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    • Twilight Sparkle Gets A Free Salad
      Twilight becomes an action hero to fight for free salads everywhere.

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      Twilight slowly loses her mind as preparations for the Summer Sun Celebration go horribly wrong.
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    • The Immortal Game
      Princess Luna leads the Elements of Harmony against the corrupted Twilight Sparkle
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    The Weight Of Our Sins

    A buzzing filled Rainbow Dash’s ears as a million insects crawled under her skin. Every second you disobey one of my instructions, my spell is going to take a piece of your sanity. A violent shudder wracked her body, and she hit the floor with a dull thud. How had she gotten there?

    She needed to hurt Pinkie Pie. No, Pinkie Pie was her friend. Dash bit her tongue as she tried to make sense of her surroundings, then realized that she wasn’t supposed to think of herself as Rainbow Dash. She wasn’t even supposed to think. Don’t think, or it will come back and take little pieces of Rainbow Dash away and they won’t come back again. Don’t think, just kill your friends with your bare hooves. Don’t think. Just do.

    “Rainbow Dash!” Twilight was calling her name.

    Dash staggered to her hooves and looked around frantically, her mind failing to process everything she saw. It wasn’t Twilight; it couldn’t be Twilight. It was Twilight’s prison and Dash’s jailor. It was Nihilus.

    A pair of hooves grabbed her. “Rainbow Dash!” Nihilus said as she spun Dash towards her.

    Uninhibited hatred seared through Dash’s veins, hot and intense. The sickening sound of a hoof hitting flesh rang out as she struck Nihilus across the face. This was the monster who made her kill Fluttershy. She was going to pay.

    Nihilus reeled back as blood fountained from her muzzle. “Someone grab her!” she shouted.

    Rainbow Dash wasn’t going to let anyone grab her. She was going to escape and be free and nopony would hurt her ever again. She spun away from Nihilus, coming face to face with Celestia, Luna, and her friends.

    “Rainbow Dash,” Fluttershy said softly.

    But it couldn’t be Fluttershy. Rainbow Dash had felt Fluttershy’s pulse stop under her hooves. Fluttershy was dead, and none of them were really there, and any moment now she was going to return to the Insanity and kill the rest of her friends.

    Suddenly she was staring into two glittering pools of darkness, stretching on into infinity and bringing it right back to her. She was being passed a steaming cup of hot cocoa after a frigid winter flight. She was curling up by a fireplace and stretching out her aching muscles, languishing in the feel of spent energy. All of her friends were still alive, and she was Rainbow Dash again. When Fluttershy broke her gaze, Dash’s breaths came fast and ragged.

    “What’s your name?” Fluttershy asked as she stepped closer and rested a hoof on Dash’s shoulder.

    Dash shut her eyes. “Rainbow Dash.” It was something she would never forget again.

    Fluttershy’s voice was powerful and firm. “Where are you?”

    Dash looked around at all of her friends, each of whom was gathered around a plain table that seemed vaguely familiar. And all of them were alive. Nihilus had been dead for almost a month.

    The walls and floors had been stripped of anything that might make the room the least bit homely, making it look bare and uninhabited. No streamers hung from the thick wooden beams that made up the rafters, no balloons were tied to the polished banister that ran along the once-carpeted stairway. Sugarcube Corner obviously hadn’t been occupied in some time, making the ground floor a dim reminder of the happy gathering it once hosted. It was the kind of room that could feel lonely with eight ponies in it.

    “Sugarcube Corner,” Dash said. “We’re in Sugarcube Corner.” She became acutely aware of the fact that everyone in the room was watching her and Fluttershy.

    “Why?” Fluttershy asked.

    Dash searched her brain for an answer. “Because... Ponyville is burning.” Her eyes widened. “There are dead ponies everywhere and this is the only place we can go. And Terra...” Dash’s eyes flitted around the room frantically. “Terra is hurting us...” She spun around as the memory of the fight came into sharp relief in her mind.

    Sure enough, the former queen sat in an iron cage that had been stuffed into a corner. She looked tiny without wings or a horn. They’d beaten her. They’d won.

    Standing next to Terra’s cage was Twilight Sparkle, a thin trickle of blood drawing itself up her face and back into her nostril. Twilight was looking at Dash, her eyes apprehensive and hurt. Dash had hit her across the face. Dash had thought she was Nihilus again.

    “You brought us here to show us Terra’s memories,” Dash whispered to Twilight. “It was the closest building still standing.” Slowly, Twilight nodded. “And Titan cast the spell. The same...” Dash swallowed. “—The same spell Nihilus used on me.”

    “Yeah,” Twilight whispered. “It’s exactly the same spell. I think Titan invented it.”

    “Of course Titan invented it, coruscarim,” Terra said from where she lay sprawled on the floor of her cage. “Is any other mind capable of something so cruel? Other than mine, that is.”

    Dash tried to slow down her breathing. “He made you kill them,” she said.

    “It’s a shame,” Terra said from within her cage. “But it would appear I missed a couple. I suppose Twilight Sparkle only showed you all the... relevant memories. Watching me stumble around Saddleville or Ponytown or wherever as I try to tell them all to run would hardly be productive, would it? They never could run fast or far enough before I lost control.

    “There’s only so many times you can wake up from a nightmare, feeling a limp innocent fall from your bare hooves, before you just start letting things run their course. They’re all going to die anyway, why should you have to suffer with them? But the spell doesn’t just want you to give up, it wants you to enjoy it.”

    A phantom buzzing. Her skin began to tingle. Rainbow Dash couldn’t afford to forget who she was. “Stop it!” she shouted. “Stop!” She clamped her hooves over her ears, but nothing stopped Terra’s onslaught of soul-rending truths.

    “But no matter how hard you wish you could just let go, you can’t. Murder is... so truly evil, and you can’t take pleasure in evil. So what’s the solution? You hate. It’s such a powerful thing. I hated my mother for leaving me with him. I hated Discord for ruining my world. And I hated my father, every second of every day. I was choking on it, so much hatred I could barely speak. Because Titan never told me I couldn’t hate him, only that I had to obey him. He knew I’d need it if he wanted me to change. Eventually, I just started hating everything, and suffering became my only release.”

    Hadn’t Rainbow Dash built Wrong out of hatred? Out of her feelings of betrayal and abandonment? Dash remembered the feel of Applejack’s rope sliding through her hooves as she dropped Pinkie Pie to her death.

    Terra was shaking now. “The Terra you just saw is dead. Buried beneath countless corpses. There isn’t a shred of her left inside me, and if there was I’d take pleasure in destroying it. She was pathetic, everything I despise.”

    Dash stared at Terra, at Titan’s greatest victim, and realized that Terra was right. Her insanity had run full circle, scooping out the old Terra and filling her in with a monster. How long would it have taken before Rainbow Dash would have fully succumbed to the Insanity? A week had turned her into Wrong. How long had Terra suffered?

    Fluttershy placed a hoof on Dash’s shoulder again. “Rainbow Dash?” she asked. “Do you want to, maybe um, leave?”

    Did Dash want to leave? Would leaving really do her any good? It wasn’t like she could fly away from herself.

    “No,” Dash spoke loudly so that the whole room would hear. “I can do this. I’m still part of the team. Uh...” Dash scratched the back of her mane with a hoof. “Sorry for hitting you, Twilight.”

    Twilight’s face was an expressionless mask. “It’s fine. Not much can hurt me anymore, anyway.”

    “Don’t say that, Twilight,” Fluttershy said.

    “Sorry, did that sound bad?” Twilight said. “It’s a good thing really.” She frowned slightly. “I think. Anyway, on to the matters at hoof!” A quill and some parchment popped into the air beside her. “I’ll take minutes.”

    The sight of Twilight, quill poised over a scroll, was so normal that Dash couldn’t help feel a little calmed. She found an open spot at their table, and Fluttershy joined her.

    “Your highnesses?” Twilight prompted. “You two are in charge.”

    Celestia nodded, then opened her mouth to speak. Twilight’s quill was scratching against the parchment before she had said anything.

    “Terra should die,” Celestia said.

    Twilight’s quill tore through her parchment. “What?”

    Next to Celestia, Luna gave a slow nod. “I agree.”

    Terra started to laugh, a slow, building cackle that upset the newborn silence. No one interrupted her.

    “You all look so surprised!” Terra said between bouts of mirth. “Of course my daughters want to kill me. All of you should, too. If by this point I haven’t given you all an overpowering feeling of murderous hatred when you look at me, I’m not doing my job.”

    Dash thought back to the bodies littering the town square. To the sound of Applejack screaming as she burned inside her own armor. She felt the bruises along her back aching from where Terra had pitched her at the ground.

    Applejack said what they were all thinking. “Believe me, sugarcube. It’s there.”

    Which made sense. Applejack spent more time than any of them among the citizenry, selling apples. Her family had been in town since its founding. She could probably call every corpse by name.

    “I don’t hate you,” Fluttershy said. “I don’t want to kill you.”

    Terra looked at her and let out a derisive snort. “Idiot.”

    “I like the idea of murder just as much as any of you do,” Celestia said. “But Terra is dangerous, even without her power.”

    “We once spared our parents to keep our hooves clean,” Luna said. “It turned out poorly.”

    Celestia nodded. “If any pony deserves death, it is Terra.”

    Fluttershy looked from Celestia to Luna. “But nopony does.”

    Luna regarded Fluttershy coolly. “Are there any other objections?”

    “Do I count?” Terra asked.

    “I abstain,” Twilight said. “I can prove, through objective analysis and deductive logic, that killing Terra is the safest course of action for us.” She shook her head and sighed. “What would the populace think of us if we spared her life? But... I still abstain.”

    Applejack touched the brim of her hat, then worked her mouth. She looked at Terra. “Rotten to the core,” she said. “I have a family. They won’t live in a world with you.”

    Rarity pursed her lips and seemed to think about it for awhile, never taking her eyes off of the diamond she was polishing. “Abstain,” she said at last. “If we just keep her in the cage she can’t really hurt anypony, now can she?”

    Next around the table was Pinkie Pie. Rainbow Dash had hardly noticed her; she had so far been awfully quiet.

    “Blue moon,” Pinkie Pie said loudly. She rocked back and forth slightly, and her eyes had a haunted quality to them. “Slim chance,” she said, somewhat quieter. “Fat chance too.”

    Dash didn’t understand. She looked around at the others, but none of them clued her in. What was Pinkie Pie doing?

    “Tough luck. Tangerine. Silvia.”

    They were names, Dash realized with a touch of horror. Pinkie Pie knew every pony in Ponyville.

    Pinkie Pie kept going, her voice growing quieter and quieter until she was only mouthing the words. Dash kept watching her, trying to catch when she said Blue Moon’s name again, when she started repeating her list. She couldn’t.

    “Kill her,” Dash said.

    “What?” Fluttershy grabbed her by the shoulders. “Rainbow Dash, you—”

    “Would have wanted you to kill me,” Dash said. She nodded as she felt the truth in her words. “I would have wanted you to kill me, if I ever became like that.”

    “No,” Fluttershy whispered.

    “I understand your reluctance, Fluttershy,” Celestia said as she strode to Fluttershy’s side. “You of all ponies would feel for the Terra we saw in her memories. But she is not that Terra any longer.”

    Fluttershy looked up at Celestia. “You can’t,” she said. “We aren’t murderers.”

    “After so many years it will finally be done,” Luna said. “At long last, we will be rid of her. Shall I, sister?”

    From the inside of her cage, Terra sneered. “It takes the eight of you this long to decide to kill the greatest mass-murderer in all of history, even though we’re all about to die anyway. What makes you think you’ll have what it takes to beat Titan?”

    Celestia’s face fell into an expressionless mask. “No,” she said to Luna. “I’ll do it.” She took a slow step forward.

    Fluttershy pushed herself away from the table and threw herself between Celestia and Terra. “I said no!” she screamed. Her face was drawn back into a dangerous look, yet tears gathered in the corner of her eyes. She planted her hooves firmly on the floor.

    Celestia stopped and looked down at the mare. Her expression didn’t change.

    “Don’t you understand?” Fluttershy said between heavy breaths. “When are we going to stop killing each other?”

    Luna broke the ensuing silence. “Fluttershy, Terra is not the mare you saw in the memories.”

    Celestia regarded Fluttershy. “I understand your sympathy, Fluttershy. But this will be done.”

    Fluttershy backed up until her back was to Terra’s cage. “If she could turn bad, bad can turn good.”

    Celestia gritted her teeth. “It has been decided.”

    “Then I un-decide it!” Fluttershy shouted. Her eyes were wide and frantic. Her voice became pleading. “We can’t just sit around and decide to kill someone. We can’t.” Fluttershy turned on Twilight. “Twilight,” she said. “Please.

    Twilight drew a long, ragged breath. “They voted, Fluttershy,” she said tiredly. “She’s a murderer.”

    “So it’s right to kill a pony because it’s wrong to kill ponies?” Fluttershy asked.

    “I don’t know!” Twilight shouted, banging a hoof down on the table. “Why me? Why do I have to answer that question?”

    This is the crack team of ponies that defeated me with the magic of friendship?” Terra asked. “I have to say I’m glad I’m not capable of shame.”

    Rainbow Dash looked over to Terra. Terra was a murderer, yes, and they’d all wanted to kill Esteem for the same reasons. The fallen queen truly did deserve to die, in Dash’s eyes.

    But she wasn’t going to leave Fluttershy to stand alone. The mare had guts, sticking up to Princess Celestia like that.

     “Leave her alive,” Rainbow Dash said. Twilight shot her a look of confusion, and she added, “What? She can’t really hurt anyone, right? And we can always kill her later.”

    Twilight let out an exasperated sigh. “Fine. Terra lives for now. But she’s yours to take care of, Fluttershy. As for you,” Twilight said, turning to Terra. “I hope you know what you’re getting into.”

    Terra blanched. “Huh?”

    “I’ll pull you out if I need you again,” Twilight said.

    Dash looked from Twilight, who was paying attention to Terra, and Celestia, whose mouth was held half-open, as if she couldn’t think of something to say. Had Twilight just overruled the princess at Fluttershy’s behest? She had, and that could only mean one thing.

    Twilight Sparkle was now the ruler of Equestria.

    The Royal Pony Sisters sat atop a cloud high above Ponyville, watching the ruddy glow of the setting sun wash over the ruined town, a warm blanket draped over a hurt foal. The buildings below were barely specks, but Celestia could still see where the picturesque small town gave way to the ruin left by Terra’s swath of destruction.

    Celestia idly drew a hoof through the cloud beneath her. “They voted,” she said. “We decided Terra would die and they just... put it to a vote.”

    “That may be my fault,” Luna said. “I was not the sole decision maker after we went to Canterlot, especially not after Twilight’s return.”

    Celestia sighed. “She overruled our decision and gave our mother to Fluttershy. No one opposed her. I’m not exactly used to having ponies second guess my decisions.”

    Luna’s horn began to give off the faintest glow, and above them Sirius appeared in the night sky, so faint it was almost invisible. “That doesn’t go away,” she said. “But we have to consider the possibility that Fluttershy might be right.”

    “Wouldn’t that be something?” Celestia asked. “Terra redeemed. Titan’s first victim.”

    “Terra is sick,” Luna said. “I have never seen a pony take such pleasure in pain.” She fixed the sky with an imperious glance, and Polaris revealed itself. “Still, if anypony could cure her, it is Fluttershy.”

    The moment Celestia had the sun halfway below the horizon, Luna turned eastward. A faint sliver of the moon rose into the sky.

    “I’ve always wanted them to take more autonomy,” Celestia said. “But this is not exactly the ideal time. They’ve had impeachment clauses for the past thousand years, elected officials, public forums, but they’ve always deferred to me. I’ve always wanted them to be able to rule themselves, to choose, but now...”

    “What if they choose wrong?” Luna asked.

    “What if they choose wrong?” Celestia said. “Twilight and her friends don’t know Terra as well as we do. We have the benefit of age. And we’ve seen a world they can’t even fathom.”

    Luna looked down at Ponyville, and Celestia followed her gaze to the rubble that buried the town square, still smoking in places. “They’re closer to fathoming the old world than you or I are willing to admit,” Luna said. “And if they choose wrong they will suffer the consequences and learn.”

    Celestia watched the last sliver of the sun fall below the horizon, glad to see the end of another miserable day of war. “And in a hundred years, when every pony alive now is dead, will the lessons they’ve learned be forgotten? Are they doomed to make the same mistakes over and over again?”

    “Perhaps,” Luna said. “But we will be there to guide them.”

    “Unless we die tomorrow,” Celestia said.

    “Unless we die tomorrow,” Luna agreed. “I must admit, dear sister, that the odds do not seem to be in our favor.”

    Celestia could have laughed at Luna’s understatement. The odds weren’t just against them; they were paltry. Insignificant. “Even if we win,” Celestia said. “The chances of both of us surviving are... slim.”

    “I’m aware.”

    The cloud beneath them was now the deep blue-grey of the coming night, and Celestia knew that if she were a mortal, she’d probably be feeling cold by now. She leaned her head against Luna’s side. “I wish we’d had more time together.”

    “So do I. We spent so much time fighting. Each other, Discord, each other again. We were only really sisters when we were children. It seems like... a waste,” Luna said finally.

    Celestia fixed her gaze on the ruins of Ponyville once again. “A waste,” she agreed. “I wish you could have seen more of the world I made.”

    Luna gazed out over the landscape. “I know.”

    “It wasn’t perfect, but it was still so much more than either of us had hoped. I thought it would be hard to take the war away, but ponykind just has so much good in them. They made it so easy.”

    Luna gave a slight tilt of her head, as if considering Celestia’s words. “They adapted to war quite easily.”

    Celestia scoffed. “Did you see them in there? They don’t have much fight left in them, if they have any. I’m glad it’s our fight now. I’ve put Twilight through enough.”

    More stars were flickering into view as the pale orange light of the sun faded. “You did what you had to,” Luna said, her eyes on the sky.

    “And she’ll never forgive me for it.”

    “Give it time,” Luna said. “Ponykind used to despise and fear me. They still do, but not nearly as much as they once did. Every day I fight with them, their feelings of dislike ebb. Change is slow, Celestia. You of all ponies should know this.”

    “Oh?” Celestia asked, her eyes twinkling with subdued mirth. “When did you get so wise?”

    Luna shrugged, never taking her eyes of her work. “Too much time with the six. It’s odd: the love and gratitude of the citizenry used to be all I wanted. But now that I believe that what I’m doing is right, it doesn’t matter to me. All I care about is Titan’s defeat.”

    “We don’t have time,” Celestia said. “Barely a day.”

    “Unfortunately, you may be right,” Luna said.

    “It isn’t fair,” Celestia whispered. The sun’s dying light drained the color from the world around them. “I just got you back. Everything was going to be perfect. We were going to rule together in a new golden age. And now Titan’s come back and destroyed everything I built over the past thousand years.”

    “Celestia,” Luna said, pressing her muzzle against Celestia’s neck. “You and I made our peace. We put decades of war behind us. We’re fighting for what is right. We’re fighting for ponykind. We’re fighting against Titan. We’ve done all that we can, and now there’s only one thing left to do.”

    Celestia looked up at the myriad stars that now spanned the night sky. “What’s that?”

    A faint smile touched Luna’s lips. “With any luck? Succeed him.”

    Rarity was working.

    The feel of the needle gripped with her mind, the taut pull of the fabric—these things did more to relieve her than any spa, any massage could ever do. Pinkie Pie’s armor lay on her bed. The Boutique had been gone for two months now, so Rarity was making do with the tools the Cakes had around the house. And as she worked, she sang.

    “Thread by thread, stitching it together,

    Pinkie’s rig, linking all the straps to fit just right,

    Making sure the magnets pull nicely

    Underarmor has to fit so tight

    Otherwise she’ll risk taking some shrapnel,

    Leaving lots of room for her new grapnel

    I’m fixing Pinkie’s rig”

    An effort of will, and Pinkie’s rig was pulled apart into its components, then began to rotate in the air as Rarity examined the areas that needed patching. Had she ever had so much focus before the war?

    “Inch by inch, we get a little closer,

    One more god, Sweetie Belle I’ll be back soon I swear,

    And you’ll never know about father

    I’ll make sure you live to be a mare

    Titan won’t succeed in making us his

    Because a secret truth of our new world is

    That even gods can die

    Bladecasting’s easy,

    It’s thinking of you that’s hard

    Blood makes me queasy,

    It’ll ruin my robe; make...”

    Rarity frowned. “Hmm,” she said. “Sleezy, cheesy, uneasy? Make me feel all uneasy? Make my friends feel uneasy?” She should have picked an easier word.

    “You can sing,” Pinkie said.

    Rarity turned to find Pinkie Pie standing in the doorway to the room she’d lived in for years with a shell-shocked look about her. Pinkie’s eyes moved from Rarity to the her old bed, covered in pink blankets and pillows, then on to her rig. “I can’t sing anymore,” she said finally.

    Straps and canisters clattered against one another as Rarity gently set Pinkie Pie’s rig down on the bed. “At first I could only hum,” she said. “But it came back.”

    The floorboards creaked as Pinkie Pie stepped slowly into the room. “How can it come back?” she asked. “Nothing will ever go back to the way it was. Not without Blue Moon, and Slim Chance, and Fat Chance too...” Pinkie sat down and screwed her eyes shut.

    “Oh my,” Rarity said, striding over to where the mare had started to rock back and forth. “Pinkie Pie, darling, come here.” Rarity put her forelegs around the mare and tried to steady her. “It will be all right. We’ll win.”

    Pinkie Pie began to sob, her chest heaving against Rarity’s side. “It doesn’t matter if we win,” she wailed. “They’re all dead and Twilight doesn’t smile and Rainbow Dash is so hurt...”

    “Pinkie Pie!” Rarity snapped. Pinkie blinked away her tears as she looked up at Rarity. “Now you listen here.” But what could Rarity say? Things were never just going to go back to the way things were.

    “We aren’t fighting to make things go back to the way they were,” Rarity said. “We’re fighting to survive.”

    Terrible, Rarity thought to herself. That was absolutely terrible. How is that going to cheer up Pinkie Pie? “But when this is over,” Rarity continued as she saw the stricken look on Pinkie’s face. “We will remember the dead.”

    Ugh, now I sound like a soldier. “We’ll rebuild all the buildings that they knocked down, you understand? And we’ll make Twilight smile.”

    Pinkie Pie snivelled. “Y-y-you really think so?”

    “Of course I do, Pinkie Pie.”

    Pinkie swallowed thickly. “Pinkie Pie swear?”

    Rarity stopped. Could she Pinkie Pie swear that things would get better? Did she truly believe that they would? Pinkie Pie stared at her as Rarity tried to think, her face slowly breaking into anguish once more.

    Rarity believed that some dresses—such as anything made of gauze, were fragile and prone to tearing. Sometimes a ruined dress could be patched, or tattered pieces replaced. But sometimes they couldn’t. Sometimes a dress was beyond repair.

    Those times were frustrating, but they were also rewarding; they were a chance to make an entirely new dress. The flaws of the precursor could be taken into account, and every design idea she’d had making the first dress could be incorporated into the second. Rarely had Rarity failed to design a dress that was not more fabulous, more awe-inspiring, more beautiful than the first.

    “Pinkie Pie swear,” Rarity said, her voice firm and unwavering. “Cross my heart, hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my eye. Nothing is so broken it can’t be fixed, Pinkie Pie.”

    Pinkie Pie sobbed once, drew a hoof across her wet nose, then looked up at Rarity and smiled.

    Rarity smiled back. She did so love making dresses.

    “Why won’t she stop staring at me?” Terra asked from within her cage on the ground level of Sugarcube Corner.

    Fluttershy looked back at Rarity, who had pulled up a chair and soundlessly examined Terra for the past ten minutes. “Her talent is beauty,” Fluttershy said. “And you’re very pretty.”

    “I’m aesthetically perfect,” Terra said. “I was built with your sense of visual appeal in mind.”

    “No,” Rarity said. It was the first time she’d spoken since she’d sat down. “Not perfect. You were prettier in your memories. But even now you are very beautiful. On the outside, that is.”

    “Inner beauty?” Terra raised an eyebrow. “How precious. Do you also intend to show me the goodness of the world with the power of heart? I’ve seen what ponies are on the inside, child. It isn’t pretty. It’s mostly water, actually. But it never fails to come out red.”

    “I’m leaving,” Rarity said, standing. “I don’t see why you bother spending time with her, Fluttershy.”

    Fluttershy sighed. “I want to help you,” she said as the door swung shut behind Rarity.

    Terra gave her a lazy smile and sprawled out against her cage bars. “Is that so?” she asked.

    “Yes.”

    Terra shivered. “Can you make me a god, little pegasus?”

    “No.”

    Terra waved a hoof dismissively. “Then I don’t exactly see how you can help me.”

    “You were good once.”

    Terra sneered like a predator expecting a fresh meal. “And that means what, exactly?”

    “You can be good again,” Fluttershy said.

    “You think you can make me a princess again? No. Certainly not in a day.”

    Fluttershy shook her head. “Not in a day. But maybe someday.”

    “You only have a day,” Terra said. “Titan will regain his full strength soon. If you think you or I will live see the sun rise the next morning, you are insane, little pegasus.”

    Fluttershy paused before whispering, “I’m not a pegasus.”

    Terra stood and leaned against the bars of her cage, her eyes narrowing. “Eraterus,” she hissed. “How could you possibly have survived?”

    “I don’t know,” Fluttershy said. “But I’m alive and... and I don’t know what I am.”

    Terra grinned. “Is that so?”

    Fluttershy swallowed. “I used to take care of the animals,” she said. “But Titan made it so that they won’t listen anymore. And I can stare at something and take their choices away. And I heal, and I think I can sing...”

    “Don’t.” Terra shivered again.

    Fluttershy frowned. “Don’t what?”

    Terra shut her eyes. “Don’t sing.”

    Fluttershy tilted her head. “What makes you think I would sing for you?”

    Terra’s eyes opened to narrow slits. “It would hurt me,” she said, as though that explained everything.

    “I don’t want to hurt you, Terra.”

    “You should. Or have you forgotten all the ponies that they’re burying right now because of me?”

    “I don’t want to kill you, Terra.”

    “And why not?”

    “Why would I?” Fluttershy asked. She let out an exasperated sigh. “Murder makes murder right? Please listen to me, Terra. Nopony has cared about you for so long. I thought that maybe if I cared, you’d at least have a second chance.”

    Terra wrapped her forelegs around herself. It almost looked as though she was cold. “Are you really so broken?”

    “W-what do you mean?”

    “What are you trying to prove by sticking by me, eraterus? Why do you need to convince everypony that you’re so good and pure of heart? Do you want them all to see that you’re better than they are?”

    “N-n-no!”

    Terra sneered. “Or is it that you do it for selfish reasons? Are you just trying to convince yourself that through all of this, ponies are still good? I have terrible news for you, eraterus: they aren’t.”

    “You’re wrong!”

    “They were good when they were happy,” Terra said. “When Celestia had them living in ignorant bliss. You act like this new world is broken. It’s fixed. This is the way things are supposed to be. This is, as Titan would say, the—”

    “Don’t!” Fluttershy said. “Don’t say it.” She refused to believe that the animals were supposed to run from her in fear. She refused. “Are you cold?”

    Terra gritted her teeth. “It’s night,” she said. “And it’s almost autumn. I’m cold because it’s cold.”

    “Really?” Fluttershy asked. “I feel fine.”

    Terra started to rub her hooves together for warmth. “You’ve been at the mercy of heat for all your life. I’ve been a god. I’m not used to feeling anything but perfect. Now I feel like a wet paper bag.”

    “Did it hurt?” Fluttershy asked. “When we took it away?”

    “Yes,” Terra said. “And it wasn’t you who took it away. It was Twilight Sparkle. You and your friends are just a set of batteries.”

    “I’m sorry.”

    Terra barked out a laugh. “For what?”

    “Hurting you. I know that if Twilight could have made it easier for you, she would have.”

    “You just don’t get it, do you?” Terra asked. “How can you not see what it took me seconds to realize? Your precious godling is so methodical, so reasonable, so in control. When it comes down to it, she’s just cold, hard logic. Maybe when she looks at you there’s equinity in her eyes. Maybe you can watch it slowly leaking away as she kills her enemies one by one. But when she looked at me, right before she invaded my mind? Nothing. No pity, no hate, just the job she needed to do.”

    “Twilight isn’t like that.”

    “Twilight is Titan, my little pony. She’s a dark god waiting to happen. The weight of this war is going to make her collapse in on herself and—”

    Fluttershy interrupted Terra with a voice that was perfectly calm. “Why are you doing this?”

    Terra flashed her an innocent smile. “Doing what?”

    “Trying to upset me. It isn’t very nice.”

    Terra shrugged. “Cruelty, I suppose. I want to hurt you. It’s what I do. It’s who I am.”

    Fluttershy didn’t answer Terra. Instead she stood up, turned around, and flew upstairs.

    “You’re proving me right!” Terra called out as she left. “Doesn’t that bother you?”

    Fluttershy found the Cakes’s linen closet, grabbed the thickest blanket they had, then brought it back downstairs. Terra gave her a peculiar look as she passed it through the bars.

    “Why?” she asked, eying the blanket suspiciously.

    The faintest smile touched Fluttershy’s face. “Kindness, I suppose. I want to help you. It’s what I do. It’s who I am.”

    Terra looked from the blanket to Fluttershy. Suspicion seemed to melt into confusion on her face. Terra looked at Fluttershy, her face uncomprehending, for a very long while.

    Then she started to cry.

    It didn’t come out all at once, and Terra’s first sobs were not very loud. Rather, her body trembled as she clumsily pulled the blanket toward herself with her hooves. She blinked hard, then blinked again, then shut her eyes entirely before tears started to roll down her face. She looked for all the world like a mare desperately trying not to cry.

    “Go away,” Terra said weakly. “Don’t look at me.”

    “You need somepony, Terra.”

    Like a little filly, Terra tried to pull the blanket over her head so that she couldn’t be seen. She failed. Fluttershy guessed she wasn’t used to using her hooves.

    “There’s no one,” Terra whimpered. “She died. He killed her. And I’ll never live up to her expectations.”

    “Shhh. I’m here.”

    Terra swallowed. “Will you...?” She didn’t finish her sentence.

    Fluttershy didn’t need her to. She got up, moved next to the cage, and reached through the bars to take Terra up in her hooves. Sometimes all a pony needed was to be held.

    Terra punched her in the throat. The attack was so sudden, so unexpected, that Fluttershy didn’t even have the time to cringe. One moment she could breathe, and the next she couldn’t.

    Terra threw herself forward, grabbed Fluttershy’s mane in her teeth, then struck Fluttershy’s forelegs with her own. Fluttershy’s legs were thrown back, and she lost her balance. Terra dropped down to lie flat on the floor, then kicked a hind leg out to knock Fluttershy off her hooves.

    Fluttershy spun as she fell, and Terra’s forelegs wrapped their way around her neck before she hit the ground. It was all so well coordinated, so flawlessly executed, that she didn’t have time to react. One moment she was offering Terra a hug, the next Terra had both forelegs wrapped around her and was using a hoof to push her neck into the stranglehold.

    Terra’s voice was venom in her ear. “Erateri can have enough earthpony magic to rival even the earthponies themselves. And as you’re undoubtedly the apex eraterus—possibly the only one still alive—that means that you’ll survive this. Which is why when you stop breathing, I’m going to cradle you to the ground, pull you close, and beat your head to a bloody pulp with my bare hooves.”

    Fluttershy flared her wings and beat her hind legs against the floor in panic. What had happened? Terra had lied. Terra had lied and Fluttershy had fallen for it. She tried to pull herself free, clutching at Terra’s forelegs, but it was to no avail—her strength didn’t matter when Terra had all the leverage. She couldn’t meet Terra’s eyes to use the stare. She couldn’t open her mouth to sing—but what good would that do anyway?

    “Who do you think is going to find you?” Terra asked. “Which of your friends is going to walk through that door and see the mess I’ve made? I hope it’s Pinkie Pie; she seems so cheerful. Or maybe the rainbow one, who thinks that gods are something to be fought. Perhaps the earthpony; she seemed so close to breaking.”

    A blue glow as deep as midnight encased Terra’s forelegs, and they were peeled away from Fluttershy’s neck with a deliberate slowness. Fluttershy threw herself away from the cage as soon as she was freed, taking in a rasping breath that stung her throat as it went down. She looked up to see a set of familiar hooves on the floor before her.

    “You think that they’re weak,” Luna said. “That their compassion makes them powerless.” She stepped past Fluttershy to stand in front of Terra’s cage.

    Another choking gasp tore its way down her bruised throat as Fluttershy turned to see Terra, suspended in the air before her daughter.

    “Their compassion is what put you in that cage,” Luna said. “And their compassion is what will free you. Because no matter how much hatred you have inside you, Terra, Fluttershy alone has enough love to smother it.” Luna took a step closer and let Terra fall back to the floor. “Is Titan himself capable of such a feat? You and I both know the answer to that question, mother. There’s only one pony with true power in this room, Terra. It isn’t you. And it isn’t me, either.”

    Terra pushed herself to her hooves, trembling, and wiped a foreleg across her mouth. She locked eyes with Fluttershy, her gaze one of pure loathing. “I hate you,” she said. “I hate you for not hating me.”

    Luna took her eyes off of Terra. “I would think, Fluttershy, that you have done enough for tonight. Do you have a place to stay?”

    Fluttershy realized that Luna was asking if her house had been destroyed or not. She nodded, not willing to speak through her damaged throat.

    “Good,” Luna said, fixing Terra with a dispassionate glare. “Then let us leave my mother to her thoughts. I’m sure you’ve given her quite a few of them.”

    “I’m sorry my mother tried to kill you. Are you all right?”

    Luna was in Fluttershy’s cottage at the edge of Ponyville. They all had to stay somewhere, after all. Rainbow’s house was taken by her and the pegasi. Applejack’s farmhouse was built to cater to large crowds, and she, Pinkie Pie, and Spike were looking after the rest of the army. Sugarcube Corner held Terra and Rarity. Twilight would stay in the library.

    A kettle sat heating on the stove—Fluttershy was going to try and soothe her throat with tea. Luna sat serenely in the center of the living room, and Fluttershy reclined on the couch under a blanket. She’d offered Luna one, but apparently the princess didn’t get cold.

    “I shouldn’t have let her touch me,” Fluttershy rasped through her damaged windpipe.

    “Perhaps,” Luna said. “But if redemption is possible, your actions alone will sway Terra.”

    Fluttershy curled up on her couch and pulled a blanket over herself. “Do you believe that?”

    “That redemption is possible?”

    “Yes.”

    Luna nodded. “I have to. I was once a hate-filled tyrant, Fluttershy. I killed more ponies than you have met in your entire life. Not either of our minds together could comprehend the lives that I have destroyed.”

    Everypony she had ever known. Parents. Friends. Classmates from flight school. The mail pony. All of them dead twice over. Luna was right—Fluttershy couldn’t comprehend death on such a scale. “You’ve saved us, too. We would have lost to Nihilus if it weren’t for you.”

    “I am not concerned with balancing the scales, Fluttershy. If I have a hoof in defeating Titan, then they will be forever in my favour, but that does not mean that I cannot do evil. If Titan destroys us, then my deeds will have meant nothing, but that does not mean that I did not stand for good.”

    “D-do you think... do you think we’ll win?”

    “I don’t know,” Luna said. “Celestia and I together are strong. But Titan alone is a primordial force. He has always used agents to carry out his will. I fear what his direct intervention will bring.”

    “It’s sad that he’s so alone,” Fluttershy said.

    Luna couldn’t tell if she was being serious or not. Sympathy for Titan? “Hardly alone,” Luna said. “He likely has every creature in the Everfree under his control.”

    Fluttershy sat up abruptly. “The creatures?”

    Luna gave a curt nod. “Titan controls something or he destroys it, and the Everfree is the model of his natural order. I imagine that by now every living being, from the smallest carnivorous splinter beetle to Exakktus himself, is now under Titan’s control.”

    “Exakktus?” Fluttershy asked.

    “Exakktus the Black. The largest, oldest, and most powerful dragon alive. I saw him last over a thousand years ago.”

    Fluttershy’s eyes widened. “Titan has a dragon?”

    “Indeed,” said Luna. “It has been said that Exakktus is as big as a village. That his wings can smother the sun itself. His flames appear as roiling black smoke, thick and dark as ink, and his horde is as much the charred and twisted bones of his victims as it is treasure. His scales are as dark as Singularity, and his heart cares only for death and dominance. His maw—” Luna stopped. “Have I said something to frighten you, Fluttershy?”

    Fluttershy was pale and shaking, her eyes wide and her pupils diminished to points. “I’m afraid of dragons,” she whispered.

    “I see. Have no fear, Fluttershy. Even in my youth, I could match Exakktus in battle. I slew his brother, Firkraag the Red, with the help of a knight named Valiant. He used the severed head to propose to my would-be murderer, Astor Coruscare. Also, his blade, Carsomyr, ended up in the possession of Rarity’s father Esteem. Small world. I imagine Exakktus would do anything to add that sword to his horde.”

    Fluttershy swallowed. “Anything?”

    “Dragons live for treasure, Fluttershy. Possessing the sword that slew Exakktus’s only equal would show that he has surpassed Firkraag once and for all. And it is not as though he can add Nadir to his horde.”

    “Luna,” Fluttershy whispered, “do we still, um, do we still... have the sword?”

    In that corner, the forces of evil.

    One dark god who had supposedly seen the creation of their world. Titan, who had never lost to an enemy before. His power was something quantifiable—Twilight’s best estimate put him at somewhere around three thousand, four hundred years old. Alicorns were born with a set amount of magic that increased linearly with age, so it was easy to determine what Titan might measure on the Coruscare scale and apply the result to unicorn and earthpony magic as well.

    But it was more than raw power. What spells did Titan know? How did he fight? Did he even know how to fight? After all, what use had Titan ever had for skill in battle when his only true rival had apparently been Discord? According to Harmony, he wasn’t just good—he was the best. She’d said she’d never seen him lose. But lose what? Against whom?

    Then there was the matter of his alicorn magic. Celestia had a gift with fire. Luna could weave shadow easier than Rarity could cloth. What kind of spells came naturally to Titan? Mind magic? Control? He’d already demonstrated a remarkable ability to become undetectable—but Harmony had demonstrated remarkable abilities in spades.

    Too many variables. The forces of evil had power, but it fell within such a wide range that it hardly bore thinking about.

    And in the other corner, what would have to pass for the forces of good.

    Luna, Celestia, and a smattering of ponies so weak in comparison as to be negligible. The princesses were what, a little more than a thousand years each? Then there were the Elements of Harmony. Friendship wasn’t the strongest magic in the world, it was just the key to Harmony’s superweapon. And Titan could pick his dead wife’s magic apart with hardly a thought.

    It didn’t add up. Not with only Luna and Celestia, not including Twilight’s godslaying archspell. There was no artifact to sweep in and magically save the day anymore. Twilight had finally learned the truth of the Elements’s origins, and it had awakened her from a happy dream and dropped her into a grim reality. And the reality was that they were certainly going to lose.

    Twilight picked up a duster with her magic and began to run it over the Ponyville Library’s many bookshelves. They’d accumulated much grime in the time she’d been away, but with the end of the world looming, dusting wasn’t really a priority task. Staying busy was.

    It was night out, and the only light came from a couple of candles situated around the room. They cast a faint glow about the library, hardly enough to see by, but Twilight wasn’t really paying attention to see if her duster missed any spots anyway.

    It struck Twilight as odd that even now she was afraid to die. After all she’d been through, dying was certainly the least of her worries. And yet here she was, a scared little filly about to face the end of everything she held dear. Despite all her apparent power, she was nothing before Titan. Luna and Celestia weren’t much better off.

    The door to the library creaked open, and Twilight turned to see Princess Luna stride into the room, the flickering candlelight causing her shadow to dance against the wall. “Twilight Sparkle.”

    “Princess,” Twilight said tonelessly.

    The clatter of the shutting door was the only sound that followed. Luna regarded Twilight, her face almost statuesque, before walking over to what seemed to be a randomly selected bookshelf. “You have lost hope,” she said, examining the books.

    Sweep. Twilight’s duster cleared a layer of grime from a half-empty shelf. “You can tell.” She’d meant it to come out a question; instead it sounded like a flat accusation.

    “I suspected,” Luna said. “Your mind is... not unlike Celestia’s, and she has been having similar troubles.” Luna’s mane licked at the bindings of half a dozen books as she spoke, a second sky reaching out to touch whatever it could.

    Sweep. At the mention of Celestia, Twilight stiffened a little. “Are you here because of her?”

    “No, Twilight Sparkle. I am here for you. You despair.”

    Sweep-sweep. A layer of dust was sent to the floor. Later, Twilight would have to clean it too. “Despair? Do I look like I’m despairing right now?”

    Luna stepped away from the bookshelf and turned toward Twilight Sparkle. “You do,” she said. “Not the despair of a pony watching her house burn to the ground, but a different sort. A cold, lonely kind of despair. The despair of a pony standing in the ashes. It is a kind that I am not unfamiliar with. Why are you here alone, Twilight Sparkle, when you could easily be with your friends?”

    Snap. The handle of Twilight’s duster shattered, each wooden shard tumbling to the floor. Had she been holding it that hard? “We’re going to lose.” Twilight’s voice was low.

    “So you won’t spend your last night alive with them?”

    Twilight’s breath caught in her throat for the slightest instant. How could she explain herself? “They’d... expect optimism. But I know better. How can I look at my friends and be happy when I know that we’re going to die?”

    Luna blinked. “I see.”

    “It’s okay.” Twilight’s voice wavered. “We’ve... we’ve had some good times. Even after Titan they were still always, always...” Twilight swallowed. “—there for me.”

    Luna gracefully trod over to where Twilight stood staring at the broken shards of her duster. “Why do you think we’ll lose?” Luna asked.

    “Math.” Was Twilight’s answer. “He’s stronger than all of us put together by a significant margin. He has more power.” She lifted her broken duster into the air and floated the fragments over to a garbage bin.

    “Power?” Luna said. “There is your mistake. This world is not one to be won by war, Twilight Sparkle. Power is not the only thing that determines the outcome of a conflict. Remember that.”

    Twilight’s mouth twisted into a grim frown. “I’ve yet to see any evidence to support that, Princess.”

    “Then consider your math error,” Luna said. “You failed to account for the magic of friendship. That puts our side ahead by quite a large order of magnitude.”

    “The magic of friendship?” Twilight asked. “Friendship is just a... a trigger condition for Harmony’s weapon. And it’s a weapon that’s useless against Titan!”

    “Friendship is not useless.”

    “It’s useless here!”

    Luna brought a hoof down on the library floor, shattering hardwood like it was paper. “Listen to yourself, Twilight Sparkle!”

    Twilight drew back as splinters flew through the air around Luna’s hoof, then swallowed thickly.

    “How could you of all ponies possibly believe that there is no magic in friendship? After all that it has helped you accomplish, after all that you have seen! Go to your friends. Look them in the eyes, talk with them, laugh with them, and tell me if lifting a duster is more magical than what you feel, truly feel, in your heart. Friendship is a force, Twilight Sparkle.

    “Love. Wonder. Happiness. Titan has none of these things. If you allow him to take ours, then you give up our only advantage. If we are going to win, it will be for our intangible virtues, not brute force. Magic, real magic, the kind that I use to raise the moon, cannot be fought.”

    Twilight stared at the floor, trying as hard as she could to understand what Luna was telling her. “And I’m here in the library, alone,” she said at last. “I’m losing hope when they need me most.”

    Luna leaned down, and her flowing mane sent a cool breeze over Twilight’s face. The princess looked almost... indistinct, in the candlelight. As though she truly were an object of shadow, vulnerable to the faintest flame.

    “You are not alone, Twilight Sparkle. I am here.”

    Twilight sighed. “Do you know how many townsponies I spoke to today? Ponies who’d lost loved ones, their homes, everything. Ponies who used to know me, and now they act like I’m their saviour, despite Celestia’s return.”

    “You are a talented leader, Twilight Sparkle. They do well to put their faith in you.”

    Twilight turned on her heels and began to pace, avoiding the new hole Luna had made in her floor. “I might be a good master general,” Twilight said. “But I’m not infallible!”

    “I know, Twilight. We can’t ever hope to deserve the trust they give us. But we can try. And if any pony deserves their faith, it is you. You are not the distant moon or the fallen sun. You are one of them, and you understand them, far more than my sister or I ever have. You have shown yourself willing to risk everything for them, and when you truly accept the mantle of leadership, you are... inspiring.

    Luna’s eyes grew distant as the flickering candle flames played within them. “You make others want to be... better. More than what they once were. The effect that you can have...” Luna pulled her hoof from the broken floor and set it down on solid ground. “I believe that you can build a better future for ponykind. And I believe that you have inside you the very soul of Titan’s undoing. I have faith in you, Twilight Sparkle.

    Luna reached out, cupped Twilight’s face in her hooves, and their eyes met. Twilight stared into her nebulous turquoise orbs and felt a vague tinge of familiarity. Luna spoke again, her voice consumed with determination.

    “Prove. Me. Right.

    Ponykind was a drift of infinitesimal dust, billowing about his hooves on the winds of blind chance. They dared to call it a victory when he did not sweep them aside.

    Titan sat. It was not a position he assumed very often. The shattered plateau of the Dark Heart of the Everfree Forest spread out around him, sundered by the clash of gods. The verdant forest stretched out around the plateau, ignorant in its serenity.

    They were ants, and emboldened by their capacity to lift a weight ten times their own, they were trying to move a mountain. But Titan was immovable.

    Titan stood, walked three paces,and looked down on the exact center of the plateau. He drew a hoof across the ground, brushing away dust and pebbles to uncover the smooth rock beneath. A touch to the stone, and a slight ripple of power disturbed the air, tearing leaves off the trees around the broken mountain. It returned to him in moments, carrying the character of a magic he had long since forgotten to feel.

    A savage raged against a thunderstorm, unaware of the titanic conflict the elements waged within. What could one pony, one unenlightened brute do to end the churning tempest? Twilight Sparkle would rage, and the lightning would come. But would her death suffice, or did her transgressions call for true retribution?

    Titan’s gaze pierced stone and earth and spell, seeing for the first time what he had buried in an aeon past. Twilight Sparkle dared to wield Harmony’s magic against her King. He would use Harmony’s magic against his subjects.

    The earth shook.

    They were wretched parasites, crying out against the very being that had given them life and earth and order. Their crushing insignificance, their debilitating simplicity had fascinated Harmony. They forever craved the demands of their design, and so the ghost of intellect with which they were gifted attributed to these things higher forms so as to justify their primitive pursuits. Love, for companionship. Morality, to guide their herd mentality. Peace, as an assurance of survival. As if they could comprehend true morality. As if Titan had not already given them peace.

    The false plateau cracked and broke beneath him, the sound loud enough to break mortal ears. The earth seized, and trees were torn free from the earth, their roots snapping as dirt cascaded from their forms. Titan ascended.

    Harmony had succumbed to their false beliefs, turning to them for guidance rather than the very tenets by which she and Titan had ruled. Through her, ponykind had killed Titan’s son, and eventually Harmony herself. Even as Titan had bought them real peace by defeating Discord.

    The arms of The Citadel were now distinct. They heaved their way out of the ground around him, each carrying a thousand tons of broken stone and soil. A small effort of will, and Titan blew most of the debris away. He folded his wings and set his hooves down on the shards that rose to receive him for the first time in a millenia and a half.

    They were cosmic dust caught within the pull of a star. They could not even comprehend the being that they reckoned with, and they did not understand his divine providence. Twilight Sparkle led them. Twilight Sparkle was the most ignorant of all.

    Titan began to ascend, the elementary white of his magic filling the sigils of the shards wherever he stepped. The remaining debris was annihilated and recycled as The Citadel came to life. Harmony’s greatest creation. Next to Empyrean, that was.

    They were machine beings, worth only the matter that composed them. The drop of divine blood in all of them had caused them to malfunction as intellect warred with instinct to create a hybrid monstrosity. Was reducing them to their base state the only answer left?

    Simultaneously, each petal-like arm of The Citadel met its neighbors, sealing Titan within the metal tower. He continued his climb to the uppermost ring at a leisurely pace. He was in no hurry.

    Terra was gone. No doubt killed by Twilight Sparkle and Harmony’s last, wretched gift to ponykind. Had Twilight Sparkle taken her power? Would Twilight Sparkle meet him in battle alongside Celestia? Were they so infected by pony ideals that their basic arithmetic could fail them that much? Did they truly hold on to hope?

    Titan reached the summit, and his horn burned like a star brought low. The walls of The Citadel were lit with his power, and the great spell shaped itself in his mind. Each ring formed from the floating shards beneath him, and a single beam of white light shot skyward.

    High above Titan, a wave of energy travelled outward from the point where the beam met the sky. The first spell was the call. Each creature he had tamed in the Everfree would come to him, and each of them would take part in the slaughter.

    Another wave. The second spell was the storm. Let the savages bring themselves to bear against his might. Only Titan could tame the feral elements, now.

    The final wave did not come, for the final spell would take time. Such was its magnitude that Titan himself could not have cast it without The Citadel to provide the design, to deliver his magic to the world.

    He had decided that ponykind could be salvaged. Genocide was beneath him. Instead, despite all their resistances, ponykind would be fixed. The final spell would kill only the things that made them weak, only the things that made them imperfect servants of the divine authority. When it was finished, they would fit perfectly into the natural order.

    No freedom. No will. No love. No morality. No hope.

    Could a more perfect world be imagined?

    Titan had not always been alone. He had once been imperfect. But ponykind had taken his companions from him, and in the stark emptiness that followed he had seen his true place in the natural order. As its master.

    Now they would be empty, too. They would thank him, once he showed them how. And they would worship him, once he gave them their expectations. They would see that companionship was a waste. That Titan had been right all along. Not the other way around.

    But for now they would come for him. Twilight Sparkle would come for him. They would wade through a sea of their own ignorant imperfection, and when they finally reached Titan, he would drown them. He would drown them all. Even his daughters.

    The king was the strongest piece. The only piece that mattered. The piece that bore the burden of both victory and defeat. The piece that was the avatar of the player himself.

    And in all of creation, from the hot and screaming birth of the universe to the unfathomable end of time, from the edge of the cosmos to the center of the most massive, seething star, from the youngest god to the heart of every living pony, there was only one true king.

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    The End Is Near

    A thanks goes out to The Prereaders

    Comments ( 120 )

    #1 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Thank you lord for you have made my month.

    -After reading edit-

    They are in the eye of the storm and the wall is bearing down.

    #2 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    GAHH!!! I HAVE AN EXAM TOMORROW WHAT HAVE YOU DONE? Ah well sleep is for pansies anyways...

    #3 · 49w, 2d ago · 2 · ·
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    > Playing Diablo 3

    > Check FiM on a whim

    Best. Whim. Ever.

    #4 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    awesome update time to read.

    #5 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Alright time to update my own fic and stop leaving all my readers hanging. *makes PMV instead*  Okay, now to seriously work on my own fic. *sees that The Immortal Game updated*  :rainbowlaugh:

    #6 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Wow! Ominous! I can't wait, and I assume that the ending is only two to three chapters away?

    #7 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Well, here goes my night.  I have a final tomorrow, too!

    #9 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>708724

    The next chapter is the last.

    #10 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>708745 I have a Gusta.

    #11 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Haha, having trouble wrapping it up? That's good, more for us! :pinkiehappy:

    #12 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Oooooh. The set up of these plot domino's....  I can't wait to watch them cascade into place.

    #13 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    This... is truly awesome. I cannot wait to see how it ends.

    #14 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    What? Final chapter soon? Awww! Will there be a sequel? Just curious, I can only imagine next update will be massive!

    #15 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    The calm before the storm eh? Well to be honest this has very quickly become my favorite fanfiction ever, but I'm working on a review for the final chapter that will say that better.

    I'd just like to say that it has been a privileged to have read this week by (kinda) week and watch each of the characters grow along with your writing, and watching a great fic become even better. Not a day goes by where I don't attempt to recommend this fic to people in and outside the fandom. You should be honored to have written this.

    Thank you for your dedication.

    #16 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    AAAAAGGGHHH WHAT HAPPENS NEXT???  You must tell me!!!  :raritydespair: :pinkiehappy:

    #17 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    i'd say that Titan needs a chill pill, but he kinda past that line long ago.

    also, Titan, if you really want to be happy, go kill yourself already ya dunce :twilightangry2:

    #18 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    All the pieces have finally come together. Now the final game will begin. The Immortal Game draws nearer thus, to it's true and irrevocable end.

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    The royal sister rest aloft,

    the queen of earth laments,

    the ponies of Equestria have found themselves quite spent.

    The dread black dragon Exactus is seeking Carsomyr,

    the elements are scared,

    but hope yet kindles amongst them, though death's hand looms afar.

    The king of order sits aloft, upon his tarnished throne,

    within the depths of Everfree,

    the Citadel's reborn.

    The arc pony is mourning,

    the eraterus forebodes,

    and the tormented young Corsucare is losing all her hope.

    The players in this final game, have taken all their places.

    Laughter, Kindness, Loyalty, Truth, Generosity, Friendship,

    what does the final act yet bring?

    We can but guess for now.

    Yet it is plain

    this immortal game will finally be laid to rest

    Prepare yourselves my brethren,

    for the this, the final verse.

    The blood is cresting in the dawn

    like a crimson tidal wave,

    just what will the future hold?

    To find out, wait, and see.

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    Edit: Did I just post that monstrosity? Woah... maybe I should put that on my DA...

    #19 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Ooh. Ohh. Endgame.

    JMH

    #20 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    WELP

    Good stuff. I have to say though, I'm not sure what to think of another new pony race for Fluttershy. The Arc thing made sense with Pinkie. She already seems like a different race in the show itself so it was a cool idea that you thought up (even though it isn't expounded upon). But the Fluttershy thing... I don't know, feels like you're trying to exploit the idea too much.

    Few grammar mistakes and left out words but they are waaaay up at the top and I don't remember where they are.

    Much love, still the greatest novel I've ever read.

    #21 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Bravo. Looking forward to reading the last chapter.

    Do you feel emotional at all, knowing that your story is nearing its completion?

    #22 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    And thus the calm before the storm has pass. Let the rumble of thunder and roars of the wind approach for we are prepared for the downpour that is to come.

    #23 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Shit just hit the fan! OH MY GOD!!! Excitement levels are OVER 9000! :rainbowkiss:

    #24 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Definitely the calm before the hurricane.

    The Dark Heart of the forest it the location of the Citadel, interesting, I suppose that should have been guessable.

    I'm recognizing that Prove. Me. Right. line from somewhere.

    #25 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Well well well....

    Looks like an epic is about to come to an end. Now we can do nothing but wait for the final chapter in the story.

    #26 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    OHHH YEAH! The epicness is just one step away.

    #27 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>708745

    Mixed feelings, man... I'll finally have closure... But I'll also have closure... This has only happened to me... A lot. Why am I not used to feeling this way, yet? The saddest part is that -- as of now -- nothing is telling me there will be, or even should be, a sequel. So sad.

    ...

    You make me feel things, Mr. B, and I don't know how I feel about that.

    #28 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Logic failing Titan? I am vaguely amused by that. The King is the most important piece, no doubt about that, but not the strongest. And it can still be taken by a cleverly positioned pawn.

    #29 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Finally! I've been checking your page day and night for this update.

    Wonderful chapter, especially the last section with Titan. Beautiful.

    Hmm.. I should probably do a full reread of the story in time for the last chapter. Ah the excitement.

    #30 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    It's sad to think that the next chapter will be the last :ajsleepy: But it will no doubt be an epic finale, and the relative calmness of this chapter just sets it all up so perfectly :pinkiehappy:

    #31 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>709019

    i read that to Led Zeppelin's " The battle of Evermore"

    #32 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>709019 inspiration begets inspiration begets inspiration

    Fire, fury

    the end is nigh,

    let us hurry

    scurry, scurry, little worms,

    the king returned

    and the world burns

    The past is loosed

    the light dims,

    the heart pounds

    the blood thins

    and oh, it spills

    screaming lungs, it fills

    It will never wash away

    Insanity shall stay

    A godling and her dark ascent

    the faithful steeped in sin,

    a knight consumes the beautiful mare,

    laughter echoes in the wind.

    the stalwart writhes in her pain

    kindness sees only cruelty, again.

    The sun brought low,

    even pawns bleed,

    a broken queen,

    her hatred must feed.

    And atop the world,

    he collapses,

    into himself,

    his soul relapses

    He brings the order,

    but not for free

    There was never any hope

    Soon enough, you'll see...

    #33 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    in chess the king is only as powerful as its army the king alone is weak if the pieces were to represent ponies applejake is the castle pinkie is the knight rarity is the bishop fluttershy is a pawn weak but can become anything the queen is twilight one of the strongest pieces and princess celestia and luna are also pawn weak but strong and rainbow dash the knight as well thus together are stronger than the king as the king is as said before only as strong as the army it commands.

    anyway keep it up :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy:

    #34 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Finally. Though a bit shorter than average. Can you give any rough guess as to how long will we have to wait for final chapter? A week, two weeks, more?

    Though I have to say, I don't see any hints of how the good guys will win this one. (That is, if they win in the end at all).  I was expecting something, at least some hint but nope. Whatever are Fluttershy and Luna planning with that dragon is likely going to be important, but I don't see any of that being at all relevant against Titan.

    And we have Twilight completely disillusion in Elements, and on other hand there is Discord's comment "she needs to put them on manual", or they already did that against Terra and Twilight is still certain it won't, it can't work against Titan.

    And we still don't know rest of Astor's story. Luna just revealed that Valiant turned to her side, or was her double agent from start. It could be important, but with only one chapter left...

    I really really hope we don't get a downer ending. When I first started reading this story I was disgusted. First really grimdark FIM fanfic I've read. But the writing was good enough, and story interesting enough to make me push trough. But main thing that made me bear with torment of characters was the hope that in the end they will win.

    #35 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    there must be a lot of stuff in the last chapter: battle against dragon, battle against Titan, victor of the battle faces Discord

    this is going to be interesting

    #36 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Cannot wait to read this.

    #37 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    NOTE: it has been awhile since I have done anything like this but I thought I might as well give it a shot, even if it turns out not very good.

    The immortal stands on their high throne,

    Darkness radiating,

    sanity overthrown,

    logic failing,

    yet strength not abating

    Sun and Moon circle high overhead,

    mortals toil, for this could be the end,

    time has come the bid is made,

    will the immortal win this day?

    Hope fades,

    Yet by the Moon's light,

    and the Sun's fire,

    Hope survives and hope sustains.

    In Twilight the battle will rage,

    The truth about the world released from its cage,

    Will harmony and friendship win this day,

    Or will the cold and uncaring have final say?

    Joy and laughter are scarce heard,

    yet to silence, they have not gone,

    And from such feelings

    The world takes heart.

    Though dark time brings dark tidings,

    Kindness has shown the way,

    To bring the world back to life one day,

    The world is torn,

    little left to spare,

    yet generosity

    is surely there.

    The time for lies have come and past,

    Half truths no longer enough,

    It takes an honest heart,

    for reality to be made real,

    Though bonds were tested,

    and bonds have faltered,

    Loyalty remains and with it,

    The world will be forever altered

    The Immortal stands on their high throne,

    The dice has been cast,

    the battle not yet won,

    Power alone is not enough,

    Possess, ye

    Strength of mind,

    force of will,

    understanding supreme,

    For to win the Immortal Game,

    you must have these.

    #38 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Oh. Dear. Sweet. Celestia.

    This is going to be the best thing ever. BRING IT ON. :pinkiehappy:

    #39 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    A few things I spotted while skimming to see your changes (which made this chapter much better than the godawful trainwreck I saw initially):

    > Snap. the handle of Twilight’s duster shattered,

    "The" needs to be capitalized.

    > “Twilight,” she said. “please.”

    Punctuate dialogue correctly, you hack. Either make the period after "said" a comma or capitalize "please."

    The last one's the end, eh? Well, I look forward to seeing the rough draft appear in my inbox.

    #40 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    H.

    O.

    L

    Y.

    S.

    H

    I.

    T.

    I feel somewhat high right now after reading this. Thank you AB! Thank you Vimbert! Thank You Shivirani! Dude-who's-name-starts-with-an-R, how the hell are we supposed to pronounce your name? Have some gratuitous praise Ambion! Thank you Midnight Shadow!

    You've given us the one and only fic of it's kind, thank you! We're waiting for this last bit of glorious prose to come forth, bringing a close to a epic I know I'll remember for ever!

    Thank you.

    #41 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    I kind of think it would be cool if you subverted all our expectations and made Titan win in the end.

    #42 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>710104 Eh, I prefer Audiomachine tracks for my poetry, but that works too.

    >>710171 >>710722  Domino cascade poetry effect! Go!!!! This needs a group with a thread devoted to fanworks and tributes like these poems.

    #43 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>710944

    I don't know anything about any hypothetical initial version that may or may not have had three whole scenes dedicated to nothing happening. Also, your dialogue punctuation copypasta is by this point engraved on the inside of my skull, so why I continue to fail at this is beyond me. The end should be... fun, for everyone. I'll see you then.

    #44 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>711074

    I have been waiting for a ponyfic to end that way since I joined the fandom.

    #45 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Hmmm...

    What ho, these ides of doom,

    that sing so sweetly

    upon an autumn afternoon?

    That voice is poison.

    Only by death do they stand to gain,

    but under the weight of our sins,

    who will sing the refrain?

    She died for her creation,

    they died for her death.

    Alone on his throne,

    The world is all he has left.

    Someplace, sometime,

    a filly blew seeds to the wind

    by his power and decree

    that piece of the world did end.

    We could have made this a better place

    We were meant to be good

    now the blood spills from the throat of a race

    and AestheticB -

    I still think the word was better as 'should.'


    #46 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Sometimes I forget this is a fan fiction for My Little Pony. So many grim events and occurrences mixed with moments of absolute thought-provoking profoundness. It's sometimes hard to remember that these characters are supposed to be vibrantly colored little equines with large adorable eyes.

    So, 20 chapters and 240,000+ words later and this story is finally drawing to a close, eh? My anticipation is rivaled only by Titan's self-important arrogance. Honestly, the character realizes he's not the progenitor of all existence yet seems to think he should be. So much hubris. Also, I noticed there was no foreshadowing as to Discord's role. One would think Twilight, in her ever-calculating mind, to treat him as the unpredictable wild card in the impending battle.

    I'm not pretentious enough to pretend that I think I know what's going to happen. So I'll sit back with no expectations and let you hit me with the finale. However... I would like to know something: Has the ending that is coming always been your plan all along? Or has it changed over the course of writing this epic, either due to external (canon adaptation for instance) or internal (refinement of storytelling sensibilities as an example) factors?

    #47 · 49w, 1d ago · · ·
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    All I can say is "OH SHIT" , past that my brain has been reduced to a drooling imbecile.  

      Why is Luna still so amazing? Dash is still holding together, not like a boss, but still together.   Trust in Lyra to save us all with Vinyl Scratch kick'in out the awesome tunes.  (Why am I thinking Scott Pilgrim vs The World?)

    #48 · 49w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>713169

    Once upon a midnight dreary, while I pondered weak and weary,

    Over many a comment thread so filled with fans that I adore,

    While I nodded, nearly napping, soothed by the sweet sound of tapping,

    From my fingers gently rapping, rapping at my rich keyboard

    `'Fimfiction has beeped,' I muttered, `A new comment for the hoard -

    Let me see, then, what’s in store.'

    As my eyes surveyed the screen, they took upon a certain glean,

    A glimmer at a challenge issued that I just could not ignore,

    For the comment in its content, spoke about a disagreement,

    To which I had been vehement, In defense of meaning bore,

    By that word which he had spoke of in my fiction filled with gore

    His words he would answer for

    I took up my fancy keyboard, presently to serve as my sword

    And my shield would be my ego, against insults it would ward

    For we cannot help agreeing, As you might see now, while reading

    That my skill is somewhat needing when it comes to poems galore

    But I still press on for you will never find an author that is more

    Eager for a poetry war

    Ambion, your sentence failed, my attention, it derailed

    For your verb - it did not match the subject set out in the fore

    A raucous caw cannot take flight, a sound can’t fly, it isn’t right

    Your noise, it’s wings they were alight, you little imagery whore

    And so your sentence fell to pieces - reading it became a chore

    It made sense, oh! Nevermore!

    #49 · 49w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>714410

    "Hope" is the thing with feathers--

    And so's a raucous caw--

    It says the thing without the words--

    it never needs--at all--

    And richest reading--by imagery--is heard--

    And sore must be your wrath--

    that could dissaude me from my way

    and change this writing path--

    I'll be raucous in the thickest poem--

    and in the crass comments--

    As always: never--would I lament,

    So it was that not one shit--was sent.

    #50 · 49w, 1d ago · · ·
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    *gulp*

    #51 · 49w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>711044

    That may be the entire reason for my various names existence.

    >>713169

    I thought we agreed on 'will'?

    #52 · 49w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I stopped reading this once at about chapter 3 or 4, because it was just so dark.

    Now.... well, it's still dark as hell, but that makes the prospect of victory all the more tantalizing.

    #53 · 49w, 1d ago · · ·
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    so damn good!:pinkiehappy: im not sure if i should be wanting the next chapter or not. it will be absolutely epic, but it will also be the last chapter...:pinkiecrazy:

    edit: also; i feel like there is so much left undone, so many things left unfinished, i don't know how you and your prereaders are going to manage this next chapter, but you guys have my (and many others i suspect:twilightsheepish:) absolute faith in that you will succeed brilliantly!:raritystarry:

    #54 · 49w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>714410

    Oh snap! We're getting all Edgar Allen Poe up in here! :pinkiegasp:

    #55 · 49w, 22h ago · · ·
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    I just wanted to say, without further ado, I am very fond of this story, and should the final not come to pass, a small tragedy would have befallen the world.

    Keep writing please.

    #56 · 49w, 10h ago · · ·
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    collapse in on herself...after the war....

    oh god and Titan's blade's name is singularity. And she's related to the original war mare.

    I think i see where this is going...

    #57 · 49w, 4h ago · · ·
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    That awkward moment when you read all 20 of the currently released chapeters in Google Docs, then discover this exists.:facehoof:Oh well

    This ending needs to come soon. This has been one of the most gripping things I've read since A Song of Ice and FIre, or Harry Potter and the Methods of Rationality. So well done, it almost hurts to have to wait.

    #58 · 48w, 6d ago · · ·
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    So guess who just read through a multi-novel length fan fiction far superior to pretty much all the YA Novel's she's read in the past few years.

    <---

    My god. This is fantastic. And this is coming from someone who dissects everything she reads, looking for the flaws and, while there are some (mostly the fact that your villians are all evil, so very very evil, with no sort of redemptive qualities), this was still such a joy to read. I am sad that I had to come in ONE CHAPTER before it was finished. So I actually have to wait to see what happens next. :facehoof:

    Although to be fair, I do have a theory on that:

    The Mane Six wins, and Sir Unimpressive turns out to be related to Twilight because he's a distant relative since he reminds me of Valiant. But he's distant enough that it isn't creepy and incestuous, so those two go on to have the best babies in the history of Equestria. :raritywink:

    Just a working theory, but I like it.

    EDIT:

    Actually I would like to say that, while your villians are all irredeemable balls of icky evilness, they are extremely interesting in their various forms of insanity, and you showing the world through their warped view is... fascinating. I especially enjoyed the perspective of Titan/Order, although his cutie mark confuses me. After all it is... nothing, nothing at all... I sort of take that to mean that he is the master of nothing, which is sort of funny considering he considers himself to be the master of everything. And yet if he is not constrained to one strength, if he has no singular purpose like everyone else, then perhaps he is stronger?

    I do not know, but I'm interested to see if his cutie mark plays into the next chapter.

    #59 · 48w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >> ambion

    >> AestheticB

    I made an account just to tell you I love you.

    :heart: Like, seriously. :twilightblush:

    #60 · 48w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I look forward to the conclusion.

    #61 · 48w, 6d ago · · ·
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    If my suspicions are correct, and this story parrallels THE Immortal Game, then Titan is walking into a checkmate.

    #62 · 48w, 6d ago · · ·
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    End game for this will certainty be interesting.

    I was expecting a very dark ending for a while but with the revelation that Spike is still alive, I'm now expecting a bittersweet one with some heroic sacrifices from the mane cast.

    #63 · 48w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>714410

    Ha B! You did not reply;

    with what I said, so do comply

    One look at you (Like Fluttershy)

    and you fell down into the sty!

    Let's pull a switch--

    Terra is still quite the bitch

    Though her past gave us a hitch

    it must be said her story's rich--

    Lich, 'twas Nihilus Nix Naught

    With a sliver she was bought (and sold!)

    for while they fought: 'twas filthy, filthy written gold.

    Even dead, she's wrought

    twists and turns that shall unfold.

    Now twists and turns

    Discord's line

    His appearnce (so unique!)

    is only for a little time

    And like a boss (in chracacter) he tweaks

    proxied by a crown of worms,

    and slime.

    "You should not have dropped the apple," Titan said.

    Because the red apple was a red head,

    (of his dead son, no less!)

    Presumeably Titan has bled

    for that (and left the world as quite a mess)

    ///Switcheroo!

    Like Kangeroo!

    and every creature he calls to his side

    Like the crazy god of cat ladies

    Sanity? Hah! it ebbed with the tide--

    Oh hey look, the Pleiades!

    >>Been there, done that,

    bought the T-shirt with his wife

    (typical tourists)

    then went about to end her life

    (not so typical)

    and lyrical, these taxonomical

    anomolies, these alicorns--

    waxing philosophical

    with students both gone prodigal

    with power quite vestigial

    (It doesn't win the world)

    now naturally quite jaded

    to the way the world's been sladed

    in proportion to what's escalated

    ideal and hope have both faded.

    Corsucare?

    Course I care!

    But do I dare?

    (No don't stare--you fool!)

    You've always been her tool

    poor poor Valiant, she always had you

    (and that certain piece for procreation)

    for a bit of recreation,

    which, bizzarely,

    helped with emancipation

    and the founding of a nation..

    Luna's head she went to take

    (that bat motiff? Better try it with a stake)

    But Sangrophile Celestia did slake

    and thusly, as always, she spake:

    "This world is not won by war"

    Esteem was something of its whore

    But, to him, it was no chore-

    he'd never bore of waging war

    and in the lore he had a store

    of more and more blood on the floor

    and the decor, and in the drawer,

    and gore hardcore galour

    in his own words: he was cocksure

    With him so readers do amour

    though best deplore and abhor,

    at the core of fighting corps(e)

    this rancor whore of war

    --no encore--

    Not yet a soldier but no longer a maid.

    Fair Rarity, she's underplayed

    Esteem tried his best that in his image she'd be made,

    but he's dead and her virtue has stayed

    (Blood isn't her colour)

    Now Vorpal is her diamond blade

    And like the name sake in this wonderland

    she wonders what happened to the band

    will this be their last stand?

    Will Sweetie Belle live to be a mare

    with a talent in musical flare?

    curse the name that was ever Allure

    somehow, they must endure--

    unsure and insecure,

    'tis Rainbow Dash, but not herself

    (shit, nothing rhymes with elf--

    the little bastards ruin everything)

    well, that was a bit of a sting

    like a thousand insects in the brain

    every action makes a deeper stain

    she comes back to herself, but what does she find

    but only that what was hers was mined

    blind and bind, front to hind

    she fought she fought, she grind she grind

    against the the course assigned,

    but being TIG,

    its much inclined to be maligned..

    And coming near, the final act

    both of this poem and the matter of fact

    Bust out your Pinkie rig and prepare to dig--

    your heels into this aweome jig

    take a swig (strong stuff that Sir Unimpressive packs!)

    as Ludwig von Aesthetic starts the gig

    dis ain't just gonna be good,

    this gonna be BIG

    #64 · 48w, 6d ago · · ·
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    By Celestia's crown...

    This chapter... so much build up... that last line, 'The End Is Near', pulls me like a vortex within my computer screen to the edge of my seat.

    For 'tis my fate, I must lament, to bide in amaze and contemplation, for the conclusion to this epic tale I do so eagerly await.

    AestheticB, you are a wordsmith. Every word I've read of this story so far, all 240,346 of them, have come to tipping point here. All the characters in whom I have invested, all the lore with which I have become so fascinated...

    Chapter 21. When chapter 21 arrives, like a boy transitioning into adulthood, this story will cement its already well-earned place as one of if not the greatest of its kind.

    I salute you sir.

    Keep on rockin', B.

    #65 · 48w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Am I weird, I find myself wandering my about these arc ponies and whatever the hell fluttershy is. Dearlord, these little things kill me.

    #66 · 48w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Thus does the world begin.

    thus does it END

    This war is nigh over,

    nothing left to defend.

    With even Chaos gone,

    the tide shall again turn.

    There are no winners here,

    this world shall burn.

    Harmony is gone,

    and Earth went too soon.

    Order violates Sun

    Order defiles Moon

    chances gained and lost,

    with the messages that sends,

    good and evil

    light and dark

    it all ends.

    Gloomy poetry! My excuse:

    But everypony else was doing it!

    #67 · 48w, 6d ago · · ·
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    um....

    Haikus are easy,

    But sometimes they don't make sense,

    Refrigerator.

    #68 · 48w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Hail to the king, baby

    #69 · 48w, 5d ago · · ·
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    By far the most enthralling read I have seen. Insurmountable depth of story, absolutely love the detail, intriguing explanations for events, and astounding variation of writing from semi-comedic, dark, to philosophical. I would only be able to compare this to what few novels I have read, essentially only the Brent Weeks works (Night Angel Trilogy/ The Black Prism) for total composition, depth, variation, and development.

    Other than the very few inconsistencies in the chapters (I noticed "hand" once or twice) the only possible error I have seen was in the first section of this chapter:

    --A phantom buzzing. Her skin began to tingle. Rainbow Dash couldn’t afford to forget who she was. “Stop it!” she shouted. “Stop!” She clamped her hooves over her ears, but they nothing stopped Terra’s onslaught of soul-rending truths.--

    The part: "but they nothing" dose not sound right to me, but I could just be ignorant in this matter.

    Needlessly said, I shall be reading the whole thing over in a few days, as I enjoyed it that much.

    #70 · 48w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>724173

    Did some googling. You mean the chess game of that name right? It actually worries me now. It was the winner who sacrificed all hies peaces to obtain the win (Esteem, Empyrean, Terra...). Otherwise... I fear that after the battle and (optional) epilogue "Mane 6" might be renamed into "Mane 2 or 3".

    #71 · 48w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>730258

    you have no idea what you're getting yourself into.

    It's dangerous to go alone...here, take this :derpytongue2:

    #72 · 48w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Celestia's Ethereal Pubic Hair! I'm not sure whats more intense, The Story or the Phat Beats Rolling outta the Comments! this has been one of the best reading experiences I've ever encountered

    #73 · 48w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I'm Commander Titan, and this is my favorite store in The Citadel.

    #74 · 48w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Poems eh?

    I got one :twilightsheepish:

    Oh there is one last thing I'd like to write

    on this fantastic little site

    about your story, so long and cool

    you have a sad tendency to

    describe every action in a fight

    and honestly I'd hope you might

    tone this down for it is hard to get

    caught up in something like that when it

    is given to you in a list like form

    indeed it makes me quite forlorn

    for when I try to make sense of

    all the different kicks and shoves

    I get confused and the tension eases

    as I try to put together all the pieces

    to find out where everypony's punch

    and kick and block and stab and crunch

    are heading and hitting or missing and shifting

    indeed it's hard to get a feeling

    of how the fight is going

    when all the details your are showing.

    So instead I might ask

    you make it less of a task

    and instead give us the feeling

    of what everypony is doing,

    rather than explaining outright

    anyways, thank you and goodnight

    :twilightsmile:

    #75 · 48w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>740405

    I know, right?

    It is a plight

    to fight and bite for what is right

    and in the writing find fault to slight

    because lets be honest...

    sometimes great writers write utter shi-

    -Shy was great this chapter,

    don't you think?

    No need to stare,

    nor blink nor wink,

    from the foe she did not shrink

    and in despair is yet to sink

    Aloft but not aloof,

    respect and fear this gentle poof

    from the tip of the feather

    to the end of her hoof

    the storm she'll weather

    ... a soul to soothe-

    --say... pray for the day

    TIG 21 is sighted in the bay?

    here to stay, Titan to slay,

    say no neigh, only bray

    what's done will fray,

    of hope--a ray

    what might--may,

    cast your blay--

    --duh, that's how I roll

    like Empy 2.0,

    (especially his severed head)

    Forevermore they pay the toll

    ( I lay my own upon my bed)

    goodnight, sweet prince,

    but you are dead.

    #76 · 48w, 1h ago · · ·
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    Whew, it has taken me two solid weeks of reading during my spare time to hammer my way through this story, and boy has it been an epic journey. I was initially reluctant to read this when I first saw it announced on Equestria Daily given its grimdark and warlike qualities, and so it had spent months on my “to do list” collecting dust (and a significant word count that made it even more intimidating to start and read). But hearing that it was really good, and nearing the end I decided to bite the bullet and starting reading this story. I have not regretted that decision one bit.

    This has quickly become one of my favorite fanfics of all time, and an absolutely epic story. I am happy to have joined this near the very end, and I eagerly wait for what will no doubt be an entertaining ending. This story has made me feel so many emotions as its events and characters have wrenched at me. From sadness, to despair, glee, hate, relief, and a range of other emotions. You did a wonderful job of making me hate your villains. I generally like my villains in one of two general flavors. Relatable villains with perfectly understandable motivations, and then complete monsters. This story definitely embraces the latter with villains capable of the worst actions imaginable. They have been well thought out, and have their own twisted motivations and world views, and it has been gut wrenching when they succeed or even managed to evade the heroes from stopping them, and oh so satisfying to see them knocked down one by one. If you have made me want the villains to be taken out this badly, you have done something right in my estimations

    It has also been entertaining to read about the evolution of the characters throughout the story. You have certainly badassed many of the characters, but it has made sense within the context of the epic scale story you are telling. I have sympathized with them, wept for them during their in many cases horrible trials (what happened to Twilight and Dash at the beginning was absolutely horrifying), and cheered for their hard fought successes.

    I think someone may have been inspired by the Dresden Files for things like the concept of Free Will, and the horrors of mind rape spells. You have certainly shown how terrible mind related magic can be, and how awful it would be to be subject to one. The Insanity spell and Twilight’s possession by Nihilius, and its descriptions have certainly been absolutely cringe worthy, and heartbreaking to read about. To take away ones free will is certainly a horrendous thing to do to someone.

    Needless to say, this has become one of my favorite fics, and I eagerly wait for what I hope will be a satisfying conclusion. There is just so much positive that can be said about this story that it is hard for me to put in words. Bravo!

    #77 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    5/13 scenes and already 15k word? So how long will it be,  30k+ words? I don't mind though. Epic ending to a epic story and all that.

    #78 · 46w, 6d ago · · ·
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    This is going to sound like hyperbole, but "The Immortal Game" is the single greatest piece of fiction I have read on here. Far and away greater than even the vaunted Eternal, this story...it seethes with depth and imagination beyond compare. You, sir, have single-handedly redefined what it means to be a dark adventure on FiMfiction.

    The combat, the premise, the history, and the characters: every element is an inspiration and a credit to the art of writing. Rarely have I seen a fanwork ascend the level of the show upon which it is based. This is one of those occasions.

    Sir, I salute you.

    #79 · 46w, 6d ago · · ·
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    To be honest, I can't help but think it would be hilarious if Titan really did just roll up and own everyone, end of story. Somehow I doubt that will happen but a 100% happy ending seems pretty much impossible right now.

    #80 · 46w, 6d ago · · ·
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    From what I can infer, from the last chapter at least, is that Luna and Celestia will end up sacrificing themselves to create an opening for the Elements of Harmony to kill Titan. In the end, all of the Alicorns would be gone, leaving the mortal ponies to rule themselves.

    #81 · 46w, 5d ago · · ·
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    This is the most amazing fic I have ever read in the history of all literature, and I cannot wait for its conclusion.

    You are writing it. Right?

    Right?

    #82 · 46w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>809967

    I guess you could say that, but I still feel being "trapped" in a body part other then your brain is kinda silly. :pinkiehappy:

    #83 · 46w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>810326

    She was trapped in the sliver that just so happened to be in her eye. The Sliver of Darkness takes your personality, replaces it with it's own inverted personality, and shoves the original back into the sliver.

    #84 · 46w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>810395

    So then they only communicated via the optic nerve?  I see it more as a split personality disorder, with one personality being the weaker and is forced into the background by the more domineering personality.  That idea explains how she was able to regain control in the sky fortress (honestly, a floating rock is not the safest thing).  :twilightsheepish:

    #85 · 46w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I just finished reading everything that's out so far, and this is my new favorite story. I can't wait for the sure to be epic ending.

    #86 · 46w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Okay. So, we are incomplete with 240,000 plus words. So, imma track this, and come back when I have time to read the equivalent of three Harry Potter books or so.

    #87 · 46w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Absolutely AMAZING FiM fic. I truly wasn't expecting something of this calibre from a fanfiction, but I guess I underestimated this fandom once again. I loved that this fic is dark, and how well you made the ponies fit into such a grave environment while still maintaining their friendship and character quirks. I can't wait for the next chapter.

    I have honestly read this fic twice already since discovering it three nights ago, and I feel as if I could go through it again. I love how the narrative changes per character and each of their personalities show through the way they interact with their environment and other ponies. This goes on my top fanfiction list of any genre of all time. I know that may not mean much to you, but I am so happy I stumbled upon this fic.

    Also, listen to Dark Terrors by Stars in Autumn while reading this. :raritywink:

    #88 · 46w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Of course, they can always telefrag Titan if all else fails. How good are Alicorns' magic jamming/defense capabilities in this story? Do they operate them on a conscious or subconscious level? Because if Titan cannot maintain a jamming field or shield subconsciously around himself, the heroes could win by distracting him long enough for one of the Princesses to open a portal into his heart and allow the Mane Six to blast the Harmony beam right inside his chest.

    Seeing that bastard explode after all he did would be EXTREMELY gratifying. :yay:

    By the way, where can I find fanart for The Immortal Game?

    #89 · 46w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>830136

    Unfortunately, I can't even find much in the way of fan art.

    Also, it's been a month. I do hope the next chapter comes soon.

    Axz
    #90 · 46w, 1d ago · · ·
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    perfect as always nuff said :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

    #91 · 46w, 16h ago · · ·
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    It... it can't be the last one. This is literally THE BEST fanfiction in the whole Celestiadamned fandom. -Quite- literally, there is nothing better. This doesn't get half the praise it deserves by far, while other over-hyped crap dances around higher up the popularity ladder.

    The Immortal Game and Growing Pains are the two fics I most look for during story update time. :< And the latter's on hiatus and/or discontinued. You're taking my crack from me mang.

    #92 · 46w, 12h ago · · ·
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    >>834589

    That thing got six stars in Equestria Daily. I supposed it already did got the praises it deserved.

    On the side note, what about "Fallout Equestria"? Or "It's a Dangerous Business, Going out your door"? Those are equally among the best, with the latter being not only original, but had the size and epic scale that was said by some to rival even LORD OF THE RINGS.

    #93 · 46w, 12h ago · · ·
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    >>835049

    I was kind of talking about FO:E when I was mentioning hype, though "crap" was more along the line of "stuff" rather than badly-written. Good series, just... this, this goes beyond just what you're seeing happening as it's laid out before you. There's something about that puzzling introspection that makes it all the more sweeter to finally connect to yourself somehow. The inner level of depth that touches thought, action, and reason. AB really makes the characters -live-, without adding on extra layers of flesh to make them look alive. Each one of the girls and the alicorns has a unique presence, without needing to be hyper-burdened with details and backstories like you'll see from many other good authors. It's telling several different stories with every paragraph of the main story that goes by.

    I've yet to find another fic that does it quite like this, and believe me I have looked. Being laid up as I am I have little else to do but read ponyfiction everyday. I'm certainly no expert critic, but I have read quite a few very good fanfictions over the years, from several fandoms. This is, even in the face of that experience, still the top. Others might be longer, or have more intricate twists and turns, things that make you cry or howl with laughter, but I don't find this level of connection anywhere else. For quality, this is one of the best fanfictions that there is. For me, there is no better.

    #94 · 45w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>828043

    OC alicorns are a huge no-no. That's why I only have five. TIG also has a cupcakes reference, see if you can find it!

    #95 · 45w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Next chapter predictions:

    1) Twilight will end up splitting her mind 3 ways. This was foreshadowed by Luna in chapter 12.

    2) As was foreshadowed by Celestia and Luna's conversation in chapter 20, they will end up sacrificing themselves to allow the Elements of Harmony to land a killing blow. Imagine a pawn landing a checkmate after a queen sacrifice. [Alternate Theory: Harmony may create an avatar from her memory that is stored in the Elements - setting to manual as Discord said- cleansing Titan's mind or pulling him into an eternal struggle within their minds. This theory is way more far fetched so honestly doubt that this will be the ending, but who knows.]

    3) Fluttershy will use her song. This will most likely be in the battle against nature.

    #96 · 45w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Do want last chapter. This story is what keeps me checking FiMFiction daily.

    #97 · 45w, 10h ago · · ·
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    I can't believe that this only hit me on my second re-read. What color is Terra's cutie mark? It's been black because of her corruption, but what was it originally? I hope we get a short segment with her "restored"

    #98 · 44w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>837645

    Been dreamin'

    I've been waiting

    To read the final chapter!

    So when will you update this fic?

    Will the writing be done quick?

    I really don't like all this waiting,

    But I'm sure you'll get a 5-star rating!

    For the final chapter of this fanfiiiiiiiiiiiic!

    Can't wait for update!

    #99 · 44w, 22h ago · · ·
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    When I heard Mandopony's I Am No Hero (Luna's Theme), it made me instantly think of the Luna in this story. No matter what she does, she will never be seen as a hero by the majority of those she is helping. She will only be seen as a monster. Even if she is her little ponies monster. :fluttercry: This story makes me feel so many feelings, and I love the protrayal of the Luna of this story.

    #100 · 43w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Hi AestheticB, I have been following this story on google docs for a while, and I love this story, so I was just wondering if you have a general idea when the final chapter will come out? I await it soooo eagerly

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