• Member Since 16th Apr, 2014
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TooShyShy


Fan fiction. The final frontier.

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What happens when arrogant young Rainbow Dash needs braces? Naturally, she is less than thrilled with this. Luckily, she encounters a filly whose just as terrified as she is. Or perhaps even more terrified. That filly is young Fluttershy, whose having a little trouble conquering her own fear of the dentist.

Note: I made the cover art myself, using vectors and Paint.NET.

This is my first post on here, so don't hold back with the criticism.

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Comments ( 12 )

Love this. I think you captured their personalities perfectly.

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It's... :ajbemused:

It's... :trixieshiftleft:

It's...:twilightangry2:

Oh screw the subtlety, TAKE ALL MY HEARTS!!! :heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart:

Ugh. I loved it. Not super complicated, no huge grammar mistakes, personalities were on point, cute plot, and all around great story. Is this truly your first fanfic? If so, you earn a follow, because I need more of this simple and picture perfect way of writing. :ajsmug:

While many people's first story give people cancer, I think this one will give them diabetes instead because of its sweetness. Nice story.

The story itself was great, although there were a couple formatting issues at the end where it moves to a new line where it shouldn't. There's nothing wrong with the writing, just the formatting.

4356097 Not my first ever fanfic. Just the first MLP:FIM fanfic that I've actually finished, revised, and posted. Also, thank you :twilightsmile:

Try to depart that monster paragraph other then that it's was adkroble :3

A wonderful little slice of life moment, and certainly a great way for the two of them to properly meet. I hope to see more in this style; it's very well done.

Very good I love filly stories

Daww nice story. :scootangel:

Aww, that's cute. :) Always nice to see simple, gentle stories like this. A lot of writers neglect those in favour of huge, complex epics and I think there's always a place for them. Also, I'm a complete sucker for filly FlutterDash friendshipping! :yay::rainbowkiss:

This was a sweet story, but a little hard to read since the paragraphs weren't spaced out.

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