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Aquaman

Joined July 2011
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Destroyer of worlds, consumer of libations, scribe of technicolor horsefictions. Mostly, all three at the same time.

Stories (13)

  • Far From The Tree
    After stumbling upon Apple Bloom in a compromising position with a colt, Applejack comes to terms with her little sister growing up and wonders what role she's meant to play in her life. Written for "The Most Dangerous Game" contest.

    10,457 words · 3,354 views · 441 likes · 5 dislikes
  • It Only Hurts When I'm Sober
    Of three things Octavia was absolutely certain. One: she liked stallions. Two: her conductor expected grace and perfection from all her players. And three: the fact that she just had drunken sex with Vinyl Scratch didn't match up with EITHER.
    8,382 words · 4,585 views · 275 likes · 6 dislikes
  • Harmony
    An adaptation of BioShock for the world of MLP, starring several OCs and the entire Mane cast.
    103,530 words · 9,261 views · 795 likes · 27 dislikes
  • In Tooth And Mane
    The twelve super-powered members of the Zodiac have their work cut out for them when a immensely powerful enemy threatens to destroy not only the newly formed nation of Equestria, but the bonds they share with each other as well.
    17,178 words · 2,293 views · 198 likes · 4 dislikes
  • Sky Pirates of Equestria: Phoenix Flight
    16,706 words · 1,733 views · 168 likes · 3 dislikes
  • Loop
    13,715 words · 919 views · 79 likes · 2 dislikes
  • NIGEB
    9,777 words · 2,471 views · 131 likes · 7 dislikes
  • Diamond Tiara Hunts Down And Systematically Murders Bad OCs
    7,010 words · 5,646 views · 512 likes · 44 dislikes
  • Detachable
    5,220 words · 1,578 views · 84 likes · 9 dislikes
  • Breaking Bricks
    41,116 words · 1,276 views · 42 likes · 3 dislikes
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When Ruby boards the first trans-oceanic flight in Equestrian history, the last place she expects to end up is stranded in the middle of Eternity's Crossing in the wake of a horrific zeppelin crash.  After a mysterious tower leads her and a fellow survivor to discover a twisted and fragmented city twenty thousand feet below the surface of the ocean, though, a bit of fire and smoke is the last thing she needs to worry about.  Between the horrendously disfigured residents and the paranoia of the madmare who once built and controlled it, daily survival in this corrupted utopia is anything but a guarantee.  But with the help of some new friends and a few genetic enhancements, Ruby isn't going down without a fight, and in the process might just discover that the deadliest weapon in Harmony is herself.

An adaptation of BioShock for the world of MLP.  Written to be comprehensible to anyone, regardless of whether they've played the original game.

First Published
31st Mar 2012
Last Modified
12th Aug 2013

Comments ( 605 )

Alexstrazsa
Moderator
#1 · Chapter 1 · 121w, 4d ago · 13 · ·

I've been waiting all my life for this moment, and I ain't gonna let it slip by. If it's the last thing I do, I'm going to read the fuck out of this fanfic.

#2 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 4d ago · · ·

THIS NEEDED TO HAPPEN! I AM GOING TO READ AND RE-READ EVERYWORD OF THIS!

Please continue this  as I am going love this shit forever.

Edit: I just read the chapters, and everything fits perfectly well. Nothing much of errors, easily understood, perfect description and characterization. Wall of text is easy to read with paragraphs but that's just me talking. Honestly, you deserve a fave ( and a track but FIM FIC changed)

I expect lots of this story to chill me to the bone and make me want to read on further. If this is anything like FO:E I would save this forever and consider posting it to EQD, I wish you well sir. Ha! I can never write anything like this, I am more of the comedic type but I do enjoy the extensive plot and various twists and surprises.

Keep on the good work, I am rooting for ya!

#3 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 4d ago · · ·

Your grammar is great! The details of the story are equally good and balanced; not purple, but not flat either.

Characterization is great and I also loved the backstory you gave before starting the "real" story started proper.

This is definitely worthy of a track and a fav. But I must also voice some concerns; I sincerely hope you aren't just copying the game into p0ni version. I hope you're creating a new universe, like Fo:E did. If you are, I can expect great things coming from this story. You also win bonus points for the Atlas Shrugged reference. A great book.

Not to mention that the chapters are perfect in length.

I would suggest you send this to EqD ASAP.

Please, this is a personal appeal; don't disappoint us.

Just some hints:

* Hit up the Return Key twice when you end a paragraph. Goes easier on the eyes.

* When dealing with guns, remember reloading time, number of shots inside of the gun and whatnot.

Oh who am I kidding? You're clearly a pro writer.

You earned my track and fav with just one chapter. Congratulations.

PS: Do you plan on making a ".pdf" downloadable version of this story once its finished? Like Fallout: Equestria and Past Sins? I would love to have this on my computer.

#4 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 4d ago · · ·

Holy shit... This is totaly fucking brilliant.

>>388710 I think you're right. We could certianly be seeing the creation of a new  fan-made universe here, just like Fo:E.

#5 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 4d ago · · ·

Infact, I'm going to add this story to the writing gold group right now. Because words cannot describe how fucking awsome this story is.

#6 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 4d ago · · ·

yes

#7 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 4d ago · · ·

I can't even explain how awesome this is. :pinkiehappy:

#8 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 4d ago · · ·

>>388710

To answer your underlined question: the absolute last thing I want to do is just copy the game into a pony universe.  I have way too much respect for both BioShock and MLP to do that.  The usage of the word "adaptation" to describe this, however, is still accurate; this story will follow the same general narrative structure as BioShock, except with an entirely different backstory, dramatic differences in how the stand-ins for the bigshot BioShock characters behave, and a lot of changes in how the plot gets where it's going.  So yes, someone who's already played BioShock would probably already know where the story's headed; what happens when it gets there, though, will not be at all like what happened in the game.  Matter of fact, I'm hoping what happens at that point will come off as just as big a twist as what happened in the real game.

tl;dr the proverbial points A, B, and C of BioShock will still be there, but everything else will be entirely different, including most of the details about those points.

#9 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 4d ago · · ·

Yeah, it's pretty good.

#10 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 4d ago · · ·

>>389487 WELL, YOU SHOULD KNOW.

#11 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 4d ago · · ·

Hooked for being big Bioshock fan and honestly amazed at the quality. Keep up and remember to include the plasmids and tonics realistic way as unicorns can already do magic.

#12 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 4d ago · · ·

I only had enough time to red one chapter before work.:fluttercry:

This is going to be the longest five hours of my life.

Alexstrazsa
Moderator
#13 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 4d ago · · ·

Well this is basically everything I've ever hoped and dreamed.

#14 · Chapter 1 · 121w, 4d ago · · ·

This is pretty amazing. Not gonna lie, I giggled like a school filly, out loud, very audibly, when Pinkie suggested "'Vigor'ous"

Really hyped for Bioshock: Infinite, played through the original Bioshock 4 times all the way and ALMOST have platinum and have become so obsessed with the world and fiction of Rapture my ex-girlfriend and I even started a roleplay. I'm not going to get into that, infact I probably should not have ever mentioned it, but it should make my point across that I'm very experienced with the world of Rapture. And enough gushing, onto to the fic itself.

The pacing and grammar are all perfect so far as I can see so there's not much I can say on that end. After a while I forgot it was a crossover fic and became absorbed within the story itself which is a very good thing when you're writing to include anyone who hasn't played the games yet.

One thing, why did you decide to immediately open with the creation of Rapture/Harmony, rather than gradually revealing the history along side your protagonist like in the games and another crossover fic; Fallout: Equestria?

Here's hoping you stay true to this and, if im not putting too much pressure on you, it hits the same critical mass as FO:E.

A man chooses, a slave obeys...

#15 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 4d ago · · ·

Would you kindly continue this masterpiece? :rainbowlaugh:

#16 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

The now loading this was a nice touch. So many references that I actually get I can't contain my fangasms. They are also quite audible.

Took me a while to remember you'r behind Breaking Bricks as well. There's something similar but somehow very different between writing in both fics that I cant seem to place a finger on...

I had some long drawnout explinations for shit on this chapter but im lazy and I want to read more. Most of it was just going on about how great [read: FUCKING AWESOME] it is so far and hew well thought out the prose goes without getting too purple, so yeah.

Fav part other then the loading paragraph? The background story you gave to the line "You were destined for great things." Got me teary eyed you son of a bitch...

#17 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

No "Everything flows into Harmony" sign guiding them in?

Avi
#18 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

Great job so far, love the characterization of the main character and the grumpy stallion. Looking forward to more chapters.

#19 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

They told me...

Son, everything good in the world is worth waiting for.

And you know what?

They were right.

#20 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

SHUT UP AND TAKE MY MONEY.

#21 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

YES! A BIOSHOCK CROSS-OVER! Why has no-one done this before?

#22 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

And I'll just move this over there aannndddddd, Haza.  Now I won't forget to read it later.  I was wondering when someone was going to come along and write a Bioshock crossover.

#23 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

I got here from EQD. The pre-reader's actually gave it one of those "critic's quote" things. I've never seen them do that. I might be looking at the next Fallout:Equestria here!

#24 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

I can honestly and truthfully say, this will be greater that Fallout: Equestria. You are a true talent and we are all going to benefit from your skill. I look forward to the later chapters. :eeyup:

#25 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

It's so beautiful :pinkiesad2:

#26 · Chapter 1 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

great story, can't wait to read it all.

#27 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

this is one of those stories where I start reading, and find out I just spent almost half an hour doing so when I suddenly run into the end. Good job, and I would like to see more.

#28 · Chapter 1 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

Why do you keep switching between the names? If you're going to basically use the beta names for the main six then you could at least not keep switching between them, like Firefly/Rainbow Dash. If this is explained later on and is part of the story, feel free to insult me.

#29 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·
#30 · Chapter 1 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

I'm starting to suspect the name thing was an April Fools joke misapplied.

#31 · Chapter 1 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

ah, that makes more sense. now i just feel silly.

#32 · Chapter 1 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

rainbowdash fluttershy pinkiepie hehe this is fun:rainbowlaugh:

#33 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

ASDFSDFSDDSFGEGREGAFESFSFASDFDSFSD FSDP

;FN

KIH

BNIKNHBFJOMDSHLKND;OFN

HOW DO I EXPLAIN MYSELf?!:flutterrage:

#34 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

Your descriptive skill is, well... It's like the Magnum Opus of writing, truly. The way you described the city of Harmony was just perfect. I'm not going to say "I can almost see it" because I already can see it.

#35 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

Star 6 on EQD FTW

#36 · Chapter 1 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

>>392796 Oh, wow, the names actually are changed.  That's kind of hilarious, actually. :rainbowlaugh:

If it bugs you, there's a button at the very bottom of the page that says something like "Toggle G1 Mode".  Hitting that should make everything go back to normal.  Worked for me, in any case.

#37 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

>>391681>>391842

There are five more on this sight. It's just none of them are this...

Awesome? No, to tame.

Astounding? Not even close.

Fanfuckingtastic? Closer but no...

Supercala...not even going to go there.

Goddammit. Some one needs to invent new words to describe how great this is.

#39 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

This is amazing. As a long time bioshock fan from the day bio 1 came out i can't wait to read this fic. The one thing i really would like to see is "would you kindly?" put in there or at least something in it's place.

#40 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

I haven't played Bioshock all the way through yet, but from what I've seen so far the only member of the Main six I can truly see going completely insane in a Bioshock manner is (Oddly enough) Rarity.

Honestly, who else can see Rarity becoming the pony version of Dr Steinman?

#41 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

The banner changes to this story's picture?

Something tells me this is going to get wildly popular....

#42 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

This has already been done, twice, and those authors sent it to EqD ages ago :ajbemused:

*notinterested*

#43 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

>>393617 They were not, however, accepted to Equestria Daily, nor did they garner a six-star rating within the first twelve hours of being posted.  Speaking as someone who has pre-read several BioShock crossovers (probably including the two you're referring to) and fervently prayed every time that one of them would meet standards for posting, all I ask is that you give this story a chance before you write it off as a repeat of what others have already done.

#44 · Chapter 1 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

As soon as I read 'Eternity's Crossing' I was sold.  The usage of that map alone gives you 50 brownie points, in my book.

Then I saw the header.

LETS SPIN THIS SHIT

#45 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

I'm not one to avoid giving credit where it is do, so I'll start with this. This crossover with bioshock blows mine out of the water. It doesn't mean I'll stop writing it )it is a just for fun fic after all) but I'll certainly throw any meager fanbase I have this fics way. I'm excited to see a truely great bioshock fic get on eqd.  I may be :raritydespair: because I've lost to a better fic, but I'm excited (if I understand you correctly) that my absolute ineptitude brought this about masterpiece.

#46 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

>>393543 Oh my Celestia...EZ NOT POSSIBLE!

#47 · Chapter 2 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

I got chills with that last line.  Bravo, sir or madam, bravo.

#48 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

>>393672

I tried that, but it only lead to mediocrity. I don't mean to hate against your story, but I am simply not interested in reading after what I have seen before.

Also, could you explain as to why the FIMFiction title card changes when we refer to this story? :applejackunsure:

#49 · Chapter 1 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

Excuse me while i pick up my jaw from the floor. This! My friend. Is what i call "Amazing". I love Bioshock and i have played both of 'em at least 5 times, and i can't wait to play Infinite :pinkiehappy:. Will continue reading soon. Can't wait! :heart:    

#50 · Chapter 3 · 121w, 3d ago · · ·

ME after being stunned by three chapters of awesomeness:

CONTINUE THIS MASTERPIECE OF EPICOSITY!!!!!!

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