She had left, and with her, so had her happiness. Only two days have passed since her special filly has left, Sweetie, but the pain has already overwhelmed Scootaloo, she's angry, she's bitter, she's sad, she's hurt, and now she might do something drastic, something that may hurt her, and everyone who cares for her.
Contains (possible) self hurt, and a depressed filly, if angst is not to your liking, then I suggest you either give it a try (if you want to) or leave.
I'd appreciate if you'd explain your thumbs down, even if it's just a "I didn't like the theme", you don't have to, of course, but it would help me a ton on plotting out my next story!
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A few typos and some things could be smoothed out and better phrased, but overall a decent little sad fic. Though I am biased by my enjoyment of sad Scootaloo stories.
I must say, and this may make me a very bad pony, that I was hoping she'd go through with it. I'd have loved to have seen Sweetie's reaction.
Couple of spelling and grammar issues, but a very good, touching and heartbreaking story. Could really relate to Scootaloo's pain.
This is a little hard to follow, some of it is speeling and grammar some of it is formating. Maybe find an editor willing to work with you a bit.
Good message at the end even if it felt a bit rushed.
I'll echo a few of the other comments here. It was a pretty decent moral and worthy topic that is totally worth writing about. However, it is too short to experience more than a mere glimpse of its true potential. There were some spelling and grammar issues. The one I remember most poignantly off the top of my head would be the use of the word "trough" instead of "through".
Thanks for writing,
~SilentBelle
i just dont like gay stories
Speaking from experience I certainly was not thinking about the others I might have hurt in the moment. Dealing with the clean up after an attempt would definitely make you not want to try again. The problem is the desire never goes away. Surviving 2 attempts I can say that through them I am definitely a stronger person. I do not let my desire have any power. I accept that the desire exists but I do not have to act on it. I've taken to redirecting the energy to exercise and reading fimfiction. :twilightsmile
If anybody needs someone to talk to feel free to PM and for the love of Celestia get some help if you think you might hurt yourself.