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KiwiFreakinBlitz


The following statement is true; the preceding statement is false.

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Rainbow Dash loves hanging out with Pinkie Pie. They practically spend all their waking moments together anymore, and despite her life being a little slower to accommodate the party pony, the cyan pegasus couldn't be happier with their relationship.

Pinkie Pie couldn't agree more!

...except she's a little confused on one aspect of their relationship, and while on a picnic with her Dashie, she brings up a perfectly reasonable question: Are they or aren't they?

RainbowPie shipping, a light and fluffy one-shot dealing with Best Pony OTP

coverart belongs to White Diamonds LTD

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 12 )

Cute, enjoyable oneshot. I can give you a more in-depth review if you'd like.

4163475 I'm glad you liked it! And please, whenever you have the time, I'd love to see your thoughts on it more in-depth, darling. :raritywink:

And here is my overly detailed review! I will grade this story on four different categories; plot, pacing, details, and grammar. Each will be given a score of zero to four, with zero being horrendous and 4 being amazing. Spoilers may be incoming, and while the review in full will be spoilertext, here's your warning anyway.


Category 1: Plot. All right. Pretty bog-standard if you get down to it, but the formula has been proven to work time and time again, and this is no exception. Always been a fan of the pairing as well. 2.5 of 4.0. Category 2: Pacing. Well-paced. Things got off to a sudden start with the opening line, before backpedaling slightly and explaining the situation at hand. Once again, a standard technique, but an effective one nonetheless. Things did tend to move at a pretty smooth pace from then on, though, which is surprisingly not a good thing. 2.75 of 4.0. Category 3: Details. This lets the story down a fair bit, as not too many were added. Sure, there were some, but not that many. And, possibly worst of all, none were given to the two main characters Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie. Yeah, I know what they look like anyway(:pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2:) and so do many others, but that doesn't excuse the downright bad detailing given to them, or most other things, in this work. And also, why anthrod? I'm not trying to pick on anthro here, as it has its place, but in this story, it was downright unnecessary. I mean, honestly, was there any mention of their bodies to necessitate them to be in any way humanoid at all? I recall one mention of hands, but it was brief, and without that, you could have called this a regular full-pony story and I wouldn't have known the difference at all. 2.0 of 4.0. Category 4: Grammar. Couldn't find any errors at all, and while I may have missed a few, the fact that I didn't see any means they didn't detract in any way, so good on ya! 4.0 of 4.0. Now, to average it out... and you've got yourself a 2.8125 of 4.0. The biggest issue with this story is the predictability. It goes for a typical pony shipping, but makes no attempt at all to be anything more than that. Even so, I enjoyed it, so I feel that the score is deserved.

The way past cool pony

OMG. Accidental Sonic reference.

Interesting, but I also saw little need for the Anthro tag. Other than that, jolly good show.

Not bad, not bad. Unfortunately, as is with every time I'm not busy writing, I had my hawk eyes in for spelling and such. Nothing major. I remember exactly one misspell.

Shaking her hesitance form her mind and clearing her throat,

Just going on context, I think it's safe to assume you meant "from" instead of "form" here. Aside from that, this was basically perfect as far as spelling and grammar. At least, as far as my eyes are concerned. By the way, don't let my stories fool you. That's saying quite a bit. I'm really good at nit-picking grammar on reflex.

Oh, also, liked the story. Wasn't too sure what to expect, but it was nice. I think there may have been some very minor flow issues, but that can be somewhat opinionated, so don't pay much mind there. All in all, good show.

~Grand Panda

OMG so cute!

liked+faved!

This was pretty sub par.

S'alright. It's not the greatest, but pretty entertaining.

Breasts (Bosom) were mentioned once, so I guess that's what qualifies this for the Anthro?

"So, Dashie, are we dating? Because I think we're dating, but I wanted to consult with you first, because I would hate to ignore your feelings on the matter."
:rainbowlaugh:
This was cute, and the characterisation was really good. Also you kept up that kind of innocent back and forth Dash and Pinkie have got going on which was really nice. :pinkiesmile:

4315885 Indeed, darling. It follows the 3 Rules of MLP:FIM;

1. Rarity is Best Pony.
2. Luna is Best Princess.
3. Rainbow Pie is Best Shipping.

Thanks for commenting. :raritywink:

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