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My name is Allen Fersch. My story begins on the last day of my life.
There’s a distinct possibility that every living being has a kind of “quantum immortality” that prevents it from experiencing its own death. At the instant when your body in one parallel universe dies, your consciousness jumps ship to the most similar parallel available where you did not die.
The truck swerved at the last second. The power went out. The gun jammed. You were thrown clear and you thank God the Almighty and all the saints and seraphim that you’re okay.
If you’ve ever been in a near-death situation where your life flashed before your eyes, there’s a good chance you’re not in your original body. That experience of “flashing before your eyes” is the download mechanism kicking in. In some lonely universe somewhere, all your friends and loved ones think you’re dead and your parents keep a picture of you on their mantelpiece, which depresses everyone when they come to visit for the holidays.
So what happens if the mechanism goes wrong? Like any natural process, there are quirks in the system. Some people are born with six toes. Some people have a defective downloader. If somebody you know ever had a near death experience and came out a completely different person, you’re seeing what happens when the escaping soul can’t match the parameters of their original universe closely enough. I shudder to think how many perfectly sane people are locked up in mental asylums because their soul skipped a track or two and now they’re living a timeline meant for someone else.
Sometimes you escape death and you never even realize how close you came, sometimes you escape it and the world around you is different in ways you can’t quite place.
And sometimes… you end up like me: completely off the grid.

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Comments ( 34 )

Forward into the unknown!

Sounds awesome, tracking!

Wow. Well written, an intriguing premise, and I am genuinely interested in seeing where this character goes. (And I mean that as a compliment extending beyond the MLP hook. Don't screw this up now and turn it into just another fanfic.)

That was pretty good, a little gross. The hyper-realism thing was cool too, I don't often think about the pony world looking as real to them as our world looks to us. Nice work. :twilightsmile:

Cool. So rare to see comparative anatomy come into play with correct joint correlations.

I do wonder who will start believing him first? The ponyvillian who knows him best might be Pinkie Pie..

Will read when I get a chance, as in later today, but with the quantum immortality, I was watching an episode of Through the Wormhole with Morgan Freeman like 2 days ago and it was about what happens after death, and it mentioned this. First time I had heard of it and it was very intriguing.

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Maybe she knew Charcoal...

Human In Equestria fics live and die on the strength of the character entering Equestria. Although his background is a bit uninspired (if I had a dime for every college kid who gets dropped in Equestria...), Allen's a good narrator, and I chuckled a few times while reading the opening hook. I got some serious American Beauty vibes from the intro, and found myself hearing Kevin Spacey's voice reading out the opening.

It's interesting to see that you're taking the anatomically-correct angle (heh, angle). Hopefully that won't make his future interactions with mares too awkward. The scene where Allen stumbled to the bathroom on four legs was a nice touch, it's always a bit immersion-ruining to read a HiE story where someone who's been walking on two legs their entire lives can instantly prance around on four without breaking a sweat. Pissing himself was a bit gross as the above commenter mentioned, but to be expected. How do those holes even work anyway, squatting I guess?

You've got me hooked on this story, so nicely done. Favorited and definitely looking forward to the next chapter.

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Of course Pinkie knows Charcoal! :pinkiehappy: She knows everypony in Ponyville! So if this isn't Charcoal, she should know that too.

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College kids are easy because they're kind of a blank slate. They're young enough that they can still be impulsive, but educated and mature enough to handle adult situations.
I could have written about a middle aged man getting a new start as a pony, or a child unfairly torn from their parents and forced to live as a pony and they would have been new and unique stories, but I don't know if I could have identified with the characters closely enough to make them compelling.

nice faved and up thumbed

This is off to a great start. And that's a kick-ass multiverse theory.

Also, I had to stop reading and try very hard from laughing like hell in the back seat of the car while reading the bathroom part.

It's definitely a unique multiverse theory, and some pretty awkward situations Allen got himself into. Obviously it turns out OK, he got himself a typewriter!

Did he really just ask for a steak? I would have done the same thing...
GOTTA HAVE ME MY STEAK!!!

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I did a minor edit. What he says is a little worse now...

433185 Now it just about made me fall on the floor laughing. Good job sir!

A scientific explanation for unicorn magic. Impressive.

And I read the before and after on the steak/horse part. Good one!

I was expecting his situation being a little more kobayashi, but this is actually way better. Thank you for not making the mental ward part longer than it needed to be.

I really enjoyed the description of magic you used here. This is looking to be a very interesting take on the human in Equestria story. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

It's good to see that you are taking a different approach on Human in Equestria. This story should be fun.

:ajbemused:... You sir.... ARE A GENIUS!!!!1:pinkiehappy:

I'm liking dis shit. Go on:moustache:...

I have just become attached to an abandoned story haven't I?

Any plans on updating this? Or has this been canceled?

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Not cancelled. Just delayed due to work. I've got some time off coming up. I intend to write like a madman as soon as I can.

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Work..... I can understand that.
Curse you need for money!!!!!!!!!!

I really hope this turn out well. From just reading the description it sounds like you've thought this through enough to build a pretty nice story off of. GOOD LUCK! I'm keeping an eye on this one.

This is pretty awesome.

But I know the feeling. It's been laying around so long that you kinda don't feel like continuing, even if you really want to the words just don't come out when you try to type...

Still. I hope you'll continue this, it's been far too long since I read a story that made me laugh instead of just rolling my eyes at forced humor.

What Sixpence said.

Dam I was beginning to enjoy it :fluttershbad:

It was as if I’d stepped out of a dreary, period drama about mental asylums into the rolling, green hills of Narnia, or Middle Earth, or at least New Zealand

I live in New Zealand, we have great scenery but overpriced houses that are usually purchased by foreigners so we have alot of homeless people.

Goddamnit, the worldbuilding is pretty fantastic in this one, but you just have to stop early didn't you :raritydespair:

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