Spike was accused of a crime he never committed and thus he was banished with most of his former friends turning their backs on him, but even so the young drake decides to start anew with a new dream; Gather a loyal crew and become the next Dragon King! Even more the former assistant now has to travel with an Temperamental Oni Swordsmen, an Teasing Mermaid, an Cowardly Cook, an Greedy Perverted Cheetah, an Clumsy Doctor with earthquakes powers, an Arrogant Royalty Researcher, an Extreme Party Samurai and an Undead Musician with horrible luck...So Can Anyone Say BINGO~!? Kamen Rider OOO AND Den-O Cross/X-Over!
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The beginning of this sound oddly like the beginning to my story, Legacy of Dragons and Knights. Either I'm curious as to where you go with this.
4158049 Well Thanks For Being The First Review! As For The Beginning, Well My Fic Was Inspired Not Only By One Piece But Also Yours. And If I Offend You Then I Apologize!
Either Way I Hope You Continue Your Badasses Fics!
GOOD LUCK!
PS: What You Liked The Most Of The Prologue?
>Everything starts from big letter
>broken bold
My eyes hurts.
4158098 Sorry About That, It's That I'm New To How To Write Fics. I'll Try To Fix It When I Can.
GOOD LUCK!
4158092 Don't worry about it, I don't mind. Besides I'm kinda flattered that one of my fics inspired you to make your own.
Anyway your fic is off to a good start. I like how you gave small glimpses of Spike's new team and I'm curious in what kind of powers you're planning to give Spike. Keep up the good work, this fic will probably go far.
the only two problems I had with the story (other than the constant, and probably broken, bold and italics) are:
1) that you had so much unnessessary stuff at the beginning. like reiterating the title and the plot, along with having "Cross/X-Over" instead of just saying "Crossover" because "x" is literally "cross" in that regard and other things like that (and I can go into details of the other things of that section that I didn't like, but that's just nitpicking at this point
2) the "|?: Somewhere In ...|" section practically negates the excitement that the other stories like One Piece provide: you don't know who's going to join the main character until the adventure brings them together... just having them state who's going to join at the very beginning just takes a good amout of the fun out of it
other than that, I did enjoy the story and I would like to see where it leads
4159077 Sorry About The Italics, As I Said I Am New.
1. For That, Force Of Habit, But This Is The Only Time This Will Happen.
2. That Was For A Teaser, Also Let's Say That They Won't Be The Only Ones To Join Spike...
GOOD LUCK!
4159322 I'm just putting it out there as a writer myself, when you're posting the story, it's good to have a prescript to say what the audience needs to know (if you're not putting it in the story itself) but it isn't necessary to have the summary in there when you have something before it that has it (and is the reason people begin to read it)
I'm not saying it's horrible, I'm just saying that I see it as an error to be fixed pleasantly for the sake of improving
4158049 Sounds more like one piece
Did You Know That When Every Word Starts With A Capital Letter, It Turns Your Story Into An Eyesore?
4165143 Fixed it, Thanks For Pointing Out.
GOOD LUCK!
PS: Love Your Avatar!
whens the next chapter?
Yay
You left out One Piece in the listing of stuff this is crossed with... Seriously, just the description makes it sound like One Piece.
Dude wake the hell up and continue it already.
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I know right!!
6277120 He probably won't though.
6852622 good point
6857312 I'm mostly judging that by the date since he even last looked at this thing. It needs to be adopted so it can be continued or in the least someone makes something a little similar.
Is anyone going to adopt this...
7228539 Hope so.
uncoordinated i suggest you FIX this chapter before making another especially at the end instead of doing all those random cut scenes you could actually have made those into full on chapters later if you ever got writers block also it was completely random fix yer stuff
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Update?
Alright I have a proposition what if I adopt the story
But I have a catch
I essentially remake the story with a new plot essentially everything that happens in the beginning happens but afterwards ill make things a bit more different.
Instead of betrayal resolution. a gray area if you will.
Not many may approve this change in pace for the story but it will at least clear up one more unfinished story in Fimfiction
So what do you guys say?
This is what you've been reduced to man. A Kishimoto lover and a lazy excuse for a writer, you let that yuigohfan mook influence you.
Will this continue?