great start to what I believe will become an even greater fanfiction.

This is clever. Very, very clever. You deserve congratulations.

But.

It was very dry. Short, non-descriptive, and dry. Expand this madafaka and give him some detail. Please? It was so clever it's hard not to want it blown into correct proportion.

My view: the city being somewhat like the ones in 'Bunraku' or 'The Spirit' (movies). Also, I know who the killer is straight-out, and I like how you allude to it without saying it. I also like how it goes so OOC for the character... but you should give us background.

In short, BIGGEN IT. I wan so bad now. Tracked. But you have to BIGGEN it.

although cupcakes ruined my love for dash, ide still be intrested to see where this story goes, you got a good prolog, so go, go on, write me a story alredy, i wanna read.

I would suggest you keep going with this story. The idea of Pinkamina having a "partner in crime" is very interesting.

i dont particularly like it but it is decently written

Pinkie Pie and Killer Queen....

A much more sadistic version of Bonnie and Clyde?

My interest. You has it.

>>10949141094914 The fanfic.

It hasn't been updated since April.

You can pretty much drop your interest.

>>10952171095217

Shame...