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This story is a sequel to When the Man Comes Around


The fourth story in The Journey of Graves.

After their little trolling adventure, Sweetie Belle has decided that Graves would make a great big brother. Of course adoption's out of the question (after all, parents always say no), so that just means the Cutie Mark Crusaders will have to get creative.

Meanwhile, Rarity has taken an interest in Graves for completely different reasons. Just what does the prettiest girl in Ponyville see in the gruff, stern faced soldier? He has no idea and frankly, isn't sure he wants to find out.

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Comments ( 251 )

I don't know how you do it, but you continue to draw me into this world, this version of Equestria that you've created, forcing me to read perfectly created characters that are completely believable and relatable.

I f-ing love this series.

:rainbowkiss:

:yay: I love your stories.

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And I love you! :raritywink: Seriously, with comments like that, even if you were the only person reading, I'd still keep writing. Thanks so much! :twilightblush:

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And you are spectacular: thanks for all the love and being so awesome! :rainbowkiss:

Shame this isn't a more popular series. I guess people can't get past the fact that they are humans rather than ponies but you still get their personality down pretty well. Fun to read. Keep up the great work.

You are a writing god...

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Ee-yup. One person downvoted my story just because I humanized them (I don't know if he actually read the whole story):fluttershyouch:

Still, as long as people like you enjoy it, I'mma keep it up. Thanks!:scootangel:

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Aw, shuck, I ain't that special. Just a brony who likes him a good ol' fashioned story. Ee-yup.:eeyup:

Thanks for the love: hope you enjoy the rest!

I've read all of your series of "The Journey of Graves" in one hole day and I must say... IM IN LOVE WITH THIS SERIES, keep the chapters roling

This series, not matter what, makes me smile whenever I read it...

... or re-read it

Keep it coming, mate! This series is gold!

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In that case, I'll keep mining. Lolz! :rainbowlaugh:

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In that case, just call me Pinkie Pie. :pinkiehappy:

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Don't worry: I'll hold on to that feelin' :rainbowkiss:

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Keep dat flow goin'. :rainbowdetermined2:

oh god sweetie bell...

read all the other 3 storys in one go, am really liking it.

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This pleases me. This pleases me greatly. :rainbowkiss:

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Isn't it the worst and best feeling being caught up with a great fanfic?
On one hand, yay, you're reading a great work of writing, enjoying your time with it, and everything. Then, on the other hand, you have to wait for the author to write the next bit and you feel like you're missing something if you aren't reading it.
I heap praise on certain fics every now and then, but I really can't get over how much I've fallen in love with this series, nor can I recommend it enough.

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I know the feel, bro. And oddly enough, it feels the same on the other side.
Hearing people say they like my stories and are waiting for the next chapter makes me just want to say, "screw this, let's post the next one!" Except if I do, not only might they not be as good, I'll quickly run out of stored material which makes later waits even longer. So sad!
But you're a huge encouragement, and as long as I got these hands of mine, rest assured that I'll write as fast as Rainbow Dash flies. Thanks!

3 words: Best. Series. Ever.

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Divines Smile on this author.

This fic needs MOAR attention. Wont you agree?

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That would be wonderful. If only I could figure out how...

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I'm advertising this series every time someone asks for a good, light-hearted fic to read.

BTW: Don't change whatever it is that you do for your writing process, its working.

This is the BEST. POSSIBLE. THING!

good, good, shorter then the other chapters but hay, anything works for me

well, whatever the CMC plan its gona become a diaster.

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Eeyup it pretty much does
:eeyup:

Short but entertaining.

"...tie them up, and if need be… give them a bath.”

I like where this is going.


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I love this, keep it up

I'm sensing somthing bad happened to his other 4 compadres

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The force is strong in this one. Perhaps I'll even tell that story one day. :raritywink:

I'm going to comment more heavily on this in the big batch of notes that I'll compile for you in a couple of days, but I wanted to mention this: You have an excellent talent for world building. Not only have you sucked in several loyal readers, but you have built and altered Equestria in such a way that it still feels very true to the show while still making it very much yours.

Personally I want to know more about Grave's medals than anything, you've foreshadowed that Grave's companions were killed or put out of action just by the little you have of them here and I don't think that you really need to elaborate on that further until/unless a deeper relationship forms between Graves and Rarity, or any of the 'Mane 6.'

As always, can't wait for more.

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Hoo, lordy, I'm glad you caught onto that! :pinkiehappy: I don't want to say too much and spoil the surprise, but let's just say that all the thinks you want to find out about will come back at some point later on.

Also, I'm really glad that you like the world. It's taken me a lot of time to establish it because I want it to be a foundation for everything that grows from it, especially the relationships. I've been taking those really slow because I want to properly nurture them, let them take root and really blossom. But then again, I guess it's good because that means I'll have to write more, eh? :twilightsmile:

As always, thanks for the support and the feedback: you rock socks off!

His pride is no dead, R.I.P Grave's manhood

Wow... That's a lot of world building that you have going on here.

I really hope that you're going to put Rarity and Graves together, in someway, they're such an interesting couple.

I working on that batch of notes for you, is there anything in particular that you want me to look at?

...lol...the donut part

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A good relationship's like fine wine: there has to be good base ingredients that are aged properly in order to bring out a rich, complex bouquet. As for what happens to Rarity and Graves, well... let's just wait and see. :twilightsmile:

Nothing specific. Just anything you liked that I should keep doing, flaws I could fix, and suggestions on what could be different. Any kind of constructive criticism is appreciated. :pinkiehappy:

Poor bastard.

But I guess Rarity has been taking tips from Celestia. :trollestia:

Graves Y U NO secure with masculinity?

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For any little gramatical or wording errors that I find, I'm going to comment on the specific chapter and keep the minor things out of the notes.

I LOVE IT!!!! Next chapter will get funnier i guess. Keep on rolling my friend

and then they found out Tom had a son

rock turtles!?:pinkiegasp: I must have one.

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The rock turtle: illegitimate child of Tom and his mistress, Senora Shells. Theirs was a love that simply could not be.

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