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Long ago, in the magical land of Equestria, there lived a powerful King and his dark Queen. Immortal and ignorant, their end came at the hooves of their daughters, Celestia and Luna, who sought to build a better future for ponykind.

Now ponykind’s old gods have returned.

Twilight Sparkle is trapped inside her own mind, slave to a cruel and impulsive consciousness built from everything she is not. Powerless and voiceless, she must find a way to stop the being that calls itself Nihilus from destroying everything she holds dear.

Luna is tasked with assembling the remaining Elements of Harmony in hopes of freeing their leader. For if ponykind is to have any hope, it is in Twilight Sparkle. And if Twilight Sparkle is to have any hope, it is in her five friends.

Facing her father in mortal combat, Celestia must do everything she can to ensure that ponykind has the tools to survive before she falls. With inevitable defeat bearing down upon her, she makes the first move in the oldest and deadliest game known to creation.

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Last Modified
30th Jan 2013

No!  Not Celestia!

#3 · 213w, 1d ago · 13 · · The Beginning ·

Applejack!  One of the most useful ones in the group!  :ajsmug:

You forgot her lasso though...:ajbemused:

hey im really want to get in touch with you....

im not good at art but i have been working on a pic of rarity casting her blade, along with pictures of the pieces of the blade itsself...

not sure what you want but this is how i immagned it

imma scan and vectorize it when im done ok?

just wanted to let you know

so so good

You guys are awesome.

I'll be fixing this up sometime this week so that it's readable on FimFiction and nopony is forced to use the Google Docs.

#7 · 212w, 3d ago · · · The Plan ·

This story just keeps getting better. I'm happy at the thought of 2 more chapters coming soon but at the same time I hope you aren't overworking yourself on this.

#8 · 212w, 3d ago · · · The Plan ·

yea so that name still makes me lol. LATIN FTW

#9 · 212w, 3d ago · · · The Plan ·

ALSO I DONTk know if this isjust me but im expecting at sometime to see pinkie pie to go full out rage pinkamena diana pie on nihilus's ass

#10 · 212w, 2d ago · · · The Plan ·

Amazinging story brony, BROHOOF! /)

#11 · 212w, 23h ago · 6 · 3 · He Has Returned ·

yea i really liked the way you wrote celestia's character in this story. it made her out to be more than just a trolling douche with no intrest in the fate of equestria. and gave her depth that had not existed before this moment

#12 · 211w, 5d ago · 5 · · The Plan ·

I am not sure if I have enough money to buy enough hats to adequately take them off to you about this story. I am awaiting more with baited breath. I am genuinely mad at the one major player we haven't seen yet - Empyrean. How dare he kill Celestia!


i love you

you have officialy made it onto my list of "best back stories" in this case?

you win rarity's spot.


did you get the pic i emailed you?

btw just realised this and had to say it


ITS!!!!  OVER 9000!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


ok ill stop now.

ok there is no way i could be a good friend

as i would have tied rd down and had pinkie saw off her wings :pinkiecrazy:

#16 · 211w, 3d ago · 3 · · She's Alive ·

that battle sceen was really funny

some one was laughing when they did that

hm the evil pegasi seem like my oc... :trixieshiftleft: :pinkiegasp:IM EVIL D: :applecry::fluttershbad::fluttershyouch:

This is my new favourite fanfic. It's awesome, and everything I had hoped my own fanfic would be. It's far, far better than I can manage. One small thing though - are you sure you meant 'kueen' and not 'queen'?

The freeing of Twilight from Nihilus came a chapter or two earlier than I expected but these past two chapters were pretty damn awesome.

#20 · 210w, 4d ago · 1 · · She's Alive ·

At first I was like :ajbemused: and then celest died and I was like :twilightangry2: and then RD got mind raped and I was like :fluttercry: BUT NOW IM LIKE :heart::heart::heart::heart::moustache:

This is a great story so far although I cried at the beginning of this chapter:fluttercry:

I like Rarity's power and your take on Luna. Everyone seems to make her perfect, but your characterization shows her as flawed but strong and loving of her sister. Can't wait for more!

me gusta

liked the ending

really looking forward to finding out more about Rar's dad

i love what you did with him

also, do i see another epic battle scene on the horizon? 20000 words of canterlotian distruction? full blown avatar state twilight sparkle and a battle to the death for rar and her dad? with sweety belle coming to the rescue?


or i you have somethin better

just do that



My name is Twilight Sparkle.

You killed my princess.

Prepare to die. :twilightangry2:

Really digging the story, can hardly complain about you making us wait 2 weeks when its been over a month since a couple of my favorite fics updated. Care to give a touch more detail on this upcoming comedy piece? Characters, setting, maybe even a dialogue teaser?

#25 · 210w, 3d ago · 7 · · She's Alive ·

I feel like I just read Pony Ball Z


I don't think I'll give dialogue teaser, just because I honestly have no idea what I'd pick, and it would probably end up being two pages long. I will say that the story centers around the mane six as they prepare for the Summer Sun Celebration once again. Except Fluttershy is missing, so Pinkie decides to play detective as she searches for her. Dash volunteers to tame the birds in place of Fluttershy, and Applejack is dealing with a bit of an identity crisis. Hopefully it will be funny, but it's hard to tell when I don't have an audience to gauge. If nothing else, it's a nice short break from Grimdark, and I'm doing something new.

Hey AB. You sir are awesome. Out of all the fanfics I have read, yours is the only one that I absolutely recommend to any brony. I might just be some line of words on the screen, but this is the only fanfic which I take seriously. I love how you write fight scenes, I adore how you can set the mood that all hope is lost, only to grab me and tell me it's alright. If this was youtube, I would subscribe to your channel, favorite it, even make it my home page. Keep writing.

PS. I'm excited to see you trying something new. Can't wait for the first chapter.


I love how you portrayed Celestia as quite the chess master here.

Anyway, I am really loving this so far and I can't  wait to see what happens next.

TO THE NEXT CHAPTER! :flutterrage:

I first thought that Nihilus was going to turn Dash into something like her self, an anti-Dash, so to speak, but this is worse... :applecry:


Sweet Celestia's mane.... Rarity has taken about 9001 levels in absolute badass. the whole chapter had me almost literally on the edge of my computer chair with the epicness... I cannot express how much i am loving this story so far, definitely going on my list of my most favorite fanfics of all time


Still loving this story, and now I have an urge to make some fanart of Rarity wielding her blade.

......................................never mess with fluttershy 'nuff said

or pinkie for that matter...

or any of the mane 6

after the what Flutter said to Nyx, i kinda want to give her a hug, except i know that Nyx would probably kill me first


:fluttercry: For a little while I thought you actually killed Fluttershy and then, when Pinkie was beating the ever loving crap out of Wrong!Dashie I was listening to a song called All tomorrow's parties by Johnette Napolitano and I felt it kinda fit with the scene

and then the whole chapter got 20% Cooler and my mind just exploded

It's probably getting a bit redundant on saying how much I love this fic, but I do. I love how you portray everypony, it's believable and powerful and I can easily picture everything that's going on and it leaves me wanting more. I can't wait to read the next chapter.

Also, I've added this to TV Tropes' FiM Fanfic recommendations page. I hope you don't mind :twilightsmile:

#35 · 209w, 2d ago · 6 · · She's Alive ·

twilight never got to say "Generosity!"

1/5 stars.

I kid I kid...

This shit is cash! I'm so glad I read this after reading your comedy piece.

I love this story and realize you probably don't care, but I noticed a little something. While you are an amazing writer, there seems to be one convention you are unfamiliar with. When someone is speaking and a paragraph ends, yet they continue speaking in the next one, there is no need for a closing quotation mark. For example, this passage:

“-Not Princess Luna, Princess Celestia,” Rarity corrected, leaning in and whispering in a conspiratorial tone, her grudge seemingly forgotten. “In the middle of her throne room, while she was holding court. They failed, obviously. In any case, her assailant wore a grey cloak, and wearing the color has become a major faux pas. The entire aristocracy has to reorder their summer wardrobe.”

“Celestia had the entire thing under control in moments, of course,” Rarity continued, “Though I have heard rumors- and these are totally unvalidated, mind you- that in order to catch all the culprits she used mind magic on her assailant.”

Would become:

“-Not Princess Luna, Princess Celestia,” Rarity corrected, leaning in and whispering in a conspiratorial tone, her grudge seemingly forgotten. “In the middle of her throne room, while she was holding court. They failed, obviously. In any case, her assailant wore a grey cloak, and wearing the color has become a major faux pas. The entire aristocracy has to reorder their summer wardrobe.

“Celestia had the entire thing under control in moments, of course,” Rarity continued, “Though I have heard rumors- and these are totally unvalidated, mind you- that in order to catch all the culprits she used mind magic on her assailant.”

This is a minor thing, but I thought you might want to know. Anyway, I really love the story, keep up the good work.



I do care. I absolutely care. This isn't even something I'm doing that could be construed as right or that anyone could have a disagreement about. This is objectively wrong. A friend of mine has been on my ass about this lately, too.

That said, I probably won't do an editing run over the earlier chapters specifically to knock out the hanging quotes. It's just way to much effort for something I see as relatively small. If I ever need to do an editing run over them in the future (Dear Celestia I hope not, I've been over parts 1-3 exactly six times each,) I'll be sure to take them out. For now, though, My new chapters will just do things right.

What? I can be lazy if I want. I'm the boss. I'm allowed.:trollestia:

I don't understand where the new chapter is, it hurts my head, and makes me sad :raritydespair:


It's coming. I'm actually two chapters ahead of the published fic. I just want to release the best Ponies Make War that I can, which means making everypony wait longer than I anticipated. I'd rather break my word and seem like a bad pony than release a chapter that isn't up to my standards (which grow higher every day.) I fully intend to once again settle into a regular release schedule again after part 9.

Why Can't I rate YOU 5 stars :fluttershysad:

Heh...I really liked the part where Rainbow goes through weirrdd shit as Nihlus pet...kinda horrifying yet intriguing prospect




Great chapter btw. Really feelin steam-punk pinkie and super commander Twilight

Rarity is a boss as always.

Dash.... not a fan (not your writing just don't like her personality) but like what you did.

Fluttershy? well kinda hoping you make her like a chemastry boss and have her make bombs and other flash-based weapons.


Well... that was entirely worth the wait.

My brain's still processing the sheer amount of awesome it just imbibed, so I'll just go ahead and echo the sentiments of the first comment for now. :derpytongue2:

I just about squeed when the new chapter notice popped up!:rainbowkiss:

The amazingness of this story is too amazing for words and as always, I can't wait until the next chapter :twilightsheepish:

NAME DROP!!!!!!!!


another amazing chapter, and I am literally bracing for the 14th cause I can see foreshadow in the next chapter's title!!!


Truly there can be no one to match your skill at writing.

:rainbowkiss: Bravo sir. Bravo. You're writing has once again pulled me away from studying. That is no small feat I assure you. :twistnerd:

My computer was unable to handle the awesome of this story and literally BSOD'd for the first time ever (had this for 2 1/2 years now) half way through this chapter. I hope you are happy. :fluttercry:

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