After a mishap with Twilight's magic, Rainbow Dash finds herself split into seven different ponies.
A very fun story
DEFINITE SPOILERS BELOW THIS COMMENT.
A little note from the author:
firstly and most importantly: this story is from something i wrote a long while back, i just added some words.
I was just taking a break from writing Dark, adventure stories and decided to write a fun little story that was relatively normal (i could see an episode on this idea)
It was just a one sit write. I basically sat down, wrote the entire story beginning to finish, and looked over it briefly, so if you find and grammar or spelling mistakes please feel free to tell me in the comments.
Hope you enjoy my little story.
Other Notes: A new chapter for separation is in the making, but due to this large break it might be out a little later. I just needed a break from all the dark adventureness. Enjoy this story, it doesn't require any thinking and is a fun read (even though i managed 5000 words! haha i honestly was expecting a 1000 word story out of this, but instead i wrote 5000. Oh well....)
It also probably sounded a LOT better in my head than on paper, but oh well. Back to what I'm actually good at writing....and it's not really bad puns.
I don't really expect everybody to like it, comedy is difficult to write and please everyone.
Happiness, rainbows, and gum drops not your thing? Never fear, just read my other stories, they're the exact opposite!
Oh god, not Pinkie...
This is very silly, but in a good way.
Ha. That was great. I guess pinkie got more than she bargined for.
I'm writing an important essay that's due really soon, but dammit I'm gonna have to read this!!
And they never saw Pinkie or Rainbow Dash again, the end.
' After thinking about it for a moment, it hit her.'
BAHAHAHAHA I'm so glad I decided to read this. Epic awesomeness, that was pretty show-accurate, aside from maybe Apathetic Dash. I don't think they'd like the talk of killing. But still I loved it.
Ba dum tssk!
Sequel please PLEASE
"Where's Pinkie Pie?!"
Oh man, that was a great finishing line.
Now Rainbow Dash will experience what it's like to have Pinkie Pie in your brain. I've had that for a few months now, AND IT IS VERY STRANGE. SEND CUPCAKES.
"Pinkie Pie stood grounded on the floor, trying to bring order to the chaotic scene."
Wow, that sounds less effective than trying to cool down a room by setting it on fire.
If I don't find out what happens, i'll go crazy.
Can i considerate this a Pinkie Dash (or Rainbow Pie) story?
ACHIEVEMENT UNLOCKED- FU-SION-HA!
ACHIEVEMENT UNLOCKED- FOURTH WALL FATALITY!
ACHIEVEMENT UNLOCKED- Awesome story!
thank you all so much for the positive reviews!
i may have to start writing more stories like this...
>>377977377977 if you wish, although there wasnt any shipping intended at all
>>377977377977 you could say they've become.... inseperable!
>>378151378151 I smiled at that, but that's like, a huge spoiler.....
As what Rainbow Dash would say...
Best Story EVER!
And dat ending
Can't stop laughing right now. Keep up the good work!!
NOT PINKIE PIE!!
I loved that ending! and the rest of the story, of ocurse...
I only spotted a few incidences where you put 'i' instead of 'I', and at the part with Idiot Dash I think you accidentally refer to her as a him when she's on the stallion's back. But that's all!
So now I'm going to try to imagine Rainbow Dash being the party pony now
>>378169378169 Thank you for spotting some grammar errors! Really appreciated
"Let's go visit the sun," > My reaction:
Also, there is a little grammer error.
"There's I library?" inquired the pegasus.
It would be "There's a library?"
Other than that a dead funny story!
This is a well written story, but there is one issue. I hate to have to tell you this, but Rainbow Dash has six colors in her mane, not seven.
>>378249378249 if you look closely her mane is surrounded by a blue outline, and the color in her mane is indigo, so it's seven!
This is awesome. *Favorites*
I believe I shall give thee six moustaches, good sir. Or madam.
I ~KNEW~ something about this story was setting my teeth on edge! I just assumed it was the thought of Pinkie Pie being in the mind of somepony capable of setting off a Sonic Rainboom.
You sir won ten internetz. You can recieve them at the reception.
>>378341378341 WOW I'm going to be rich!
It's so amazingly silly!
Should be noted, it would be more accurate if it were only six versions of Rainbow Dash. She has no Indigo in her hair (and personally I've never thought indigo should have been considered a separate color of the rainbow anyway. Honestly, they just decided to give a name to the meeting point between blue and violet. Might as well make it eight colors and say the meeting point between green and blue is now Turquoise or Sea-Green or something.), so to have one Dash with a color that's not actually present in her mane is somewhat odd.
>>378382378382 for the purposes of the story, she gets to have seven colors in her mane. Besides, 'rainbow' has seven letters in it, so it works out nicely.
I noticed a ton of capitalization errors. Almost all the Dashes had lowercase "d"s
>>378403378403 only found two, they're fixed now. Thanks for the comment!
Pinkie Pie.... What in all manner of things Alicorn happened to Pinkie Pie? And is Rainbow Dash going to have 4th wall breaking powers? Cause that would be like, so totally awesome.
"Don't worry you'll be fine" there should be a comma between worry and you'll.
"From his back, the pegasus leaned over his head until she was facing the stallion eye to eye, only hers were upside down. After staring intensely for a couple of seconds, the dim-witted pegasus licked the stallion's face, and then took off toward the sky. Scared and feeling slightly abused, the stallion ran off, looking back to make sure the crazy pegasus wasn't following him."
>>378409378409 alright I exaggerated a bit :3
This story was so great.