A pony can choose to do many things in his or her life before he or she dies: he could be a farmer, bringing in produce and commerce to the kingdom, or she could be a rebel, fighting to further her cause. Death visits everypony, however: the farmer hopes to leave his farm in capable hooves before he passes, and the rebel hopes to have finished the fight for whatever cause she was fighting for before her time comes.
Sometimes, death likes to come calling early: the farmer taken before his prime provides no additional produce; and the rebel becomes a martyr, causing others to fight in her place.
Sometimes, rather than kill a pony, it is better to leave him or her broken.
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Ok I am now, very interested in this story. Let us see where it takes us.
364476 Indeed. Get out the popcorn, fold up chair, and the standard mob pitchforks and torches assigned to us by the local Mayor Mare, as we sit back and watch as this story either takes off wonderfully, or crashes and burns.
good beginning, a lot of detail for such a short time period, looking forward to the next one!
Hmm, I liked how Nightmare was thinking more long term here than short term. Not only does she get rid of the manifestations of the EoH she also going after those who best embody them on the chance that they might be able to summon said manifestations to themselves in a time of need. Also I've got to love the irony of her using her prison as a place to do that from.
Now I wonder what she has planned for Twilight and the others. Banishment to the moon is interesting and all but I like Echos have to wonder about what she did to twilight before leaving her there. It could be any number of things from a slow acting petrification spell to cursing her with immortality so that her wold be opponet is driven into maddness by the same imprisonment that she herself experenced.
I wonder what Nightmare intends to do to the others? I mean while it would be an excilent way to crush them to let slip Twilight's fate that could be something of a mistake as it could make a martar out of her. That possiblity also holds true for her outright slaying the other five she's going to have enough trouble establishing her rule without giving her unwilling subjects symbals of freedom to rally around. Then there is the issue of Spike making a personal enemy out of a dragon isn't a smart thing to do even if he's young because he won't stay that way and it's been implied that a fully grown dragon is a force to be reckoned with.
Either way I can't wait to see what happens next here.
are you going to update this one anytime soon?
511705 Yes! I'm truly sorry about the delay, I'm just very easily distracted D:
If you had seen how long it had taken for just the first chapter....
But I've been hard at work on it this week, and I'll try to have it out by the end of the weekend.
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I want to thank everyone else for their patience!
Moar is demanded!
bump ^,=,^
reply to this when you update so i can read both chapters at once
513180 are you updating anytime soon?
well, this is interesting......
this chapter convayed alot of information very quickly, and it did it quite well too!
cant wait for the next update