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  • 1w, 2d

    I'm a little worried about  the new book case options they came out with. Particularly the notifications.

    SiS LRG has been added by some people to  to folders named 'clop'

    Not sure if it's a miss label or some one who is going to be sorely disappointed at the teen sex tag .... Might need to remove that.

    8 comments · 43 views
  • 2w, 3d
    Here we go now

    Alright peoples i have updates. Might be doing more of these just to give everyone something to look at  as i am realizing the pain of a favorite story not updating as often as i like [i don't really want to take as long as i have been but things happen]

    The Next chapter of Lost Empire starts a major plot point in the series that some of you have been clammoring for. It also goes a bit dark... Which annoys me because the intent of LE was to be silly and i'd have to rework a lot of this chapter to do that. Still the prime plot about the seed is not what i am talking about here.

    Reign of Night  part 3  is also in progress, the annoying part about it is that all the stuff i am writing for this chapter was supposed to be in the first chapter. The goal is to have as many chapters as there are song lyrics but at some point i know i am going to have to screw with that formula because i write too much.

    It also doesn't help that i have been listening to this....

    over and over again so my rage levels in writing are fairly high.

    Granted i have been listening to this which brings me back down enough to write  Reign of Night

    Of course both of those songs are contributing to my writing of Record of Beryl Wars.

    Any way more to come, though i'm not sure how often i can drop 2 story chapters in one weekend again

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  • 3w, 5d
    Stories in Stone rehash

    Now for updates!!

    Stories in Stone, Luna's Royal Guard

    Alright as some of you know i am very slowly going back and redoing Stories in Stone  Luna's Royal Guard.

    Basicly i look at my older work and shudder in fear now.

    At this point i've made it up to the first appearance of Platinum and Bleu. Like i said before this chapter has gotten even bigger due to the rewrite.

    It's sitting at 3 chapters on it's own right now and that's before even getting to the song, with 20% more platinum and Jer'rahd awkwardness.

    Tales in Stone

    Precious  has been started though it's a short one like Pursuit, i should have that up soon.

    Lost Empire

    The latest chapter of this is almost complete, i just need to wrap up the current situation. It's taken longer than i thought to get to where Babs is in the chapter and i'm debating either finishing it which will make it much bigger, or ending now and having the next chapter  continue with her.

    Reign of Night

    I have not forgotten about this story. My biggest issue is i need to be in a certain frame of mind to write this one. I've not been depressed in a while , so that delays it.....

    The Mare the Dragon, and the Draquonuss

    The first chapter of this has been scrapped and redone so many times it's giving me a headache so i took a break for a bit. Eventually i will find a version of it that i like enough to not scrap but for now i'm still only glancing at it from time to time.

    Record of Beryl Wars

    The next chapter of this is in progress, granted i could be an ass and  just say he died there and write an epilogue.... The wastes are a harsh place.......

    Last Dance

    I am going to do this...... after everything else.  Lost Empire needs to be finished before LD  the others not so much but i'm doing it any way.

    Real life crap

    Work, class, and Destiny.......... now you know why  i've slowed down...... and the Borderlands presequal is coming soon too.....

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  • 5w, 4d
    2 more incoming

    Two new stories coming in Tales in Stone, Precious and  Pursuit. Prolly have both up by this weekend, the motivation is strong.

    Granted this is the last time i try to update this by mobile, geez this got messed up

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  • 7w, 1d
    Gemstone in the rough

    Hello again  pony fans i have a few minor announcements.

    First off both  SiS LE 11 and SiS RoN 2 and SiS TMDD 2 and SiS RoBW 3 are all half completed......  yeah...

    The bigger news however is actually from Stories in Stone Luna's Royal Guard.

    For those of you who have been paying attention you might remember that i said i was reworking the first book.  Well i finished Red Sands  a bit ago and started working on the largest chapter i did in the first book  Gemstone in the rough which introduces Claymore, Mustang, Bleu and Platinum.

    After reworking only about 8k words of it  i decided that i was adding too much new content and decided to split the chapter in half.

    So if it's been a while since you read the first book or  skipped it to start in another book then  this is a great time to pop back and have a look as i very very very slowly rewrite history and fix the glaring plot holes, the nonsensical ramblings, and the correct usage of your and you're, [ more of the last bit than i am comfortable admitting.]

    The goal is to flesh out the writing style i started with and turn it into how i write now, which is a great deal better i've been told.

    So if SiS LRG pops up as having a unread chapter for those of you who favorited it , now you know why.

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  • ...

Twilight discovers the true purpose for the Canterlot Royal gardens, much to Princess Celestia's annoyance. Knowing her student will seek answers with or without her permission, the Princess gives Twilight a new subject to study, the story of five of the garden's occupants, their connection to Nightmare Moon, and the dark days of the War of Night.

Warning: Comments are encouraged, but spoilers are present in the comments.

Fic is currently undergoing a very slow revision.  Revised chapters will have a (R) in the title.

Tags: Action, Historical, Sad, Humor, Roller Coaster, Violence, Singing, Some Romance

Part 2 is here.


First Published
1st Nov 2011
Last Modified
27th Dec 2012
#1 · 156w, 3d ago · · · Luna's Royal Guard.(R) ·

I very much liked this story. and would be very happy to see any sort of extension on this.

#2 · 156w, 3d ago · · 1 · Luna's Royal Guard.(R) ·

I liked the story but its "bearer" not "barer", that irked me a fair amount.

#3 · 156w, 3d ago · · · Luna's Royal Guard.(R) ·

The concept is good and the story is compelling, but the punctuation and formatting are atrocious. It's not just the marked absence of commas and apostrophes throughout much of the text. I'm talking about things as basic as not putting spaces between the last word of a sentence and the period. As basic as only putting one space between words.

At the moment, this story is a diamond in the rough: It's crude and lumpy, but with a little more work, it could really shine.

#4 · 156w, 3d ago · · · Luna's Royal Guard.(R) ·

I liked this story a lot actually and wouldn't mind seeing something done with the characters that are mentioned, if not a new chapter then a pre story going into there stories as the task force would be kind of neat actually.

Time heals all wounds, and this is certainly a story i will keep tabs on. (I saw the same comic on equestria daily btw it was a right good laugh) The main thing you should focus on is the grammer try getting someone to look over what you type would be a good idea, but all in all it's a powerful story even with the errors.

This is a great fix, I am happy to see you extend on it. I'm impatiently wAting for more

another good chapter, much better grammar this time around, and it was much easier to read. I enjoy this story and am definatly gonna keep tabs on it :twilightsmile: I like the further picture this paints of the spirit of generosity, and the dialog between the characters had me laughing on a few occasions. ^^

Comic is Garden Party: Petrified by PumpkinHipHop on DA

#8 · 156w, 4h ago · 1 · · Rock Solid Experiences (R) ·

loved the drill Sargent! again the characters continue to amuse me good work :pinkiehappy:

I imagined every one of the drill seargent's line in R Lee Ermy's voice!

Very happy to see you continuing this, and i wish for more!

It seems the Royal Canterlot Voice was mildly annoying even back when it was common place. I must admit this story gets more interesting with each chapter. I can't wait to see how it continues.


#13 · 155w, 2d ago · · 1 · Stone in My Hoof [R] ·

I would suggest adding a carrige return or two somewhere in that bit of run on rambling.  Looking forward to the next chapter.

#14 · 155w, 1d ago · 1 · · Stone in My Hoof [R] ·

Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee I wanna go to the Pinkie Pie fun fair! :pinkiehappy:

#15 · 154w, 2d ago · 1 · · Stone in My Hoof [R] ·

Rock puns ftw. :rainbowlaugh:

That was a pretty good story based off a comic that truly terrified me.

However, the lack of commas in phrases like "if not for Jer'rahd for all five of them" is a severe detriment to the tone. Just put those in and the story will get a LOT better.

#17 · 154w, 5h ago · · · Red Sand [E] ·

i can probably pre read for you just message me k

#18 · 153w, 2h ago · 1 · · Gemstone in the Rough. ·

"Costello: I don't know".

Right before the first use of a bold Third Base.

Loving the story so far.  Next chapter should be interesting, I predict chaos and tragedy.  :pinkiecrazy:

#19 · 152w, 6d ago · 2 · · Red Sand [E] ·

Elder Scrolls reference :rainbowlaugh:

#20 · 152w, 6d ago · 2 · · As Tears Go By ·

Bah, expected what happened, and it was still sad to read.  :pinkiesad2:  Hopefully the next chapter will have happier moments.

#21 · 152w, 6d ago · · · Gemstone in the Rough. ·

hahahahaha yay its the whos on first base skit i loved doen that skit when i worked at a boy scout camp in CO.

Some letter mixups ill just go and fix those when i go thru your stoy on google docs.

#22 · 152w, 6d ago · 2 · · As Tears Go By ·

arrrrghh y i like platinum yd you kill her grrrrr:flutterrage::twilightangry2::raritycry:

#23 · 152w, 6d ago · · · As Tears Go By ·

anyways good stroy bro

#24 · 152w, 5d ago · · · As Tears Go By ·

a sad chapter but a good one, not every love song gets a happy ending, but to see vinyl and octavia is a bit of a treat ^^ still a good story keep up the good work.

#25 · 152w, 5d ago · · · Gemstone in the Rough. ·

Miiiight wanna trim the "Who's on first?" sketch. It detracts from the narrative flow.

#26 · 152w, 5d ago · · · As Tears Go By ·

Ok answer consolidation time.

>>18676   done.

>>36936  I considered that and it does but  with the dark happenstance something distracting and funny was needed.

>>36794 sorry she was orginoly going to be the classic stuck up singer type. but she would have lived then. Half way through writeing that i was like.  thats been done to death and opted  to change her to the way she is now.

>>36691 I hate being predictable but this chapter had to happen.

>>36164 I refrence alot of things  the main one I put in was a metal gear solid refrence at the wedding.

>>18679 >>18730  >>19781  >>30153   Currently have it being preread and repaired  though i likely will not fix anything here until i hit a block of some kind or finish the story. I am rideing a rather prolific wave of ideas and wish to keep hammering things out until that wave breaks.

>>20587>>20629 I used to be in the army  if i used everything that i was hit with chapter 3 would have been longer than 7

For all the readers thanks  and I will continue this. I will say however please refrain from spoiling too much in the comments. even if its a clear thing coming.

#27 · 152w, 5d ago · · · Luna's Royal Guard.(R) ·

This was awesome, but it really could use a bit of editing. I'd love to see what it'd look like with those errors patched up.

#28 · 152w, 5d ago · · · Where the River Goes ·

Well I can see how these 5 were the Elements of their time for sure now. I have to admit I'm rather curious to know how the Elements got lost after the battle with Discord.

I'd really love to see a pic made of Bleu and Jer'rahd and their faces when they ended up scaring Rhede, Starfall, and Velkorn before visiting good old Colonel Claymore.

#29 · 152w, 3d ago · · · Where the River Goes ·


Honestly I would not mind if any one drew any of them. I plan to make a few blind bag mods as soon as I can get my hands on the new set that has male ponies.

#30 · 152w, 3d ago · · · Where the River Goes ·

You can't spell laughter without slaughter, :pinkiecrazy: something tells me that dragon will be all right. these characters are interesting still loving the story.

When refering to a military officer, "Sir" or "Ma'am" should be capitalized.  The last portion needs some general cleaning up, ex: you're instead of your, comma placement.  Good use of apples, provides better visualization of the dimensions of things.  Looking forward to reading more!

#32 · 152w, 1d ago · · · Where the River Goes ·

You're and your.  Y u no use correctly?  I'm only annoyed because the story is so good that it highlights where the basics slip.  Still looking forward to the next chapter!

#33 · 152w, 1d ago · · · Where the River Goes ·


Like I have said before. Its being reviewed and when i hit a block or get to a point it will be fully repaired useing the aid of people who know grammer better than i do.[likely everyone].   But I am currently running a groove now with chapters.  So until that subsides the grammer likely will not be that much corrected. I might pause a bit after 10 though to do it.

#34 · 151w, 6d ago · · · Where the River Goes ·

i love this story... and i may just have to try making that song, although i hope you don't mind it being sung by this colt, I do not know any female vocalists at the moment. :derpytongue2:

#35 · 151w, 6d ago · · · Pebble Strewn Path ·

>>42214  the song exists. Cosmic love  by Florence and the machine.

#36 · 151w, 6d ago · · · Pebble Strewn Path ·

cool there are some mistakes in there some you trip over and have read a couple of time to get what is said one I couldnt figuer out what you were tryen to say but still a good story looken forward to more.

#37 · 151w, 1d ago · · · Landslide ·

Twi-Hero and Twi-Lust = hilarity.

#38 · 151w, 1d ago · · · Landslide ·

Is it April?  This chapter almost feels like an April fools joke.  That said, the writing is still as good as always and the argument from Spike was nicely done.

#39 · 151w, 6h ago · 1 · · Landslide ·

oh lord, poor applejack lol

that has to be one of, if not the most chaotic of all bad (well maybe not particularly "bad" but still) spell effects ever known: personality division. that never ceases to cause mass chaos whether it results from magic or otherwise

that was awesome, it'd be even more awesome if i could see that kind of region in a game... maybe oblivion (or a mod for oblivion)? if the game could match the random physics of the region that is and the various creatures/effects

Total awesome:pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy:

i love this fic!

Oh the random references found going thru Discord's...countryside I guess. I wonder how many people really noticed. Ewoks, Bermuda Triangle, mist that invokes Rule 63, "half-centaurs", and a hentai monster. Apparently hentai exists in Equestria for someone to have seen enough of it to know what it was. I would guess that would have been Bleu that said it but not entirely sure.


Time again for comenters coments.

>>48490   was going to be Twi-clop to start with  but this one wound up to be a bit more amuseing of a name to me.

>>48509  more along the lines of i was in a weird mood  and had a few people complain that my work was predictable. Of course considering I told the whole story minus all the details in the first chapter i rather hope it is predictable. Well at least up to a point ::smirks:

>>49726   Some one had to do this old spell trick , might as well have been me.

>>60190 would have to be a rather impressive  mod.

>>62856 heheh correct on all of those. theres also nightmare before christmas, mario brothers, classic james bond,cerabus guarding hell, monty python and the holy grail, among others  thou thoose were the ones that hit in just chapter 12.  The comment was indeed by Bleu , I try to drop hints about who is speaking with  how they talk . sometimes its easy.

Rhede is the least formal  he calls Jer'rahd Jer.

Bleu calls Jer'rhad Boss  and Rhede usualy gets called some sort of pet name or flirt.

Velkorn either speaks in Rymes or language brackets.

Jer'rahdIs fairly formal  though he is about mid way between  and usualy makes the snarky comment or the one that sounds angry.

Starfall is the most formal of the five  not able to call Luna anything but Princess.

Luna is the one who seems to speak properly  among them all but is trying to be less formal but still calls them by rank other than name at times.

Hope that helps a little

#45 · 148w, 5d ago · · · Luna's Royal Guard.(R) ·

Chapter 1 is in need of some serious editing. Double spaces between words, spaces on both sides of periods, etc. Other than that this is a great story...just needs a little spacebar quality control.

#46 · 148w, 5d ago · · · Strawberry Pop Rocks ·

Pinkie's twist of "someone is going to die" is a bit...odd. Surprising since the story focuses primarily on the previous element bearers. Interested, but slightly concerned where that plot line will go. Really loved the rest of this chapter, Gala related shenanigans were the best. Curious if Nocturne will have a role in the future of this story?

#47 · 148w, 5d ago · · · Strawberry Pop Rocks ·

Also, judging by the pacing it seems you have a lot of story left to go. This story is going to be ridiculously huge by the end.

#48 · 148w, 5d ago · · · Strawberry Pop Rocks ·

2 things, 1. who stole most of the comma's? and 2. that sounds like a unpleasant part of pinkie's pinkie sense

and of course the gala turned out to be fun for all :rainbowlaugh:

#49 · 148w, 5d ago · · · Strawberry Pop Rocks ·

Ha "doctor who?" awesome. I think i laughed harder in this chapter than in most any other fic I've read to date

#50 · 148w, 5d ago · · · Strawberry Pop Rocks ·

At the Gala (Ancient Remix)

That was downright hilarious. The fact that it's apparently a spell of Celestia's that cause it makes it awesome. The duel was great. Lord Coin apparently needs to learn who he is talking to before doing something stupid...like talking to them for the most part.

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