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Stories in Stone.
Luna's Royal Guard
by
TDR
Prologue, Stories in the Stones
Twilight fell back, eyes wide as she stared in horror. The garden grew quiet again, the echo of the scream fading into the hedgerows. Even at the full light of noon the Canterlot Royal Gardens had suddenly a very sinister look to her. She lifts her gaze, watching as the last of the pony's flesh was consumed once more by stone. Twilight's eyes had yet to leave the cold gray statue. She could still hear the mare pleading for help and screaming for Celestia’s forgiveness. The surprise had cost her the control of her spell, resealing the mare back in her cold petrified state.
The purple pony lay on the grass, her mind galloping millions of miles an hour. Her head slowly turned as she looked over the hundreds of other statues decorating the garden, and these were just the ones she could see. The gardens covered acres of land, magically folded back in on themselves. The spell was a marvel, giving more room but taking up less space; a feat only a Goddess could have mustered the power for. There was no telling how many statues there truly were. Was Discord correct? Did the Princesses really turn ponies to stone? The little pony in her head screamed a definitive “YES”, along with an order to run.
Discord's comment had nagged at her for months, adding in no small part to her breakdown a few weeks ago. She decided to take a small vacation after Nightmare Night in order to visit her family in Canterlot. Visiting her parents resulted in the usual small talk of how she was doing, along with her mothers not so subtle qwerries about if she had found a proper stallion yet. She had left Spike with her parents, telling them she would be back later, and had hurried to the palace grounds to find out for herself.
After the cockatrice had turned her to stone, she had put a great deal of effort into finding a cure that would not require the bird to be agreeable. She had managed to learn a spell to revert stone to flesh from an old tome she found in the royal library, and had come here expecting nothing more than one of Discord’s lies. To find he was truthful had been a shock that she was still trying to recover from. She slowly pushed herself to her hooves, not even sure what she was to do next. Could she tell somepony? Was it even possible to confront Celestia over this? Could anything really be done if she did indeed turn any pony she wished into a statue?
She barely noticed the shadow looming over her until its owner spoke.
“You should not have done that Twilight Sparkle. Some things exist that you should not seek to learn.”
Twilight’s eyes widen as she turns to look behind her, yelping and back scrambling backwards away from the grim visage of Princess Celestia. She smacks into the pedestal of the pony she nearly freed dropping forward into a half bow, half grovel with her hooves over her face.
The Goddess offered a small sigh at her antics.
“ I should have guessed you of all ponies would be curious about the words Discord let slip. Likely the only one who would have noticed as well. Come Twilight Sparkle, walk with me.“
The Princess turns, moving a few paces down the path before pausing to glance back at her student. She frowned, seeing that Twilight remained cowering; having yet to move from where she was.
“That was not a request Twilight.” Celestia growled.
The purple mare jumped to her hooves with a start at the command and followed slowly after the Princess. She wondered briefly if she was being taken somewhere to join the Garden's inhabitants. Would any pony ever figure out what happened to her if she was? Rumors had abounded for a long time about swings in the Sun Goddess' temperament. Her own experience with her mentor’s disfavor was still clear in her mind after her minor breakdown. Twilight shudders, hooves plodding lightly on the grass as she followed her teacher.
The Princess strode to a small dais in a clearing of the hedges. Several larger statues rested here as well as a pillar that rose into the air and seemed to have several more statues at the top of it. The Princess steps onto the dais, her hooves clicking lightly on the stone before she turned facing the cowering pony siting down on the stone.
” Faithful student, do you know what the Canterlot Gardens are for? Why Luna and myself put so much effort into them?” Celestia asked.
Twilight swallowed hard, thinking on the question. She was hesitant to answer rapidly, so she could be sure of the answer, but she did not wish to make the clearly annoyed Goddess any angrier.
“It.. It is supposed to be a place of quiet tranquility. A monument to ages past and the great heroes and villains of Equestria's history. A way not to forget the reasons for the past even if the history is lost.”
As she rattled off the words, some calm came back to her; her mind finding the familiar comfort of the words from the text she had read. The Princess did not seem upset further by her response, which eased the tension a bit further.
“Well spoken, Twilight. Nearly a perfect recitation of the pamphlets for tour groups. But that is only the partial truth. The Canterlot Gardens are a prison. Nothing more, nothing less; regardless of what they look like and what ponies have chosen to believe they are." Celestia explained.
Twilight lifted her head, a bit confused by the term prison. From her reading she knew it was supposedly a larger jail. One meant to hold ponies for far longer than to sleep off a night of Sonic Rain Boom shots, or sticky hooves that were waiting a trial.
The Princess raises a hoof pointing to a statue of a dragon taking up most of the clearing. The amount of stone that would have gone into forming the beast alone would have made a road from Ponyville to Canterlot six stallions wide. That is, if it was stone.
“Do you know what that statue is supposed to be?” Celestia inquired.
Twilight lifted her head, examining the dragon statue. She quickly recognized it as a statue of Forge Scale the Terrible, a beast that ravaged the countryside thousands of years ago. His very actions started the First Dragon War. Eventually he simply vanished, bringing the war to a close. She explained all this to her teacher who simply nodded.
“Use your spell on that statue Twilight.” Celestia instructed.
Twilight swallowed a bit, her horn glowing as her gaze locked on the statue. A small patch on the great dragons side starting to glow with a lavender hue. The stone peeled back, bearing a bright crimson scaled flank. A wash of heat scorched the grass around the bared flesh and set one of the bushes nearby ablaze. The exposed scales burned hotly, molten fire dripped from the spaces between them. Twilight cried out as the searing heat washed over her and she once more lost control of the spell; the flesh changing back to stone before she got more than singed.
“Wha... what was that ?! “ Twilight exclaimed.
“The statue is not of Forge Scale student. It IS Forge Scale. “ Celestia said a bit of worry in her voice that Twilight was able to uncover even that much of the dragon.
The Princess lifts her head, looking somewhat wistful as Twilight’s eyes widened further; threatening to pop from her skull as she looked between the statue and the Princess.
”I have never in all my years been able to take the life of another creature Twilight. It is a rule I made for myself long ago. My sister has no such rule guiding her. If the situation called for it, she had no issue with ending a life. She was....Is, the aspect of war and I am the aspect of peace. The pair of us have many titles, but those are two many have forgotten in this peaceful time. The Garden had been here long before Discord was defeated, but it was his addition that brought about the Garden as it is now. Luna lent me her power to craft this place as it is, practically endless, yet both of us can find our way around with little trouble. The idea was that even if I would not kill, I could remove those who threatened Equestria.” Celestia explained carefully to her bewildered student.
The Princess Shifts a little, her expression softening as she spoke.
“That pony you woke was the creator of a abomination; a monstrosity that wiped out thousands. One she released to take vengeance on a unfaithful lover. One that killed to grow. One that devoured any living thing to make itself bigger. The creature killed my sisters first love, Twilight. He and many others gave their lives to slow it down so that we could find a way to stop it. The hoof prints cracking the base of the pedestal she stands on are all Luna's; my sisters rage was such that I had to intervene personally to stop her from shattering the statue. Her grief was such that she cried for a hundred years, her tears forming the great inland sea. That mare will never again be free, or my sister would surely kill her outright rather than ever let her trot the land again." Celestia continued.
Twilight had shifted into student mode, listening intently as Celestia spoke. Her teacher never spoke of the past like this. She straightened up a little, watching the Princess closely; waiting for her to continue and hoping she would. The tale of the mare was shocking to say the least, although no less of a surprise that Luna's grief was what created The Hooper Sea in southern Equestria. Twilight’s initial panic was all gone. If her Teacher wished to turn her to stone, there was no reason to explain things first Twilight turned her head back looking at the patch of scorched grass and the charred remains of the bush. She could see now why her teacher had been upset. She could have accidentally released something far worse than a screaming pony.
“The ones placed here are ponies and beasts that have caused untold destruction and death. They are all sealed here, most with no chance of ever being freed let alone being forgiven. Of course, only my sister and I were supposed to be able to awaken them. Your power has grown again my student. That spell should not have been enough to break the enchantment.“ Celestia explained, her voice catching a slight tone of pride at her students abilities.
Twilight could not help but smile at the compliment; an action that brought the same sort of smil from the Princess.
“I know that all I have done is peak your interest in this place. So, rather than sending you away with just a few answers, I will give you a new task; one that may help you to understand how things were a thousand years ago. And perhaps the knowledge will prepare you for things in the future. Not all that are imprisoned here are enemies of pony-kind. Some are here for other reasons. The monument over there," Celestia spoke, motioning her hoof towards a group of statues." "What do you know of it ?”
Twilight looked up to the outline of five forms atop the monolith. She could not make out much more than the outlines from this distance, but she had seen this monument quite often from outside of the garden; unfortunately never thinking much of what it was past the information provided in the tour, which was little more than a name and deed.
“I think that’s the monument to the five heroes that served to help you end the reign of Nightmare Moon with the elements of harmony. “ Twilight replied.
“Yes. That is what is told now. Though it is correct, it is also wrong. They were, and still are, Luna's personal honor guard. She hoof picked each of them before she became Nightmare Moon. They followed only her then, and they followed her even after she became Nightmare Moon.Then they followed her into imprisionment. Come Twilight, let me introduce you to The Beasts of The Moon.”
Celestia went on, motioning her pupil forward.
Twilight followed her teacher as she moved again, the name she uttered sending a small shiver along her spine. The Five Beasts of the Moon were another well known old mares tale. The true meaning of the name was lost, much as Nightmare Moon's name had become little more than a holiday boogie stallion used to frighten foals. The only thing she had found about them was from a few references in the book: The Elements of Harmony. The Beasts were Nightmare Moon's generals in the time of the Lunar Republic. They had caused nearly as much destruction and terror to the lands as Nightmare Moon herself had done, though that was all that was mentioned of them.
The Princess approached the short tower, trotting up a thin path invisible from afar that spiraled up the side of the structure to the forms on top. The Princesses' hooves clacked against the marble as she walked up the ramp, Twilight following behind. Even with the Princess telling her that nearly every creature here was a threat to Equestria, the concept of sealing something forever in stone here bothered her greatly. Reaching the top, the Princess moved towards the figures, letting Twilight have a clear view of them.
The first surprised her; a zebra of all things was clad in what seemed to be light armor that looked as if it was based off the armor of the Royal Guard. Her mane reminded her of Pinkie Pie's curls and even her tail was poofy. She had never seen a zebra with that sort of hair style. This zebra also wore no jewelry save a small necklace with what looked like a bit of metal or stone hanging from it. Her armor was adorned with countless pouches, all marked with the symbols of zebra and pony medical services as well as many others sewn on that Twilight had never seen before. Twilight guessed the patches must be the medic symbol for other races, as that seemed to fit with the ones she knew.
The zebra mare was half bowed, her head lowered but eyes open and cast upward, as if she was not willing to take her eyes off of whatever stood before her in case it became hostile. Her stance also reminded Twilight of Rarity's cat when it was about to attack something.
The second figure stood behind the Zebra; a pony sized Dragon sporting a wide grin on her fanged maw that reminded Twilight eerily of Discords grin, though the dragons smile seemed less sinister. The figure was reared up, wings spread wide and one arm across her chest as if she was preparing to bow; the other clawed hoof outstretched gesturing to the zebra. Twilight blinked a moment noticing what looked like a stick of charcoal in the outstretched claw. Moving around them as Celestia snickered lightly, she nearly fell off the raised platform seeing the phrase, “ Lick Me!” written on the flank covering portion of the zebras armor. The dragon too had a small necklace with a bit of metal hanging
from it.
Shaking her head at the frozen joke, she moved to the unicorn in the middle. This one simply looked despondent. The stallion was standing upright, but his head was lowered to the ground enough that his horn touched the marble surface. His eyes were shut tight and moisture had collected around his muzzle, and closed eyes giving the impression of tears. He wore slightly heavier armor that reminded Twilight of the Guard armor worn by Princess Luna's chariot pullers. It was a much fancier version of that armor, which seemed to be fitting of an officer; though where badges would be the stone looked like it had been torn and something removed from the armor. His short tail hung between his legs and
where his flesh was not covered it was easy to see the discoloration of scars crossing the petrified flesh. His position and the clear wounds made it seem to Twilight that he might have been beaten into supplication like this. The ground at his hooves was covered with what Twilight thought was jagged bits of stone,though looking closer they seemed to be medals and rank insignia. It was likely this was what was torn from the armor.
She glanced to the Princess, her expression unchanged before moving to the stallion. This one was engaged in a deep formal bow to the central ponies' right. He was a rather large earth pony; perhaps even larger than Big Mac. He wore a sly smirk that, even in stone form, seemed to say he knew things that you did not. His gaze, however, was just at the right angle to make Twilight feel uneasy; as if the statue was staring at her rump. She could not help but compare him to Apple Jack’s brother, although his coat and mane were much better cared for than the farm ponies. It was as if he spent as much time in front of a mirror than Rarity did. His clothing seemed to be more of a suit for a ancient formal party than any sort of uniform. It also seemed designed to show as much of his form as possible. The over all effect was that he simply expected any mare who saw him to fall into his hooves without a word.
The final figure was a stern looking pegasus mare. Her wings were folded tight at her sides, though her mane and tail were stretched out. The effect made her look like she was being blown by a strong wind before she was frozen in stone. She wore armor much like that of Rainbow Dash's Shadowbolt costume, though she did not wear a mask. Her gaze rested between the Earth pony and the unicorn, an expression of worry etched onto her features. Twilight thought it looked as if she was considering whether she should be there or not.
“These are the five heroes of Princess Luna's Honor guard. These are the five Beasts of the Moon that rampaged the land at the head of the Lunar Republic. Based on their actions, Luna selected these ponies to be at her side. They were her guards, her generals, and her friends. Individually, these five accomplished great acts. With Luna at their lead, this team brought down many great threats to Equestria. With Nightmare Moon at their lead, they committed atrocities untold. And finally, with me at their lead, we sealed Nightmare Moon for a thousand years.” Celestia explained somewhat sadly.
Twilight glanced back at her teacher, the alicorn having moved to a spot at the front of the obelisk where four hoof prints had been seared into the marbles surface; each one looking more like a crescent moon than a hoof print.
“This is where Nightmare Moon was sealed. Sealed by the Elements of Harmony, used on a god for the first time in centuries by somepony other than my sister and I. Used against her by family and those she trusted and loved the most.“ Celestia continued, whispering mostly to herself in sadness.
Twilight walked up to her teacher; the tone of the alicorn's voice worrying her a little. The memories evidently being painfully brought back to the Sun Goddess. Twilight lifts a hoof, touching the Princess's shoulder lightly. Celestia lifts her head, blinking lightly before turning to her student and smiling as she spoke again.
“Thank you, Twilight. I often choose to try and forget painful memories and details that tend to be lost in time even to me. I do not recall the true reason of my sisters transformation into Nightmare Moon. Suffice to say, it was enough for her to raise armies against the rest of Equestria. I can say, however, it had nothing to do with that fabled beautiful night nonsense she was spouting when she returned. Her magic and evident sanity had not quite remained as strong as when she was first sealed. The Lunar Republic was a group of dissidents she brought together along with evils left from Discords rule and with anypony else with a grudge against the world; which in those days was nearly everypony. Her honor guard became her generals, guiding the troops to sweeping victories over any force that stood before them. Had events not turned out like they had, she would have likely ruled alone with me imprisoned or banished.” Celestia explained coldly.
At that moment, Twilight could have sworn her teacher aged to all her years with the weariness she displayed. She slowly moved from the hoof prints to the leering pony statue.The image of her age was fleeting, but terrible to think of as well.
“Rhede Pelt," Celestia began. "Bearer of the element of Generosity. To be honest, at the time I was the reason my sister chose him. I believed it rather funny, as he was an agreeable stallion and a smooth talker who likely could converse his way out of anything. But he showed no other qualities that would have made him fit for Luna's inner circle. Perhaps his ability to negotiate was what she was after? Perhaps it was simply due to his being friends with the others. It might have actually been something to do with me as well. I do remember he played an important role at some point... He was a mare’s stallion, pure and simple. It would not surprise me in the slightest to find that nearly every pony in Equestria could trace their linage back to him somewhere. He claimed on more than one occasion his sole purpose of joining the Guard was, as he put it: ”Mares love a stallion in uniform.”
Celestia moved to the pegasus mare behind Rhede, looking the mare in the eyes with a faint sigh.
“Starfall Silvertail, bearer of the Element of Honesty. The first known pegasus to preform a Sonic Rainboom and likely the fastest pegasus that ever lived. Baring perhaps her direct descendant, your friend Rainbow Dash. Starfall was married to a Guard and took with foal while about your age. When her husband was killed in a land clash with the griffons, she refused the financial aid that was offered in recompense for his death. She preferred to work honestly for her bits. She joined the Guard, leaving her daughter in the care of her sister and sending back everything she earned to help the foal. She saved the life of my sister and was the primary cause of the surrender of the Diamond Dogs attacking our western border." Celestia explained rather fondly.
The Princess moved past the unicorn to the dragon, glancing at the note and the charcoal; smirking slightly as if she likely had seen it countless times before.
“Bleu Scale the dragoness." Celestia spoke with pride. "Bearer of the element of Laughter, obviously. She was not even considered to be a Guard, as she was a entertainer for the E.S.O.; a group sent out to bolster troop moral. I am told that during her last performance, the base she was at was attacked. She joined the fight immediately, repelling the attacking forces while not missing a beat or a pun in her act. A song she preformed drove the defenders to great heights, and the smaller force of Guard was able to repel the attackers because of her. Without her at the battle, the attackers would have claimed the base and many more lives would have been lost. Luna asked her to join her Guard not long after, and Bleu agreed on the condition that she would not be required to wear the lame uniforms.”
Celestia offers a final look at the note on the zebra mare as she passed, her eyes locking with Twilight's as she grinned.
“Velkorn the Zebra: first Queen the Zebras and bearer of the Element of Compassion. The Zebra lands at that point were ruled by warlords, bandits and military groups all clinging to power. Equestria had moved to deal with one of the larger warlords whose actions were causing issues along the border as well as suffering among the zebras. Velkron was a combat medic in the conflict on the warlords side. In the battle, she crossed the lines countless times while braving spells, arrows, and explosions to tend any wounded she found; be they zebra or pony. Many times it was thought she was killed, only to show up later crossing the field and dragging somepony else to safety. She had no regard for her own life, as she worked to save others. She became somewhat of a legend on the field of battle, earning the nickname 'The Specter of Life'. The warlord, however, was not happy that his best field medic was treating everypony and sent down some of his personal guard to kill all the ponies found in Velkorn's medical tent. They had barely lifted a blade to kill one of her patients before she made all of them into patients. Velkorn was a master of the zebra weaponless combat style that focused on subduing opponents.It was not always painlessly, or with out damage, but they lived. She had put her years of medical knowledge to work as well, honing the talent. Princess Luna met her personally, bringing several cartloads of supplies for her medical unit after the battle. She asked the Zebra if she would join her Guard unit and Velkorn agreed, knowing that where ever the Goddess of War went, it would be at the forefront of battle that would require her skills." Celestia spoke, her voice straining as she explained so much.
The Princess moved back to the unicorn in the center of the rise, glaring down at him as if in both pity and anger at the same time. Twilight sat in rapt attention through every description, her mind making notes of what battles her teacher spoke of and pairing them in the nearly blank time line of history of a thousand years ago.
“Jer'rahd Kaisur, bearer of the element of loyalty." Celestia said in slight disgust and pity. "He was the first to join my sister's inner Guard, having nearly sacrificed himself on several occasions on her behalf. He knew all the others as well. He was a foalhood friend of Rhede, and they both signed up for the guard at the same time and were paired with Starfall for training. His life was saved by Velkorn on the battlefield, and he aided Bleu in keeping her show going while under attack He was in the thick of nearly every major battle that happened at that time as well. His suggestions were likely the reason Luna choose the others for her guard and likely the reason they made him their leader. He was skilled with his chosen weapon, a true terror on the battlefield. He was also violent, his temper easily getting the best of him and he seemed to have rather poor luck as well if that could be considered a personal flaw. His spells were quite limited, but the few he could cast he did better than any other unicorn before him. He survived things that no other pony could have, and he was a rather clever strategist as well. He seemed to always have some sort of plan ready. He would do anything for those he considered his friends and was a relentless foe to any who were his enemies. However, to say he held a candle for my sister would be a fallacy; it was more like a lighthouse.His affections seemed clear to everypony but Luna. He never admitted his feelings as far as I knew; he simply acted as he was supposed to as a guard. Perhaps if things had remained as they were, Luna might have returned his attentions. When she became Nightmare Moon, his loyalty to her was such that he followed her still without question. And the others followed him. He trailed after her like a small yet very dangerous puppy. He would not hesitate to attack any who spoke ill of her, and the level of savagery he displayed against any wishing her harm was the stuff of nightmares. He displayed this same devotion to the others as well. He gave my sister his life, and in return she gave him her absolute trust.”
The Princess approached Twilight, settling down next to her and leaning against the smaller mare for a bit of support with her tail swishing lightly as she spoke, making it brush across Twilight’s back and rump as it moved. The lavender unicorn blushed lightly, trying to ignore the feeling of her teachers touch and focus on the tale. Celestia continued on, not seeming to notice her students unease.
“They became Generals of the Lunar Republic, and their armies did things that would make even the most violent among us now a days cringe. They were called The Beasts of the Moon. On their order, cities fell, creatures were slaughtered, fields were burned and salted. Nightmare Moon used all of Discords creations and some she made herself against Equestria, as well as any pony or monster willing to fight under the banner of the Lunar Republic. It was a dark time indeed for the land, as ponies are not meant for war. We prefer peace to conflict, but once riled or directed we are formidable. But the forces that Nightmare Moon gathered...War was all they knew. Peace had never weakened them. We had no chance against them, and Equestria would have been lost if not for Jer'rahd and the rest of them.” Celestia spoke.
“These five, along with my sister, were chosen by the Elements of Harmony. That power helped bring about the end of Second Dragon War. They came to me with a plan: the Elements had sealed Discord in the past and had brought the end of The Second Dragon War. Jer'rahd and Rhede believed that the Elements could be used to turn Nightmare Moon back into Princess Luna. They had taken the Elements from Luna's Castle in the Everfree forest and brought them to me, as they wished for my aid in returning Luna to her old self.”Celestia said softly, as if saddened and joyous of her memories.
“The plan should have worked- it did work when you and your friends preformed it properly. When my sister came to this dais, she expected to be greeted by her loyal Guard and her sister as a prisoner. What she received was a trap. I used the power of magic, drawing on the other Elements and it was not enough. The five were Princess Luna's friends, not mine. At best I could only banish her, not cure her. I was little more than a stand in as they tried to help their true friend; my sister. “ Celestia whispered,fighting back a tear.
Princess Celestia sighed, looking up at the last rays of sunlight as the sun sank into the west.
“None of them were happy with this, particularly Jer'rahd. They understood perfectly, but they were not happy. Jer'rahd looked up to see Luna's silhouette on the moon and simply dropped into a heap on the surface here weeping openly. This was a pony that had his limbs cut off, survived explosions, magic attacks, and had broken nearly every bone in his body at least once. And yet he lay there crying like a colt over the failure. His friends could do nothing to comfort him, and I was in no shape to do much of anything as I had spent my magic sealing my sister in the moon. He refused to move from that spot and he refused to eat. He simply remained collapsed on the marble surface, fighting off any attempts to move him. The others accepted my invitation to join me in the castle at least, but he did not. The loss of their leader and generals had all but broken the Lunar Republic's back, sending the lot of them against each other for control or fleeing into the night in fear of their lives. When I recovered enough to raise the moon for my sister for the first time, I came back to this spot along with the others to check on Jer'rahd. We found him standing here, starring at the sky. It was then that he asked me for something, his voice calm and without even the hint of the sobbing wreck he had been before.”Celestia said, pausing to look at the marble floor.
“I want you to turn me to stone, as you have done the others here in the garden.” Celestia quoted, doing her best to imitate Jer'rahd's voice.
“I refused of course, but he was adamant about it. He claimed he could not live with himself knowing he had betrayed the trust my sister had placed in him; the trust the ponies of the land put in him. He argued that he was not worthy of remaining free while his princess was sealed away. I still refused, ordering him directly to leave this place and live his life, a direct order to a Royal Guardsman. It was then he tore off the medals and awards that had been given to him for his service. His hoof slammed down shattering them under him as he glared at me.“ Celestia said as her chest swelled; perhaps inspired by her memories of his actions.
“You are not my Princess, Celestia, and you never will be. You use this place to keep those who have committed crimes against Equestria. How many more of your subjects need I murder before you seal me here? I do not want your pity or forgiveness. There is only one pony who I want to forgive me and I am willing to wait as long as it takes for Luna to do that.“ Celestia growled, again imitating the powerful general.
“It was at this point Bleu laughed and figured that I should do it. Better my spell than Jer'rahd running off into the Everfree to find a basilisk or something. She also agreed with him and was willing to join him in stone, so at least while he waited he would not be lonely. Rhede agreed soon after with Velkorn nodding. Only Starfall seemed torn. Jer'rahd's demands and orders that they do no such thing were completely ignored by the others. I gave them all three days and a disguise spell to hide who they were. There was little reason for them to be seen as The Beasts of the Moon while out finding a reason to live. If they still wished to be petrified, they would return here in three days.
Starfall nodded and flew off first, the others slowly dispersing as well save for Jer'rahd who remained where he was. I managed at least to get him to eat something, but he refused to depart the pillar. He slept during the days bowing his head and not meeting the sight of the moon at night." Celestia spoke.
The princess glanced up as the sun had finally set, her sister soon to show up and raise the moon.
“All of them returned three days later. Velkorn had taken the time and all the bits she had saved from the adventures and donated it to every medical center she could find in Equestria. Her massive contributions sped forward non magical medicine in the lands by leaps and bounds. Bleu showed up not long after, not really having had much to do anyway considering this group was her family. She had simply gone out drinking and was looking forward to what new jokes might be around when she awoke. Rhede claimed he was going to enjoy this break, before any more mares showed up with colts they claimed were his. I almost refused to turn him then and there, but he had shown up and I did promise. I found out later he had been keeping track of very single foal he had sired. Nearly every bit he had earned went into a fund to pay for his foals schooling so they might better their lives. I was impressed enough by this act that when the bits ran out from his accounts I paid for the ones who had not managed to receive bits to go to school. Eventually, it turned into a grant program that was available to anypony who wished to apply for it. I left his name attached however, calling it The Pelt Grant. Starfall was the last to arrive. We had all hoped she would not come and would go home to raise her foal, but she returned red eyed and seeming on the verge of tears. Her daughter was terrified of her when she arrived. Her own daughter would not approach her for the entire three days. We all told her to go back and keep trying, but it was clear with the acts tied to their names even if she had wanted to stay she would have had to stay on the run with her daughter. Starfall finally claimed it was likely better this way. If Luna returned and sought vengeance, then she would be able to slake the thirst on her and not any of her descendents. Jer'rahd sunk down as he is now, with the intent to not watch another moonrise until he was forgiven. The others bowed and stood as they are now as well. I cast the spell, though I still do not know how Bleu managed to put that note on Velkorn. I am also quite sure Rhede only bowed that low to get a look under my tail. Even in this somethings did not change. After the spell was cast, the Elements returned to where they were stored in Princess Luna's castle in the Everfree forest. The Elements themselves turning to stone as well. “ Celestia sighed, finishing her tale.
The faint hoof falls of somepony approaching caused Celestia to glance back towards the gardens entrance. Twilight looked back as well to see the dark form of Princess Luna heading into the garden.
“Teacher, it has been over a year. Does she know about all of this? Why hasn't your sister done anything? These five were loyal to her even past when they should have been .“ Twilight whispered in disbelief.
“She knows, but betrayal is a hard thing to handle. And for all their good intentions, that is what her closest friends did to her. They betrayed her, and had her sealed in the moon for a thousand years. It is not something one can easily forgive. I believe at times she only forgives me because we are family and she remembers what she had planned for me as Nightmare Moon. She comes here nearly every night to raise the moon and I think she may talk to them, but I do not listen in. Perhaps she is at least considering forgiveness.
Celestia rises to her hooves as Princess Luna walks up the path to the monuments top. She pauses, a bit surprised to see the two of them up there. Luna opens her mouth as Twilight rises, as if trying to think of what to say or ask before giving up and moving aside for them to depart.
“Good Night Sister.” Celestia whispers sadly.
“Good Night Tia. Twilight Sparkle. “ Luna replies.
“Good night Princess Luna.” Twilight chimes in softly.
Twilight glanced back at the obelisk, watching as Luna settled down where they had been before. The moon slowly rose into the night sky, shining its pale light down on the statues of the Garden.
Comments ( 16 )
I very much liked this story. and would be very happy to see any sort of extension on this.
I liked the story but its "bearer" not "barer", that irked me a fair amount.
The concept is good and the story is compelling, but the punctuation and formatting are atrocious. It's not just the marked absence of commas and apostrophes throughout much of the text. I'm talking about things as basic as not putting spaces between the last word of a sentence and the period. As basic as only putting one space between words.
At the moment, this story is a diamond in the rough: It's crude and lumpy, but with a little more work, it could really shine.
I liked this story a lot actually and wouldn't mind seeing something done with the characters that are mentioned, if not a new chapter then a pre story going into there stories as the task force would be kind of neat actually.
Time heals all wounds, and this is certainly a story i will keep tabs on. (I saw the same comic on equestria daily btw it was a right good laugh) The main thing you should focus on is the grammer try getting someone to look over what you type would be a good idea, but all in all it's a powerful story even with the errors.
That was a pretty good story based off a comic that truly terrified me.
However, the lack of commas in phrases like "if not for Jer'rahd for all five of them" is a severe detriment to the tone. Just put those in and the story will get a LOT better.
This was awesome, but it really could use a bit of editing. I'd love to see what it'd look like with those errors patched up.
Chapter 1 is in need of some serious editing. Double spaces between words, spaces on both sides of periods, etc. Other than that this is a great story...just needs a little spacebar quality control.
This first chapter was more than I expected. Reading about Rhede reminded me of Captain Jack Harkness. I congratulate you on this and I hope to see it on EqD sometime in the future!
Okay, a dash of Twilestia. I like where this is going.![]()
Why?
Because...
The best ships are
TwiLuna, Twilestia, Twixie and Moonlight
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This site really needs some Luna and Nightmare Moon emotes.
"a group sent out to bolster troop moral." It's "morale", not "moral". "Moral" involves a code of ethical conduct. "Morale" is how happy people are.
The paragraph at the end switches tenses... that kinda thing really pulls you out of a story... however, it was very good. ![]()
It's a very interesting idea for a story, but the numerous grammatical errors prevented me from enjoying it.
Ok a lot of people have commented on various grammatical errors, but surprisingly no one has commented on the frequent shifts of tense. For some paragraphs the tense is past, but in others it is present. There is actually kind of a strange pattern to it, but these shifts would have to be corrected in an EQD story, as it is a repeated and highly noticeable flaw. Other than that though a highly enjoyable read.
I used to be Luna's maid. Here is a picture.
This is pretty good, but I recommend you get a proofreader or use a spell-check program. Most of the errors were pretty minor, but there were a few that just pressed my grammar nazi button down further than the others. Here's the two that I bothered to copy and paste. (I'm lazy sometimes, deal with it.)
small talk of how she was doing, along with her mothers not so subtle qwerries-Should be mother's and queries. Always remember that apostrophe when you're doing possessive nouns. (Note: If a noun ends in "s", put the apostrophe at the end of the word and do not add another "s".)
I know that all I have done is peak your interest in this place-This is the one that irks me the most every time I see it, in any writing. In that instance, it's pique, not peak. If you're not sure which one to use, a dictionary is your friend. If you don't own a dictionary, then dictionary.reference.com is your friend.
WOW I am very interested in this story. I liked all the background info. for the characters and I honestly was too interested in this to notice the grammatical errors till I read some comments
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