Gilda's visit to Rainbow Dash couldn't have gone worse. What was supposed to be a fun visit ended with dash hating her. Could Gilda still manage to apologize and repair their relationship?
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The expression on his face reminds me of my dog when Boop her
4030162 Didn't get what?
I think the premise of this story is acceptable even with some issues. I think the story should have only been focusing on Gilda's reflections. Have her apologize only in her head and have the text imply to the reader that she will eventually speak to Rainbow in person. The chase scene and scene at her house was superfluous and I think her substantial development was too forced and not something that would make sense with Gilda's character. Putting Gilda in a better light can be done only with her understanding that her actions could have been done better. A personal reflection and sorrow makes her seem more approachable.
4030974 Yeah, there were a lot of things wrong with this story. I was trying to cover a lot in under 3000 words so the premise was a lot more rushed than it would have been normally. The story was also heavily rushed, so at least people seem to like it. Iuno.
Gilda reminds me of one of those 90s biker chicks.