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The 8-Bit Flame Princess


The hardest thing is never to repent for someone else, it's letting people in.

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Today is astronomy day, and Luna's dragging her marefriend Twilight on a night-time flight.
On this flight, however, Twilight learns more about herself than the stars.


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Warning: The comments will contain spoilers. Read at your own discretion!

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Comments ( 20 )

YOU FINALLY PUBLISHED IT! :rainbowkiss:

4570910 I KNOW! And this is only just the beginning :pinkiehappy:
Did you like it?

Yay TwiLuna :raritystarry:

She smiled as she felt

Forget something at the end of that?

Luna come up and nuzzle her

Should be "came".

I always love a good TwiLuna story!:heart:

On my "read this tonight" list.

4571255 my inner panic is rising
I hope you enjoy it :twilightsmile:

I shall read this, sometime. I await this.

Gotta catch 'dat SUMMA FEVER!!!! :D
TwiLuna is perfect shipping.

This seems appropriate.

Hey, I liked it. And favorited it. Perhaps I'll feature it on a blog I work for. Still stories to go through though. :pinkiehappy:

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actually I was thinking of this:

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Actually, that song has been stuck in my head for the past day or so. It's driving me in-saiyan.

Steady flow of feels here, man. Luna, my girl, I know how you feel. This story's great, man. I gotta know what happens next!

Ohh, this has gotten a lot more interesting now...

Sir, you have my attention now. :moustache:

....this made me sad....I mean, it's really good, but...it's not a cute, fluffy, happy ending. lol

I like the bit where they get back together. Genius! :ajsmug:

I appreciate that you went for a story where they don't work out. That's a rare thing to see in fanfics, and you handled it very well.

This story was confusing. The emotional back and forth, it read more like two teenagers too filled with hormones and angst to know what they want rather than too mature people having a rational discussion and we all know that, Twilight at least, is as rational as they come.

I'm not saying this is a horrible story, it just feels to disjointed, like there was no clear focus as to what you wanted to tell people and it felt like a one shot that you attempted to stretch out when it should have remained a one shot.

I know that all twiLuna fics don't have to end up with them together and to be honest, it was a little refreshing to find one where they don't but they way you did it was well.... bad. They're together, they're not, then they're back, and then they're shouting again and somewhere in there I think they had sex but I'm not sure. It just seems like they are perpetually mad and stressed at each-other with how quickly they are to start yelling, and Luna shifts moods so fast, I'm be afraid she's going to strip her emotional gear box.

"Theoretically, yes. I'm neurotic, self-entitled and selfish, and you are temperamental, demanding and possessive.

and this made no sense what so ever. How is Twilight Self-entitled and selfish? Luna, I can see Tempermental but demanding and possessive, not really.

I can't say I enjoyed this but I felt it only fair as to say why. As such I will not be up-voting this, but because I did find the initial premise of the story original and promising, I won't be down-voting it either.

Please keep writing.

This story could use some editing and at least in my opinion, it somehow deserves, even needs, a 'sad'-tag. :applejackunsure: I'm feeling more depressed then before reading it. I also agree with almost everything of that comment below. (5363882)

I'm sorry.

I was hoping this was going to be about Luna and Twilight falling in love. But, this is very cute as well.

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