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In the beginning the Universe was created. This has made a lot of people very angry and been widely regarded as a bad move.

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Twilight discovers the true purpose for the Canterlot Royal gardens, much to Princess Celestia's annoyance. Knowing her student will seek answers with or without her permission, the Princess gives Twilight a new subject to study, the story of five of the garden's occupants, their connection to Nightmare Moon, and the dark days of the War of Night.

Warning: Comments are encouraged, but spoilers are present in the comments.

Fic is currently undergoing a very slow revision.  Revised chapters will have a (R) in the title.

Revised chapters that have not had a editor go over them yet will have a [E]

I've also added chapter numbers for a bit more ease of navigation. Mostly on my part.

Tags: Action, Historical, Sad, Humor, Roller Coaster, Violence, Singing, Some Romance

Part 2 is here.


WOOOT featured on Jan 5th 2015 at 2:47 am,  4 years after it's initial publishing!

First Published
1st Nov 2011
Last Modified
22nd Jan 2016

I very much liked this story. and would be very happy to see any sort of extension on this.

I liked the story but its "bearer" not "barer", that irked me a fair amount.

The concept is good and the story is compelling, but the punctuation and formatting are atrocious. It's not just the marked absence of commas and apostrophes throughout much of the text. I'm talking about things as basic as not putting spaces between the last word of a sentence and the period. As basic as only putting one space between words.

At the moment, this story is a diamond in the rough: It's crude and lumpy, but with a little more work, it could really shine.

I liked this story a lot actually and wouldn't mind seeing something done with the characters that are mentioned, if not a new chapter then a pre story going into there stories as the task force would be kind of neat actually.

Time heals all wounds, and this is certainly a story i will keep tabs on. (I saw the same comic on equestria daily btw it was a right good laugh) The main thing you should focus on is the grammer try getting someone to look over what you type would be a good idea, but all in all it's a powerful story even with the errors.

This is a great fix, I am happy to see you extend on it. I'm impatiently wAting for more

another good chapter, much better grammar this time around, and it was much easier to read. I enjoy this story and am definatly gonna keep tabs on it :twilightsmile: I like the further picture this paints of the spirit of generosity, and the dialog between the characters had me laughing on a few occasions. ^^

Comic is Garden Party: Petrified by PumpkinHipHop on DA

loved the drill Sargent! again the characters continue to amuse me good work :pinkiehappy:

I imagined every one of the drill seargent's line in R Lee Ermy's voice!

Very happy to see you continuing this, and i wish for more!

It seems the Royal Canterlot Voice was mildly annoying even back when it was common place. I must admit this story gets more interesting with each chapter. I can't wait to see how it continues.


I would suggest adding a carrige return or two somewhere in that bit of run on rambling.  Looking forward to the next chapter.

Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee I wanna go to the Pinkie Pie fun fair! :pinkiehappy:

That was a pretty good story based off a comic that truly terrified me.

However, the lack of commas in phrases like "if not for Jer'rahd for all five of them" is a severe detriment to the tone. Just put those in and the story will get a LOT better.

i can probably pre read for you just message me k

"Costello: I don't know".

Right before the first use of a bold Third Base.

Loving the story so far.  Next chapter should be interesting, I predict chaos and tragedy.  :pinkiecrazy:

Elder Scrolls reference :rainbowlaugh:

hahahahaha yay its the whos on first base skit i loved doen that skit when i worked at a boy scout camp in CO.

Some letter mixups ill just go and fix those when i go thru your stoy on google docs.

Miiiight wanna trim the "Who's on first?" sketch. It detracts from the narrative flow.

This was awesome, but it really could use a bit of editing. I'd love to see what it'd look like with those errors patched up.

When refering to a military officer, "Sir" or "Ma'am" should be capitalized.  The last portion needs some general cleaning up, ex: you're instead of your, comma placement.  Good use of apples, provides better visualization of the dimensions of things.  Looking forward to reading more!

Chapter 1 is in need of some serious editing. Double spaces between words, spaces on both sides of periods, etc. Other than that this is a great story...just needs a little spacebar quality control.

Another update so soon?  You're crazy.  Also, is her name really "Maw Pelt" or did you you mean "Ma Pelt"?  She's an old battleaxe so I can kind of understand how Maw would be a play on words.  

Wow...This story just keeps getting more and more interesting. Geez last story that was able to pull me in like this was the Wheel of Time books. The bit with Scarlet was just down right mean though. If not for bad luck Jer'rahd would have no luck in relationships. Luna going ballistic on the Order for what happened to Jer'rahd was kinda understandable. Eternal goddess finally makes a new friend after who knows how long since last one was killed and then some Order of jerks decides this one needs to be killed for their own gains. Yeah...I think they got off easy compared to what she could really do to them.

The Pelt family is awesome. I had to admit I wasn't expecting Lucy and Linus until I read the names and it hit me before reading a few lines down and seeing their last name mentioned. Luna and Beuford's meeting was hilarious.

Pinkie Pie has a Critical Fail in cooking. Even with a 1 in 20 chance of it happening it had to happen eventually.

wow....so uhm.... Luna hacked life and godmoded on those order people.... and jeh'rad almsot died.

His girlfriend was a prick and a spy, and the afermentioned prick/spy is now eternally on fire...

from this episode i have gained/lost

-respect for luna +100 -

-fear for pissing Luna off +9001 -

-empathy for characters +9001 -

-hatred for scarlet +100 -

-liking for scarlet and "order people" -10000 -

“Some pony will now face my wrath, no one interrupts my bath.!!” oo scary, lol

saw 1-2+ references in there, 1 being final fantasy with biggs and wedge, can't help but think mustang refers to fullmetal alchemist too though that could be a coincidence


>> Gomegadon    Yes

>> Tyr Remora   in the same chapter when Luna is napping it is refrenced that Celestia took Nocturne to the Garden. And yeah i am trying to work on my grammar and such.

>> MatsuriDream ask and ye shall receive chapter 14 up now

>> Anon E Moose MuWHAHAHAHAHAHA , needs to be a mood swing tag i think

>> Balancer   .... my hands .... they can touch everything but themselves....... oh .... wait....

>> MaxVive   It is Maw, there's a bit of a southern draw on the end i was trying to get across, and I did say in the blog i would have another post up By  the 25 , just in time for the holiday

>> Royal Brisk   I was really hoping that some one would get the Vanpelt joke in there,  What was done brings about the question of which is punishment is worse. Death.which ends the suffering  but removes  any chance of forgiveness. Or being turned to stone, which would think is all suffering but the chance of redemption may come.

>>84556  woot a point system

>>84557  At the start General Mustang was indeed a FMA ref but then he was in place of Colonel Claymore. Then i realized it was a pony pun I promoted him to General and Claymore got the villian spot.

>>84557 Biggs and Wedge were two of the pilots from Star Wars: A New Hope.

Biggs was Luke's friend from Tatooine and didn't make it, Wedge lived through all three movies and became the leader of Rogue Squadron.

Love the name choices, always amusing to recognize them.

Oh this was the perfect Christmas present, thank you so much.  Spending my holiday sitting at work, so this was better than any gift I could unwrap.

and new best pony is drunk luna!

cant wait to see where this is heading :P

Astonishing work!

If you do not consider it spoilers, would you please tell me whether or not you plan on expanding the story (Side stories, continuing the main story, etc.) after Twilight and her friends give their opinions to Luna?


>>85762  Both chars also have been in just about every final fantasy game as well. But even that is a tribute to starwars.

>>87713  :twilightsheepish:   um your welcome.

>>93708  not sure if i want to see the meme's made from that

>>95393  it is not so much a spoiler. the first chapter started as a one shot. After that i was going to write other things, but the feedback was positive enough that i opted to expand on this story. My first goal was to have a open setting where any one who wanted could write something about one of the statues in the garden. I still plan to do that  eventualy, i also have a few ideas of my own that i might work on once the main story is done based on this one. But i will say there is going to be more after the opnions are given.Though I am not sure if this is even a half way point yet for the ideas i have. there is still a great deal of history left to catch up on before they are frozen.The second dragon war has not even started yet, and Luna is still Luna, with no hint of Nightmare Moon. So  more to come.

>>95636 never knew about that in star wars but then i never really cared much for star wars

I want to read this. But the only thing stopping me is the 168,000 words! and each chapter is a story in itself. It will be read, but very slowly...

oh man dude shit just got real...

can't wait to see how they scrape together being elements after their failures...

ah well deus ex machina i guess

This story is incredibly epic.  I want to complain about it being a short chapter, but a short chapter for you is still multiple times longer than many others'.  I don't know how you do it, but don't stop!

...Or Fluttershy could take a stroll thru Poison Joke and get a job singing soul music somewhere. :D

:rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:evil laugh:trollestia:

first and foremost, lol references!!!


can't wait to see luna "the godess of freaking kicking ass and taking names" trying to be a respectable diplomat

(yeha because politicians are alwayyyyys respectable)


>>96469  Not sure how to feel about that. I tried to make it accessable, but ive got enough ideas that it continues to get bigger. last few chapters were shorter though.

>>96641  the god in the machine is not needed for that. Granted Celestia did only call them the bearers. She also called them that before she even sent them after the elements. Memories are a tricky thing sometimes.

>>102900  Intrestingly enough i do a once or twice over after writeing every chapter. I try to gremmar check myself[i suck at that] but most often i see things that need to have more explination. or a hole filled and i do it. even time i edit i wind up with another few thousand words added.

>>113122 blues singer hehe

>>113185  everyone should practice an evil laugh, just in case.

>>113904  as i said before , a peril of being a Fred Perry fan. Well you do not have to wait long to see. This next bit is going to be split up over a couple of chapters. Simply because of the first place they are visiting giveing me so many evil ideas..... um i mean delightful ideas yes......


hehehehehehe i have a feeling frm that response and that there going to buffalo land that it'll end up being pancake related...

This first chapter was more than I expected. Reading about Rhede reminded me of Captain Jack Harkness. I congratulate you on this and I hope to see it on EqD sometime in the future!

#49 · 232w, 4d ago · 2 · · Sea Salt ·

how do you consistently manage to mingle humor, life and death situation and outright stupidity (moslty from rhede that guys craaazy) into this masterpiece??

i swear man this is one of the best fics i've read, definately in the top 5!

#50 · 232w, 4d ago · 1 · 1 · Sea Salt ·

There's some tense errors here, where the story switches between present tense and past tense... in the same paragraph.

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