Wanderer D
19
342
156
Joined July 2011
10
1,781
Rainbow Dash gets a new birthday gift from Twilight Sparkle! But... she doesn't know how to do anything with it, so she asks Fluttershy for help. Can the shy pegasus survive a cooking lesson/session with Rainbow Dash?
This was my submission for the Two Hour challenge at EqD. I changed the ending slightly, no more than a few words.
... 
Dashie... XD What can one say? (Aside from poor Flutters!) Poor Lulu! Getting disrupted from her nap! But it was because of Fluttershy... GAH! Trevor can't win! He can't be mad at Flutters for messing up Lulu's nap, but poor Lulu's nap was interrupted due to Flutters! WHAT DOES TREVOR DO?!?!
It's a nice little short. The kind I love.
The comedic factor in this was rather... light. I smiled at some points, but didn't laugh at it. I guess this was your intention.
I like the writing style, it's simple and yet, not boring.
The ending is a little bit cartoony, but I guess that it's what you aimed for.
4/5
Reset Password
Resend Verification Email
1,781 ( 1,781 )
More
Less
Post Comment
Refresh
Rainbow n cooking 
Cancel
Send