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Scared the hell out of me... 
*stares closely at eyelids...*
(in a good way)
As much as I liked the story, I'm in agreement with you, though I suspect it's more with the fact that this calls out for the need of a dedicated Horror tag more than anything else. There are differences between Dark and Horror, and this one firmly goes into the latter.
Well, what's the point of any fic, really? Look at some of the great horror stories, like "It" (Stephen King) or "Odd Thomas" (which is more of an adventure than anything.) They're written purely for the enjoyment of the readers.
Isn't that the point of all fiction in general? Someone gets an idea, the develop it into a story, and people read it and enjoy it. Well, maybe they don't always enjoy it, but still.
Going back even further, what was the point of Hamlet? Or Homer's 'The Odyssey?' Sure, you can make the argument that it's a hypothetical representation of day-to-day life, but in the end, it comes down to someone fluent in the arts of language that created something for their peers to enjoy.
tl;dr The point of this is for people to enjoy it. That's the only reason any piece of artwork exists.
Actually, stories were mostly originally morality tales, far less to impart entertainment and more to pass on morals or history. The fun part came later.
That being said, my concern strictly lies with the fact that I didn't see this so much as Dark as much as the need for a dedicated Horror tag. Pointless violence doesn't bother me; heck, my oeuvre primarily deals in a lot of pointless violence, and with Device Heretic's recent work, I daresay a lot of that was pointless as well; it still does not detract from it.
Perhaps I should have explained myself a little better (okay, a lot better), but my point still stands: this work (and probably others on the site) need a horror tag, Thus, and finis.
Now, if you'll excuse me, I have to sit down and figure out which characters I'll be killing off my own work later. 
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I liked the story, but it felt like there was so much lost potential with it as well. Rather than have almost nothing but a chain of letters from Twilight to Celestia telling her what happened, I would have liked to have seen some from Twilight's PoV.
Like her movements in the void before she started bringing her friends, her watching them through some sort of scrying and seeing their reactions to her passing. Then when she starts deciding to "recruit" her friends, the process of how they went to Twilight's realm, rather than just a letter saying "Hey Celestia, so-and-so is here now" followed by Luna popping up and confirming it.
>>372376 Innocence is always the worst. Compare a little girl murdering people to a fully grown man cracking skulls with an axe. The more innocent one is significantly more sinister, as it betrays no ill intent. Without intent, there can be no warning for a victim, no remorse on behalf of the killer, and it's so much darker to see corruption of purity than just someone going nuts and killing people.
Very good story.
If you think of it, this was the best Horror story that Ive enjoyed to read, the description makes the perfect introduction; adding hellfire, ecoing voices and and a black eyes were cool, but it making Twilight the God of deadland that just whants her best friends with her at anymeans posible make it a good pre-sleeping lecture.
Ps: I liked mostly your grammar Well done 
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After looking at the comments I thought this would be a disturbing story, it wasn't. Not that I'm holding that against the work. There was nothing in my opinion to make it stand out one way or another, it was a solid story that made me go 'meh.' However there is potential for a truly terrifying story as Twilight follows through on her letter. The reaping of the princess for her own perspective could be a fun one to wright.
one last comment. i desided to read it.
i garuntee you i will sleep.
i slept after cupcakes, and i slept after rainbow factory.
the problem is what i see when i sleep.
i dream, as my ponysona, in extremely vivid detail, to the point where i can feel it in my sleep.
it has scarred me much like PTSD is with many people. i flash back to some dreams if they are bad enough.
i flash back to cupcakes, frequently. i have once flashed back to rainbow factory.
thank you for the nightmares, and probably the flashbacks.
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*votes thumbs up*
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It was good... but I think use a little more subtly next time. For example, "Even though my eyes are black, I can still see. That's what matters, right?" is too heavy handed. Describing how Twilight perceives her friend's reactions to her eyes in a round-about way would be much more subtle, and thus much more creepy.
In saying that, for what it's worth, this story was enjoyable enough with a pretty creepy hook. Well done.
Intriguing to say the least. Well written and enjoyable and quite sweet. I don't really see much of a horror aspect to it. Perhaps I lack a connection to the fear that should be felt by Luna and Celestia? Might more detail find me in a better position to empathize? Regardless, great fic. Could stand to be a little longer though. Allowing Twilight to play with death a little more would be nice. Forcing her to convince her friends to join her the first few times so that she has to gain the power to just kill people over time might give more of a feeling of suspense. As it stands the inevitability and constant pace makes it a little lacking. Rises and falls in the action are essential to good story telling.
It's like the Joker says, "Nobody panics when things go "according to plan." Even if the plan is horrifying! If, tomorrow, I tell the press that, like, a gang banger will get shot, or a truckload of soldiers will be blown up, nobody panics, because it's all "part of the plan." But when I say that one little old mayor will die, well then everyone loses their minds!"
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JESUS!!!. Man that image is serious nightmare fuel.....................SERIOUSLY WHAT THE FUCK. GOD i'm going to have nightmares for weeks. The Passion of the Christ theatre poster is more appropriate then that image. Nice story by the way but seriously back to the image. JESUS YOU ROBBED ME OF A GOOD SLEEP. Cupcakes is more appropriate no, SWEET APPLE MASSACRE IS MORE APPROPRIATE THEN TAHT FUCKIN IMAGE. I'm sorry about harping on an image but seriously WHAT.......THE.......FUCK!!!!!!!
*Looks at image*
You know... I think I'm in love with Twilight enough to overlook whatever issues she has at the moment. Even if she's a little cursed or undead or hurt or insane or whatever it is. I'm sure that I could try to explain how I feel about her, and she wouldn't ever really...
*Looks closer*
NEVER TARDY
Okay, I'm officially scared. 
Hurm. When I first started reading this, I found the funeral scene to be a tad off in terms of diction and pacing, but it was nothing too bad. When I got to Twilight's first letter from death, I pumped my fist and shouted "Genius!". But then I kept reading. And I ended the story feeling really underwhelmed.
It was...spooky, I suppose, but the degeneration of Twi into madness and slaying her friends was incredibly...forced. And it felt really out of character. This story was very poorly paced; it was insanely fast and could have been far more powerful had it been done out of the perspective of letters. The letters are a gimmick, but they don't work to this story's advantage.
A swing and a miss, but dangerously close.
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