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After getting hit by a mysterious weather phenomenon Rainbow Dash awakens in the Ponyville General with minor cuts and bruises. Initially relieved with her seemingly superficial wounds she's ready to get back out of there. Discovering something important missing a split-second later the blue mare sets out to visit Twilight for some help...
Rainbow Dash isn't blue... She is
Super Cyan!
Nice story as well.
Thumbs up for an adorable story. There are a few things that seem a bit off, but they don't distract from the overall story. A few punctuation details here and there, but that's a given when you get a certain length, and re-reading stories eight million times before posting is not fun at all (speaking from experience).
What was off about it: only mention of healing magic, when it's already established that Twilight's mastered growth magic (giving Spike the 'stache). Twilight seems to give up quite quickly, without looking for alternate approaches, which is what she's infamous for. She's the type who, when she can't break down the wall, just walks in through the front door when no one's looking, so to speak. It'd been reasonable for her to just have feathers grow back one at a time, since they grow so slowly the size difference from dfferent timing wouldn't matter. Or to get some other overly contrived plan, the possibilities are endless.
But then, that would have been a different story, and this one's good as is. Nice work.
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was tying their tails together. 
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