When Twilight's feelings regarding her mother come to light on Hearth's Warming Eve, her confession threatens to tear apart her family bond forever in favor of her perfect idol. To give her daughter happiness, Twilight Velvet deicides to take drastic measures to either regain the daughter she missed for two years, or lose her forever. When Princess Celestia is brought into the equation, Twilight is faced with the daunting challenge to no longer hide her feelings but come to understand them. When torn between idealism and the card Fate handed her, Twilight must confront herself with what it truly means to love.
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Chapters (2)
Possible error, "read the let we", I think it's supposed to be "Letter"
A nice little story, the paper cranes was a nice addition tying the beginning and the end together.
This is definetly going in my favorites
Ehh comment:P this is an amazing piece of work I love it!!
4365800 Whoops.
It's been corrected; thank you!
4366297 Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it!
I sort of wanted Twilight to choose the other option. Lol
I was hoping Twilighjt would come up with a compromise option where she took both.
4366849 yep:) I'm actually glad with what twi chose. When it's looked at it that way, She is really better off with her mom.
so she chose velvet?
im confused a little bit.
4396513 Yes, essentially, she did. Can't exactly agree to an adoption with the forms half-buried in the snow.
And as the tale was told the emotion flooded the heart of the reader, questioning if that decision should never be left on their hands.
This is the cutest !
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I think the "dare" should be emphasized here, and word might be better as "sentence".
I'd suggest swapping out "untouched" with something else since your previous sentence just used that same descriptor for her room.
Here "and" should be "about" and I don't think "Mother" needs to be capitalized.
"seeing" might be better as "watching" here, to avoid repetition.
This should probably be "sunlit".
This should either be "slightly damp" or "slightly dampened" though I think "damp" is better.
Lastly, in your story description,
This should probably be "the card".
That's it! I really like what I'm seeing so far. I'll get on to chapter two here in a bit.
Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!
4545989 I'll gratefully take those, thank you! *sigh* It's always the little things, isn't it?
Imperfection may be a part of life, but it certainly does get annoying. At any rate, my sincere thanks for taking the time to point out my oversights; they will be corrected at once. 
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This should be "To have been able".
This should be "the past two years".
This should be "and sang her lullabies".
This might be better as "couldn't her heart decide?" to avoid repetition of "both".
That's all! Loved the story! Ah Twilight, love is such a complicated mess, and each of us must discover what it is for ourselves, for no book nor guide nor tale false or true, can impart the meaning onto you. Thoroughly enjoyed this, and how Velvet got a few jabs in at Celestia.
Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!
4546611 Again, thank you so much! Both your polite critiques and complements mean the world to me! I'm so glad you enjoyed this story, and I hope my future projects will also be to your liking.
Beautiful.
I kinda wanna see an alternate where Twilight picks Celestia now, though...
It would be fun to see the rest of the mane 6's reaction when Twilight first arrives to Ponyville and such.
Wee! A word I don't recall seeing before!
"caviled“, old french, to mock, jest or rail.
If this is how Twi perceived her mothers encouragement, its no wonder the lesson was so difficult.Went back and reread that bit... Twi used the word... My first impression when I looked it up on wiktionary was that her mom was mocking Twi's frustration.
Now I suppose it should be Twi railing against her mothers insistance that she repeat the exercise yet another time.