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    • Halo ODST: On the raggety edge
      The ODST sqaud we all know and love are trapped in Equestria, are there underlying motives?

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    • To see where you will go...
      An alternate season 3 finale.
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    The first Phantom was hit with the full force of a crimson beam in its right turbine, destroying the chin mounted search light. The second drop-ship dropped close to the floor and took the lead; warming its Chin-turret.

    The Rookie had been warned of the incoming Phantoms by Berit just minutes prior to their arrival into range; Berit had managed to form a shaky alliance with the supposed Princess as they defended the remaining citizens. In reality Berit in her incredibly low powered state was irresponsible and prone to make mistakes.

    Buck was watching the Phantoms with his sniper from his vantage point as the Rookie fired his laser. “First Phantom is slowing from the hit! Get another good hit on that one and it is going dowwwnnn!” He had watched with a grin under his visor as bits of the Drop ship fell into the frosty Everfree Forest.

    The Nocturnal Guards flew towards the Turreted Phantom with speed, drawing It’s fire before it reached the town. The Phantoms had slowed considerably.

    As the Phantoms flew lower and out of The Rookie’s range, he called over to the Princess whilst motioning to the top of a nearby building. “Can you get me there?” The Princess looked begrudgingly to the two story building that he was pointing to, it was a hot pink colour with a steep, frosty thatched roof.

    These new aliens were helping her fight the ones she encountered in Canterlot and so far they had given her no reason not to trust them, but she was compelled to assist them if they were helping her subjects.

    She sighed “Fine...” flapping her powerful wings as she lifted the Rookie of the cobbled street with ease. She lowered the Rookie down gently as to keep the roof intact, and the ODST from falling straight off and splattering into a gooey mess on the cold winter streets below.

    The Rookie laid on his back and dug the butt of his laser into the snowy roof as to reduce recoil; he brought the laser to eye level and aimed for the already injured Phantom. Both Phantoms had been reduced to a crawl trying to hit the black Pegasi guards that plagued them.

    The Rookie fired his crimson beam of death into the left turbine of the already damaged Phantom, causing it to spark of bright blue neon flames before losing altitude and disintigrating  into tiny little pieces.

    Buck’s voice rolled out through the coms, “One down one to go keep it up!”

    One of the many pieces that had come off of the slammed into the larger of the two black Pegasi; sending him into a spiral towards the floor. The second Night guard dived for him only to get crushed completely by the bulk of the giant purple wreck.

    The second Phantom sped forwards at its top speed straight toward Rookie’s position, ignoring the incoming armoured white and gold Pegasi that were the Royal Guard. The Rookie aimed his laser and got one good hit on the chin mounted turret.

    Buck had begun to fire sniper rounds into the Phantom mass, hoping that to some miracle it would stop it, slow it down or at least distract it. “Rookie! Move!”

    The Rookie didn’t need telling twice, he reached up behind him and hauled himself across to the opposite side of the thatched roof where Luna was led , he slid down the side at menacing speeds grabbing the Luna’s back left leg on the way down, dragging her of the building with him.

    They ended up sprawled across the floor, mangled into a heap.

    Luna looked down from her slumped position to the Rookie “What is the meaning of this?!”

    The Rookie, who was lay on his back, remained where he was; he raised his right hand and pulled it down vigorously with in a plunging motion. As the Rookies hand hit reached its lowest point; the building they were only just seconds ago camped on exploded into a bright blue ball.

    Luna looked sheepishly over to the Rookie; her face slightly flushed “Oh...”

    Berit’s A.I form became visible in a green glow above the Rookies supine form, only instead of a young human woman; she appeared as a semi-transparent bright white Unicorn with deep emerald green eyes and mane. Her mane reached just past her shoulders but the most unique feature would be the Athena owl that adorned her flank. The only thing that kept her remotely human is that she was wearing a black civilian hoodie.

    The Rookie was glad of his helmet; if anyone saw his face they would see that his eyes had expanded exponentially in pure astonishment.

    The Rookie perked himself up on his elbows. “Well that’s new...”

    Sitting on her haunches much like a dog would, Luna was staring at the translucent Unicorn in pure awe with a slack jawed expression. “Pray tell what is this?”

    An ODST jumped from the roof of a large building to their left and onto a smaller on where he vaulted down towards the Rookie and Luna. “She is an A.I.” He stated matter of fact-ly.

    She stood up to her full height and coked her head at Buck “What is an ay-i?”

    Berit piped up. “With all due respect can that wait,” Luna looked shocked that Berit could talk, but quickly nodded in agreement. “If your role is Princess also, does that make you direct relation to the pony that was injured buy the Lance Corporal?” she used she used her holographic hoof to motion to the Rookie.

    Luna eyes widened at the end of Berit’s question, she knew that her sister had been injured and had .

    “You mean to say that my sister was not injured by these one of these creatures?” her eyes were filled with malice. “But by the one that has been posing as my ally?!”

    “Uh-oh.” The Rookie mentally scolded Berit for reciting that very sensitive information; Buck was staring at him with disbelief; that was the sort of thing that he needed to be told.

    The Rookie was lifted off the floor in a light blue aura and thrown towards Buck as Berit’s form disappeared, the ODST’s collided sending both of them sprawling to the floor. A few royal guards had arrived near the area; they were mainly inspecting the crash and avoiding the confrontation as they feared their own Princess almost as much as the invaders.

    Buck pushed himself of off the Rookie “Alright I’m getting the feeling of kill or be killed right now!” he pulled his assault rifle from his back and sprayed a burst in the Princesses general direction which missed her by a hair. Buck dived into a building to recover himself.

    Multiple guards were closing in on the scene “Leave them!” Luna’s voice was booming like a Mac-round in atmosphere “I will make them pay for harming my beloved sister!” her gaze dropped on the Rookie who was on his back barely conscious from taking the brunt on the magical attack.

    Luna strode forward; she stared down at the Rookie, her voice was filled with malice “You.will.pay!” as her horn began to glow, out of the corner of her eye she saw a tall, dark biped figure jump from a second floor window and straight towards her. Luna tried to leap away but to no avail; Buck tackled on her and used his momentum to take out Luna’s front legs.

    Buck’s weapons were ripped from his back and scattered in random directions. Luna flapped her wings, gaining some height and maneuvered herself so that she was pinning Buck to the floor.

    A very specific lavender mare careered round a corner after being swept away by the tide of fleeing ponies. “Princess Luna!”

    Luna looked to Twilight, her expression soften considerably and she reduced the pressure she was exerting on Buck. Buck took the opportunity to gain the upper hand; he swung his leg up and hit the soft of Luna’s underbelly. Luna flew upwards from the force of the kick and landed with a soft thud on the floor.

    Buck pounced onto her; he grabbed her horn and using his left hand repeatedly punched her in the snout. Luna was powerless without the use of her horn and her wings were crumpled beneath her back, unable to lift off.

    Twilight screamed attempting to cast any spell at the ODST and failing painfully “Stop!” she tried to cast again but she had used up all of her vigor fighting the pain that came with an injured horn “Stop please!” She strained herself too far and fell to the floor. “Just stop!”

    Many of the Pegasi guards were looking on with unsure expressions, looking to each other for guidance.

    Buck was un-mercilessly punishing Luna, his hard fist pounding into her soft face repeatedly; he showed no signs of letting up, her face covered in her crimson blood.

    A weak yell came from behind Buck “GUNNY!” The Rookie slowly hobbled onto his feet “Stop!” his voice was raspy from the magical hit. Buck pulled his fist back for another hit, ignoring his lower ranking companion.

    The Rookie muster up all his strength and grabbed Buck’s fist and yanked him backwards. “If you kill her, then there is no way in hell we are ever going to get off this planet!” he pushed Buck to the floor “Let alone live on it!”

    Princess Luna was left on the ground looking up to the Rookie through teary eyes plus a broken and bruised face. Twilight slugged over to her, and she was exceedingly cautious of Buck who lay on his back staring at the Rookie in disbelief.

    Twilight reached her. “Are you alight Princess?” Luna composed herself as best she could, “Its seems I have underestimated these human vastly.” She spat out some blood onto the floor below. “I am unsure if it would be wise to face them one on one,” the guards that were watching hadn’t moved since Luna had given her order.

    Buck had finally regained himself enough to speak. “Rookie what the hell where you thinking!” he stood up to his full height and stared him down. “You shot the damn princess of the planet we are trapped on?” he motioned to Luna. “If you hadn’t done that, then she wouldn’t of attacked!”

    A large white stallion in royal guard armour galloped to the scene. He sent a magical blast from his horn, directly impacting the large biped figures that were near the injured Princess, launching the ODST’s to the ground. They had been knocked out cold by the blast the unicorn had unleashed upon them.

    Shining armour yelled over to the guards. “What are you just standing there for!?”

    One of the larger guards stepped forward, “The Princess ordered us not to intervene!” Shining armour walked up to the group of guards

    He yelled down to him “What are you a guard or a puppet!” he turned his attention away from the useless guards and towards the Princess and his little sister who had yet to acknowledge his presence.

    “Twily are you alright?” he trotted over to his sister who was helping Luna up.

    “I’m fine,” the other elements of harmony, Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo were making their way over from the various locations they were scattered to.

    Shining armour looked upon the Princess of the Night, “Princess, permission to take these aliens to Canterlot Castle for interrogation?”

    She waved Twilight away and continued standing shakily “Yes, but when you awaken them I must have words with the smaller one.”

    She would need to speak to him about many a things.

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    Note: This chapter has been so damn frustrating! I just can't get it right!

    Comments ( 74 )

    #1 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    We Are Disgusted With The Course Of Action This Has Taken

    #2 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I personally think that it is very good. I noticed a few mistakes but not many. Good job and keep it up :raritywink:

    #3 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Good chapter

    luna got her ass kicked :trollestia: so it was funny

    #4 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I get the feeling I missed something between last chapter and this one.

    #5 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Damnit Luna. Celestia attacked first.

    #6 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Well... that went to hell real fast... Buck and Rookie saved Ponyville and all its citizens only to be placed under arrest and interrogated.

    "No good deed goes unpunished." as they say. Shockingly true in this case...

    #7 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>567872 same : /

    #8 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I'm not going to lie, I'm seeing a lot of errors in the wording that make it difficult to see who's doing what...

    If one can piece everything together and show but a little patience, however, the storyline fits the requirement for a good story just fine.

    In the future, try simply re-reading your chapter before posting it, and change sentences that don't seem to flow properly.

    #9 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Welp... That went well. -Capt. Reynolds

    #10 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    i like the reach reference when shining spoke to the guards. damn buck did to luna what he did to the brute chieftain that attacked romeo. nice chapter keep it up.

    #11 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I think they might need help from an overpowered armored green guy that hopefully will kick the ponies flanks. NAO!!!:flutterrage:

    #12 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    The last chapter ended with luna getting mad at the rookie. Then why does this chapter go right into fighting where luna and the rookie are working together? Also when did princess Celestia get hurt?:rainbowhuh:

    #13 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    This was like... nuts man! Keep it up, this is exciting!

    (It's like taking over a scorpion/wraith)

    #14 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>567815 Careful what you say mate, There may be some Lunatics reading this.

    #15 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>568269

    I like luna (so please don't kill me lunatics) but i still find it funny she got her ass kicked

    #16 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>568291 Not to worry, I'm not a Lunatic; I is a Loyalist.

    #17 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>568295

    You can probably guess which queen i like :derpytongue2:

    #18 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>568295 May i ask what the hell you're talking about?

    #19 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    woah, that sucks. not the chapter, but that its short, and now we have two battered princesses who started the fight and are calling the ODSTs bad guys. but luna getting beat was pretty awesome.:derpytongue2:

    #20 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    If they would let him tell his side of the story then everything would work out.

    I mean, celestia attacked him unprovoked and he used non-leathal rubber rounds. Plus, he just saved the entire Town of ponyville which includes the elements of harmony.

    Rookie deserves a golden statue, NOT a dungeon cell. Hopefully celestia will see reason and give him what he deserves.

    #21 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>568306 Theses are the droids your looking for?:pinkiecrazy:

    #22 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>568577

    -waves hand- these are not the droids you are looking for

    #23 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    #24 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>568644........These are not the droids im looking for......But the kid IS who im looken for!*grabs kid and hightales it*

    #25 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    #26 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>568719

    See this guy? This guy right here?

    He gets it

    All we need now is for luna and shining to do the same

    #27 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    good update a bit overreacting, but its understandable considering the circumstances. i look forward to more though and i think this chapter played out fine.    

    #28 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    The fuck, bro? You just skipped over all the Shitstorm I was looking forward to from the end of the last chapter.

    I guess, "WAIT WAIT, IT WAS A MISUNDERSTANDING" or "Celestia attacked first, I was defending myself" would just be too boring. I don't know. I'd like, for once, to see the misunderstanding cleared up BEFORE they get thrown in the dungeon.

    In both Celestia's and Luna's fight with the ODST, 'Self Defense' Pretty much explains it away. While buck did get a little carried away, Against the Covenant he's been fighting for years, the kill or be killed instinct would take over fast.

    #29 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Wait, remind me. When did Celestia show up? I can't recall for the life of me when she would have been injured.

    #30 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    no

    #31 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>569053 The beginning with the bean bag shotgun :P

    #32 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    This chapter was a bit short but still really good. A sew errors here and there but nothing too serious, also Luna got SPANKED!!!! :trollestia:

    #33 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>567807 Agreed.

    #34 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Whelp, this is starting to become a rage-inducing fic.  Fucking misunderstandings, and always caused by some dumbass's actions.

    Oh, and that A.I. is rather counter-productive for something that was suppose to be freaking helpful.  So much for being several times more intellegent than an average human.  "You wouldn't happened to be related to the one we shot with a bean-bag shotgun? [Omit that it was self-defense]"

    Now for two or so chapters about "I can't trust aliens" angst, followed by a 2 more chapters of "Maybe I was in the wrong? Nah", and ending with a chapter that causes the misunderstanding to be cleared up once the humans are throughly blamed or Celestia does a "my bad" copout without really making up for it.  Oh, and everyone will be fine with it because rainbows crap happiness and friendship.

    Also, I can't help but notice your wording and and such is rather off.  Might want to do a revision when you get the chance, or have someone else do it.

    >>568409

    No, that would be far too reasonable and actually make sense.

    #35 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Much faith has been lost in this work of fiction.

    Pick it up! Stop messing around!

    #36 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Sigh... well at least this situation can't really get much more worse.:facehoof: Also, was Buck this overly aggressive?  It has been I will since I have played ODST, but I do not remember him being the type to shot first.

    #37 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    This is getting kinda weird. Hope you fix a few things up quick. Don't want to see this head down the wrong road. :ajsmug:

    #38 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>568014 hmm, me to... oh, and WTF!!! WTF IS WRONG WITH THE PRINCESSES!!! BOTH OF THE ODST's SAVED ALMOST THE ENTIRE TOWN FROM CERTAIN DEATH!!! MAH GAWD!

    #39 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I don't see Scootaloo sitting still as the Rookie gets taken into custody. She tried fighting a brute to protect him, what are a couple ponies to her. Also, you would think Shining would be less shoot first and ask questions later, but oh well. Can't wait to see what's next.    

    #40 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·
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    vary good chapter:pinkiesmile:. BUT damit man all the fics ive been resently been watching all  have somehting to do with the wedding its not bad but come on all of them:facehoof:

    #41 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Oh Hell no!  Shining Asshole you're going down ! Better make Twilight explain , cuz shit just hit the fan !

    #42 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·
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    What happened to the cliff-hanger between the rookie and Luna from the previous chapter, I was looking forward to some serous shit going down. Apart from that, and the chapter itself being a bit hard to follow. It wasn't bad:twilightsmile:, Not the best chapter in this story but good one none the less. Just make sure in the future you run things by your proof readers a bit more thoroughly.

    Good chapter, looking forward to the next chapter.

    #43 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>568882

    Damn Criminal scum

    The streets are filled with them

    #44 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Leave it to Luna to shoot first, ask questions second.

    #45 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·
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    and the plot thickens:pinkiegasp:

    #46 · 54w, 1d ago · · ·
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    AH FOR THE LOVE OF LUNA!!!!! I waited to read the three new chapters so I would have a really good story to read if I got sad and now I've gone and read them AND I'm still sad.

    #47 · 54w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>568306 If you couldnt get this chapter right i think i may know why. You need to add in an iner monologue of what your charaters are thinking...like how at realizing who hurt her sister Luna felt a boiling rage fill her veins but was back be the slightest amount of confution as to why something that would help her subjects would harm her sister. Idk something like that.

    #48 · 54w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I think the biggest problem with the chapter is how Luna found out who hurt Celestia. Even being a "dumb" AI Berit wouldn't have made such a massive tactical and political error. It makes as much sense as Berit telling the Covenant where Earth is.

    #49 · 54w, 1d ago · · ·
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    There facing an enimny that EATS there foe AND THERE TO BIZZY BETING EACHOTHERE TO DEATH WHAT THE FUCK :facehoof:

    #50 · 54w, 23h ago · · ·
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    >>568258 Rookie shot Celestia in the second chapter, but she attacked him first. And he was only using rubber bullets so she's fine. The part about Rookie and Luna, ya I'm just as confused as you

    #51 · 54w, 22h ago · · ·
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    So, they're going to take them, and the others don't say anything?

    #52 · 54w, 20h ago · · ·
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    YOU.SON.OF.A.BITCH. :fluttershbad:You sir just lost a fav and if I could I would've spamed the thumbs down button. I was liking this since the beginning but now I GREATLY dissapprove of this and just gonna find something else to read. Buh-bye:ajsleepy:

    #53 · 54w, 20h ago · · ·
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    Oh. Aaaanndd you killed two fellow night guards not one but TWO f***ing night guards. Do you have something against Luna or night guards or just night beings in general?

    #54 · 54w, 17h ago · · ·
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    >>580184 They needed to die for the main story to progress, Luna has an important role to play

    #55 · 53w, 6d ago · · ·
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    :facehoof: Twilight doesn't say anything? Shining comes and instantly K.O.s the odsts then Twilght just sits there and is like "i'm fine, it all good hurp derp!" and lets them be taken away? Also there a HUGE mistake with everyone personalities, almost EVERYONE has a "shoot first, ask questions later" attitude, i mean did they all get rabies or something? CELESTIA THE FUCKING PRINCESS just physically tackles him when her first get there for no reason! NOT EVERYONE NEEDS TO INSTANTLY TRY TO ATTACK THE OSDT'S! :trixieshiftleft: Like i can sum up this entire fic for you "there's ODST's, a pony sees them, said pony attacks them assuming there evil, they figure out there not evil, repeat."

    #56 · 53w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>570579

    Yea, remember when he was first introduced to the engineers, he killed them real quick, and then got yelled at by Dare for doing it. Well, he and Romeo killed them really, but you catch my drift.

    #57 · 53w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>585392

    True, but he really did not have any reason to believe that they were not just another Covenant race at the time.  Besides, I am pretty sure that their protocols for dealing with a new Covenant race is to treat it like any other Covenant race.

    #58 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Dude love this but I have to say, you need an editor. Anyway, I don't get the ponies in this fix because apparently being saved by the ODSTs doesn't mean anything when it comes to royalty. It's making me wish that when Buck gets the chance, he kills Shining Armor and Luna.

    #59 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Of course we know the ODSTs could kill everyone in that castle lol:derpytongue2::derpytongue2:

    #60 · 53w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Love it nuff said.

    #61 · 53w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Why... why did Twilight just let the ODSTs get murked, and not do a thing...? she didnt try to clear up the misunderstanding even a little bit! :derpyderp1:

    #63 · 52w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Is this story dead? or is the author still working on it?:moustache:

    #64 · 52w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>620760 I'm still working, just have a lot of things to do lately

    #65 · 52w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>620768 OH.. okay because i really like this story and i would be sad if it died...:raritydespair:

    #66 · 51w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Hate to say it, but this stuff is bad.

    #67 · 51w, 5d ago · · ·
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    I hate buck for beating the princess...  he shall burn:flutterrage::twilightangry2:: now the rookie's good keep him:twilightsmile:

    #68 · 50w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>659665

    cause defending yourself is SO horrible right?

    #69 · 50w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Buck shot the princess first.... and after he had the princess down Buck was about to kill her..

    #70 · 50w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Enjoying this quite a bit. Can't wait for the next chapter. :twilightsmile:

    #71 · 50w, 13h ago · · ·
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    I've liked the story so far but really not this chapter.

    Buck attacking Luna felt so out of place.

    I really hope this doesn't stay south for too long.

    #72 · 49w, 15h ago · · ·
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    Crimson beam of death? Has a good ring to it, sounds awesome but isn't too overpowered. Might use it somwhere in my story when Rookie is attacked by Discord

    #73 · 42w, 4d ago · · ·
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    i love how buck kicked her ass

    #74 · 31w, 5h ago · · ·
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    I had a feeling Buck would do that.

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