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Pulled into a strange world where myth and legends are real. Unable to communicate to the native creatures here, or even able to move for that matter... How is a human supposed to adapt to this strange world, or even manage to keep his sanity when he is encased in stone.
Wow. Such a well written story you've got here. I've got no complaints.
Although, thinking about the entire idea of someone being trapped in stone for the rest of eternity even though he did nothing wrong to deserve it makes me kinda sad. 
...He did do nothing wrong, didn't he?
>>396188 Sanity is completely relative to one's state of mind. He might see everypony else as crazy for willingly submitting to a 'tyrant'. But I guess we will have to see how things play out later to make an accurate guess. 
>>396396 I don't see him as a bad guy, but as an average joe who got caught up in a bad situation at the wrong time. Hopefully things turn out ok for him later... but we will have to see. 
>>396526 That's... a surprisingly well-thought out argument. I'm impressed. Though that he managed to keep his thoughts from devolving into blabbers, and isn't obsessively attached to Twilight, tells me he is at least relatively normal regarding his mental health.
....... Allright either that was his sanity cracking, or the stone. I wonder if Pinkie can talk to rocks. The would explain why she had a pile of rocks at her party. You know, when she went crazy 
. Anyway, WHY ARE YOU READING THIS AND NOT WRITING THE STORY AUTHOR GET BACK TO WORK SLAVE!!!
Sorry for the lack of updates recently. I was hit with a major writer's block, then a creative slump. This chapter might be a little rough due to my unwillingness to write anything (I forced myself to do it anyway), and a couple of my editors not responding back for a couple days. My impatience has gotten the better of me. 
Hope y'all enjoy!
"How much have I lost?"
"I refuse to acknowledge that train of thought!"
" When I talk I should..." (Capitalize 'i' )
"...where there are no unicorns..."
"Have I forgotten myself..."
""Some some weird unnatural vibe ..." (I believe you only wanted a single 'some' here.)
"What is Spike up to nowadays? " (remove the 's' on 'Spikes')
"She wants to go back and see at some weird statue." (Slight reword such as 'see some weird statue' or 'look at some weird statue')
"She watched as a the white one bounced away with a purple unicorn." (Remove 'a')
"...keeping the gray mare stayed in her sight." (Reword such as 'within her sight')
"...and this mare was her ticket to do so."
Some errors I came across while reading. If my posting it seems bothersome I shall refrain from doing so any further. I just like to get them out of my mind.
>>547558 Madness?
Thank you for the complement! 
Ohmygoshohmygoshohmygoshohmygosh!
Image: http://t2.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcSrSyMCtpKAKCwswuhI7BkghFVL77Gaw9_9vF_NAZJRGObLMX5s6g Image: http://t2.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcSnZTxKw8eJrd5rIaxzeHr8Q8-GMMpD7encTyyKgfQULA1l4uQEAAFriggin' pony overload! 
Reading, faving, liking, getting on the Spotlight cause this story is so friggin' AMAZING! This story just made www.fimfiction.net 20 FRIGGIN' % COOLER.
Image: http://t3.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcTNf6JLflt0k4UdqY27LMmLYoQd4xfyE9lbxj8L-cxOWe-NXazXNQGreat job! It deserves way more credit than it has now.
Brohoof?
Nope, you get one anyway~
Image: http://t2.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcR4qt7qS65x-ncqfR4CcKKzl9GDa3w2tcs_Uwk0WU8hAb5VjC3mEA Image: http://t1.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcRl2_74u021TWHuknYLXdstmk0WNXavNo81ii6RxM3IWrItn3slOgAnd now, I'll go tell everpony about this shit. 
I am so sorry about that. 
My only thought after reading the end of this chapter:
seriously, that ending is so wrong in so many ways
>>638140 >>638157 >>638255 Glad to see y'all enjoying to story! Hopefully the insanity and fun continue to please the audience!
>>638758 That was added in at the last minute. I overheard some children talking about Shriek at work and they joked about how funny the Gingerbread man was. That line popped into my head and I just couldn't leave it out.
Listening to Bloodhound Gang - The Bad Touch makes this even more fun
Liking the story so far, found a few errors in grammar and spelling that should be fixed, would recommend trying to find yourself an edtior now that you have enough people favoriting your story.
"I wonder how load I can make this ally echo?" should be "I wonder how loud I can make this alley echo." Ally was used instead of alley in several places.
shop... for woman. should be shop... for women in cases like these the noun be plural.
the moderators to the hid-and-go-seek game should be the moderators to the hide-and-go-seek game
city of talking ponies, Pegasus, and unicorns should be city of talking ponies, Pegasi, and unicorns Pegasi is plural of Pegasus
strange voice shouted out its treat to take over Canterlot should be strange voice shouted out its threat to take over Canterlot
She shuttered at the thought of being should be She shuddered at the thought of being
Thats all I got, keep up the good work.
>>671379 Many more chapter are to come! Let's spread the insanity all across FIMfiction!
>>671597 Grrr... I made half of those corrections, but the file must not have saved. Bloody temperamental computers! 
I am looking for a new editor now. My old one has disappeared recently. *tears*
*Story edited. Thanks for the corrections*
He's wearing a dress...
>>675118 Its not a dress, its a kilt!
>>675674 That was my goal. I have seen a lot of HiE fics that the human is always either a good guy or a bad guy... but what about a human that is in the gray area? This story is out of my comfort zone since I tend to write tragic and sad stories. Comedy is a fun new world to explore as a writer! Glad to have ya aboard on our insane adventures!
Aside from a few spelling and grammar issues (we'll have to work on those sometime in the WAG[Sweet monkey sphincter I made an acronym!]) I am thoroughly enjoying this story. I am a little confused about Paradox, but I guess that's kind of the point (being that he's a paradox and all) I look forward to more reading!
Good chapter, not much happened, but eh progression is not always interesting. Also if you need to some crazy inspiration, this might do the trick.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sByxMsCVdIA&feature=g-hist
Don't worry it's clean, just as insane as the germans can be.
>>744329 Yeah, setup chapters can be a little lacking, but hopefully chapter 10 is full of chuckles! (It's chapter 10, it has to be a big one!)
>>744345 Rock on Brony!
>>744381 As said previously in this comment, I am working to make Chapter 10 a chapter to remember! And we can never have enough crazy, so your video is perfect fuel for future works. (Not to mention I found the monkey band hilarious 
)
>>744391 Oh that is funny! I never put two and two together and thought this story would relate to Steve Austin! That is a hilarious image!
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