The aftermath of Silver Spoon's words bore into Diamond Tiaras mind. Used to shunning everypony, now Diamond Tiara has to start over and make friends in Manehattan. Criticism welcome here~
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And here begins another epic tale.
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Don't ask what I'm doing here again; just lurking.
nah nah nah. My shit is simple; and my english is somewhat better than last. I found that I'm probably ADD which is a slap in the face to a writer. But great story.
I'M BACK ON THIS SITE AND IT'S CHANGED ON ME.
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So Screwball is coming off as autistic, rather than Discord's last gag. I'm a little surprised they're taking her so well in stride (Tiara, at least). Her madness could be so disasterous to the reputation of a socialite busybody that I'd almost expect DT to treat Screwball like a four headed toad from from Chernobyl.
Well someone's bitter. EQD's a shithole with biased, subjective and dickish pre-readers. So they didn't like your story, therefore nobody else will. That is literally their thought process. So they didn't like your story. It's high time you deal with it and move on.
Pity the only other thing we've got is circlejerking here on FIMFiction.
So Fleur-di-Lis is Tiara's mother, so she's half unicorn? I'm guessing, based on the comments, that Screwball's propeller beanie is what lets her fly like that.
I was surprised by who you included into Diamond Tiara's family and I'm looking forwards to more of this, but I do hope that you can finish Beyond the Classroom too.
Before I start reading:
Your description. It's spelled "criticism".
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Razzly? "FAIRY" Good? Green Socks? Dudew, I'm gonna guess you play the Chrono Series....or at least Chrono Cross. If you don't know what I'm talking about, This is Razzly and her Bio.
ALLONS-Y!!!
Taht last line got me confused, but I'll wait to see how this plays out.
Yay! Razzly's back!
.....Hmmm.....I wonder if Rosetta is gonna make an appearance.....Nah! Probably not.
Love this story so far.
ALLONS-Y!!!
Sorry for the delay y'all! I'm getting the hang of editing thanks to my great friends, so this update came a little later than expected! ![]()
I'll be right up front with you Holly, I'm not as enthusiatic about this story as I have been about your other ones. Now I still like this story but in all honesty my level of investment is minimal. I enjoyed the fleshing out of Tiara's classmates and Tiara's own character development but despite that I'd rather be reading more of "beyond the classroom" or whatever other stories you have planned for Silver Spoon and the Cutie Mark Crusaders.
I do like this story but I feel I need to be honest.
Please ship Dazzler aka Screwball with Cotton Cloud in a future fanfic.
And I know their pain. I was pulled out of my horribly mean LA teacher's class as I was having frequent panic attacks because of her. She often singled me out for negative attention and didn't grade me fairly.![]()
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Canceled, eh? It's a shame, but then again, this makes my story one of, if not the only Diamond Tiara first-person stories! *laughs maniacally* Nah, but in all seriousness, best of luck with your future endeavors, and I'm sorry you had to let this story bite the dust. Speaking of, I need to update my story too, lol. ![]()
“It’s my own fault...
Diamond Tiara saying THOSE FOUR WORDS?!
What happened to make her drop her image that she could never be at fault for ANY of the negatives in her lives.
Not a bad read. At first I thought that Silver Spoon was the one who moved away. It took me until the second chapter to realize it was the other way around. If nothing else, this story certainly sliced life. I imagine Screwball had a bigger role somewhere down the line considering the foreshadowing, as did Cotton Clouds. Then again, Mr. Oak's character could have gone anywhere.
I was personally intrigued by the way you went about Diamond not fitting in at this Reins private school. She faced several waves of teasing and alienation, but it didn't shoot down her self-esteem and become a serious issue like it probably would if this story were about Sweetie Belle or Twist. Instead, the mockery had almost the opposite effect, driving her forward to show them why they were wrong. It was a much more refreshing take on the New Student approach if you ask me.
I'd say this story is a cupcake with a lot of frosting and a dill pickle on top; although, I chose to take the pickle off and enjoy it on its own. Normally, I can't handle too much frosting at once, but I used the pickle to scrape some of it off. Tasty story for what it is, and I'd like to congratulate your effort on the creation.
Furthermore, now whenever someone questions me, I'll just spell at them. Apparently, it's very intimidating.







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