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XYZDreadnought


An aspiring Artist/Writer who wont let lack of skill get in the way of enthusiasm

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Paradox has always known he was different, he was pretty small compared to most people, he lives with his parents and rarely leaves the house, his hair was an unusual colour… He also had a pair of wings, a tail, walked on four hooves and covered in brightly coloured fur. So yeah, you could say that he is quite different to All the Humans around him. Mysteriously left on the doorstep of the wealthy couple of Rachelle & Arthur Millar as a foal, he was raised in secret by the pair and loved like he was their own. Despite his loving adoptive parents, he often feels out of place, like he hadn’t found his place in life, or rather life hadn’t found a place for him.


Snowy is an up and coming academic in the field of magical theory, specialising in the Advanced manipulation of reality (known as Chaos magic), in the Canterlot Academy of Magical Studies. She has always been looked down upon by her older colleges... literally, being about a half-a-head shorter than the average mare. Add being an Albino and a rather touchy attitude on both subjects, and you have a mare who you have a hard time taking seriously. But she is going to change that, with her new unorthodox experiment in void tunnelling she will win the respect of her peers once and for all. Nothing can go wrong today, she won't let it!


These two strange ponies could never meet, or could they?


Cover Art by Me

Chapters (14)
Comments ( 92 )
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trees bowed and leaves flew and danced in rhythm with the chaotic symphony of the storm.

I do hope that I am not one of the only users to favorite this story.

So far this has been very well-written, and certainly unique enough to be intriguing. I eagerly await the next chapter.

Deleted comments are never a good sign. Guess I won't be reading this...

5108948 Actually, that was some correspondence with my previous proofreader, I deleted them before I published this:twilightblush:
I assure you, I am completely open to constructive criticism

5108727 Why is one of your comments deleted?:applejackunsure:

5113402 A minor nitpick; I apologize for that. I wanted to put the comment on Chapter 1 instead of Chapter 3.

An interesting story. There has only been a few stories I have come across featuring an albino pony as a character. This looks to be a good read. Do continue good sir.:moustache:

5186231 Thank you, its nice to get some feedback every now and theSWEETCELESTIAYOURAVATAR!:pinkiegasp:

Ah yes, good ol' Murphy's Law. It is not to be messed with.

5196340 Do you think the god Murphy was too much? I honestly just made it up for that last line:twilightsheepish:.

5196347 I wouldn't play too much on him if you don't plan on making him an actual character. If you made "Murphy" a figurative "him" for the sake of the possesive function of the phrase "Murphy's Law" then it makes sense.

5200310 I'm not planning to use him too much, just a running gag between stories, were occasionally the character, after some contrived event, or unlikely occurrence, the character will shout "Dammit Murphy!"

He's also a joke on how contrived Equestria can be at times, especially on fimfiction.

"Ass..." The Mare grumbled before unconsciousness took her.

:rainbowlaugh:

Oh this ought to be for some VERY interesting conversation with Walter...Oh yeah nice Doctor Who reference. :rainbowlaugh:

Nice story. Gonna keep an eye on this one.:twilightsmile:

need more please hurry and do a good job

This is going to get quite awkward for poor Paradox...

5429238 Yup! The Coolest pygmy Albino out there.:twilightsmile:

Any part in particular you were refering to?

5429244 The way she carries herself. Her attitude. She the perfect mix of "you really wanna fuck with me" and silliness that makes you wanna hug her!

5429262 Nice to know I'm doing it right, I love my OCs and I want to do them justice.:pinkiehappy:

5429275 Care to clarify what you mean by dorky? Just curious.

5429283 She a pygmy Albino unicorn with the temperament of a grumpy Rottweiler. Adorkable.

jxj

take your time with the story. You can definitely see paradox's social skills in action.

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That's the problem, he never developed any social skills, the only company he has ever had was his parents, Walter, and a younger sister. He has never had any social contact outside his direct family, and possibly a few online interactions, he's dense because he doesn't know how to read people, especially ponies, so Snowy is a complete Enigma to him.

jxj

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lol, it's ok. sarcasm doesn't come over text well either

5573267 That's for sure, I tend to stick a trollestia emoticon in my comments when I'm not being serious.

this guy is socially deprived it's not so much him being dense as to just not knowing what to do or how to respawn to others.
this story's abit of a enigma never read anything even remotely close to this. i'm really enjoying this, i mean i absolutely love it.
you have earned yourself a nose boop i492.photobucket.com/albums/rr289/axlthehedgehog_2008/responses/tumblr_m2gfw2gtbw1r6i662o1_r1_500_by_scarlett_novel-d7b3svf.png

stayclassy:moustache:

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*Gets booped*
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But seriously, thanks!

I'm glad you like my story, and I'm ecstatic that you find my story unique.

I was planning to waste the rest of my evening Playing Sims 3, but because of this, I think I'll get some more work on the next chapter!

I am the definition of classy...
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jxj

Pretty good chapter. It would have been nice see at least a bit of paradox and snowy, but I get that this chapter was necessary.

:pinkiehappy: oh this is just a treat cant wait for more


stayclassy:moustache:

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