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Ragabash


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I don't like it.

But I won't downvote it either.

I liked the idea, but I think there could've been more interesting ways to play it out. Maybe she could make a game of it where if she gets caught she's not allowed to cum. That would've been fun to see. And it would maybe even make for more chapters.

Overall though, I liked what I read, and you shall receive an upvote for the idea.

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I agree with this.

That said, you keep going back to the teats but you really never did much with them. At most, the reader was told that "She rubbed her teats" and that was it. You need to show to us how that made her feel, the sensations, the perkiness of the little nubs as the soft fur from her hooves tickled the sensitive bulb of skin, how the kneading of her mounds melted the foreboding inhibitions that lingered in her consciousness, the shivering as her muscles tensed and subsequently relaxed upon coaxing her nipples, etc etc.

Maybe that's a sense of style, but you really didn't provide much reasoning into why she kept fondling her crotchboobs, which honestly doesn't make sense if you keep focusing back onto her shaft and how much pleasure she's deriving from it.

idk, it was good but it felt really rushed.

Awesome work

Bloody hell. :pinkiegasp:
HAVE MY MUSTACHES! :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Comment posted by Yamazaki deleted Jul 15th, 2014

I love you.

This clopfic is just so hot! Good work! :yay:

Holy tits this was hot. Wish I could suck my own cock :fluttershysad:

Oh, I liked that. Timid Fluttershy as a budding exhibitionist is really quite exciting! How about if she does it at the library next...
"Fluttershy, what are you doing?" A startled Twilight gasped. "No, wait! Not on the books!"

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