Lets see that constructive criticism everyone.

Keep it up! Good story so far, only thing you MUST change is a terrible mistake everybody makes. MORE CHAPTERS!

>>416595416595 Sweet Celestia how could I make such a vital error, I must repair this ASAP! Thanks for the complement

I need more but great story. I see nothing wrong, no spelling errors, grammar, nothing. I look forward to reading more of this

wow. that was amazing

voted, favourited, and watching u.

That was glorious!

We need more, now!

Awesome story!

Looking Forward to it!

I'm excited, I like it already! And it's funny to see Princess Celestia so young and silly.

Only one problem.

Canterlot was not founded until after Nightmare Moon was defeated then.

The battle between Celestia and Nightmare wrecked the old palace in the Everfree Forest there.

>>417671417671 I'll add Alternate Universe tag since I'm assuming this whole event didn't really in the show anyway. Thanks for the heads up

No errors I can't ignore...

Pretty good so far.

I got my insuline ready.

Take that Cutelestia and roll with it. ROOOOOLL WITH IT!

off to a decent start. this chapter needs to have more happening in it, eg, actually have a flashback scene that explains why Tia left, or otherwise explore it more in depth. you need to elaborate more on that detail.

'the call to adventure' is an important beginning to a story. gives your main character a back story, and reason for going out into the dangerous world. don't just gloss over it.

  and you need to indent the beginning of paragraphs.

>>420979420979 I had thought about maybe giving a flashback or two, but I decided it would be better suited for later as she tells it to a certain main character. (One who will be appearing soon, but who could it be? ) I like to keep some questions up in the air to get the reader asking themselves about it for a time (mission accomplished I guess )

As for paragraphs, I'm off to indent them! Thanks for the input

Is this good?......... yes yes it is

Hmmm... I am interested, but I can't say much until I read more.

>>437125437125 Odd, I was just about to start on the next chapter...can you read my mind?!

>>437152437152 I am actually watching you. I am a decedent of an ancient line of ninjas, and i have taken it upon myself to watch the authors of my favorite fanfics to make sure they write... or else...

>>437263437263 Well I'm not one to argue with fan fiction ninjas. Time to write

Shout out goes to my friends Snapple Jack and Equal Balance. Keep being awesome

"Celestia's in need of a new name, but she and her friends can seem to think of one." Ohh i guess in that case im not needed ill be waiting for the next chapter.

and I throw the name "Dawn Strider" at your head

Well, you could always give a shout out to this other story you may have heard of and just call her "Sunny Skies".

>>456652456652 rofl, how did I mess that one up? Thanks for the heads up

>>456712456712 >>456839456839 Also liking these names. I'll have to give Sunny Skies a read.

It's already taken but you can try "Sunny Days"

What about Summer Heart? Also, I NEED MORE OF THIS STORY!!

Call her Pink Flame!

Hooray for me being cannon! /)(\

The swag levels! They go threw the roof! I! AM! BEST! FILLY!

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I'd say something with "Flare" in the name like White Flare or Winged Flare or maybe Flare Sticker

The next chapter...

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>>675469675469 Fear not! A chapter will be on its way, I've just been busy and trying to finish up the current section of Destined for Chaos.

This chapter has been up for so long, and im just reading it now. What the buck is wrong with me lol.

Oh Shit,

Discord!

baby Discord!

Before Discord reigned chaos over the land? :O OH MAI, ZE PLOT; SHE THICKENS.

What a thick plot this is...

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Hope it continues to be this juicy...

>>785948785948

>My reaction to that comment

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Dem fillies shouldve listened to me. I know what im talkin bout.

>>788033788033 >>785948785948

Tell Equal to quit being such a downer Gray, learn to live a little like Snapple and Tia

I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!

>>788921788921 well, i can certainly try. No guarantees one way or the other though.

A Wild Cliffhanger appears!

What do?

All according to plan.

I NEED MOAR!!!! also HUZZAH, AN UPDATE!!!

ZE DISCORD IS A SPY! ZE SPY IS A DOUBLE AGENT FOR CELESTIA'S FATHER!

*Squee* This story is AWESOME!

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