You deleted everything and started over?

>>25227882522788

Seems like he did.

>>25227882522788 & >>25227912522791

Yes, but it was for the better. The pacing, realisticness (is that a word?) and characterization were bad, and Clockwork was becoming the very thing I strived to avoid.

It was getting to be kind of a chore to read, so I think this'll do the story some good.

I noticed it got all changed too, but I do like that Clockwork and Charger have some history now as opposed to randomly becoming friends/bestfriends/romantic interests in such a short amount of time.

It takes real guts to start over completely and I applaude you for your tenacity to improve your story.

Yes! Yes! YES! I've been waiting so long for this. I congratulate you for not giving up when the going got tough, and weathering the storm, sir! I have no doubt this story will easily stand up to my expectations.

Only one mistake here:

“Those newsponies just like to make everypony think things are worse than they are so that they sell more papers. Believe you me, there’s no danger of an actual war.”

Whoa... its like its all different...whoa...

I will say, this story seems much more realistic in the sense of steampunk MLP fantasy magic ponies, but its enjoyable! Very enjoyable. I look forward to how this plays out.

I have to say, that was a fairly good new first chapter. Nice work.

>>25227962522796 Perhaps you meant realism rather than realisticness?

>>25231422523142

That's an entirely legit sentence.

Yay it's npback, nowi just have to clear m mind of the mental images of the story before

>>25231842523184

Yes, thank you.

>>25231872523187 "Believe you me"

Huh...everything deleted. :|

whatever you want...

Right. *rubs hands together*

Let's see where this goes, shall we?

>>25233352523335

That is fine, actually. It is used a lot it literature, actually. Take my word for it because I edit pretty much all the damn time. Not for him but for a lot of people.

>>25227962522796Well I look forward to see how you redo this. Oh, and if you ever need another set of eyes to read through your chapters well... hint hint.

yay! i hated where th' story was going!

Yay! Its here!

Please do not disappear on me again~ I haven't found a good fic that is focused on a pony in a while.

why is it that whenever I read a fanfic about Equestria going to war, I get a shiver down the spine and feel light-headed?

not against them... unless either one of the Mane 6 or all dies

Pretty bucking amazing starter chapter you got here.

I can see why you wanted to do a reboot.

I want to do that for some of my stories, but I'm a bit too lazy at the moment and it'll feel like a waste of time of people don't really like it. I'm not exactly confident when it comes to redoing things.

Holy shit. I thought I would have to clear my Favorites of any "mistakes in judgement" from my part, but you just saved your own ass by starting from scratch and actually make some sense on were the hell you were going. I will still remove it but I will keep my eye out for this. Please Guy don't fuck this up.

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!! You started over? Your story was already EPIC!

But then, I would REALLY like to see where you'll go with this. I have faith in your epic writing skills. Now go, and save the worldwrite the perfect story!

I'm liking this far better than the first edition of this story. Given more context and Clockwork no longer screams "Gary Stu" at me.

In other words, I'm enjoying this so far. Don't mess it up.

Image: http://derpicdn.net/media/W1siZiIsIjIwMTIvMTEvMTIvMDJfMTZfNDNfNTc4XzE0OTQxOF9fVU5PUFRfXyJdXQ/149418__safe_princess-luna_image-macro_crystal-empire_frown_skeptical.png

Well i was a big fan of he old draft, but I am not allowed to secondguess your decision to rewrite it, as i have literally done this twice.

Not only am I very pleased with the heavy makeover (which worked pretty damn well), you've included a nice cameo that fits him really well. Kudos to you!

Aww man. I loved the original story, even if some of it was rushed. What I'm sorta sad about is just getting rid of all the work you had done and the time you took.

I don't want to guilt trip ya but man... I just really loved the story.  But if you believe that the remake of the tale is necessary, I'm right behind ya.

Wow, THAT`S ONE AWESOME IMPROVEMENT!!!

This is cool can't wait for the next chapter.

Also: inflammable = flammable (stuped I know having two word that mean the same thing).

By the way if you need a steampunk OC you can use mine. I'll PM you the Info if your interested.

I'm enjoying this, and really can't wait to see what else you've changed from the old version.

Now, something that must be put. GIIIIIILLLLLLLDAAAAAAAA!!!!! (If I could put emoticon things from my phone I would) <3<3<3 First chapter back and Gilda is here, so happy.

I look forward to the next chapter, until then, see ya round.

Echo... Diamond Dog... Wait...

>>25227962522796 I think it was fine the way it was plus, crippled by smog?

>>25366012536601

All shall be revealed........

>>25359392535939

By Jove, I think he's onto something.

Hmmmmm....*Sigh* you could have atleast renamed the first one Clockwork:The Bad Version

And then started the new one... i kinda liked the old one but i have to admit it was beggening to sound like some type of Call Of Duty: Black Ops Crossover Dx

>>25382722538272

May I just say......*death-glare* What is it with you people? You make an awesome story and then.....Whoosh, gone. Because you didn't deem it good enough? You got a single downvote? WHY?! I'm sorry I'm just highly irritated....At least Cards Lafter had the decency not to delete the original...

And just fyi, any chapter from your original could bludgeon this one to death with a broken tooth-pick.

>>25313772531377

I might feel inclined to believe you if you didn't incorrectly spell "stuped". It's stupid.

Grammar nazi away!