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SilverMistyStar


Hi! We are a trio of teenage Pegasisters, who enjoy writing fanfics! We each have our own unique style of writing so we hope you enjoy!

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Daring do and Rainbow dash are setting out on an epic journey across Equestria to save pony kind! From candy? Along the way, they will encounter an evil dentist, a taffy torture machine, and many more creepy things! But, when something unexpected happens to Dash, will they ever find the pony behind all of this?

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Comments ( 11 )

:facehoof: you should never have your villain introduce himself in the first paragraph, have him lurk in the background, manipulating events in his favour, making the job(s) of the heroin(s) a lot harder. He should never appear in the first chapter unless it absolutely calls for it. You need to build up his character beforehand. Make him hated :pinkiecrazy:
Right now he's just some guy holding Pinkie.

4081898, I appreciate the advice, but this is not the first chapter, it's a prologue.:twilightblush: I apologize for any confusion that you might have had, and like I said, thanks for the advice!
Misty Berry:pinkiehappy:

4096287 you're welcome? :rainbowhuh:
...i've never had anyone thank me for advice, usually they either ignore me or tell me "STOP TELLING ME HOW TO WRITE MY FIC WAH! WAH!".....
Mostly the former though

Misty Berry please do another chapter
Silver Leaf

4182005, I did! Chapter two! Are you working on another chapter of the Sunset before the Sunrise?:trixieshiftright:
Misty Berry:twilightsmile:

Me like this! Why on pause? seems really interesting and exciting!

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It's on pause cuz I want to work on some other stories for a while.:twilightsmile: Glad to see that I'm getting good feedback though!:pinkiehappy:

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That makes sense! i know how it feels to do that.

4746065 I'm glad.:twilightsmile: Just know that there may be new stories, and chapters of old ones coming soon!:pinkiehappy:

You should have twilight wake up, hook her up to a machine, and do egghead stuff, so to speech. :pinkiesmile: Do you likie? Also, can you space out dialog? You don't have to, thou.:moustache:

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