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  • E Three Hundred and Fifty

    The future has everything that any pony could ever want. Twilight Sparkle wants to go home.
    48,448 words · 13,040 views  ·  2,050  ·  61
  • T Rainbownomicon

    Losing a friend is only tragic for those who don't know necromancy.
    3,621 words · 7,962 views  ·  1,284  ·  37 · gore
  • E Stormy Nights

    The desert is a hard to place to grow up for a pegasus who loves the rain.
    8,704 words · 2,039 views  ·  166  ·  4
  • E Stormy Nights 3: Darkened Skies

    Stormy runs away from her past.
    10,722 words · 811 views  ·  109  ·  5
  • E Ember and the Orb

    A filly seeks out an ancient treasure.
    6,384 words · 416 views  ·  36  ·  2

Blog Posts12

  • 38w, 6h
    From the Rejected Pile, Part 2

    There was a blog post here.

    It's gone now.

    4 comments · 147 views
  • 38w, 1d
    From the Rejected Pile, Part 1

    Or: Void Got Bored and Made a Silly Blog Post

    As part of the "Void Procrastinates on Writing an Actual Story" series, I figured I'd ramble on a few ideas that I came up with, but never wrote for some reason or another.

    If any of my plucky readers want to take one of these and run with it, feel free. Non-plucky readers need not apply.

    A Thing I Never Got a Title for

    I'd been playing with time travel for a bit. I came up with Twilight inventing magic rocks that made portals, then modifying them to be temporal as well as spatial. Past that, it was in hindsight a pretty bog-standard plot where Twilight sees a disaster in the future, tries to prevent it, and ends up causing it. Yawn. Also my editor said the rock-portal thing had been done.

    Time for a Change

    Again with the time travel. In this one, one of Chrysalis's minions managed to snag That Time Spell from the show before they got loved out of Canterlot, then used it to get back into the Starswirl Library while everypony was celebrating and looted the place.

    From there, they find out that Starswirl had allegedly come up with a way to alter a timeline (to give the changelings a second go at invading Canterlot), but never wrote down enough details to duplicate it.

    The first attempt, at murdering Twimom before Shining was born, not only failed, but ended up tipping off Equestria of the changelings' existence. Isn't causality fun?

    From there, the minions use time magic to try to hunt down Starswirl in space and time, stopping at various points in history in their search.

    Thing is, I see changelings as being masters of emotional manipulation. And combined with the illusion power on a time that has no way of preparing themselves? Yeah that'll get mighty dark mighty quick.

    Eventually they find Starswirl, and I was always fuzzy on the exact ending. They decide for whatever reason to not alter the timeline, and to keep the future they know instead of breaking it.

    I got about 1000 words in before I decided I couldn't do a plot of that scope well. Shame, I thought the title was absolutely brilliant.

    I finally got the time travel plot out of me with 350.

    What Goes Squeak in the Night.

    Rainbow Dash tells a vampony story one night, spooking the crap out of AJ. The next day Applejack wakes up to find one of her pigs got his blood sucked.

    According to Twilight, the last vampony (created by Nightmare Moon) was killed centuries ago. Applejack suspects Rainbow Dash, but a close examination of her neck reveals nothing. RD does catch her ogling her neck, though.

    But the vampony targeted an animal and not a pony. A kind one, or with a thing for animals? AJ suspects Fluttershy, but doesn't want to confront her openly, despite FS showing no signs of a vampony's weaknesses.

    Applejack makes up a story about zombie rabbits to get to her to visit the farm at night (to lead her to a garlic patch):

    "Oh my. I hope you get those taken care of. I'd hate for something to happen to Angel."

    "That's why I'm here, sugar. To figure out what to do about the undead comin' round the farm."

    (I liked that line.)

    Rainbow notices AJ's sudden interest in vampones plus breathing on her neck earlier, and thinks that AJ is the vampony.

    The garlic doesn't affect FS. AJ decides to go to Rarity to source some silver jewelry. Rarity wants to know why AJ wants a necklace all of a sudden. AJ makes up something about wanting to look fancy. Rarity hears what she wants to hear, and AJ gets the full makeover, and also a mirror.

    The silver has no effect on poor FS. AJ walks away, but finds that Fluttershy indeed doesn't have a reflection.

    AJ decides that, well, Fluttershy is still her friend, vampony or no. Then Apple Bloom gets bit.

    Applejack storms to the spa (where TS, PP, Rarity, and FS are) and confronts Fluttershy. Fluttershy has no idea what AJ is talking about. Rarity points out that the mirror is enchanted to only show the pony looking at it. Helps with dressing, you see. AJ half-heartedly flips up Fluttershy's mane... and finds bite marks. FS is as surprised as anypony that she's a vampony. Twilight is ecstatic at the chance to study a real live vampony, and the ponies reluctantly volunteer themselves to be blood donors should FS need them. D'aww.

    Rainbow Dash then bursts in with a hammer and stake for some awkwardness.

    In the epilogue, it is revealed that the vampire was not Fluttershy. It was Angel.

    The entire plot hinged on Applejack telling lies and having secrets, which rubbed me the wrong way, Element of Honesty and all that. Then a particular Season 4 episode put the nail in that coffin. Pun totally intended.

    I ended up repurposing "main 6 is an undead" into Rainbownomicon.

    I've got one more, but that'll be another post; it's pretty long.

    1 comments · 134 views
  • 41w, 4d
    Void Takes a Long Time to Write Something Short

    It's been, what, close to a year?

    But like the title implies, I am back in business peddling my horse stories on the side of the metaphorical road. Or one horse story, at any rate. The point is, expect something new in the next few days.

    Rainbow Dash will die in the first scene. It's a comedy.

    Coming Soon: Rainbownomicon

    7 comments · 145 views
  • 66w, 2d
    A Big Story Gets a Little Editing

    A fine fellow by the name of JustAnotherTimeLord said a whole lot of critical words in a few chapters about my story, so I did what I usually do and conscripted him to edit it. (Naw, he offered to. But watch your backs.) He helped me tweak out a whole bunch of little things about it, like at least 300 things, maybe 340.  Besides some grammar derps, the scene at the end of A Tree in Canterlot got expanded to hopefully get Sweetie's reasoning across better, and I added a scene at the start of the epilogue. Maybe some other things I'm forgetting; the editing took a while.

    So give the story a re-read and see if it's improved for ya any.

    6 comments · 217 views
  • 85w, 12h
    Void Ruins His Story

    So yeah, the finale sucks. Worse yet, there's no way to improve it.

    The entire story was structured around Twilight going back and Sweetie staying. That can't be changed. Not without what amounts to a complete top-to-bottom rewrite.

    Sweetie goes back? The CMC lasting to help future-Sweetie? Wouldn't happen. Without that, there's no Apple Crisp, no Spot light, no troupe. The Sweetie-statue? Makes no sense.

    Twilight stays? I don't like the idea of Twilight never seeing her friends ever again and being miserable in a world she doesn't fit in for the rest of her life. Maybe that's just me.

    Celestia telling Twilight the truth instead? Completely ruins the tension. And why wouldn't Twilight tell her how once she got back, and Celestia relay that to Twi in the future? The 10 year delay becomes nonsensical.

    From what I see, my options are:

    1) Redo the finale somehow. Having one with the same outcome but still acceptable seems to be beyond my abilities as a writer. If it's possible at all.

    2) Dump the epilogue I have into the fic and be done with this damn thing.

    3) Accept the story premise as unworkable, delete the last chapter, and mark it Cancelled.

    29 comments · 426 views
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This story is a sequel to Stormy Nights

A letter prompts Stormy to leave her home. An assignment to the Whinnypeg weather team is the first step towards her destiny, as well as a new friend. Meeting other pegasi for the first time in her life is thrilling, but can Stormy Nights live up to the expectations that her teammates place on her?

Thanks to Shiropoint, Silicas, and my other prereaders.

Cover art courtesy of Voodoo-Tiki

First Published
8th Apr 2012
Last Modified
3rd Jun 2012
#1 · 134w, 9h ago · 1 · · Chapter 1 ·

I don't always first-comment, but when I do, it's on my own stories.

Welcome to Stormy Nights 2. You're all lucky I waited until 2 was done before posting 1. It took a long, long, looong time to get the opening to this how I liked it. There were, like, four opening chapters that got rejected before I settled on this.

And as to how Stormy 2 earns that Sad tag? Well, let us read on and see, shall we?

#2 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Glad to see this get up, finally!

I really felt that this story was much better than the original, and I'm glad that the fans from EqD, trackers on FimFiction.net, and all the new readers will get to enjoy it too!

Just wait until you see the end; it's amazing.

#4 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>423382

How'd i know you would be one of the first viewers also? :D

#5 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I loves it! Moar, moar, moar. ^-^

#6 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Great so far, though I am dreading the fact that one of the new characters has a very similar name to a character I am using in a RPG so I will most likely keep getting the two confused from time to time.

Edit: ... Wow, I just noticed that it seems that my very similarly named RPG Character is in an RPG at the same site you originally posted this story at (though mine was probably made at an earlier date)... I really need to start paying more attention there I guess :facehoof:

#7 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Ha! When I loaded this the page said 3 views :rainbowwild: damn work callouts...

But seriously, I am soooo egare to read more, your works are just masterfully awesome! World needs more Stormy.:heart:

Gem
#8 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Good Work! Looking forward to more ^_^

#9 · 133w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Must read this!!!! :rainbowkiss:

#10 · 133w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Dipping into a bit of headcanon here. Figured that there was a way to make clouds before the machines were invented, and that Cloudsdale only services the major cities, leaving the little ones to DIY it.

Also Wobbler is fun to write.

#12 · 133w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Well, I suppose she's bound to make a few mistakes early on, given that she's a self-taught weather pony who's only resource for application was a desert reservoir. Still, at least she learns quickly. I just hope her personal indulgences aren't too off putting :rainbowkiss:

#13 · 133w, 17h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

How many people laughed at her? Fess up.

Wondering when it was going to get sad? Read the story again; it has been sad this entire time.

#14 · 133w, 16h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

I love this story :D

Gem
#15 · 133w, 11h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>448764

It Has?

*Reads Again*

MIND BLOWN

#16 · 133w, 10h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Clever. Definatly keep it up, it's nice to read good SHORT chapters for once rather then stuff that takes half an hour to say anything, this story is also the change of pace I've been needing, keep it up.

#17 · 132w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

A short chapter to finish off Stormy Nights 2. Sorry Stormy 2 is little shorter than Stormy 1 was. As usual, I'll get around to making some A/N blog post, so if there is anything you need clarified, ask away before then.

Hope you enjoyed. Thanks for reading.

Edit: Blog!

#18 · 132w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

Poor Stormy... Poor town... Poor Mayor... POOR STRAWBERRY! Seriously, she's going to be so sad and terrified for her friend when she gets that letter, it reads like a suicide note. I hope there's another installment down the road.

#19 · 132w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

...stormy... three?

#20 · 131w, 7h ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

Hm. I liked it, but I can't favorite something that's incomplete. Nothing was resolved, so the arc hasn't ended. Sorry brony, I can't let you start a Stormy Nights 3 without finishing Stormy 2. :derpytongue2:

#21 · 130w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

This story... *cries*

It's so short for each chapter that it makes me savor it even more!

*cries*

#22 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

I never laughed at her once, HAH!

#23 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

I don't let my failures get me down! As long as no one is permanently injured or killed, I will go about my experiments with a zeal that only a scientist could have!

Granted, I am impulsive at times, but it seems like Stormy has a case of guilt. She needs a good friend, an intervention, and some cider.

#24 · 130w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

>>530226  Bah!  I AM a scientist!  Our zeal is only rewarded when people are injured and die!  Preferably by THE MILLIONS!!!  *insane cackle!!  He's a MAD SCIENTIST!!!  From the South Jersey Shore even!*   GENTLEMEN.... BEHOLD!!!  :pinkiecrazy:

#25 · 130w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

>>536378

PRESS THE BUTTON!

MUAHAHAHHAHAHAHHAHAAHHAA...

*explosion*

Errr.... I got carried away there, sorry everyo-

Hello? Is anyone there? Anyone?

D:

#26 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

coulda done more with that. kinda ends abruptly

#27 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

I'm sorry, but the ending is just.... unfinished. I was reading and I got the impression that I was actually moving towards the CLIMAX of the story rather than have it already happened.

Yeah, Stormy did a stupid thing and made some people fear him. He learned nothing, nothing was confronted, nothing really gained.

I'm sorry, but this just bummed me. Hence why I gave it a thumbs down.

#28 · 128w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

>>585379

If Stormy learned, improved, and grew, then this wouldn't be a sad fic, now would it? The whole point of the story is that everything falls apart around her.

But you could well argue that she 'learned' that she was a danger to everypony around her. That's something she didn't know at the beginning.

Oh and Stormy's a girl. I don't know how you can read 15,000 words about her and miss that.

#29 · 128w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

>>587289

First, I did notice Stormy is a girl. It just skipped my mind. :twilightsheepish: Gender does not play much importance in my mind when it comes to ponies.

I would argue about the points about what he "learned" (submitting to an old insecurity is not "learning" and depression doesn't "teach" you anything, and yes, I know from personal experience) and what he didn't, but that would be pointless. It would boil down to personal preference, which would be pointless to argue.

So, please don't take my negative feedback too deep or anything. I just read through Stormy Nights one and I went to reading In The Clouds without noticing the "sad" tag. I still think that the ending is not really satisfying though.

#30 · 127w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

Indeed it looks like cliffhanger in the end of the chapter, not like final of story.

But I liked it anyway (except of chapter 4 to be honest).

Looking forward for Stormy Nights 3...

#31 · 126w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I'm not liking that Sad tag. Not one bit.

#32 · 126w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

A CLIFFHANGER!??!!?!? You pester me for a week to read this and you're leaving it at a got damn cliffhanger? I'm soooooo going to strangle you.

#33 · 124w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

I laughed. But mostly because I thought it was a quirk like Derpy's eyes, nothing detrimental but just something to make her stand out and be unique.

#34 · 96w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Wobbler, he is so funny, reminds me of an old anime

#35 · 96w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

this fic is much interesting than I expected,

will be reading chapter 3 now, seeing a happy Strawberry

#36 · 94w, 5d ago · 1 · · Chapter 3 ·

>>448764 If Wobbler isn't sad about her wing anymore I don't see why I should be. Circumstances are only as bad as we make them.

#37 · 6w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

I don't think a broken wing was the only thing that was damaged by the ceiling falling down...

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