A gundam cross over, nice

Always nice to see another Gundam crossover.

I... can't really understand the story description. You could put it on Word and see if you can fix it to make it readable

>>654854654854 Sorry, Word couldn't help me with the description as far as I understand you. Maybe some constructive criticism can help improve the description itself.

I honestly cannot read this, half of it is non-sensical while also having terrible grammer, an obvious lack of actual editting, you explain nothing and genereally make no sense.

To make this readable you would honestly need about 3 hours of solid editting.

>>710167710167 Any idea on where to start?

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Image: http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v605/SSJJolt/0401_Gundam.jpg

Honestly? The first paragraph would be a good place to start. It's convoluted, rushed and that falcon comes out of nowhere. Heck, you could have used nearly 500 words just getting to that point. The description of the Gundam should have been expanded to nearly a paragraph in and of itself... that one paragraph should have taken a page to cover everything.

I wish i could show you my WIP fic to give you an example, however you'll just have to wait... Mobile Saddle Gundam Friendship is a fic being developed with great levels of love and care.

Mobile Saddle Gundam Friendship has been uploaded, I suggest you take a look to see what kind of quality you should be aiming for.