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TheLoveless
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you might want to check you short story description. It says "Teh edge".
wow the description is filled with errors.
I might be jumping something here, but the Chapter is obviously different than how your title and description is spelled.
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it's idiots like you that ruin my day.
i don;t care if you can't stand 2 mistakes. or if the capatalization is off. atleast be helpfull, and HELP, like this person
4235830 thank you for telling me, i'll try fixing it soon. somethings wrong with my internet
4236008 Wow, rude much? Their posts weren't even anything remotely close to being insulting or mocking. The errors they point out are both easy to spot and easy to fix.
4236052 did any one ask for this to go on
no. dose anyone care wether it dose or not? yes, i do
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quit acting like your better than every other human being, and leave me alone.
4236065 I'll say this again: NOTHING that they said was in any shape or form intended to be anything insulting to you. They are pointing out simple errors in your story's description and single chapter, and you are taking it as something more than that. No one in this exchange is acting like they're "better than every other human being", and you need to stop viewing it as such. Don't be so surprised when people offer their own (harmless) statements on your work when you publish it for view by anyone on this site.
4236090 i'm going to ask you once. get off my story. and leave me alone
Okay..... So, I would like to give you some advice. First off, your description seems MUCH different from your story. There are much more grammar errors and spelling mistakes. Instead of:
I would write:
The bolded/italicized text: Get rid of that. Completely. Saying that will immediately influence people to down vote your story. If you want to EVER become anything, you need to be able to take criticism. I'm not saying you have to like it. I'm just saying that you shouldn't whine about negativity like you did there and in the comments. I suggest that you join some groups where you can find an editor. They will definitely help.
The Story: Although it doesn't have as many grammar and spelling errors as the description, it still had a few that could be easily fixed with an editor. No, your main problem is the wording. You add unnecessary words that make your sentences VERY confusing for the reader. Pre readers can help you with this, as well as editors. I can't really comment on the concept, since I didn't understand it. Because of the way you worded everything, it seems as if you started in the middle of the story..... Look around at other, popular stories. See what you like about them, and see what you can do to change your story to make it how you like it. Keep on working, get some help, and I know that you can improve!
-Derpy 2
4236259 i'll "try" and not sound like a horrible person.
i could careless about what italic bold markings i should use. as long as the message gets through to people.(i will apply it, becuase it's more or less stupid not too.)
critasisum: i hate it. "grammar sucked," isn't critisisum(not even quoting this fic). i'm done on this topic
grammar: i don't use editors for a reason. none of anyones concern.
word placement: i write the way i write. if you want to understand it better, then understand it more. put some effort in your reading skills. i an not going to tell you eactly what happens.
It's not the story that's the problem. Well, okay, it is, but it's more than that.
It's your attitude.
It took someone knocking me down a bit when I first came here to do my best to strive as a writer and constantly seek help, accept most advice, thank those who find errors, and explain disagreements. You... are doing none of the above.
You truly give this fandom, and creative writing as a whole, a bad name.
And it doesn't matter at this point if English is your second language, and don't you dare give a dyslexia excuse, because I have it. Spell check, damn it, spell check. We both follow The Abyss. Read their writing and copy from them. They know how to write.
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I know it's none of my business, but I'm curious: are you always aggressive towards people legitimately trying to help you, or have we just caught you on a bad day?
If you're going to use a cover, at least source it. That's why there's a source box when you create a fic.
http://titanimal.deviantart.com/art/Number-One-Together-253352009
4236296 Alright, I won't try to help you. I'm done trying to help stubborn, ungrateful people like you. If you don't care, then you shouldn't- no. I'm not going to rage and sink down to your level. This is to everyone trying to give advice to this person: Don't. He obviously takes it with a grain of salt, and attempting to help him is a waste of time. I'm sorry to have bothered you, and I won't be looking at your stories any more. If you ever need help, you know who to come to. Farewell.
-Derpy 2
Then all you're gonna get is hate.
4236483 your 'im not going to rage' comment sounds a lot like rage, just saying
u can't just tell someone they don't get an option that isn't right. sorry but due to ur attitude i had to dislike it...
4236296 Go away, nobody likes you.
4236065 He is a better human being. Because unlike you, he actually listens to people that don't just say, "YES YES, I LOVE YOUR WORK!" Grow up, kid.
4236440 okay, and thanks. i'll put that in in a second.
4236383 the answer to your question.
i'm practiclly always in a bad mood, but i can be like that ocatinally.
hostile to people who want to "laggitamitly" want to help? no, not all of them. and i don't consider "the grammar was bad" as help.
hostile, not always. bad mood, most of the time.
also, since your the onlyone who cared to ask, i need to tell you something
4240144 So you're constantly in a bad mood, and you put your poorly written story on a public site that has critics on it? Yeah, not the best of moves.
4240188 can you stop being that one guy we all look up to, and worship for his constant insults, and try to learn to accept life as it is.
NOTHING is perfect.
4240196 Never said I was. But you made a shitty choice, and then you blew up at others because of it. Pull your head out of your ass.
4240203 bye
The comments section is infinitely more entertaining than the story! Sucks, though, that one of the few fics about Spike and Trixie bonding had to be written by a troll or asylum inmate.
I read this and I think it is quite good. Personally, I don't mind the occasional error or two. They just show that no one can be perfect. And besides, the errors in this story are extremely easy to overlook such as the occasional missed capitalization. Noticed that most people dislike this and are posting comments that are offensive to you. I just wanted to be sure you know that there are some people out there who do appreciate your work and hope to see more.
You've earned a fav and a follow. Can't wait to see more!
4280876 glad to hear that you think that way. its kinda nice of you, and thanks again.
i'm expecting a few dislikes on this
4281663 You're welcome!
4236296 Oh, THIS is an attitude that's gonna get you far as a human being.
Also, I looked on the comments of your OTHER primarily-disliked story. It sounds like you're REGRESSING with your quality somehow, based on comments on the errors of that story. And your attitude has embittered as well, given your former openness and ENCOURAGEMENT of criticism. "Constructive" does not mean "positive," if that's the reason you wanted it.
Gonna leave this here.
4546522 i'm actually stuck between these two opinions.
this is rasist becuase the devil is black,
and the devil is black becuase he would be much cooler black.
all in all, i enjoyed watching this.
4546593 i'll just answer that right now.
and i'm glad you enjoyed it. if you really ment that, with all the dislikes
4546609 thanks i guess
4546701 i skipped to the edited part after reading the first line.
if you mean posotive as in upvotes, then yes, they are posotive. only becuase it's a story people want to read, this is what i wanted to write, not what others wanted me to write
so yea. you only looked at the stories on the side of this story... i have some with a lot of down votes
edit: where the hell did i go wrong? i went wrong when i wrote what i wanted to write. and decided not to write clop
You do realize that simply asking for that will only result in more of it?
For starters, learn to spell correctly.
And yes, I'm being sarcastic.
Oh, you're starting THIS, are you? Remember how bad the comment deletion ended for you before?
Also, does this count as ban evasion?
Wow. This sucks. Not just the story, but more in the comments section. Why did this have to get dredged up again? I'd prefer it if the shit stayed at the bottom of the site, though it is certainly fun to see the pit this idiot dug himself. The review was great, just sayin'. Better than the thing that you are attempting to call a story.
>in b4 commn3t del3te
4547900 Aww, I'm flattered.
Your grammar is literally worse than cancer
How old are you? Does your mother even know you use the computer?
Printer = Your story
THis was god awful.
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