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    Daniel threw Agrippa's head through the portal, and was killed by the shadow. Daniel was dead, but he could hear very femiliar voices.

    "You can help him, I know you can"  Agrippa's voice echoed.

    "I can bring him back to life, but not on Earth" Another voice said.

    "Where will he go then?" Agrippa said.

    "I know a place..."

    First Published
    2nd Apr 2012
    Last Modified
    30th Mar 2013

    Comments ( 106 )

    #1 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Someone's already done this, but i'll give it a go.

    edit: ehh, not gonna track. nearly everyone is OOC especially daniel, spellig/grammar errors, idea done before... i'll leave this one out.

    #2 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Amnesia crossover?

    You have my attention.:pinkiehappy:

    #3 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    #4 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    More.

    Please.

    #5 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    would have opened a little smoother if it waa based off of the second ending you could get when he wakes up and agripa says: it'll be alright" as daniel walks into the light. not bad though:twilightblush:

    #6 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    ...did he just pass out from low sanity?

    Nice attention to detail.

    Although you're using "Daniel'' too much.

    #7 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Could be smoother of course but its still better than anything I could do.

    4/5

    #9 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Aw, you did not just do this. *Sigh* well you did post this before me so I guess you have the rights to it. I'm just going to have to delete my hard work on Ponysia. :raritycry:

    #10 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>400905 What? Dude, no reason to. There's no such thing as notability, and your story may very well be better than this.

    Please, do post.

    #11 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    :pinkiegasp: Immediately sir. That is when I get finished with what I'm doing right now *don't ask* :pinkiecrazy:

    #12 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    wow

    :facehoof:

    #13 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>400717 It is baced off that ending.

    #14 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    The insanity faint there at the very end was a pretty nice touch. Cautiously tracking...

    #15 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Tracking.

    Now, if you don't add Pony Grunt's and Brute's into this story, I'll slap you in the face.

    #16 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Not to rain on your parade, but didnt I release an Amnesia story like, this morning?

    #17 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    For the love of god, more please.

    #18 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>401418 Hold on, i'll check.......I don't SEE anything...oh Wait, My laptops just being stupid. I found an amnesia story by Sorren. aka you.....Great. now I gotta read both!

    #20 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    oh, sorry. I probably just got a bit confused with the details. i was kinda still freaking out at the end of the game so its a little fuzzy.

    #21 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    No freakin' way!

    My name is Daniel, too!

    And you just made a crossover of Amnesia: The Dark Descent, Finally! My prayers have been answered!

    Thank you so much for making an awesome story like this. I'm already intrigued for a next chapter.

    Keep on going:twilightsmile:. And fix some errors too.:trixieshiftleft:

    #22 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 3h ago · · ·
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    I like this store keep it comeing:moustache:

    #23 · Chapter 1 · 59w, 1h ago · · ·
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    More please.

    #24 · Chapter 1 · 58w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Oh no... Daniel's goin' insane! Again!

    Anyways; normally I tend to ignore spelling/grammar errors if the story is interesting and the plot catches my curiosity. This is one such story. The fact that you include Daniel being traumatized by the events that occured at Brennenburg is simply brilliant, not to mention the teeth chatting and the high pitched sound whenever he goes insane. Despite some grammatical errors and "squeezed" sentences the story was good overall but you would do well by getting an editor.

    Hope to see more soon. Faved/liked.

    #25 · Chapter 1 · 58w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>403791

    Well Daniel, as apparently that is your name, I seem to find you wherever the hell I go on this treasure-filled labyrinth of a website.

    And to>>401126, I am open to be a proofreader, as there are a few gramatical and spelling errors.

    #26 · Chapter 1 · 58w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>421111 Sure. Just one question though. I'm still sorta new to fimfiction, how are you supposed to get the chapter before I post it?

    #27 · Chapter 2 · 58w, 4d ago · · ·
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    A little short but I like it.

    #28 · Chapter 2 · 58w, 4d ago · · ·
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    "Dude are you ready for this? It's a little short though."

    "Short? Short...Doesn't even! FUCKING! DESCRIBE IT!"

    Stay frosty!

    ~Hazard~

    #29 · Chapter 2 · 58w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Yes, it is indeed a little short, but I can appreciate it. (So long as there is more coming soon!)

    >>422246

    Awesome Reach! :D

    #30 · Chapter 2 · 58w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>421870

    Hmmm... I have been looking for the View Password function for stories, and I'm not quite sure where it is. Most people I preread for just copy and paste the story into a PM, though that's tricky.

    #31 · Chapter 2 · 58w, 3d ago · · ·
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    So... Fucking... SHORT.....

    #32 · Chapter 2 · 58w, 3d ago · · ·
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    uhhh wow.  That IS short.  Maybe when it comes time to post again rather than make a third chapter you can just add it to this one?

    #33 · Chapter 2 · 58w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>423081 Next chapter will be longer

    #34 · Chapter 2 · 58w, 3d ago · · ·
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    You sure know how to keep a reader in suspense. :applejackunsure:

    #35 · Chapter 3 · 58w, 3d ago · · ·
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    NEXT chapter will be longer, i pinkie promise

    #36 · Chapter 3 · 58w, 3d ago · · ·
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    So the Brute got into Equestria too somehow?

    Oh my.... This isn't good.. This isn't good at all! :pinkiegasp:

    Btw, "bravest of all ponies, and Chuck Norris combined!"...? Come on...

    #37 · Chapter 3 · 58w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>423931 Just a TINY dash of humor :heart:

    #38 · Chapter 3 · 58w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>423959

    Oh well... :derpytongue2:

    Anyways; I'm confused... Is Daniel in Fluttershy's house now? Was the growl Daniel heard the Brute? And most importantly; How did the Brute end up there?! :rainbowhuh:

    #39 · Chapter 3 · 58w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Find a closet, Daniel, QUICKLY!!

    It also may be a good idea to find out how exactly ponies light and carry lanterns.

    #40 · Chapter 3 · 58w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>423985 The chapter is called DANIEL'S NIGHTMARE! He was dreaming. :ajbemused:,and I can't tell you how the brute got there... Yet...

    #41 · Chapter 3 · 58w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>424036 In my mlp universe, all types of ponies have just enough magic in their hooves, to grip things.

    #43 · Chapter 2 · 57w, 6d ago · · ·
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    timor umbras. this guy has it

    #44 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 2d ago · · ·
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    I would think Daniel would have some more mental issues from what he had gone through. Might want to add that. Anyway, Its an average fic and I will continue reading it. Can't wait till he explains bits of his past to them.

    #45 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>657962 He'll continue to see stuff that isn't there, and start going insane in the dark.

    #46 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 2d ago · · ·
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    excellent work my good man please continue with this story posthaste

      

    #47 · Chapter 1 · 51w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>400905 (late reply)  You should still do it. There's a 4/5 chance that yours will be better than mine:heart:

    #48 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Yay new chapter! NOW WRITE MORE!:flutterrage:

    #49 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Daniel appears to be a bit out of character for my liking... :trixieshiftleft:

    #50 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>658417 I'll try to be more "in character" for daniel from now on. :twilightblush:

    #51 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>658533

    Oh, and remember how Daniel couldn't pick up stuff to use as weapons during the game? Make him unfamiliar with stuff he should normally be.

    #52 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Yes! Finally!:pinkiehappy:

    New chapter, and I liked it.

    Although it has some errors that need to be proofread. Can you fix them if you don't mind?

    You have tried your best, anyway. I will see you in the next chapter.:twilightsmile:

    P.S. The funny thing about this story is that MY name is Daniel, too.:twilightsheepish:

    #53 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>658593

    Oh hey, Craterfist! You read this story, too? Cool!:pinkiehappy:

    #54 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>658593 Like freak out, and hide when he first sees Twilight use her magika?

    #55 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Daniel is going to get all the bitches.

    #56 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 2d ago · · ·
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    #57 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>658989

    Well that, but you know how Daniel basically has amnesia and doesn't know how to use objects to fend off the monsters? Stuff like that. Make it hard for him to use devices and such.

    #58 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 2d ago · · ·
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    #59 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Daniel suffers from Nyctophobia (fear of the dark) so you may want to remember that. Also, he has high problem solving skills and extremely high intuition, considering the course of events in the original game.

    Also I have a suggestion for the next chapter:

    Daniel: The Pimp Daddy.

    #60 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 2d ago · · ·
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    #61 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 1d ago · · ·
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    obvious foreshadow is obvious

    #62 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 1d ago · · ·
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    #63 · Chapter 5 · 51w, 1d ago · · ·
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    :rainbowlaugh:

    #64 · Chapter 5 · 51w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Oh Danny, I can't think of him as Daniel now.:rainbowlaugh:

    #65 · Chapter 5 · 51w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Oh crap. I do not think its wise to frighten a man who has been through all that. Is waiting for the next chapter with anticipation.

    #66 · Chapter 5 · 51w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>401364 alittle too late to say this but I DID IT!

    #67 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>Juggernaut even though it is good you are making clear he has very good hearing, you might want to take out where Twilight and Rainbow say "come on in Fluttershy."

    #68 · Chapter 5 · 51w, 1d ago · · ·
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    it looks like you said he had good hearing then imidiatly through it out the window :facehoof:

    (he couldn't hear what Rarity was mumbling)

    #69 · Chapter 5 · 51w, 22h ago · · ·
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    >>665788 He heard it, and it was applejack who was mumbling. I just chose not to write what she mumbled. As it included vulgar cussing.

    #70 · Chapter 5 · 51w, 20h ago · · ·
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    >>665488

    Ummmm.... Should he explain his rather traumatic and maddening time in the castle now, or later?

    #71 · Chapter 4 · 51w, 20h ago · · ·
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    >>658015well, he actually is already insane, and is always insane, he just gets more insane in the dark.

    #72 · Chapter 5 · 51w, 3h ago · · ·
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    >>667377 I don't think daniel would be too keen to tell the mane six about killing inocents, thinking they were criminals.

    #73 · Chapter 5 · 51w, 2h ago · · ·
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    oh Daniel :facehoof: flipped out

    #74 · Chapter 5 · 51w, 53m ago · · ·
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    >>670289

    Well, he's going to have to tell them sooner or later. I'm sure they would get him help for his insanity.

    #75 · Chapter 5 · 50w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>671192 All in due time Craterfish, all in due time... *Evil laugh*

    #76 · Chapter 5 · 50w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>676252

    *Joins in evil laugh for the hell of it*

    #77 · Chapter 5 · 50w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Poor Daniel. I can imagine the high pitched sound playing now.

    #78 · Chapter 5 · 49w, 2d ago · · ·
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    I am awaiting the next addition to this story and I shall watch over this website until it comes out so you better not disappoint us my friend.

    #79 · Chapter 5 · 49w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I used to think he was brave for going through amnesia, but after reading this story, I realize he was just fucking lucky.:rainbowlaugh:

    #80 · Chapter 1 · 48w, 5d ago · · ·
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    "It's okay, we're not going to hurt you" It said.

    Sanity:Head is pouding and hooves are shaking.

    Daniel slowly opened his eyes to see he was surrounded by other ponies. He looked around his pupils were shrunk, and he was chattering his teeth.

    Sanity:...

    His hearing started to go away, replaced by a very high pitched sound. He then collapsed on to the ground.

    Sanity:Insane

    #81 · Chapter 5 · 48w, 5d ago · · ·
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    "Go in first." Twilight said, grinning. Daniel mentaly shrugged, and opened the door.

    Sanity : Crystal Clear.

    WARNING:Witnessing unsettling events will reduce your sanity. Recover it by talking with ponies and outrunning monsters, and solving puzzles.

    "SUPRISE!"

    Sanity:...

    "ARGHHHHEA!"

    #82 · Chapter 5 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    *Cough* *Cough* Hey Author, when is this dusty old story getting updated?!

    #83 · Chapter 5 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>795513 don't rush me, check out my new story.

    #84 · Chapter 5 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>753383 I wouldn't mind if you did that for every chapter! :rainbowlaugh:

    #85 · Chapter 5 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Give me more comments, I feed off of your hate :rainbowlaugh:

    #86 · Chapter 6 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Good chapter, but it's too short though.

    I hope you can make a long one next time, just try your best, man.

    Also, try to stay along Daniel's story too. See you later.:raritywink:

    #87 · Chapter 6 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    ...Good but may we have longer chapters?

    #88 · Chapter 6 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>796337 A friend at school who's a pegasister called me juggernaut all day. I'm wondering how she found out I had a Fimfiction account, and how she found out which one I was me?

    Juggs out.

    #89 · Chapter 6 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>796410

    "Daniel jumped into a nearby bush."

    Sanity: Dangerously Low

    "He tapped his hoof to the unknown music."

    Sanity: A slight headache.

    Warning: Witnessing unsettling events will lower your sanity.

    Sanity can be restored by talking with other ponies, solving puzzles, sleeping, and listening to music.

    #90 · Chapter 6 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    #91 · Chapter 6 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Sanity : A slight headache."Ummm, my name is Daniel..." He raised a hoof, and waved it slightly. Suddenly, Pinkie popped right out of a picnic basket, suprising several ponies.

    Sanity : ...

    #92 · Chapter 6 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Sanity : A slight headache.

    "Ummm, my name is Daniel..."

    He raised a hoof, and waved it slightly. Suddenly, Pinkie popped right out of a picnic basket, suprising several ponies.

    Sanity : ...




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    #93 · Chapter 6 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>799087 Nice...

    #94 · Chapter 1 · 47w, 3d ago · · ·
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    What is up with everyone randomly getting teleported to equestria? AND I'M NOT INVITED!!! :flutterrage:

    #95 · Chapter 7 · 41w, 16h ago · · ·
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    WHAT A TWIST! and...More Hiatus....What....The.....Fuck....

    #96 · Chapter 7 · 41w, 14h ago · · ·
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    this is as short as me on a cold morning :twilightangry2:

    SHIT! :pinkiegasp:

    I-I mean.....

    oh who am i kidding :pinkiesad2:

    #97 · Chapter 7 · 41w, 11h ago · · ·
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    #98 · Chapter 7 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>1050553 Nah, All we did was go to some crappy forest, where some historical shit happened. I got back about an hour ago.

    #99 · Chapter 7 · 40w, 6d ago · · ·
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