The Cutie Mark Crusaders never got along with Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon. Scootaloo hates them more then the other two, and wants nothing more then for them to disappear off the face of Equestria. Applebloom and Sweetiebelle started to learn more about Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon, and what made them turn into what they are today. However Scootaloo doesn't seem to care to learn about them at all. Rarity was dragged into this conflict, and wants to know herself what happened to those two fillies to cause them to act the way they do.
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bravo good sir please keep it up~ i'm pulling for you
Good start, but you need to work on your punctuation and getting the difference between "there", "their", and "they're".
4209039 Thanks, I know my grammar isn't the best in the world. What I really need is an editor.
Interesting chapter...can't wait for update.
4211294 Glad you liked it!
This is getting pretty interesting, also Sweetie Belle and Apple Bloom are two words, not one lol.
4212674 Thanks, I fixed it, I always got confused on how there names where written.
This sounds like it should have a dark tag.
4214843 Really? I don't find my story to be all that dark O_O
4214980 i think its cause of the violence first it was a beatdown and now it seems like she might do more than just beat up diamond or silver but to me it sounds like she may kill them
4215158 While I don't plan to have Scootaloo kill them, I can agree that the story is a little dark.
Good so far, I've read what there is so far and I just want to say:
I like what your doing with Diamond Tiara and Scootaloo, both have had a bit of a unfortunate thing happen (or multipule things, if you really think about it). But, due to assumptions they both end up in this predicament. Scootaloo snaps, I like that. Actually, I understand Scootaloo's plight, seriously. I would've punched Diamond Tiara in that situation too in Scootaloo's sho- hoofs, I'm actually surprised with how long the bullying's probably been going on in the story, that Scoot's didn't try to punch her before.
Am I safe to assume that her friends are good at restraining her?
Anyway... However, I'm wondering why no one in the story is wondering why she reacted so harshly to, " I bet your parents are ashamed to have you as there daughter". Although, that's realization will probably will come later.
I'm liking this a lot more than I though I would.
4218669 Thanks man, I mean I would think it would be natural to assume that someone would get mad if they came up to you said "I bet your parents are ashamed to have you as there daughter." I know I would have lost it if someone said that to me. Anyways yeah I was planing on explaining that in the next chapter or so. Thanks again, and I am glad you have enjoyed the story so far!
4218669 it probably made her mad because she said her parents abandoned her.
4218695 is there going to be a revelation of "Scootaloo ends up being Diamonds sister?"
4218753 I wasn't planing on it O_O That would be one hell of a twist tho wouldn't it?
Is this an alternate universe or did you miss a couple of episodes? Apple Bloom, Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo didn't meet until Diamond's cutie mark party in Call of the Cutie (even though they can be seen together after Nightmare Moon appears in Friendship is Magic-Part 1 *ding*). It was also established in Flight to the Finish that Scootaloo isn't homeless (she may still be an orphan though) so why is she sleeping in the clubhouse?
I am still going to continue reading though.
4218774 The reason why she sleeps in the clubhouse will be explained later on in the story, just sit tight :3
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Yes it would be
4218816 I don't know why I laughed so hard at this, but I did
Bravo, Mr. Rich, bravo.
Well, because of your inaction, Mr. Rich, Diamond has pushed one filly to the point of giving her flashbacks to those days by beating the crap out of her. And you can't get mad because Diamond brought this on herself. So again, bravo, Mr. Rich.
*does
The only one that has a chance of getting through to Scootaloo now is Rainbow Dash.
Sweetie Belle better explain things to Apple Bloom first. Like I said prior, the only one, at this point, that is going to get anything through to Scootaloo is Rainbow Dash. And we still have to find out why Silver Spoon is a bully.
Nice chapter.
yeah it just keeps getting better ^_^
(They really need to put the publish and edit buttons on opposite sides of the screen. Having them right next to each other is not a good idea as you see. I accidentally published an unfinished chapter, of course I took it down. Just ignore the update notice that you may or may not have gotten.
Damn. Update is password locked.
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4242888 As I said below, I accidentally published an unfinished chapter. I had to take it down obviously, sorry about that D:
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Oh. I understand. No need to apologize.
Why she told Silver Spoon about her past is simple. Just like Diamond said just the right words to push Scootaloo over the edge, Silver said just the right words to make her spill her guts. Silver is lucky Sweetie Belle to Scoot about Diamond's past or she might have gotten a beat-down as well. I'm expecting Cheerilee to find Scootaloo soon.
Pretty good so far.
4273647 Thanks, I am planing on having the next chapter out by tonight.
Thing is, I'm fine with Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon being bullies. But you can still make them interesting characters in addition to being bullies. Back to the Future did it with Biff Tannen.
This should be interesting...
Don't want to sound mean or anything but you use the wrong words, like there/their and wright/wright.
Great story though. Can't wait for more
The first thing i would want to do if someone insulted my parents is be friends with them
4277532 It's fine XD I know my grammar isn't the best in the world. I don't have an editor or proof reader so normally I go through and find all the mistakes myself. I just don't know the difference in the different ways to use some words. Sometimes I wish English grammar didn't have so many rules.
Cover Brony, if you like I can be your proofreader. I'll give you my email if you say yes. Anyway, this is good stuff. I like the idea of Diamond Tiara actually having a dark past and using her bullying as a way of coping. And while I'm kinda tired of people assuming that Scootaloo is an orphan, I think it works for this story. (I wish the show would give us a glimpse of her parents. We know from "Flight to the Finish" that she does have a house.)
4278630 I would love you to be my proof reader!
As for the thing with Scootaloo being an orphan, I wanted Scootaloo to have a somewhat relatable situation to Diamond Tiara. I thought since we never saw Scootaloo's parents that would be the best option.
Everyone knows about Diamond Tiara's past. It is only a matter of time before everyone finds out about Scootaloo's present...especially since the CMC is going to confront Silver Spoon (remember Scootaloo spilling the beans to her during her outburst.)
BTW, there = in or at that place (opposed to here ); their = a form of the possessive case of they used as an attributive adjective, before a noun. Please learn the difference.
Also, wright = a worker. I think you have been meaning to use 'right'.
Great story. Can't wait for the next chapter.
4280248 Glad you liked the story so far!
TheCoverBrony, I need to tell you, you need a proofreader to fix spelling errors and well, proofread before you edit your work.
As for the story... eh?
4295577 Yeah I know, I have been trying to get one, but it seems like most people are busy now a days.
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If it helps, I'm looking to get into the writing game, and proofreading seems like a good start for me. With your permission, I would like to share a sample of my knowledge, in the morning. (23:24 PM EST). Hit me back with a private message.
I am sorry for the delay in this chapter, I have been really busy lately. I promise I will have it up soon.
Hmm, I really enjoyed this! Nice work.