This story is a sequel to The Life of a Young Colt
When Twilight spend a few days with Cadance and Shining Armor in the Crystal Empire with her friends, she meets with somepony from her past: an old love. However, it happens that old love is Shining Armor's best friend and right hoof. But, despite her efforts, she ends up becoming truly in love for him. But everything gets worse when Shining Armor discovers everything. How will it all end? Will the relationship between the two brothers be as it was before? And the relationship between the two old friends?
Note: This story tells how Twilight met Blue Sword again and how their love began. This is a parallel story in relation to Bloom's New Life and the true sequel of The Life of a Young Colt. Its sequel is The Light Kingdom.
First story: The Life of a Young Colt
Third story: The Light Kingdom
Fourth story: The Taking of Tartarus
Fifth story: Star Knight and the Nine-Tailed Fox
Sixth story: The Island of Tambelon
Seventh story: Light and Darkness - The Shadow of Midnight
Eighth story: The Hidden Prince
Nineth story: Aventures in the Bermikun Triangle
Tenth story: The Elements of Virtue
Eleventh story: The Prince of the Cursed Kingdom
YEAH!!! The SEQUEL. I am sooo happy. I can't wait for the next chapter.
Yeah!!! Now we get to the crystal Empire next. Now what will happen if Rarity tries to flirt with Blue as well. Never mind. Your story. Best of luck.
4311650 Yes, I could do it, but I prefer do it myself because I want to improve my English.
Nice chapter. I really liked it. I can't wait to see how the plot develops.
Nice chapter. I can't wait for the next one.
They will be. I would say only a few things further would screw up things more. Shinning finding out about Blue. Rarity's and Cadences involvement, and the changelings. If all those things happened within 24 hours. Man that would break anyone. Great chapter.
4363293 Maybe, but you must not forget that he is an overprotective brother and that even if the his sister's coltfriend is his best friend, he can not react very well.
Well, so far nothing has caught ablaze. Lets see what happens in the next chapter.
Cadence got off way to easy. I would have yelled at her. I wouldn't care if she was a princess. Good chapter by the way.
Nice chapter. I do like how they are now an official couple. I can't wait for the next chapter.
4401068 There are still a few chapters.
That was a very sweet date. I love how you should how much attention Blue gave to Twilight. I can't wait for the next chapter. I hope it comes out soon.
That was a great chapter. Man. I love how Cadence ran interference with Shinning. Let the secret romance continue.
I hope they used protection, or else Blue is going to face the wrath of Shinning Armor. Not even Cadence can save him if Twilight gets pregnant. I can't wait for the next chapter. Good luck.
4424912 Don't worry about that. I'm not thinking in making Twilight getting pregnant right now. Maybe later or in the sequel.
pretty good so far nice work
4426348 You're really impacient. Be patient, we are almost there.
Oh boy. I wonder what is going to happen up at the crystal empire. This could end up very badly.
Well the inevitable happen. Now lets have Cadence put Shinning in the dog house. That is going to be fun. I don't think I ever read Cadence using the Canterlot voice.
It's a bucking shame that the number of views is so low. Can't wait for the next chapter
Go Cadence. Good job with the way Cadence is talking to the foal. It makes this story seem more realistic.
ok we shall see where this goes
ummm so suddenly twilight is a dude ?
ok now I am really confused
love this story but just one word GRAMMAR !!
but other than that very good story
Well it looks like a villain is now going to appear. I can't wait to see what happens next. Great job with this chapter.
Yeah!!! We got a wedding to plan now. This is going to be great.
THIS story is REALLY wonderful
Oh boy. We got Changlings in the house. I guess Discord isn't going to making the biggest blunder that the wedding.
Of course they would not check the guards.
... This is one of the reasons I hate women friends. They are creepy when it comes to romance.
Also, reread it, some stuff doesn't make sense and some spelling mistakes (Don't use auto-correct, its bad.)
What?
I feel an emphasis on responsibility in this story, perhaps a moral? Also, less spelling and gramma errors! *applause*
Oh boy. Now two stallions down. I hope Someone notices soon enough what is going on.
4506710 expect the unexpected, I sense some wedding crashers
*Sigh* lets hope that there is more behind this wedding, because I sense copy and paste of ideas, he's gonna lose anyway. It's in changeling blood.
This was awesome. Great job with this chapter. I enjoyed it. Now we need to know who are these two lords, and what is Twilight's and Blue's positions in their game.
4533463 The Lord of Order is the one who send Bloom, aka Cherry Blossom, to Equestria (see my story Bloom's New Life). He is the one who created all what is good and benign. The Lord of Chaos is the one who corrupt Sky when he came to Equestria to see Bloom (see my story Apple Wedding) and is the one who turn Fire Punch into a Changeling (see my story Fire Punch's Reborn). He created all what is evil and malignant.
Off to the next story. Great job with this one. Good luck.
hmmm.... this is good, but that does not appeal to me, moreover, have already a favorite ship
... with twilight 
... but it is a good story 
second book? please.... this was one of the most romantic fanfic ive ever read and its so sweat i allmost cried! please continu i will give you as much suport as needed this was apsalutly amazing!
Ridiculous. Why would Celestia send off a newly wed pony on a mission?
It makes absolutely no sense. If it was important, then Celestia must have been aware of it prior to wedding. She would have planned around having to dislodge somepony from their honeymoon. If it was urgent, then Celestia would have more then enough more suitable ponies to send. If it was both, she would`ve sent them both.
I added the image of Gleaming Shield. I hope you enjoy.
Huh... Didn't know you made a sequel... *reads description*
Greeeaaat... Good to see your grammar is as sterling as ever... And dat "Sex" tag...... Please tell me it's not going to be explicit... Or at least give a signal so I know when to turn my head.
Anyway, so I figured, since I reviewed one story, why not review the whole series? Yes, that means you'll have to deal with all three getting mercilessly ripped into.
You know the drill. If you can't remember, check my review style from your previous story.
And as for the grammar corrections, I'll just highlight the changes in the usual light blue.
Well, without any further delay: let's get started!
(Warning: The following reviews may contain sarcastic, serious, joking, thoughtful, or downright unnecessary commentary and/or flutter-censored swearing. Viewer discretion is advised.)
So we start this out at sunrise in the Crystal Empire. So this means we're in Season 3 and forward MLP. I wonder, does this have Alicorn Twilight in it?
Wow... While your grammar may be atrocious at times, your vocabulary is certainly the opposite, particularly in those color words. (I decided to try and use an online pony generator to get a whole visual of Blue Sword here using this paragraph for description, and I now realize...that's a lot of blue...)
We change scenes to Princess Cadence actually doing her job (other than saving the world).
Then Shining Armor comes in, looking rather exhausted. I wonder why?
I just said that! Oh, whatever....
So it seems that Shining Armor, while being Prince of the Crystal Empire, hasn't resigned as Captain of the Royal Guard in Canterlot.
Well, it is an improvement. I'd say getting a few hours to rest is better than going without any sleep at all------ Wait...so Blue Sword's been absent this whole time? *DING* Wait...*checks final chapter of previous story* Oooohh.... Blue Sword hadn't returned from his trip until today. speaking of which, where did he go?
So Cadence suggests he gets a right-hand pony to help him with his duties and...
Cliched response to a voice a character hasn't heard in so long.
So the three of them have a short moment of reunion and exposition.
To Shining: So does the audience. We don't know anything about that trip! What was it about?
To Blue: Oh. So this takes place after "Magical Mystery Cure." We're actually in Season 4.
And Blue Sword volunteers to be Shining's right-hoof pony, which - for some reason - Shining takes some convincing to accept.
You expected anything less?
So Shining goes to show Blue Sword around the Crystal Palace, leaving Cadence in the throne room.
Do what? Write to who? My guess: Twilight, but...I could be wrong.
Not a bad start to a sequel, but the grammar is still bad in several places. You need an editor.
So we find Twilight sleeping at her desk. (Exactly where is she, the library? Or her friendship castle from the end of "Twilight's Kingdom"?) And there's a lot of paperwork on said desk. Okay, my response to this will depend on where she's at because it will determine what time this takes place.
So Spike comes in and she wakes up rather abruptly...
Well, that's nothing new.
So Spike suggests she take a vacation from her "Princess Duties" - I'll get to that in a minute - when he receives a letter via the usual Dragon Fax Machine, and it's the letter Cadence wrote earlier.
Hello, plot convenience.
So Spike is all for her taking the vacation, but Twilight isn't so sure.
plot-hole mender: plot convenience; giving Twilight an excuse to want to take a break. But she would be just as eager to come to the Crystal Empire if she didn't have anything to do - in fact, she'd be even more enthusiastic to see her brother and sister-in-law with no overzealous-perfectionist-stuff holding her back.
I love how just about every fanfic that isn't centered around Spike conveniently keeps the little guy out of the main plot.
So Twilight goes to ask her friends if they want to come with her and...
Convenient! (Okay, since the Rainbow Dash letter coloring is light blue, I changed my editing color to purple for that segment alone.)
She finally has some luck with Rarity.
Yeah, so you can go all
over the Crystal Ponies. We all remember how you acted in the season 3 opener.
Alright, so all that leaves is---
Okay, because of the irony of that last statement, THAT was funny! (Humor: +1)
And Pinkie Pie says she'll go with Twilight to the Crystal Empire - perhaps the Cakes gave her the weekend off or something? I dunno... - Twilight returns to the library to write her letter to Cadence and then we skip ahead to Twilight ready to leave and being the bookworm worry wart we all know her to be.
Yeah, seriously, Twilight; you trust Spike, don't you? And besides, you're going to the Crystal Empire so you can unwind, so don't just wind yourself up so much before you go; it'll make it that much harder to calm down once you're there.
Twilight heads off to the train station to find Pinkie and Rarity already there, Rarity having only just arrived, and Pinkie....well....
Say what? You've been here since this morning? Okay, first off: it's an evening train. Secondly: What've you been eating? We all know you have an insatiable sweet tooth, Pinkie Pie! You can't go five minutes without eating some kind of sweet.
.......Of course......
............*groan*
Pinkie, Pinkie, Pinkie.........
Changing topic, Rarity is packing a surprisingly small amount of luggage. Why is that?
BS Detector!
So they board the train and are on their way to the Crystal Empire.
Things I want to say:
1 - I'm noticing an improvement in your grammar. (the errors are still there, though.)
2 - I wonder how the reunion is going to go? I hope Rarity doesn't start flirting with Blue Sword...... And how is Blue going to react to the randomness of Pinkie?
All things that will have to wait for the next chapter.
So the train arrives at the Crystal Empire.
Calm yourself, Rarity. We don't want another episode like---
...............No comment.
Then the three of them go over the times Twilight and Cadence tried to spend quality time and ended up doing other things...
"A Canterlot Wedding", "The Crystal Empire", "Equestrian Games"...
"Equestria Girls"...
and "Three's a Crowd."
Total number of Princess Cadence appearances before "Twilight's Kingdom": 4 Episodes and one Movie!
So they head to the Crystal Palace and learn from the guards that Shining Armor is overseeing in specting the guards at another location and Cadence is in the throne room dealing with affairs of ruling an empire.
BONK! She runs into a guard.
Convenient!
Then we have an awkward moment of reminiscing, reunion, and introduction. And I'm surprised Pinkie is being as cool as she does in this scene.
"If you are friends of Twilight, then it's no wonder you both radiate such beauty." Though, that is in question in terms of Pinkie Pie, with her I-have-no-idea-what-to-say-about-it mane.
"Gentlecolt"? More like a womanizer.
And, once again with the question: where the f
k did he travel to!?
.......
What made sense?
So Blue Sword takes his leave there, and Twilight is lost in thought.
Hello, Lady Obvious! (I'm referring to Pinkie Pie.)
So Rarity snaps Twilight out of her stupor, and Twilight heads out to the throne room.
You've been working on that metaphor just in case you came across a situation like this? How would you have known you'd have a situation like................. *holds hoof out dismissively* It's Pinkie Pie; don't question it.
So they follow Twilight into the throne room and we meet up with Cadence. And they.....
Okay, normally, I wouldn't mind a description of their movements in a situation like this, but in this particular case, I don't think it's really necessary.
*whispers* Cadence, I think she knows.
So Cadence tries to feign ignorance, but Twilight doesn't buy it.
Trying to trick Twilight? Not so much.
Uh, bullcrap! Sure, it's been a while, but what you felt for Blue Sword back then was more than just a filly's crush! You truly admired him. In fact, the only problem I see with this relationship is the age difference. Blue Sword is at least five years older than her, so that might make it a bit weird, but I've seen worst pairings than that.
Haha! Classic.
AHA! You admit it!
But Twilight doesn't think Blue feels the same way about her, and Rarity.....
To Rarity: ...................Uuuuuuuuuuuuhhhhhhhhhh
To Pinkie: *light smiles* I'm not questioning it; why should you?
And here we have the "Twilight tries to do things by herself" trope for MLP two-parters.
So she leaves and goes to her room, where she debates what to do next.
Mmmmm.....So, your reasoning for denial is fear that he won't feel the same way (which, you won't know until you try), and that your brother might not approve? (Also something that you won't know until you try.) It's impossible to deal with either of those issues without approaching the problem directly.
So, while Twilight is off pondering, Rarity and Pinkie are talking with Cadence.
Yeah, that would definitely leave an emotional scar.
...Uh, are you sure you've got your ponies right? I think Shining would be overjoyed to learn his little sister is taking a step out of her comfort zone. And seriously, would he really get that angry at his best friend liking his sister? (or, in this case, the other way around) I don't see anything wrong with it! Shining trusts Blue Sword wholeheartedly! What's there to worry about?
So they start forming a plan about how to get this relationship to work, starting with trying to get Twilight and Blue to admit their feelings.
You said it, Rarity.
Wait, what?
Secondly, if Blue doesn't feel anything for her, then he may outright say he hates her there!
And thirdly, there's the problem that you guys are interfering in a personal affair! Seriously, this is something you have to just let happen on its own! influencing emotions in this much of a direct manner can be disastrous! We've seen that happen in the Valentines Day episode, "Hearts and Hooves Day." As the moral of that story can be interpreted:
"SHIPPERS DESTROY LIVES!!!
Actually, "Mysterious" means that hardly anything is known about it. Rarity, you fail.
And it just so happens that there's an entire book about this place. Convenient!
Cadence takes them to her study and removes the book from the bookshelf. And Rarity seems more interested in the material the cover is made of. Somepony needs to get their priorities straightened out.
In this case, that can end either really good, or really bad. For reasons, see my aforementioned rant above.
So they come up with a plan on how to get the two of them to the Oasis. Yeah, Twilight'll be a piece of cake; she'll be more than eager to explore a new place.
So Cadence says that getting Blue there'll be easy as well.
Oh, I get it! With Blue Sword out there on patrol in the arctic, he could happen upon the Oasis on his own - or with some prodding.
So they set off to get the two love ponies in place, and then we flash to Twilight, who is walking through the castle trying to avoid Blue Sword. Luckily she makes it outside without a hitch and goes to the gardens, where Shining Armor is inspecting the Guard. When he's done, the two embrace in a hug.
Wow......does Shining not know about Twilight's affection towards Blue Sword? Man, he's clueless.
So they have a few exchanges before Shining has to take off to do his other duties.
4344473 The first sentence of your comment just about sums up my feelings of the situation right now. Twilight, just talk to Blue Sword about it! And if he does in fact feel the same way, then bring it up with Shining Armor and check for his approval! Both of which, I am confident will happen! Seriously, Twilight; you're acting irrationally. AGAIN!!!
So we open up with Twilight strolling through the castle when she's stopped by Rarity and Pinkie Pie.
being a bit gruff there, aren't you, Twilight?
So the girls Pinkie Promise not to talk about Blue Sword and then set their plan into motion. They tell her about the Oasis of the Heart, (they kinda left out the part about the place amplifying the inhabitant's emotions) and Twilight seems interested.
And why is that? She has to get her beauty sleep.
Oy-vey...
.........Not your most persuasive argument, Pinkie. If it was me you were trying to convince, I'd call shenanigans on you immediately.
And Twilight is thinking the same thing, but decides to go to the Oasis herself.
I still disapprove of this plan. What they needed to do was convince her to tell Blue Sword and go for it. The worst that could happen is Blue Sword says no. But in this place, the results will most definitely be good or bad in the EXTREME! Blue says yes, they're DEFINITELY gonna tie the knot; Blue says no, they hate each other for life! Sheesh! Think ahead, girls!
So we change scenes to Cadence going to Shining's office and finds him practically buried under piles of paperwork. Sheesh...I knew being top dog had its troubles, but I never thought they could be this bad...
Y'know, I'm noticing Shining addresses Cadence as "my love" quite a lot. Don't you think you're overusing it? Sometimes it's okay to just call her by her name, you know.
So Shining is overworking himself because he's stressed out about these Changeling sightings. Yeah, after what happened to his grandfather and at the wedding, I wouldn't blame him.
Then Cadence puts her part of "Operation: Twilight+Blue Sword" into motion and suggests to Shining that Blue be put on the patrols.
Yeah, Blue Sword does seem kind of like the type of pony who likes to be where it's happening instead of waiting on the sidelines.
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Nice save there, Cadence.
So we skip ahead to the dinner they were talking about, and it goes smoothly.
No comment.
So Twilight then gets up to go on a walk, and shoots down Shining's plea that she stay where its safe. Seriously, Shining; your sister's a fricking Alicorn now; I think she can handle a changeling or two if she encounters them.
Overprotective siblings. *sigh*....You wanna slap them, but you can't help but love them.
So it's sunset right now, and Twilight heads out in search of the Oasis of the Heart.
BOOM! Common headcanon that has been shot out of the sky by the season 4 episode "Daring Don't." Though, if I had known that Twilight's mom was a writer when I was introduced to the Daring Doo books, I would have thought the same thing.
Ah. So that's how the Oasis attracts ponies; it works kind of like the love potion from Harry Potter - that being it gives off the scent of whatever the pony is most attracted to..... Wait, what?
So the mixes scents make her move in the snow, like some kind of mind control spell, and then we flash to Blue Sword out on his patrol.
Well, then I'm going to guess that you're less than enthusiastic to return to Canterlot, since becoming Captain is exactly what's gonna happen when you do.
Blue comes across some hoof tracks in the ground, which could be Changelings, but I think we all know whose those were. Especially since Blue then picks up a scent that is very enticing to him.
Alright. The board is set, and the pieces are moving. (bad Lord of the Rings reference)
So Twilight arrives at the Oasis and.....
So Twilight looks around and comes to the center of the Oasis, where she finds a massive tree on an island surrounded by an even more massive lake.
Okay, how many times are those two going to just bump into one another?
So now we - the audience - know for sure that Blue Sword does in fact have feelings for Twilight. The love is mutual! That, or it's just the Oasis talking. Now all they need to do is confess, tell Shining, and hope for the best! And...I think there's call for new background music.
Convenient!
.......................I have no way to retort for that. he has a very good point there.
So they hop across the rocks and get to the island, with Twilight almost falling in when she gets to the end. Luckily, Blue's there to catch her, and they almost kiss. (Note that I said "almost.")
Then the massive tree takes their interest.
Then an earthquake goes off and.....wait---earthquake----What? Where'd that come from? What caused it?
Plot convenience!!!
......Y'know, that's a lousy excuse.
So an earthquake goes off, and the two fall over, and land on top of each other. Convenient!
I believe Twilight now has her "Special Somepony."
Oh, COME ON, Twilight! Come the freak on! You know you love him, and now you know he loves you! So, what's wrong with that!? And don't pull the whole "Shining won't approve" excuse, because I think that he'd be overjoyed to learn that his introverted bookworm of a sister has a coltfriend!
THANK you, Blue Sword. Though, normally that's Spike's job to reel Twilight in when she's going insane.
(insert this sound effect here)
There. Now you two can go talk to Shining about it, and we can move on to the next issue-----
..............I spoke too soon....AGAIN!!!
So Twilight leaves Blue Sword in the Oasis and flies out, now in denial of her own feelings.
Okay, the only real effects I can see of the Oasis is that the beautiful setting is just like any other romantic place where these awkward moments happen so often in fiction. So, really, the only magical thing about it is how it's able to keep the cold out.
Well, that and attract ponies to the paradise in the first place, but that's besides the point.
(To that initial note: So, let me guess: This is going to be like the "Love at First Sight" chapters from "Life of a Young Colt", that being that this chapter will be focusing on Twilight and the next (part 2) will focus on Blue Sword?)
So Twilight returns to the palace and runs inside as fast as she can, completely bypassing Shining Armor and Cadence along the way.
But you're gonna go check on her, right?
Yeah, except for the, you know, two years straight where you never saw her or knew anything about her friends? Sheesh...
First off, she has a point there; not everything we want to discuss with our siblings, especially if it's a girl who has problems and she has a brother, and often it's best to have another female to talk to about them. But that doesn't stop older brothers from being overprotective and wanting to know exactly what's going on. Speaking of which....
Secondly, he's a guy, Cadence! He doesn't exactly get these "issues" you're talking about. He never had to go through those kinds of issues when you two were just falling in love.
And, by not giving him a minor explanation about girls only wanting to talk to other girls about their problems, you have given Shining the drive to discover what's going on by himself. And when he finds out on his own, it's going to blow up in your faces. Nice going, Cadence. Little mistakes like this can often lead to these kinds of results:
It ain't pretty, is it?
So Twilight rushes to her room and slams the door. Loud enough for Rarity and Pinkie Pie to hear in Rarity's room (This can be taken so many wrong ways by about half this fandom...)
*about to respond*
..............Yeah, what she said.
Then Cadence comes along.
Okay, I'm not even going to bother with Pinkie here...
So they manage to refocus Pinkie and go to Twilight's room.
That last bit made no sense.....you might try "turning to face Cadence"?
So Twilight describes what happened in the Oasis, from the beauty of the scenery to the kiss.
And I still don't see what you find wrong with that, Twilight! Seriously, honey, what's wrong with all this?
So you're worried that he's lying through his teeth and is just trying to not hurt your feelings? *shakes head* Whatever....
Cadence then reveals the Oasis's powers to amplify emotions and - upon Twilight realizing something - also admits to their involvement in setting up the meeting.
No. Weren't you listening? Everything that you felt in there was your own emotions; just the Oasis was amplifying them!
And, following that logic, that means that Blue Sword has feelings for you as well. That shoots down one of your worries.
I just said that! Oh, whatever....
So Twilight says she needs more time to think on this, and they leave her to it.
Okay, this is falling under my "Twilight's Stubborn Moments" list.
So we open this up with Blue Sword slowly making his way back to the Empire while having an internal debate with himself.
......Okay, now that I think about it, Shining's foul mood coupled with the threat of Changelings would definitely alter his view on their potential relationship. And, another point I just thought of, I'm going to speculate that a Changeling is going to impersonate Blue Sword later. Just a guess.
So Blue gets back to the castle and runs into Shining Armor.
Yeah, if I didn't know any better, I'd be suspecting him of being a changeling that didn't do his homework on Blue Sword.
Yeah; it's called "emotional denial."
So he DOES understand that it's one of those girl talks. But he's still poking his nose in there anyway. This can only end so well...
So Blue goes to Twilight's room and runs into Cadence along the way.
More often than not, time is the best medicine for this kind of thing.
So Blue agrees to give Twilight her space for now and heads off.
Well, she is the Princess of Love. And she's married to your best friend, with the two of them having gone through the exact same feeling you just described.
So Blue Sword just smiles and says he needs time for this to sink in as well and walks off.
Y'know, I think Cadence got off easy with her meddling in these personal affairs. But I guess not everypony thinks the way I do. Oh well.