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  • T Mission: Implausible

    Octavia and Vinyl Scratch: Musicians and secret agents.
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  • T You Only Live Twice

    Secret agents Vinyl and Octavia reunite to tackle a threat to Canterlot.
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  • E Trains, Carriages and Airships

    What should be a simple overnight ride turns into a three day trip from hell.
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  • T Maybe

    Some ponies never change. Prince Blueblood is one of them.
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  • E Rest Stop

    At a rest stop on her way to Appleloosa, Twilight Sparkle has a rare moment to reflect...
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  • T When the Curtain Falls

    An incident in a Manehattan theater quickly draws secret agents Vinyl Scratch and Octavia into a hunt for a strange killer.
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  • T The West Is Not Enough

    Secret agents Vinyl Scratch and Octavia find themselves locked in an epic struggle against a ruthless group of outlaws in the wild west.
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  • T The Wreck

    A.K. Yearling is haunted by dreams of a shipwreck...
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  • 1w, 1d
    Well, that was fun

    So now that things have calmed down a bit and the dust has settled, let’s talk about what just happened here.

    I’ve been teasing the idea of doing some sort of second-person HiE clop trollfic for a while now, and it’s mainly because of the Suffer series. After reading so much clop on the feature box, grumbling over its tired clichés and tropes, and idly wondering what gets into the box and why, the allure of trying it for myself became irresistible. Just for a moment, I would cast aside any pretenses of quality or respectability and shamelessly embody “The Player” that I had spoken of.

    I mean, come on. If I’m gonna keep talking about this stuff, I might as well try it for myself, right? Plus there was just the fun of poking fun at all these easily mockable tropes. Good times!

    When I posted the fic, there were three things I was hoping for:

    1) Get on the feature box. Check. (Though this was mainly so that I could…)

    2) ”Suffer” my own story. Check. (This was the most important one to me. When all is said and done, I have a feeling that the crowning achievement of the Suffer series will have been the excuse to utter the phrase “The Feature Box Suffers John Perry.”)

    3) And finally: Force RainbowBob to suffer my story. Ch– Oh. Hmm.

    Well, two out of three ain’t bad! There were also a couple of things to come out of this story that I hadn’t expected, but that I loved: one was finding out that Sethisto had read it, and the other was seeing this fic get more downvotes than the rest of my stories combined.

    Actually, let’s talk about those downvotes for a moment. I have literally never seen a worse upvote/downvote ratio in the feature box than my fic. I’ve been told 1 to 1 has happened in the past, and I believe it, but the worse I had personally witnessed was in the ballpark of 2 to 1 (2 upvotes to 1 downvote). When my fic was in the box, it was around 1.8 to 1. (As of writing, it’s dropped down to around 1.4 to 1.)

    And I love it. While it doesn’t exactly speak well to the mechanisms of the feature box that such a poorly received fic managed to remain in the box, I can’t help but take heart in the fact that so many people saw this premise and immediately went “NO.” Which isn’t to say that everyone who downvoted it did so without reading it; there were plenty of people who went in expecting clop and were disappointed to be reading a trollfic, or who were put off by the overt crudeness of the fic (fair enough; it definitely isn’t for everyone). But there were undoubtedly a lot of people who downvoted on sight, probably without realizing what this thing was.

    And to be fair, it looks like a clopfic from the cover. Most people on FIMFiction wouldn’t recognize my name, and if you don’t know any of my other work (namely the Suffer series) there’s probably no way you could have known that it was meant in jest.

    So kudos to those who tried their darndest to keep this blatant piece of feature bait off the feature box. But I think what we’ve learned is that downvoting en masse is a terrible way to try to keep something off the box. It might be more effective to just ignore it and hope it falls off the box due to lack of “heat”.

    So now that that’s over with, I return to my normal suffering of the feature box. I’ve had my fun, and now I’m at least one step closer to understanding the strange mistress that is the feature box.

    A big thank you to all you guys for indulging me in my insanity. Kudos all around!

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  • 1w, 3d
    The Feature Box Suffers John Perry

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  • 1w, 3d
    SEX! ...And now that I have your attention: SEX!!!

    You know, after you read enough clop in the feature box, re-reading the same tropes and even what feel like the exact same lines over and over again, at some point you start thinking, "Well, shit. I could do this."

    So, uh... I did it.

    Okay, strictly speaking, it's a clopfic parody, but make no mistake: there's clop. And if you're not feeling too squeamish, I would be most appreciative if you could drop whatever you're doing, right this second, and read/like it. If you like, you can think of it as one of my Suffer reviews of a clopfic... but much longer and in the form of a story.

    Ladies and gentlemen, allow me to present my single greatest piece of feature bait...

    Rainbow Dash Gets You Laid

    (Link goes to my recent stories page, since this might be too hot to link directly to in a blog!)

    In other news, in case you haven't already seen it, the Royal Canterlot Library did an "Ask Us Anything" post to celebrate the group's first anniversary, and we got a lot of great questions. Some of them are specific to the RCL, although there were some questions addressed more to the individual curators, so if you want to see more ramblings from me, along with noted reviewers Chris, Present Perfect, and horizon, go check that out.

    But you know, after you read the clopfic, obviously.

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  • 2w, 2d
    John Perry Suffers... John Perry

    Guys, I’ll be honest. I’m just not feeling the feature box today. It’s not that there isn’t anything good (bad?) in there, it’s just that I’m not feeling it, you know? Some days you feel the creative juices flowing, ready to take on the world, and other days you look at the front page and see a Castlevania crossover, “you” screwing human Luna, and BMiH (Big Mac in Human) and just shake your head.

    Yawn. Where’s the challenge in that?

    So instead, I thought I'd do something I've been thinking about doing for a while: trying to disown some of my early stories.

    Now, let me clarify that I'm not talking about deleting these stories or anything so drastic. I've speculated about doing that before, and nothing good lies down that sordid path. Nevertheless, I’m perfectly willing to throw these stories under the bus for the sake of a cheap laugh.

    Writer’s Block

    Basic summary: Twilight gets writer’s block while writing a friendship report, then asks her friends for help.

    What was I thinking? “Get it? It’s called ‘Writer’s Block’ because we all experience writer’s block! Pretty clever, huh? …Guys? Guys?”

    Why it sucks: I feel pretty ambivalent about this one these days, and all told I can think of far worse ways to debut one’s fan fiction career. Of course, there’s not really enough to this fic to feel anything but ambivalent, because it’s pretty nothing.

    Overlooking the overly tell-y prose and the weirdly meandering path the story takes despite its simple premise (“But I have so many cool worldbuilding ideas!” past me must have thought as he inserted another meaningless aside into what should have been a straightforward story), this fic commits that cardinal sin that many first-time ponyfic writers make of trying to cram all of the Mane Six somewhere into the story to make it as “show-faithful” as possible. Hell, even the CMC show up for a moment (which I think is the one and only time I’ve tried to incorporate them into one of my stories), but only to do a clichéd “CUTIE MARK CRUSADER ________S YAY!” line. Wow, real original, past John.

    What ultimately did this fic in for me was the episode Lesson Zero. Once I got over the novelty of knowing that the show writers had a vaguely similar idea to mine (Twilight doesn’t have a friendship report ready), the lasting impression was that Lesson Zero simply did it way, way better than I did. We don’t really think of it today, because it has so solidly become part of the MLP mythos, but the idea of Twilight as neurotic spaz really began with that episode. Lesson Zero added this whole other side to Twilight’s character that didn’t just make sense, but was really funny and memorable, to the point that it defined her character for quite a while there.

    What have we learned: Don’t try to cram so many characters into your stories. And if you hear that a future episode has a similar plot device to one of your stories, just give in to despair now.

    Legion of Gloom (and its sequels)

    Basic summary: All of the minor antagonists from season one (Trixie, Gilda, Prince Blueblood, the Diamond Dogs, etc.) unite to get revenge on the Mane Six. Hilarity fails to ensue.

    What was I thinking? “Hang on, has no one done a Legion of Doom-esque villain team with MLP characters? Shit, I gotta lay my claim! That’s a gold mine just waiting to pay off!”

    Why it sucks: When I think of this fic today, all I can think of is the word “random.”

    Also, the words “uninspired meta humor and pop culture references.”

    Also “stupid.”

    You know, I probably would have felt a whole lot better about this fic if I hadn’t completely and utterly botched the idea with the two sequels. On its own, the first fic isn’t anything great, but it was at least a fairly straightforward, if absurdly short, fic played for a few laughs. For the sequels, I very deliberately cast sanity to the wind, with the result of turning the whole thing into a giant clusterfuck. The first story was ludicrously oversaturated with characters as it is, between the Main Six and six antagonists, so what did I do for the sequels? Add six background characters! Plus a couple more villains! THE MORE THE MERRIER, AMIRITE?! HOLY FUCK WHY CAN’T I HANDLE ALL THESE CHARACTERS?!?

    Oh well. At least I had fun writing them at the time. But in retrospect, I wish I hadn’t invested as much time as I did into them (which wasn’t a whole lot, to be perfectly honest, but still too much for what they are). I think the reaction to these fics gave me a false sense of what this fandom looks for in its stories, which set the stage for a whole lot of stumbling in the dark on my part, as I tried to figure out what “my thing” was. Oh well, I guess you gotta stumble in order to get back up.


    Rest Stop

    Basic summary: Twilight is taking a train across the west and is feeling particularly moody. She meets Trixie at a rest stop.

    What was I thinking? “Well great, I’m stuck at this rest stop in the middle of nowhere while I wait for my bus driver to finish up and start driving again. And now my iPod battery is dead, and I forgot to bring something to read, so I’ve got nothing to occupy myself. God, my life sucks. Maybe I can write a story about this when I get home.”

    Why it sucks: Ngggh… this, to me, is the biggest stain on my fan fiction bibliography. This is the story I want to distance myself from more than any other, because when I look at it now, I think it says all the wrong things about who I am as an author. It’s not my absolutely worst fic, but it has gained this enduring attention since it somehow became a 6-star Equestria Daily story (back in the days when they still had that rating system). It’s that perfect combination of popularity and personal distaste that makes me want to delete this fic if I thought I could get away with it without anyone noticing. Even today, I get a notification once in a while that someone has favorited this story, and every time that happens I die a little inside.

    So why do I hate this story so much? Well, to be honest, I think it has less to do with the story itself and more because of what it came from. (But the story doesn’t help.) It has this immature, whiny tone that’s more fitting to a mopey teenager than any self-respecting adult. It is a product of a moment in my life I’d rather forget, when I had soured my outlook on the world and allowed all my childish insecurities and selfishness to surface. Nowadays I don’t want readers to identify with Twilight in this story, because she is basically just me at my lowest point: an overly sentimental, insecure person who has given in to depression, who in a moment of stress decided he has no agency over his life before curling up into a ball and becoming a surly recluse. None of the inner strength and confidence of Twilight’s character is shown here, it’s all cast aside so that I could have my little moping session. Everything I tell myself and I tell others about who I am is challenged by this fic, this reminder of my foulest side.

    I hate this story. I hate it so fucking much.

    The real kicker here is that this was never supposed to be posted to Equestria Daily in the first place. After writing it over the span of a day and a half, I submitted it to EQD, then I got a note back pointing out some grammar errors along with one or two more serious issues that would take some rewriting to address. I replied that I would look into addressing it, then I cleaned up the grammar stuff and left the more serious issues alone. By that point, my drive to continue working on this thing had already dried up, so I just chalked the fic off as something I would look into fixing at a later point, or just never touch again and never get posted to EQD. But a day or two later, it got posted to EQD anyway, with no one notifying me. I figure there was some mix-up behind the scenes where it got into the posting queue when it should have gone into the resubmission pile, but the end result is that it got posted, and then got some stupid high rating it never deserved.

    What have we learned: Just because something felt good to write the other night doesn’t mean you should stick with it. Sleep on it. Whatever you post will stick around for a long time, so you’d better be comfortable with it for the long haul.

    A Princess Carol

    Basic summary: Princess Luna remembers Hearth’s Warming Day very differently from how it’s currently being celebrated. Parody of A Christmas Carol ensues.

    What was I thinking? “Hey, I’ll write a holiday story! And I’ll put in some message about all that ‘War on Christmas’ crap.”

    Why it sucks: I’m not sure how to feel about this one nowadays. I think my disdain for it has less to do with the story itself and more to do with overexposure to this story. See, a couple years back someone approached me who was interested in doing a rather ambitious dramatic reading of the story. “Dramatic” wound up describing the project itself, when a rather bizarre amount of ego started infecting the whole thing, and by the end I wound up biting off the head of the guy running the thing (who was the only guy in this project I ever had any contact with) and never spoke to him again.

    So… yeah. That was fun.

    I think there’s kind of a nifty idea in this story, but the execution leaves a fair amount to be desired. The biggest complaint I got was the application of Luna’s olde English, something which, quite frankly, I could not give two shits about. I’m more worried about whether the intended message got through the dense fog of Christmas Carol-isms and odd asides I made while writing this. These days, I also question whether it makes any sense whatsoever to incorporate a message like that into a ponyfic.

    What have we learned: Don’t get involved in big projects if you don’t know the people involved. Also, never write anything with Olde English ever again.

    Mission: Implausible (and its sequels)

    Basic summary: Vinyl and Octavia are secret agents.

    What was I thinking? “People like Vinyl and Octavia, right? And people like secret agents, right?”

    Why it sucks: Okay, so compared to the previous fics I mentioned, I have far, far less disdain for this one. In fact, I’m still pretty okay with this series, all things considered. That said, when you have one thing that’s far, far more popular than your other stuff, you wind up constantly returning to the question of whether it accurately reflects your ability as a writer and your body of work. And the further I get away from these stories, the more I’m inclined to think that it doesn’t.

    Present Perfect recently remarked that, to his disappointment, he felt like he was becoming known more for his reviews than his stories. I think I’m in the same situation, but rather than disappointment I welcome it. In a situation like mine, the best thing you can be known for is whatever your most recent work is, since that’s usually the thing where you used the most of that talent you’ve been building up all this time. Although I’d be kidding myself if I said I had earned name recognition from Mission: Implausible, it was still far and away my most popular work prior to my Suffer series.

    My friend RTStephens once said that an issue with these stories is that I get “too descriptive of the different locations ... I wouldn't say it devolves into scenery porn, but some descriptions of San Franciscolt … seem unnecessary to the plot and come across more like a tour guide giving a practiced speech.” I think he might have been too generous; they are scenery porn, full of moments where I was obviously more interested in the setting or trying out some bit of worldbuilding than in telling a story.

    Also, I recently came across the pun “San Prancesco” in a friend's work, and that pun is so awesome I feel ashamed for ever thinking “San Franciscolt” was adequate. I'm hanging up the pun cap; that's it. I'm done.

    And when I was interested in telling a story, I couldn’t even keep a consistent tone. This, more than anything else, is what irks me about the series as a whole. One story would be played for laughs (for the most part), and then I would get bored of that and try something more serious, and then I would get bored of that and switch back. It doesn’t reflect well on the series as a whole, and makes the whole thing a pretty mixed bag.

    What have we learned: Stay focused on your actual story; don’t wander off into worldbuilding excursions just ‘cause you can. And for god’s sake, try to keep a consistent tone.

    Well, that's enough for now. Now go read my more recent stories, and tell me I'm a better writer than that John Perry impostor who wrote all this crap.

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  • ...

Today he is known as the most important conjurer of the pre-classical era, the inventor of many a useful spell and the mentor to one of the most important figures in history.  But for all his magical and scholarly achievements, there is another side to Star Swirl the Bearded, a political ideology that many of his contemporaries sought to bury and forget.  This is the tale of the last journey of one of ponykind’s most unusual figures and the role he played in the events that led to the founding of a nation.

First Published
29th Mar 2012
Last Modified
17th Jul 2012
#1 · 133w, 5d ago · · · Act I: Chapter I ·

Oh sweet Glory, this is amazing!

I... I feel complete now. I feel like going through all the trollfics and abominations has all be worth it now!

Tracked and favorited.

#2 · 133w, 5d ago · · · Act I: Chapter I ·

Interesting, tracking! I love these kind of historical and adventure stuff! :twilightsheepish:

#3 · 133w, 4d ago · · · Act I: Chapter I ·

That was, I feel, the start of something rather epic. I love your portrayal of Star Swirl, Clover and the politics of the pre-classical era. :twilightsmile:

#4 · 133w, 4d ago · · · Act I: Chapter I ·

I've been looking forward to this ever since you teased it on your blog. Now, one chapter in, and I love Star Swirl already. The guy knows how to throw down and suss out in equal measures. I'm looking forward to how this adventure is going to play out.

Heh, Red Tape. I love it. You are really good with coming up with puns for pony names.

This setup is rather neat since it's obvious to us that the unicorns will not head Star Swirl's advice. Depending on how this goes, I can see a bit of tragedy slipping in regarding Star Swirl's ultimate fate. But, now I'm speculating too much and need to just let the story flow naturally.

Looking forward to more!

#5 · 131w, 3d ago · · · Act I: Chapter II ·

Really digging the story and the world building. I also like the little touches that call back to The Hobbit, with Star Swirl's Gandalf impression (though still being his own character) and Humble Pie's "unexpected party."

Looks like the plot will be kicked into high gear next time. Looking forward to it!

#6 · 131w, 3d ago · · · Act I: Chapter II ·


Me too. The nods to the Hobbit really made me smile. The world building is coming along great. :moustache:

#7 · 131w, 1d ago · · · Act I: Chapter II ·

No, I don't need to say anything.

Faved. Tracking.

#8 · 131w, 1d ago · · · Act I: Chapter II ·

OMG, I am getting The Hobbit flashbacks so bad, I almost couldn't finish the chapter I was smiling so widely.

#9 · 131w, 16h ago · · · Act I: Chapter II ·

Awesome. But it's been a while since I've read the Hobbit, and this story's very nice in its own right. :twilightblush:

#10 · 131w, 8h ago · · · Act I: Chapter II ·

Its great.

#11 · 130w, 6d ago · · · Act I: Chapter II ·

This looks good.

#12 · 130w, 5d ago · · · Act I: Chapter II ·

Hey, hey! This is looking like it's going to be a really fun ride! The Hobbit homage's are really quite awesome, yet it is managing to stand alone with its own sources of tension building. The chapters are a little on the short side, but hey, at least the pacing is good! Some pretty nice world construction, as well. I am rather enjoying it.

Overall, I am liking where this is going. Keep it up!

#13 · 130w, 1d ago · · · Act I: Chapter III ·

I said this before, but I like where this is going. I like that Humble Pie isn't a direct copy of Bilbo and that he's got a better reason to be going on this adventure. He actually has some prejudice (minor but it's still there) of other races, particularly the pegasus. So, I look forward to seeing how he adjusts to being included in a pack of 'em.

Now we have the plot, so ADVENTURE TIME!

Better be careful stepping out that door. It's dangerous business.

#14 · 130w, 1d ago · · · Act I: Chapter III ·

I like Star Swirl's reasons for getting this quest together. All the characters reasons and motivations for going all make sense.  This is looking like it will be a fun read all the way to the end. Keep it up. :twilightsmile:

#15 · 130w, 1d ago · · · Act I: Chapter III ·

Oh, I do so hope that Humble Pie and the dragon have a brag-off. Humble Pie, barrel rider!

#16 · 130w, 1d ago · · · Act I: Chapter III ·

Haha, this is awesome.

#17 · 130w, 1d ago · · · Act I: Chapter III ·

This is very interesting, i must say it has a VERY The hobbit feel to it.

btw here some song from the movie inspired by said book.

(This one very fitting if encountering Diamond dogs)


(And this fitting if facing Changeling.)


#18 · 130w, 1d ago · · · Act I: Chapter I ·

Now this is good stuff, really i must say its a good start to it.

#19 · 130w, 1d ago · · · Act I: Chapter II ·

i like how you introduce star swirls traveling companion (Btw another good song that would be good for chap three is this

The greatest adventure


#20 · 130w, 13h ago · · · Act I: Chapter I ·

After reading the first chapter, I feel this is missing a strong hook. But lets see how this continues.

#21 · 130w, 12h ago · · · Act I: Chapter III ·

OK, now there is definately a strong hook. But now I am missing the songs from the hobbit. Five pegasi singing about their misty mountain clouds. :raritywink:

#22 · 129w, 3d ago · · · Act I: Chapter III ·

It's a really a shame that there exist so few classical fimfics.  But, after seeing this, I feel like just one does the trick.  Because this is amazing!  I expect nothing but the most epic of epic quests in the chapters to come.  :pinkiehappy:

#23 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Act I: Chapter III ·

cant wait for the next part

#24 · 128w, 1d ago · · · Act II: Chapter I ·

And the journey begins! :pinkiehappy:

#25 · 128w, 1d ago · · · Act II: Chapter I ·

Humble Pie has got to be one of the best OC ponies EVAR. :rainbowkiss:

#26 · 128w, 1d ago · · · Act II: Chapter I ·


And yet he's so modest.:twilightsmile:

I've shared my thoughts on things though I'll comment again in that I looking forward to seeing more!

For the Hoofshire!

#27 · 128w, 1d ago · · · Act II: Chapter I ·

OH NOES :pinkiegasp:

Incoming unknown pairs of eyes. GET UP YOU GUYS :raritydespair:

#28 · 128w, 1d ago · · · Act II: Chapter I ·

Looking good!

#29 · 128w, 1d ago · · · Act II: Chapter I ·

I like how well this story blends what we know of the political climate, and the story of adventure.

#30 · 127w, 5d ago · · · Act II: Chapter I ·

Oh dear either thieves, or cutthroats. Either way not good!

#31 · 127w, 5d ago · · · Act II: Chapter I ·

Sorry i mean beast for the second one.

#32 · 127w, 4d ago · · · Act II: Chapter II ·

This chapter eases us into the danger part of the journey very well. No serious harm is done, but it gives the ponies (and us) the wake-up call needed that danger is on the way.

I think we've all had that moment where emotions get the better of us and we can't hold it in. Humble Pie really comes off as, forgive the analogy, human. When written right, it doesn't matter if the story is about ponies or any other type of creature. Equines might be the shape that these characters take, but they still show all the quibbles that make us who we are. Well done.

Looking forward to how events go from here!

#33 · 127w, 4d ago · · · Act II: Chapter II ·

Love the explaination for the bells.

#34 · 127w, 4d ago · · · Act II: Chapter II ·

Oh, Swift Cloud and Humble Pie.  She really tries, and is just a tad socially awkward. :twilightblush:  But hey, at least she's genuinely caring for Humble Pie.  (Who is still the best of all OC ponies. :rainbowkiss:)  

#35 · 127w, 4d ago · · · Act II: Chapter II ·

pretty good interaction with oc and eases us into the danger part of the journey, good work

#36 · 127w, 10h ago · · · Act II: Chapter II ·

This story inspired me to re-read The Hobbit, There and Back Again, or the Red Book, depending on which version you pick.

I likes. I likes very much. :yay:

#37 · 126w, 3d ago · · · Act II: Chapter III ·

I'm curious to see what these new creatures look like. Given what I know of sirens from Greek mythology, I doubt they're calling the ponies in for a spot of tea.

I also like the growing relationship that Humble Pie is having with Swift Cloud. Though, Humble should realize that you should never start a sentence with, "Don't take this the wrong way." It's always taken the wrong way. Especially when speaking to a woman.:trixieshiftleft:

And it seems that Star Swirl and Humble can get on each others' nerves. I'm wondering if that will lead to anything.

Good goin'! Looking forward to more!

#38 · 126w, 3d ago · · · Act II: Chapter III ·

Hmn, and now I am wondering if Pinkie Pie is going to get a little pegasi in her ancestry. :pinkiegasp:

#39 · 126w, 2d ago · · · Act II: Chapter III ·

Awesome. Looking forward to the next chapter.

#40 · 126w, 2d ago · · · Act II: Chapter III ·

Am I the only one who went back to check if Humble Pie has a wife?

#41 · 126w, 10h ago · · · Act II: Chapter III ·

Bilbo meets smaug


love this chap nice to see star swirl and humble interaction very interesting, also now we see Siren in action, not good.

#42 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Act II: Chapter IV ·

Featured! At least for now.

Ah, a fake out. Or perhaps a team-up of two sets of creatures? Double whammy!

I had to laugh when Swift Cloud hid herself in a cloud, as all I could think of was that picture of Rainbow Dash with most of her body in a cloud and going, "Beep. Beep. I'mma jeep!" At least I thought it was funny.

Oh, and Swift Cloud and Humble Pie seem to be getting closer with each encounter. Interesting...

Till next time!

#43 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Act II: Chapter IV ·

Humble Pie and Swift Cloud, OTP.

>>640815 I had that exact same thought about the cloud.

#44 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Act II: Chapter IV ·

Aw yeah Swift Cloud/ Humble Pie shipping

#45 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Act II: Chapter IV ·

Another great chapter. This is a lot of fun, haha!

#46 · 125w, 1d ago · · · Act II: Chapter V ·

Star Swirl really knows how to throw down when needed. When in doubt, kill it with fire!

Heh, Hurricane's going to be eating her words next time at being saved by an earth and unicorn pony. That won't end well.

And Tempest starts entering the fray! That sword of hers was just itching to bust out and start powning everything in sight.

As always, looking forward to more!

#47 · 125w, 1d ago · · · Act II: Chapter V ·

Hurricane is so never going to live it down that she was save by both a unicorn and a earth pony.

but seriously Tempest and Star swirl are badass!

#48 · 125w, 1d ago · · · Act II: Chapter V ·

Couldn't resist, sorry. Read the ASOIAF too recently.

Anyways, I really enjoy reading this story and as I have finally found cause to post, I'm going to tell you that you're awesome and should feel awesome.

#49 · 125w, 1d ago · · · Act II: Chapter V ·

Excellent chapter. I'm really enjoying this series.

It's going to be tough to read/watch LOTR without imagining Gandalf having little bells on his hat though

#50 · 125w, 1d ago · · · Act II: Chapter V ·

Star Swirl the Bearded? More like Star Swirl the Badass! :rainbowdetermined2:

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