[Second person narrative]
[You + Rainbow Dash/Fluttershy]
You're a fast-flying, teenage pegasus colt with dreams of glory! Having just transferred to a new boarding school in Cloudsdale, you're looking forward to meeting new friends, joining the wingball team, and finally hanging out with fellow pegasi. This year's going to be so awesome!
Except you're the only pegasus around without a cutie mark. And everyone already seems to think you're a total loser, before they've even met you. And your only friend can hardly stand up for herself, much less you. And you're convinced a certain rainbow-maned mare is out to ruin your life. Yep, awesome.
This is the story of your high school days at Wingbury Academy.
Chapters (14)
Ah, high school. Seems exactly like how it's been for me these past couple years, lol.
Burn... To myself I guess. Poor me. I get wiped out by a friend. That seems alot like me! Tracking! Hope for the second! Godspeed and goodluck!
Just like highschool ahh painful memories
I like it! This is probably the first good reader-involved story I've seen, so kudos on that.
I fucking hate my high school. Not only is it full of bitchy douchebags, it is ultra underfunded. The music book I use is from 1955.
Wow. This first chapter's ending just hit me in my core. I remember my middle school experiences like this. wow. That feeling of betrayal returned as i read the ending. You sir did an excellent job writing this story. I will watch for more.
LIKE AND TRACK.
oh god highschool is a bitch and its exactly like this with like half the people that go there
atleast i got mah brony buddys
Very well done, can't wait to see more!
getting interesting keep it up
Glad I got one of these:
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I love second person stories like this! can't wait for the next chapter!
Lovin' it! Can't wait to see what happens next!
this story is awesome!
need moar soon!!
can't wait to see what happens next!
I have been RD before... Good story and godspeed.
P.S. Is 'me' liking RD or Futter?
OH NO Gilda is going to beat up Fluttershy at the Greenhouae
and Dash is going to beat you up. 
*realizes that I just sent Gilda after Fluttershy*
*is currently slamming his head against the computer desk in a fain attempt of suicide*
We're all idiots...
Nice! I like this!
This is getting interesting. The way i see it, he's going to be with either Fluttershy or Rainbow Dash. Rainbow would be extremly interesting to see. It would be complicated but it would make sense in a way. Either way, i can't wait to see what happens
You're making me hate Rainbow Dash!!!
You monster!!!
I love this story
~Rainbow Dash
but in all seriousness, I realy like this story, it's nice to see something diferent then your generic clopfic or "Cupcakes" story, and you know exactly when to cut off your chapters, leaving your readers wanting more as soon as possible. you're a realy good writer too, can't see any grammar errors (not that I'd go grammer nazi if I did see some xD.)
I can't wait for the next chapter!!!
Just sent Gilda off to beat up Fluttershy, I am such a moron
I sent Gilda to Futtershy. Great job, me. Getting beat up on the second day, too! Great story so far. Godspeed and goodluck!
Excuse me, mind if I ask you a question?
Mind if I feature this in my EVE Online ingame blog? I know that that sounds completely out of context, but we are a community of bronies in spaceships who love reading the fiction
Oh lord, I don't wanna know how much my medical bills will cost me after this...
OHH SHIT!!! Griffons vs ponies who will win.
oh man, you already got me wanting more!
can't wait!!!
darn you and your good writing, thinking of fluttershy beaten up like that makes me want to cry
I usually dislike OC stories, yadayadayda. But I usually don't like high school type stories. I think you've done both beautifully. I think there should be more of the actual school stuff--just a litte!--but the overall focus is where it should be.
Good work.
I think Gilda needs to be !@##&^ with a *&!#@% while strapped to a !(*$^&%(%^ and hit with a !(#@$^$* and then %^#*&(^$*&@(%^&$*%&*%^)(!^@#^%#!^%!*&^%*&^$%@#^(%^#%!^&$^#%*& inside of a bathtub for hurting Fluttershy
Yay, Rainbow's awesome again!
That bitch Gilda better get her ass whopped pretty hard or I'm gonna be angry
Go on, me. Kick the butts off everyone. And slaughter them. I got carried away... Good story and great job me. I sent Futtershy to a hospital! Godspeed and goodluck.
WHY U STOP THERE it was getting good
i wanna know whats so cool :
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you have yourself a new reader.. I shall be awaiting your next chapter
on a side note..
GOD DAMMIT JUST KISS FLUTTERSHY ALREADY
I do believe this is where it gets a bit more interesting. Bow chicka bow wow indeed.
I also sense
in the future.
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Wat. It was getting good. I was on the edge of my seat. Then you stopped. Why? Nice story. This is my prediction. I am in love with Futtershy and Futtershy likes me. But RD wants me. So thats gonna cause a problem. Good story, Godspeed and goodluck.
Ah, school drama. And they say national politics are cutthroat.
Great work so far. I'm definitely looking forward to more.
so im pretty sure fluttershy loves me but RD wants me and i want her. whch will cause fluttershy to do this
Don't make
happen!
Love it! Defenitely belongs in the SFG! I'v already got it added to The Stockpile. Hope you get more readers!
I am liking this story. It has good structure, and it's one of the only second-person fics that I actually enjoy reading. Keep up the good work, and keep those updates coming.
... Shit hit the fan.
great chapter! Can't wait for the next.
I seriously need to know wtf happened...
THERE SHALL BE HELL TO PAAYYYY
WHAT DID THOSE BASTARDS DO TO RAINBOW DASH?
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WHHHHHHHHYYYY!
Are we meant to see what the letter said? Because if there's a picture, it's not showing up
How dare they do that to Rainbow Dash!!!