She's looking at you. Yes you. And she is judging you with her eyes. There is no escape.
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A pegasus pony trapped in stone is found by the Cutie Mark Crusaders. Who is he and what has happened? How will he adjust to being set free from stone and all the changes in the world around him?
How will he face this new world alone?
This story stands alone from my other works. I hope you will enjoy it. Feedback is greatly appreciated. This idea has been rolling around in my head for quite some time.
Yay! Featured on 5/2/14. Danke!
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this is so worth continuing!
This story sounds really interesting can't wait for more!
Other then the odd grammatical errors, this story is really good! Thumbs up!
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I went for conversational flow and real world form. Wait till the Apple family shows up. I hope that there grammar thingamajig ain't no deal breaker.
Thanks.
Several rough patches edited. Yikes, how did I miss those? I need to fire my editor.
This is very fun. Yes some stuff is sad bit its mostly interesting and fun.
I'm actually really glad I went with the Whitetail Wood.
Too many folk have the Everfree as the sole focus of all the weirdness in Ponyville.
I'm rather enjoying this so far, keep at it my fine fellow
Was he changed by a cockatrice?
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Yes. The chicken lizard.
This. I love this
Found this today. I like seeing a writer learn as they go. Each chapter is slightly better than the previous. This site is way too focused on people being hooked on the first chapter so this will likely never be featured. But if you keep improving at your current rate I'd say your next one has at least even odds
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Thank you.
I'm really very glad that you enjoyed it and took time to say something.
Thanks!
Good so far, keep it up
I've liked the pacing of it so far. The sense of confusion of being a Fish Out of Temporal Water is very apparent with Sandow. Looking forward to the next chapter with the long conversationals.
Excellent portrayal of Luna.
They conversation between Sandow and Luna would have scored 100% on the headcanon meter of many readers.
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That is the best sort of compliment ever. Thank you oh so very much.
I actually rewrote this chapter several times, because I felt it was awful. It was originally about 1500 or so words, and, there was a conversation about Nightmare Moon.
It made the conversation too much about Luna and too little about Sandow, so I scrapped it. I'm glad I did.
feels a little bit OOC for everyone.
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A bit, yes. It is fan-fiction. They are outside of the usual cartoon setting and dealing with issues that have more depth than usual, and some adult subject matter. So they are bound to feel a little out of character.
Plus, creative liberties and all that.
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true, but honestly it hurts to read sometimes.
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Then why read fan-fiction? If you don't mind me asking. I mean, most of what is out there is terribly out of character. Not a little, but a lot. Mane six having sex with one another, Twilight giving Celestia a hornjob, cornilingus, etc, what have you, the mane six getting drunk, swearing, committing incestuous relations with younger siblings, all of the usual fare that makes up fan-fiction. By comparison, what's in this story is downright tame. Barely even worth mentioning. Or reading, by comparison, since it seems that what most readers want is somebody to churn out clop for them on a nonstop basis.
When people do put out a proper slice of life piece, not bothering with clop or the usual sordid elements typically found in most tales, people then complain that so and so is out of character, even though there are never any complaints about the Twi-Pie-Dash-Apple-Rari-Shy gangbang while Spike discovers he has his first boner in the closet, watching the show. Nobody ever complains about those moments out of character.
Try and expand a character a bit though, give them some depth, some growth, some development, away from the usual directions that the fandom approves of, those directions being perverse, and somebody will always complain.
It is mildly frustrating. I'm not sure what to do about it or how to fix it.
Read that last chapter thinking something was missing.
This chapter completed it!
Loving this so far.
I enjoy this story.
It is well written, though it is admittedly short at times. I'm not sure where this is going, or what your plans are, but that's ok, I'm enjoying the ride.
Keep writing, I'll keep reading.
Wut?
Yeah but..... He did have good intentions in other words he may have cheated but..... What Sandow did was morally correct
I don't quite know what to say...it seems like you want some encouragement... well it a comment is all you want its what you get.
Wut?
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Scootaloo. Dodo. Chicken. Flightless bird. Long running gag from the TV show.
4179366 Oooooooh. I get it. Woops. My memory went weird for a second there.
Time for some milk or some nice Ice Cream
This is one of those moments where I am glad I never dropped acid. An acid trip would be underwhelming compared to this.
Not bad. I like the Chrome pony, btw.
Oh sweet Celestia. MY SIDES
This is really well-written! I expect more stuff like it.
OH MY GOSH.
YUS!!!!!
If it's any consolation, I think you did this one good.
Oooooooohh! Dis gun' be guuuuud!!!
Luna is best pony
First time I've read a fic where somepony eats the equestrian equivalent of a Carolina Reaper. Spitting fire out of both ends. Funny chapter, just a little awkward though. Good ol' Fire-rrhea.
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I try to specialise in awkward.
I like where it's going. Continue!
In Soviet Equestria, Blazing Saddles ride YOU!!
EDIT:
Actually; in any form if Equestia, I'd say that saddles always ride the pony....
But that's beside the point!
I've enjoyed this story a lot, and I'm hoping to see more of it later, but no more peppers please!
My dear Flutters, I know exactly how you feel.
Uhhhhh.
What?
There's an awful lot of do not want in this chapter. Please go back to fun stuff with Sandow, and not all this random unrelated innuendo and dubious shipping.
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Relax, stay calm, and take a deep breath.
Now pay attention to these words:
"No actual ponies were shipped in the making of this story."
Take another deep breath. Feel better?
It is intended as exposition for Applejack to do a little bit of character reflection in the next chapter, which will, in turn, lead her a little closer to Sandow, understand herself a bit more, and cause some reflection on what it means to be an Apple.
And now, I shall repeat:
"No actual ponies were shipped during the making of this story."
And you, you there, in the back, pipe down. I hear your comments about Rainbow Dash. She never found Soarin'. She ran into those funky cloud gremlins again instead.
Twilight? A stallion far, far away in the Crystal Empire??
wtf?!
I thought only Apples did that stuff......
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I very bravely referenced Flash Sentry.
And I think I got a downvote for it. Yikes. Everypony hates Flash.