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Crystal Static


I'm a fairly skilled hermetic wizard, and I could teach you the esoteric arts, if you can prove that you are worthy of my instruction.

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This story is a sequel to A Queen's Lament


Radiance, Daughter of Queen Chrysalis and Prince Shining Armor, member of the Cutie Mark Crusaders, and borderline Egghead. This is her story. This is her life.


I actually didn't plan on writing this, but the success of 'A Queen's Lament' changed that. Hopefully people will like this just as much...

Middy, my go-to cover art guru, made the art of the cover variety.

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 199 )

I might be dense, but how does a Everfree Thistle plant and a raspberry bush match DT and SS personalities?:rainbowhuh:

4227767 DT is prickly and nopony likes her, SS is prickly but has the potential to be liked.

By prickly I mean has a hard time getting along with others.

Oh, okay. Keep up the good work.:twilightsmile:

4227783 Thanks...

You did read 'A Queen's Lament' right? It does take place before this.

yay the sequel i like it and i got a question is Queen Chrysalis and Prince Shining Armor raising their birth-daughter together in the same house or not

You call it polishing a turd, I call it well written and in-character for a filly's diary :derpytongue2:

4227821 Chrysalis is raising her in Ponyville alone, but Shining Armor comes to visit bi-weekly from the crystal empire.

4227832 When I said polishing a turd, I was talking about the fact that I am continuing what I consider a polished turd (A Queen's Lament is essentially a polished turd of an idea that I had...).

4227854 isn't Shinning Armor the father of Radiance and ok

4227866 Yes, but he still married Cadence and rules the Crystal Empire with her.

Do an implied Chrysalis and Shining private bonding somewhere in the story.

4228880 This is a sequel to another fic I wrote, you should read that one first.

Short version is that while Chrysalis was impersonating Cadence in Canterlot before the invasion, her and Shining Armor did the horizontal tango...

4228888
Yeah, but the embarrassment levels are higher IF Radiance once caught her mother and father do such a thing, or at least be noisy about it once.

4228962 The whole premise is that Shining Armor and Chrysalis have no love for each other, but love Radiance dearly, Shining lives in the Crystal Empire with his wife, Cadence, while Chrysalis lives in Ponyville raising Radiance. Shining visits often to see his daughter, but not to do anything with Chrysalis.

4233581 I am not trying to convince anyone that it is low quality, I just express that I feel that it is low quality.

4233647 low quality or not it is a decintley writen short story:heart:

4234402 Well thanks. I guess what I mean is that I am not too terribly satisfied with it, just some personal qualms over how I perceive the quality and pacing.

4248737 I think what he means is that one who is smart enough to polish a turd to a bright sheen and pawn it off as a diamond to stupid people is a genius.

Or something like that?

4248750 True that.

Only two things are infinite, the universe and human stupidity, and I'm not sure about the former. ~Albert Einstein

Radiance is adorable. I want to read more of her escapades with the CMC!!!

If this is a turd it's quite the shiny turd. You have my interest.

4317073 You know what I think it is? I think I just have a problem where I am never satisfied with what I write. I am a tad bit of a perfectionist when it comes to things I create, and I am rarely satisfied. So yeah...

I am glad I have your interest though.

4317136 I have the same problem about my drawings. I'll draw things that people love and I'll be all meh about it. Oh the plights of artists and writers.

4317173 Indeed...

I think there is a Rolling Stones song that comes to mind... '(I Can't Get No) Satisfaction'... I don't really like the Stones, but I can admit that they had quite the impact on the music world.

On a different note, do you like the cover art?

4318226 It came out exactly how I wanted it, Middy is great at his work.

I actually went so far as to promise him that he would be the only person I would go to for cover art, he hasn't let me down, and I doubt that he ever will.

He told me that he 'fell in love' with Radiance. Actually Radiance has spawned many a daww from both middy and myself, and I came up with the character.

I say let Chrysalis scare the bejesus out of Blublood, especially if he bad mouths Shining Armor.

4317073 even if it is a turd, it's still an entertaining read.

4321469 Keep in mind that I am the one who considers it a polished turd, and I wrote the damned thing.

I still feel like I am polishing a turd though...

I read this, then I noticed that you have only upvotes.
:pinkiegasp: THAT'S ONE HELL OF A TURD! :pinkiehappy:

4324026 I just meant that I am not satisfied with my writing. Other people like it, but I have too high of standards for myself...

4328094 I have really high standards for my writing, and I can never seem to meet them, so I consider my writing to be polished turds (since people seem to like it regardless of how unsatisfied I am with it)

Someone finally downvoted this. Took them long enough...

Scoots and Radi... but I thought we had something :fluttercry:
I love it!

IDEA~! I can have her come over because Sweetie Belle is going to apologize for teasing her.

Oh Rarity :trollestia::raritywink:

I liked this chapter and Scoots/Radi gets my approval.

4330413 Well, I did drop a few little hints in the earlier chapters, if you noticed, Radiance always wrote more about Scootaloo (as compared to the other crusaders) in her diary. Not to mention that whenever she wrote about Scootaloo, she put much more feeling into it.

Yes! For the record we just shouted that aloud right now.
This is much better! You're fleshing Radiance out a bit, and made a continuity tie without shoving it down the reader's throats (well, except the author's note, but those don't really count in the story, right? ). We're also not leaping along the timeline, which is good.
So far this is starting out well, now on to the next chapter! ;)

And then there was a giant dialog wall... again...

Radiance is a bit of an egghead, isn't she? We're glad you're not (yet) making her an automatic student to Twilight, that cliche is quite over used and it's nice you're not using it.
Something that just occurred to me is how little we've been told of their house. Twilight seemed to mention it was suited to chrysalis, but beyond that we don't know anything about it....

I was almost about to call out the no-fly jab at scoots, but then you reaffirmed continuity again! Winning!
Still, we've come to the conclusion that first person narrative just isn't your thing, but first person past reflective (the journal parts) is okay. I think you should stick more with the latter as you practice the former. Oddly enough, you are sufficiently descriptive in the journal entries, yet very lacking in the real-time sections, despite that it shouldn't really be all that different to switch it...
Keep going! ;)

4336126 I know that I am absolute garbage at dialogue, but some bits need to be put as dialogue in certain situations. As for the continuity stuff, I am usually pretty good about making sure key details are remembered and all of that.

Monday, May fifth. IT HIT THE FEATURED BOX!!!

I readed today the prequel, it was really nice, i will wait a little to read this one, cause im used to read huge amount of chapters at once :pinkiesmile:

Should I read 'A Queen's Lament' before reading this? Just wanna know so I dont end up lost at some point while reading :moustache:

4342824 You probably should have...

This is Post- Canterlot Wedding after all, and in this one, Queen Chrysalis lives in Ponyville...

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