Maretha's Vineyard: a quaint and charming tourist destination sporting sun-soaked beaches and cool, blue ocean waters.
Also, the destination of six ponies (and one dragon) who are looking forward to relaxing on warm sand, splashing in the surf, and chowing down on some kick-flank seafood!
However, they aren't the only ones looking for a bite in the salty sea. A twenty-five foot torpedo of fins and teeth is checking in as well and he's got his eye on the all-you-can-eat buffet of swimming tourists.
Will Twilight Sparkle and company ever get a chance to just kick back? Or will the terror of the deep, blue sea have the final word?
(Note: gone through the old chapters and touched them up. Enjoy! Also, some OoC moments. You've been warned.)
Chapters (4)
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I love bacon!
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Don't forget the Bacon.
I love Jaws, but like what Nostalgia Critic said Jaws 2, 3-D, and 4: the Revenge were really unnecessary sequels.
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I agree. The first is an absolute classic, I grew up watching Jaws and love it to death.
Even though the sequels were inferior and cheesy, I still watch them just for fun. Jaws 2 was the only one that came close to capturing the spirit of the original.
4260637 True that.
It's funny that you wrote this. A story I posted a week ago almost ended up as a jaws parody but I thought alligators would be funnier than sharks. Hope we get to see some good deaths!
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I'll have to check that story out! I don't want to get too bloody with this story, but fear not. Shark's gotta eat, after all.
About bloody time someone did one of these. Was starting to think i might have to write my own.
Bravo! ~Dollars.
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Thank you! I noticed that the fandom didn't have a lot of Jaws stuff coming out of it, so I decided that it was time Equestria learned to be afraid of the water.
4261569. Well i haven't read the whole thing yet just finished Guildas last moments, bravo by the way, and i definitely like where this is going.
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Thanks, I'm glad you're liking it so far.
4261606. Reads last line. Sets down phone. Leans back slowly in large overstuffed armchair. Dims lights in room. Reaches over and sets the needle on antique phonograph. Smiles as a certain blood chilling score begins to play through the air.
"Ello again, Brucy."
Looks over at an old photo stained with blood.
"Didja miss mee?"
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Here's to swimmin' with bow legged mares.
~ Robert Shaw, aka "Quint"
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Watch out for that apricot brandy...
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Thanks, I'll do my best!
Yes, glad to finally see a Jaws/FIM crossover! That movie was fantastic.
Though I'll probably not look forward to seeing my favorite ponies probably die.
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Depends on your favorite ponies...
4270967 My 3 favorite ponies are the ones who's icons I showed in that last comment, of course.
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Well then, we'll just have to wait and see, won't we? *twirls non-existent moustache like old-timey villain*
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First rule of Jaws: at least a third of the protagonists will die. Therefore, it's safe to assume statistically that one of those three is getting the chompers.
SoulofLegend, you have my attention with this. Carry on.
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Thanks! I won't reveal who goes first, but rest assured that somepony will meet their end in the next chapter (which I hope to finish soon.)
Dude, no, just, no. Not Pip. You monster!
Ok, now that that's out of the way. Well done, you are capturing the true spirit of the ocean juggernaut that is jaws. Did notice a small handful of errors. Nothing big, just a few little things, a misplaced coma, a missing word. No big deal but you might consider giving it another once over. All in all im loving it you damn heartless bastard, you should go crawl in a hole, and write more so i can get angrier at it. Keep up the awesome work!
~Dollars.
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I know, I'm horrible.
Thanks for the input, though! I'll go through it and get those problems fixed right away. I'm glad you're enjoying the story, it was a pain getting this chapter rolling.
I hope my writing continues to anger you... i-in a good way, that is... I hope... please, don't hurt me.
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Thanks for saying that! It's comforting to know people are enjoying this story. I had my doubts about this chapter, but so far it looks like its going over well.
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Aw, thanks.
4344016. Loosens grip on giant spear gun. "Well, ok. I have bigger fish to fry anyway."
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Whew, close one. Good thing I'm so charming!
So...who gets the parts of Quint, Hooper, and Brody?
My suggestions:
Luna as Quint
Chrysalis as Hooper
Iron Will as Brody.
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Those would be interesting casting choices, especially Iron Will as Brody!
I can see it right now:
Iron Will: "Iron Will thinks you're certifiable, Luna!"
Luna: "Aye, aye, aye..."
For this story, I'm writing those three characters in as OCs (with ponified names, of course.)
4360640 Wait, your having OC's fill in the roles of the main characters of Jaws? I thought you were gonna have the mane 6 {And Spike} do that. So what are they actually going to do instead?
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Team up!
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Forgot to mention, they're not really OCs, just ponified versions of the movie characters. Only different thing is they'll have pony names.
Sorry if I caused any confusion (I derp a lot.)
;) ~Dollars.
Duh-nuh...duh-nuh...
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Also, Salty Squint.... you goob. ~Dollars.
4680475. Nock it off, you'll give him away and he wont get his pony num nums. Do you not want lil Bruce to get his pony num nums? For shame.
~Dollars.
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It's true, though.
well another very very intersting chapter
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Thank you!
OMG, you killed Fluttershy! You bastard! D:
Just kidding. In all seriousness, wow. They haven't even actually started hunting for the shark and yet two of the mane 7 {Counting Spike as part of the group} are already dead. I bet that this will be the point where the rest of the mane 5 decide to finally hunt down and kill the shark. Also, those shark teeth must be really sharp if they were able to kill a dragon.
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I had to up the stakes somehow, right?
Glad you're enjoying it!
I... You... There are no words with which I can adequately articulate my vast unbridled loathing of your very soul, no matter how legendary it may be! You sir, have committed a crime from which there is no recompense, no sanctuary from whence the tides of my fury cannot reach! On this day I promise, in the name of innocence lost, that there shall be more blood spilled in these waters! And it shan't come from any pony!
~Dollars.
Okay, but in all seriousness, awesome chapter, varmint, glad to see this thing back. Also, found a few little whoopsis that you may wana go check up on, just saying. "It's set all set, Rarity," for starters, kinda stumbles off the tongue, so to speak.
Totally lost it on that whole slave line.
And just one more little thing, for Pinkie. Where was your Pinkie sense this time you pink b!$ch!??
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Thanks for pointing out that grammatical error, bro! Unlike Pokemon, I just can't catch em all...
As for Fluttershy, you have no idea how hard it was to for me to have to write that... the scars shall never fully heal. *curls up into a ball and quietly sobs*
And Pinkie Pie... we'll just blame her lack of Pinkie Sense on the fact that a massive great white defies all logic, illogical or otherwise.
Glad this chapter pleased you!
5337509 "Fluttershy!" she called out as paddled to get to her friend.
Sorry, my eye twitched. But yeah, as someone who also has a few grisly death scenes coming up, I feel your pain. Now, hold still will you, never did get this new scope zeroed in properly...
~Dollars.
5337509 You say that a great white shark "Defies all logic". Is that how said shark was able to kill Spike {Dragons have really tough skin. I mean, he wasn't all that bothered by getting stabbed with sharp needles, and he survived falling in lava with no injuries at all}.
Also, I'm just curious. What was it that made you decide to kill both Spike and Fluttershy off first {Out of the mane cast, anyway}, let alone in the same chapter?
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Nice catch! Thanks again.
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Yeah, given that (as far as this story goes, at least) sharks in general are rare in Equestria, let's just say that when you throw in a legendary, twenty-five foot eating machine, anything is possible. The same could be said of fan fiction in general.
As for Flutters and Spike, for lack of a better word, it just felt right... I should probably get my head examined.