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    Spike's dreams of Rarity are shattered, and at the worst possible time, for his friends will need him to make it through their greatest crisis.

    Inspired by the United Kingdom entry to the 2012 Eurovision Song Contest, "Love Will Set You Free" by Engelbert Humperdinck. From the second chapter onward, different songs serve as the inspiration, so check the comments for the links.

    Title image by Jade (tehjadeh.deviantart.com).

    First Published
    6th Apr 2012
    Last Modified
    22nd Apr 2012

    Comments ( 140 )

    #1 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 18h ago · · ·
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    Hey, nice job! This deserves some positive feedback. I think your speech (internal and spoken) is a bit forced, but the story was solid, the emotional depth was there, and you crafted good characters and settings. Very well done.  :raritywink:

    BR
    #2 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 17h ago · · ·
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    It was good, but you need a few pointers.

    1 Apple Bloom is like 11 In human years.

    2 spike needed time to recover from the emotional shock.

    3 after reading curse of the werepony, this seems like its shadow. Maybe if it had been submitted a week later...

    aw, whatever. Its good.:pinkiesmile:

    #3 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 17h ago · · ·
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    This is pretty good. I like the Spike x Applebloom, but I haven't seen that much of it.

    I prefer Spike x Rarity anyway.

    #4 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 17h ago · · ·
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    >>414598

    1: I'm quite aware of that (though the ages in the show are vague to the point of nonexistence). But I don't see Spike as that much older, and in fact, if anything, I'd see a relationship between Spike and Rarity at the in-show ages as far iffier in that regard.

    2: What, two weeks aren't enough? :pinkiehappy:

    3: Well, that's as may be. I don't really see that many similarities, to be honest (and I'm one of the hipster kids who knew CotW before it was on Fimfiction).

    BR
    #5 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 17h ago · · ·
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    >>414725 okey dokey lokey. Just making sure you knew.

    So Fimfiction is too mainstream, eh?:moustache:

    #6 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 17h ago · · ·
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    Urgghh! I normally don't read such things, not much for the shipping stuff but since you introduced me to this absolutely amazing song, I have to. My Honor demands it of me.

    #7 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 17h ago · · ·
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    Neat little story, It was finely written and fairly interesting even if it was a bit short.

    #8 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 14h ago · · ·
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    That's it? I could easily see this a fic with 2 more chapter at least. I liked it and it would make a great set up for a longer fic.

    #9 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 6h ago · · ·
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    Complete? Seriously? :raritydespair:

    #10 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 5h ago · · ·
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    >>416428 Hey, I'm just getting into this whole "writing" thing. Figured I'd go test the waters before jumping in with some 100,000-word epic or somesuch. :pinkiehappy:

    #11 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1h ago · · ·
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    tracked!!!!!!! :yay:

    #12 · Chapter 1 · 58w, 5d ago · · ·
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    UH... well I was not expecting that paring. Still good work.

    #13 · Chapter 2 · 58w, 4d ago · · ·
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    The song this chapter is named for and inspired by is Hungary's entry for 2012's Eurovision Song Contest, "Sound of Our Hearts" by Compact Disco.

    Funny. I don't even particularly like that song, but as soon as I saw the word "harmony" in the lyrics (available here), I knew this was what I needed to continue the story.

    #14 · Chapter 2 · 58w, 4d ago · · ·
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    great so far looking forward to more. :twilightsmile:

    #15 · Chapter 3 · 58w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Alright, time for chapter three. The musical inspiration this time is Finland's contribution to 2012's ESC, "När jag blundar" ("When I close my eyes", and yes, that's a Finnish contest entry sung in Swedish). Lyrics with translation here.

    I'm honestly a little surprised myself where this is going. The next chapter might take a little longer, because I need to figure out where to take this now.

    #16 · Chapter 3 · 58w, 3d ago · · ·
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    heh keep up the good work already tracked and faved.

    #17 · Chapter 3 · 58w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Awesome job. Looking forward to the next chapter.

    #18 · Chapter 4 · 58w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Another chapter, another country. The fortunate one this time is France. Their song for Baku 2012 is called "Echo (You and I)", by Anggun. Not exactly one of my favourites, but it fits this chapter. Lyrics here.

    It didn't take that long after all. Then again, this is just more setup. Brace yourselves - payoff is coming. I just don't know when. :scootangel:

    #19 · Chapter 4 · 58w, 2d ago · · ·
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    ... FUCK YEAH!!!:yay::yay::yay::yay::yay:

    #20 · Chapter 4 · 58w, 2d ago · · ·
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    BUT I WANT IT NAO!! :applecry:

    #21 · Chapter 4 · 58w, 2d ago · · ·
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    You know, I discovered this some days ago, and the fact that it's an Spikebloom fic and your usage or Eurovision songs (something quite new) caught me. I didn't favorited it fearing you might get stuck as you use an odd method of developing your story.

    Now I've read this last chapter, and finally I'm so tracking it. Go on with the awesomeness man, this looks great by far.

    Are you going to use all the songs? I could lend you a hoof (:derpytongue2:) with the spanish one's lyrics, as I'm a native from this country. That's it, if you want and need help:twilightsmile:

    #22 · Chapter 4 · 58w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>440544 Thanks to the existence of diggiloo.net, help with the lyrics probably won't be necessary, but thanks anyway.

    I did a blog post a while back on the subject of using all the songs - I won't, for two reasons: 1) almost half the songs are breakup songs, and out of the rest, quite a few are brainless "let's party!"-type songs; using more than one of the latter type isn't easy, and 2) there are a few contenders this year that I couldn't for the life of me see as inspirations for this fic - look up the entries from Montenegro, San Marino or Georgia (the latter might do as inspiration for a Pinkie fic, but I'd have to really squint my eyes to get it to fit into this one).

    I quite like "Quédate conmigo", so it will likely serve as a chapter title in the future. If it's not among my favourites this year, and not even in the top half for the six direct finalists, it's not because the song is lacking, but because the competition is insanely strong. The UK, Italy and Germany (I might be biased on the latter) all have beautiful songs, and I think it a shame that Spain and Germany were drawn right next to each other in the finals (Spain at 19, Germany at 20).

    #23 · Chapter 4 · 58w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>441203 I didn't know about that site, seems useful. It's okay dude, but if you end needing some assistance, don't hesitate to ask.

    I forgot Eurovision songs use to be happy and suitable for bashes. This lack of originality is one of the reasons I've lost almost all interest in that contest (the other one being how biased are East Europe's countries between them).

    Something I find quite interesting is that "Quédate conmigo" could work as a tragedy or mushy chapter. Well, I'll have to wait.

    #24 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Wow. I seriously wasn't expecting this to go so fast. The story wants out, it seems.

    The song naming this chapter is "Crno i belo" (Black and White) by Kaliopi, the Former Yugoslav Republic of Macedonia's entry to this year's ESC, and one of my personal favourites out of the 42. Lyrics with translation here.

    The more I look at this story, the more I wonder how in the h-e-double hockey sticks this turned from a sweet little story of teenage heartbreak into whatever it is now. What happened? Seems like I just can't do slice-of-life without at least some epic thrown into it.

    #25 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 1d ago · · ·
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    not pinkie!! :raritydespair:

    #26 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>443014 Oh, trust me, she's just the first. :pinkiecrazy:

    #27 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Heh she always seems to be the first.

    I like your taste in music and so far the story seems to be going along very well.

    Keep up the good work! :pinkiehappy:

    #28 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Better you fix Pinkie and not make her suffer too much... or I'll find you:flutterrage:

    This chapter is great, I really liked their talk and Applebloom's vision. Figures it would be related to fruits, her family and friends. But what made you turn Spike into a pear?:rainbowlaugh:

    One thing I like of this is that, although it's tagged as romance, it's well developed. It's not a "Oh I suddenly love you kiss nao" thing. Keep up the good work, and thank you for the fast updates.

    #29 · Chapter 4 · 58w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I forgot to say something. This chapter has a major flaw (my thoughts): Spike's realization.

    You see, I find a tad unfitting how fast he figured his element. It would have been nice a little more thinking and more help from his friends to make him discover his destiny; perhaps even delaying it a chapter (and leaving Applebloom's one for the next one).

    #30 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 19h ago · · ·
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    This is a fun read mah boi :rainbowdetermined2: Well written with no glaring flaws in grammar, and an interesting story going on. More please!

    #31 · Chapter 5 · 58w, 17h ago · · ·
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    >>443548 Note it says "almost like a pear". It's a way to show that Spike is different from the ponies represented by the other apples, because he's not a pony (thank you, Captain Obvious :pinkiehappy: ). I'd have used an orange as the image, but oranges already have a canonical association with the Apple family (the relatives in Manehattan), so I fell back on the German equivalent to the English expression "compare apples and oranges", which is (you guessed it) "compare apples and pears".

    #32 · Chapter 6 · 58w, 14h ago · · ·
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    Another night, another chapter. This one is named for the Estonian contribution to 2012's ESC, "Kuula" (Listen) by Ott Lepland. Lyrics with translation here. The progress of light and darkness, and a mention of rainbows in the lyrics? No matter what I think of the song (and I actually think it's not bad, if a little boring), that just fit with this chapter.

    Two down, four to go. :pinkiecrazy: :rainbowhuh:

    #33 · Chapter 6 · 58w, 14h ago · · ·
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    Wow, that was fast! Nice work, as usual.

    #34 · Chapter 6 · 58w, 14h ago · · ·
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    Sleep is for the weak! :ajsmug:

    #35 · Chapter 6 · 58w, 7h ago · · ·
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    I said the last time, but I'll repeat it: dude, you're fast:twilightoops:

    This chapter was great, but I have a doubt. How's that Spike and Applebloom's elements are related to darkness, but hers is not black? In fact, it's very similar to Sweetie's. I'm so confused:applejackconfused:

    #36 · Chapter 6 · 57w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>447700 The explanation is already there if you go looking for it. It will become clearer, I promise.

    #37 · Chapter 7 · 57w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Oh goodness, this story just wants out no matter what. Don't get used to one chapter per day, folks (too late, I know).

    This time around, another of the Big Five gets their due as chapter patron - Spain. Their song for Baku is called "Quédate conmigo" (Stay With Me), by Pastora Soler. Lyrics here. (Check out the final line in particular.)

    Also, I've finally gotten around to making a plan for this fic - not a detailed one, but I've got the chapter titles, as well as what basic story elements go in which of them. For the record, it will go to 13 chapters - for the curious, the patron countries for the upcoming chapters are, in order: Slovakia, Azerbaijan, Iceland, Belarus, Switzerland and Russia. (If you looked up the song titles and figured that the story would lead to a happy ending, congrats, and have a cookie. :pinkiehappy: )

    #38 · Chapter 7 · 57w, 6d ago · · ·
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    /)^3^(\

    #39 · Chapter 7 · 57w, 6d ago · · ·
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    And then there will be four.

    Maybe things are speeding to much (it makes the evil mastermind behind this a lot less threatening... for now), but I'm enjoying this a lot. I think I've finally understood why Spike's necklace is made of obsidian instead of metal: it's because he eats gemstones?

    The title appears screwed up because the accent over the "e", I suggest you writing it without that.

    #40 · Chapter 7 · 57w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>450986 I corrected the chapter title. For some reason, when this was unpublished, it displayed in that weird way on top of the chapter, yet correctly in the story overview menu. :rainbowhuh:

    Spike eating gemstones is part of why his necklace is different, but it's not the complete answer.

    Oh, and for the record, the next chapter will probably take another two to three days. I'm far too exhausted to write anything coherent right now, and I'll have to be at a family gathering in six hours. :ajsleepy:

    #41 · Chapter 8 · 57w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Here we are then, chapter 8. As mentioned, this one is named for the Slovak entry in the 2012 ESC, "Don't Close Your Eyes" by Max Jason Mai. Lyrics here. Obligatory warning: this is by far the rockiest song in this year's lineup - I feel reminded of Avenged Sevenfold for some reason. That's why I love the ESC - you get every kind of song imaginable, including something like this from time to time.

    Boy, Doubt sure is fun to write. Villains are always more fun, aren't they? :pinkiecrazy:

    #42 · Chapter 8 · 57w, 4d ago · · ·
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    /)^3^(\

    #43 · Chapter 8 · 57w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Ooooooh, I definitely get it know. Draconic element.

    That was a great chapter, but... Why are Applejack, Rainbow, Pinkie and Fluttershy prisoners after being healed?

    #44 · Chapter 9 · 57w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Two (admittedly short) chapters in less than 24 hours. I love writing this story, and sleep is overrated anyway. :applejackconfused:

    This time, it's the host country's turn to provide the title. This chapter is named for Azerbaijan's entry in 2012's ESC, "When the Music Dies" by Sabina Babayeva. Lyrics here. I like the song, although I think back-to-back victories for Azerbaijan are rather unlikely.

    #45 · Chapter 9 · 57w, 3d ago · · ·
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    /)^3^(\

    #46 · Chapter 9 · 57w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>461711 While I do appreciate the sentiment, this is the third straight chapter you've commented on this way. Not to sound rude, but you could express that feeling with a simple thumbs up. I enjoy comments as much as anyone, but I prefer the kind from which I can learn something.

    #47 · Chapter 9 · 57w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Rarity should have known Akbar before. In a more serious note, it was really easy not to fall against Doubt: love is the strongest form of friendship, after all. Perfect answer.

    #48 · Chapter 9 · 57w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>462387

    Sorry It's just that i just that i really like both your fic and that emoticon so I get a little carried away.:fluttershysad:

    #49 · Chapter 9 · 57w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>462711 Doubt is designed to get to the Elements of Harmony, so while Rarity might have lasted a bit longer had she thought of something like what you said, it wouldn't have been sufficient (and not just because she needed to fall to move the story along :raritydespair:).

    As for your question after the last chapter: I'm planning to include a section describing what's happening outside this "mindscape" of Doubt's at the start of the next chapter. For now, suffice it to say that "stabilize" and "heal" are two massively different things.

    #50 · Chapter 9 · 57w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>463231Doubt is a Mary Sue, then?:pinkiesick:

    Ont thing that surprised me was the possibility of destroying an element. Twilight stated on 1-2 that this couldn't be done.

    #51 · Chapter 9 · 57w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>464515 I don't consider Doubt a Mary Sue in any way, shape or form. How in the world would you get that impression? Doubt is designed to work against the Elements of Harmony in particular (and it said so), but it does have weak points - each one of his confrontations with Spike and the CMC went wrong somehow, for one thing. That's not a Mary Sue, that's more like a Superman villain armed with Kryptonite - great against Superman, not so great if someone else shows up to help.

    That other thing? Elements can't really be destroyed (the necklaces are just physical representations, same as the stone spheres in "Elements of Harmony Part 2"), but in the case of the lost ones, it would take tremendous effort to get them back from wherever they went after their sacrifice. They're not completely gone, but like the avatars of the Ancient Darkness, they're somewhere very far away.

    #52 · Chapter 10 · 57w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Here we are again. I've changed my original plan for the chapter patrons. My home country should be there somewhere, after all.

    This chapter is named for Germany's entry to the 2012 ESC, "Standing Still" by Roman Lob. Lyrics here. It's about coming to terms with a lost love, which does fit with this chapter quite well in my opinion. Also, I've come to like this song a lot, and I'm not just saying that because it's the German entry (we had a glorified intro in 2011, and some of the worst songs in the history of the contest in 2008 and 2005).

    Oof. Drawing closer to the conclusion day by day. Only three chapters left. (In the changed plan, the next one will be Iceland, then Switzerland and finally Russia.)

    #53 · Chapter 10 · 57w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Spike is badass and I like how Fancy Pants was actually important not just a the cause of all things bad.

    ... oh yeah and /)^3^(\

    #54 · Chapter 10 · 57w, 3d ago · · ·
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    What actually happened to make Twilight get encased in the disc?

    Spike's part was really great, although I'd make him suffer more.

    It gets me sad to know that only three chapters are left. Might the final battle be long and interesting.

    #55 · Chapter 9 · 57w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>464707 I got the idea from here: "Doubt is designed to get to the Elements of Harmony, so while Rarity might have lasted a bit longer had she thought of something like what you said, it wouldn't have been sufficient"

    It's not like the Superman-kryptonite ordeal. Superman gets weak if exposed to this mineral, but he can attempt to fight. Doubt is like he's level 100, and Rarity, idk, level 50. She just can't win. What I'm trying to say is, the mane6 can't defeat him, period. Then why resisting? Maybe calling it a Mary Sue was too much, but I think he's overpowered. it would have been better if they had tried to fight him for a bit, doing some damage, but ended losing after some time. Not just falling. Only my thoughts, I still think this story's great. That way it would be even better, for me.

    Ok, so they're just "banished". Got it.

    #56 · Chapter 10 · 57w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>465890 Well, if you think back to "Return of Harmony Part 1", Discord worked pretty much the same way, picking the Elements off one by one and then psychologically getting to them. The exceptions were Twilight (who got Discorded by virtue of being isolated) and Fluttershy, who managed to deflect Discord's mind games - and then got forcibly Discorded anyway. None of the others really tried to fight him, and while I agree that more of a fight might have made for a meatier story, this story isn't really about the Elements of Harmony - it's about fighting an enemy who is more or less immune to Harmony used against it.

    If the Superman analogy doesn't do it for you, think of it as someone with an elemental weakness (against water, say) going up against a water mage. The water mage needn't be particularly powerful to win out against someone whose weak points he can pummel relentlessly. In my mind, Discord would have had a similarly easy time against the Elements of Discipline (the pegasus ones), because he was created to exploit a chink in their armour (headcanon FTW! :yay:).

    But trust me, the bit with "they will need you, you will need them" will come into play before the end. The Elements of Harmony may be down, but they're not out just yet. :eeyup:

    Oh, and as for the suffering? At the moment, Doubt is winning, so it doesn't really see the need to pull out all the stops just yet. That will change. Pinkie promise. :pinkiecrazy:

    #57 · Chapter 10 · 57w, 2d ago · · ·
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    strong will, he has:moustache:

    #58 · Chapter 10 · 57w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>466077 Lol at the mage example. Why? I was going to use a Pokémon type comparison first:rainbowlaugh:

    The fact that EoH will come in handy intrigues me. Go on, dude... Go on:coolphoto:

    #59 · Chapter 11 · 57w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Okay, here we go, the confrontation you've been waiting for.

    This chapter is named for Iceland's contribution to the 2012 lineup, "Never Forget" by Gréta Salóme and Jónsi. Lyrics here.

    Ouch. I seriously didn't expect this to turn so dark. I'm not slapping a dark tag on the story, because it's the darkness before dawn, but I have upped the rating. Why exactly am I doing these horrible things to these ponies again? :applecry::scootangel::unsuresweetie::moustache:

    #60 · Chapter 11 · 57w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Damn that torture sounded nasty, it almost makes me want not to post this

    /)^3^(\

    #61 · Chapter 12 · 57w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Sorry for the chapter spamming, but this just wouldn't let me rest until I had finished it. Only the epilogue to follow now. Also, finally justifying that Romance tag! :yay:

    This chapter is named for Switzerland's ESC song for 2012, "Unbreakable" by Sinplus. If you overlook the weird accent, it's a pretty good song, and I knew as soon as this fic had taken its final shape (back around chapter 5) that this would be the title and song for the final chapter (not counting the epilogue). Lyrics here.

    #62 · Chapter 12 · 57w, 2d ago · · ·
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    yay!

    now to wait for the aftermath

    ... oh yeah I almost forgot /)^3^(\

    #63 · Chapter 12 · 57w, 2d ago · · ·
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    3 chapters in one day? Might be 4 if you upload the Epilogue later before midnight lol.

    Overall, this story is very interesting. Sadly, I wish there were 2 more elements that joined with Spike, AB, Scootaloo, and Sweetie Belle.

    #64 · Chapter 12 · 57w, 2d ago · · ·
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    SQUEE!

    #65 · Chapter 11 · 57w, 2d ago · · ·
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    I don't think the "Teen" tag is necessary. But, dafuq man? Dafuq?:pinkiecrazy:

    I really liked the "The night is always darkest right before the dawn" proverb. It's originally spanish, in case you didn't know:rainbowkiss:

    But. Scootabuse.

    I can't stand Scootabuse. Never had, never will. It makes me ill, how people charge against poor Scoots, over and over again. Orphanage, death, homeless... why, I ask? Why so much hate towards her?

    #66 · Chapter 12 · 57w, 2d ago · · ·
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    "What are you doing, AB?"

    "Our hearts are red, the ocean is blue... But enough talk! Have at you!":heart::rainbowlaugh:

    Absolutely epic chapter. The first thought I had was that the mane6 were going to shoot Spike and the CMC to restore their light, but what you did was also good.

    However, I feel uneasy about something... Spike and AB's mutual acceptance was good, and the kiss was perfect (they're kids, it was predestinated to be a calamitous, yet enjoyable moment), but I think it would have been better to wait until next chapter. They talk at the party for a bit about themselves, and BOOM, headshot. The way you did it seems a bit rushed. Of course, it's still cute:twilightsmile:

    #67 · Chapter 12 · 57w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>468482 The thing is, we don't know nearly as much about Scootaloo as we do about the other crusaders. Where I could hit Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle with stuff more or less directly from the series, that simply doesn't work in Scootaloo's case. What do we get to work with? She's a tomboy (doesn't tell us too much), she doesn't care for "icky" stuff, and she's even more willing to take risks than the other two. We have no backstory on her whatsoever, and no information on her family either. That led me to the conclusion that there might be something hidden in her background that the show won't address directly (similar to Applejack's dead parents, which are Lauren Faust's headcanon, but will never ever be mentioned as dead in the show because of its rating), and that led to an abusive father - or, to be more precise, an abusive husband. This isn't Scootabuse so much as Scootmomabuse, to coin a new word.

    Also, all that is in the past and more or less done with. It's a childhood (foalhood?) trauma, but she's dealt with it really well; a traumatized child would not have been picked as an element bearer. And I honestly don't see how you could think I hated the character. I admit I don't particularly like her, both because of the aforementioned underdeveloped background, and because she seems even more dense about the whole cutie mark thing than the other crusaders, but I do believe I've given her enough stuff in this fic to show that I don't hate her. :scootangel:

    #68 · Chapter 12 · 57w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>468756 What unnerves me is that, when we don't know something about a character, fandom uses to think about the worst case scenario.

    Until we met Rarity's parents, people thought they were dead. This still applies for every main character whose family hasn't showed up or hasn't been talked about, which is ridiculous. On a side note, Lauren said that AJ's parents were dead or travelling as salesponies, she didn't develop their life too much. Besides, think about AJ's flashback, with her leaving the farm at a young age and any of her parents is there. Seeing her age, it's safe to say that AB was going to be born soon. Only two scenarios seem plausible: her mother was travelling while being in the last months of her pregnancy (high unlikely to me) or was in the farm while her husband was caring for her, that being the reason they didn't appear in the memory. AB was born after that, and they continued travelling. That's my theory.

    Although only Dinky's mane was similar to Ditzy's, people instantly assumed they were mother and daughter and the father was gone (abandonment or death). This only got worse when Sparkler appeared.

    And that's only two examples. This madness reaches a sickening peak with Scootaloo. Yeah, it's true that we don't know a thing about her family... because she isn't a sibling of any of the mane 6, for goodness sake. Her life is "not that important". But no, people throw all the bad things of life to her. And that infuriates me. I really hope we know more about her in the third season, my screaming of joy and laugh at the people that makes fun making her suffer without reason will be heard accross the globe.

    However, that's not your case. You had a good reason to wrote that, so I can cope with it, I suppose. And don't worry, I know you don't hate her. I was generalizing. Sorry about the misunderstanding:twilightsheepish:

    #69 · Chapter 12 · 57w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>468927 Trust me, I've seen more than my fair share of bad Scootabuse stories, so I know what you're talking about. I did need a trauma of some kind, and just bashing on her inability to fly seemed rather bland. Thanks for clearing up the misunderstanding.

    #70 · Chapter 13 · 57w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Whew. Here it is, then, the final chapter of "Love Will Set You Free". To quote the Grateful Dead: what a long strange trip it's been. (Though "long" doesn't really apply here, seeing as how this story just wanted out no matter what.)

    This chapter is named for Russia's contribution to the 2012 Eurovision Song Contest, "Party for Everybody" by Buranovskiye Babushki. Lyrics here. The link for the song is in the fic itself this time.

    I'd like to thank everyone who read this, staying faithful even after "Romance/Sad" suddenly turned into "Adventure". Even bigger thanks to those who took the time to comment - and to everyone who has read the fic and hasn't commented, it's never too late to do so. :pinkiehappy: I love to read comments, as long as they're not mindless trolling or bashing. Constructive criticism, on the other hand, I do appreciate. Also, I'll ask everyone reading this to rate the fic. Some people don't do that with unfinished fics (myself included), but that doesn't apply anymore.

    Phew. Perhaps I can get some sleep now. :ajsleepy: This fic took up more of my time than I ever thought possible. Goes to show where a silly concept and a strange story idea can take you.

    #71 · Chapter 13 · 57w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Well, good job amigo, the story was AWESOME:rainbowkiss:

    #72 · Chapter 13 · 57w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Damn!... the last part sounded pretty ugly...

    but still /)^3^(\

    #73 · Chapter 13 · 57w, 21h ago · · ·
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    Perfect finale for a great story. Party fun, words of wisdom, hilarious moment with the stage mares (I see what you did there) and a shivering ending. Like Fancy Pants, I also believe these two would last, if not forever, for many years. I'm tired of the "too young for love" phrase.

    This was a very enjoyable reading. You developed a unique and new idea, and you did it pretty well. Take a good rest, soldier. You earned it:rainbowdetermined2:

    Also, until you said it some chapters ago I didn't know you were german. I must say, your english is very good. But one thing: if you're writing american english (that's what it seems), the right word at the beginning of the chapter would be "guests of honor", not "honour". The -our at the end of some words is applied in british english.

    I already rated the story as good when I tracked it. And about thanking all who commented, you're very welcome. This story deserves it:twilightsmile:

    #74 · Chapter 13 · 57w, 8h ago · · ·
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    >>472211 I usually go in for British spellings, actually, as all the (many) appearances of "colour" in this fic should prove. I do use the American "-ize" spelling in words like "realize", rather than the "-ise" preferred by the Brits. If what I write sounds American, it's probably because the vast majority of English-language media I follow are American (with the important exception of "Doctor Who").

    And considering that I study English Linguistics, I probably should be better able to make up my mind whether what I write is British or American English, but I honestly don't care that much. :rainbowlaugh:

    #75 · Chapter 13 · 57w, 7h ago · · ·
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    >>474673 I didn't realize about your usage of "-our", I'm sorry:fluttershysad:

    I suggest to be careful if you try to submit anything to EqD, or toss a story to a Ponychan prereader. You need to be consistent choosing american or british english.

    #76 · Chapter 13 · 56w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Well. That kicked quite a few types of ass. I toldja you had it in you.

    Now let's see what you can do next.

    #77 · Chapter 14 · 56w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Hee hee hee ... Surprise! :pinkiehappy:

    I have three reasons to write this second epilogue to "Love Will Set You Free".

    The first is a wish to include another of my personal favourites from the 2012 ESC lineup as a chapter title, which I hereby consider done. "You and Me", by Joan Franka, is this year's song from the Netherlands. Lyrics here. And try not to judge the song by the singer's accent or that ridiculous Indian Chieftain getup.

    The second is the wish that started this fic in the first place - I wanted to try my hand at something a little less adventure-y, justifying that Romance tag a little more. If you think it's sappy and overblown, chances are, it's the effect I was going for. :twilightblush:

    The third is that little teaser at the end. The sequel is already in the works, but since I intend to conform more to traditional chapter lengths this time, it will take some more preparation. I have a hearty dislike for hollow word ballast, but at the same time, I'm only too aware that my chapters are sometimes too short for what I'm trying to accomplish.

    #78 · Chapter 14 · 56w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Holy Shitywok dude, That was amazing,:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

    #79 · Chapter 14 · 56w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Yay, sequels! :pinkiehappy:

    #80 · Chapter 14 · 56w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Sweet cant wait for the sequel! :pinkiecrazy:

    #82 · Chapter 14 · 56w, 4d ago · · ·
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    *I see a new update of this story*

    *In chapter nine, you said: "Elements can't really be destroyed (the necklaces are just physical representations, same as the stone spheres in "Elements of Harmony Part 2"), but in the case of the lost ones, it would take tremendous effort to get them back from wherever they went after their sacrifice. They're not completely gone, but like the avatars of the Ancient Darkness, they're somewhere very far away."*

    *Now you write this prophecy*

    It was funny and beautiful to see that AP catched the bouquet, seeing that she and Spike are still together, even having lived through some difficulties. That was some hopeful and nice background.

    I'm eager to see what you're planning for the sequel. Something worst than Doubt? Shiiiiii...

    PS: I expect a certain dragon-pony wedding and/or their child:pinkiecrazy:

    AL
    #83 · Chapter 1 · 54w, 6d ago · · ·
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    wooooooow =D hey  nice work !! its really groove  and ooow  Appleblom n.n  sooo sweet !!!  

    grooove  :D :pinkiehappy:

    AL
    #84 · Chapter 2 · 54w, 6d ago · · ·
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    aweseomeeeeeeee 0: !!!!  i wondering wut could be da dream or vision 0: !!

    AL
    #85 · Chapter 3 · 54w, 6d ago · · ·
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    :derpyderp1: woooooooooow  0: interesting  point !!  

    #86 · Chapter 1 · 54w, 6d ago · · ·
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    To be honest, I can relate to Spike at the beginning of this chapter. Earlier today, I found out that one of my celebrity crushes (with whom I've been infatuated since 2007, but she has no idea that I exist) is engaged to one of her Broadway costars and I pretty much felt as though my heart was shattered into a million pieces. :fluttercry:

    But I digress. I look forward to reading the rest of this story. :ajsmug:

    AL
    #87 · Chapter 5 · 54w, 6d ago · · ·
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    wooooooooooooooooow 0: pinki lost her cueti mark !! mag this soo damn  grooove :D

    #88 · Chapter 14 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>484636

    Question what did applejack do to get applebloom to breakup withspike for that month

    #89 · Chapter 14 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>565771 To quote the great Professor River Song: Spoilers! :pinkiehappy: Though there is a slight hint tucked away in the story (chapter 10, to be precise), this will be fully answered in the sequel.

    #90 · Chapter 14 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>565863

    ohh i saw the hint

    dragons dont belong with ponies or something along thoes lines

    still cant wait to seewhat actualy hapend in the sequel

    #91 · Chapter 14 · 52w, 5d ago · · ·
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    #92 · Chapter 1 · 51w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Ooooo me likey

    #93 · Chapter 14 · 50w, 6d ago · · ·
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    this story deservers my fav and like:scootangel:

    #94 · Chapter 13 · 50w, 2d ago · · ·
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    *ahem* CHOKE ON IT BEYATCH!:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:. thank you for your time and have agood day sir.:scootangel:

    #95 · Chapter 14 · 50w, 2d ago · · ·
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    hmmm... do I sense a prophecy in the future? hmmm...:duck:

    #96 · Chapter 14 · 49w, 4d ago · · ·
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    That was absolutely wonderful. Fantastic work. Dear Celestia, SOOO GOOD! :pinkiehappy: :scootangel: :yay:

    #97 · Chapter 3 · 49w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Yep we fnns inspired a chapter in fimfiction

    Just so you know finland has two official languages, Swedish and Finnish

    Everyone in finland is taught both languages in school and basically all finns speak both languages more or less

    And that is why the song is "När jag blundar":twilightsmile:

    #98 · Chapter 3 · 49w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>737028 I know that. Even though, if I can trust "Scandinavia and the World", Finns tend to be annoyed at the fact that they know Swedish. :rainbowlaugh: But yeah, two official languages. Shame that Sweden couldn't vote in the first semi; if they could, maybe Finland might have passed through and that dreary little ditty from Hungary would have been out.

    AL
    #99 · Chapter 14 · 49w, 1d ago · · ·
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    WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW SUPER DAMN AWESOME FIC !!!!!!!!!! :DD and da end !!! owwwww AB and SPIKE   !! :DDD and u gonna write a sequel !!! GREAT GREAT GREAT ! :yay::yay::yay::yay::pinkiehappy:

    #100 · Chapter 7 · 44w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Now the real shitstorm begins!:rainbowdetermined2:

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