Always Pick Truth

Fluttershy has had a crush on Twilight for awhile now, obvious to the signs that one another likes the other back, she and twilight keep there feelings to themsleves. Until, a slumber party game of truth or dare that is.

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elmago02

elmago02 #1 · May 21st, 2014 · · ·

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Fluttershy has had a crush on Twilight for awhile now, obvious to the signs that one another likes the other back, she and twilight keep there feelings to themsleves. Until, a slumber party game of truth or dare that is.

Oblivious.

The pegasus put her ho on the purple alicorns muzzle,

hoof

Once on thw bed Fluttershy replaced her first hoof with her lips,

the

But, she that was wrong

she knew that was wrong

W-what brings you her so early in the morning?"

here

The reat of the girls will be there."

rest

Angle

Angel

With snacks, music, pinkie pie, pillow fights

Capitals: Pinkie Pie

considering the went over their time by a whole minute

that they

they probally liked it.

probably

Twilight had to write a letter to the princess saying some thinks that should not have been written to Princess Celestia

things

It was a lie and she felt horrible fir straight out lying

for

Apple jack saw through the lie instantly

No space between this two words

Save it for later, you too

two

Well, I did, but after the events if tonight.

Lily Gingertail

Lily Gingertail #2 · May 21st, 2014 · · ·

A bit rushed and some writing errors but they can be ignored.
Maybe do a bit of editing and do some proofreading before posting won't do any harm.
If i wear to give you a rating it would be a 4/10 With some work and it can be good but it is just very rushed.
~Tobben

Twilight_Scratch

Twilight_Scratch #3 · May 21st, 2014 · · ·

Would you like me to edit all the grammar mistakes our and send it back to you? If not, then that's fine.

dashiepie22

dashiepie22 #4 · May 21st, 2014 · · ·

4425183 that would be great.

Twilight_Scratch

Twilight_Scratch #5 · May 21st, 2014 · · ·

4425210 Brilliant! Whenever you want me to edit, just send it to me in a PM and I'll try to do in in two days or less, unless otherwise stated.

PatRoison

PatRoison #6 · May 21st, 2014 · · ·

Aside from some small grammar and spelling mistakes, this was a really cute story. I really like the moral at the end. That was adorable.

toastman

toastman #7 · May 22nd, 2014 · · ·

4425183
edit all the grammar mistakes our?

That's a little ironic.

Twilight_Scratch

Twilight_Scratch #8 · May 22nd, 2014 · 1 · ·

4429745 I know, but in my defence my keyboard doesn't register some keypresses, so if I had tried to correct it then it might not have picked it up (never trust ASUS when they say that it can be repaired easily). Also, when I proofread/edit, I spend quite some time on it. I tried to respond as quick as I could as I was running late for my bus. Sorry.

3 #9 · May 23rd, 2014 · · ·

Hmm... Something ain't right here. I swer sometins spokes ta be hear. I dunt know what tho, hmm... Maybe if I put maih tongue in the right spart. Wait, da goden wool!

No Cuts, No buts, No drunk bar sluts?

Nah, I swer dat ain't it. Hmmm...

toastman