I like seeing cute things turn violent.
After Fluttershy loses her temper with Pinkie Pie and threatens not to be her friend anymore, the mare goes into a state of withdrawal and fear, struggling to change herself to be a better pony.
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This was amazing!
I like where are you going with this.
Nice work overall!
Interesting. Like your views on Fluttershy's anger, and overall, I'm intrigued by the premise.
*forced laughter* ha ha lets see here one she wasn't laughing at her stage fright two she was detailing the fear not laughing at it at least i didnt think she was correct me if i am wrong. There is a different between laughing at someones fear and describing it just so you know. As much as i cant stand Fluttershy or her mere existence i wonder did you write this out of malice? Because this story rubbed me the wrong way big time since pinkie is my favorite.
Im o pinkie's side 100%
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YES! *hugs you* thank the gods finally! someone who sees the true light that is fluttersue! yeah i am on pinkie's side too.
To Pinkamina 104,
As much as I think 'Fluttersue' is a bit of a jerk thing to say, you do make a valid point. If Pinkie had shown this level of innocent insensitivity with anypony else, nobody would give a shit! They'd think it was hilarious! Fluttershy is definitely a victim of Bambification: the phenomenon of when we're meant to sympathize with a character simply because they're cute. And this is coming from a hardcore Fluttershy fan myself. I may love her, but she's not my 'waifu'.
4017848 I appreciate your words there. But she won't be so cute in the second chapter.
On another note, I can't see Pinkamina 104's comment. :/
4008735 Flutters ain't a sue, not in my story! She's flaws and stuff here! As for your other comment I'm sorry to hear about it rubbing you the wrong way. Pinkie Pie is my favorite out of all of them. So no, I'm not bashing her out of malice, I'm bashing her because I love her so very much!
4008568 Team Pinkie Pie? Yeah, let's make it so! Go Pinkie!
4007692 Hey thanks. I believe because she rarely gets angry she will be prone to overreacting.
4007359 Thank you! I look forward to writing more. Oh hey, a second chapter. :P
4020180 im pinkamena 104 I changed my nam though
4021408 Oh! Well hello. Name's Jordan! So you believe Fluttershy is a sue? I am intrigued and interested in any particular flaws you might have seen in my writing. Was it how she reacted? (I love critique. hehe)
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Flutters isn't a sue in this since she is flawed but most writers would make her out to be perfect but she suffers from extreme shyness hence flutterSHY so no she isnt a mary sue far from one actually. 
Oh bashing her out of love now that makes sense since i do the same thing XD. Its fine dude its a sign of a good writer if they can get your emotions going so in a way its a compliment since you are so good you know how to make the reader feel certain emotions for these characters.
4022352 Oh so ya just got riled up, OK! Hehe. Well, if you've read the second chapter now ya should see that I don't want her to be perfect. What did you think of it?
Can't wait to see ponyvilles reaction to this new pinkie
can't wait for the next chapter.
(gave her the flat mane)
fix him
I'm liking this.
Good story
her name is Pinker Thinker
4762842 Oh thank you so much for reading and commenting. Pinkie Thinker sounds alright, but how about Pinkie Thinkie? :P
4763104 no way i was just about to suggest it if you rejected pinker thinker
4763762 Haha, sweet. :P
This ending was very confusing.
Pretty good story though! I just feel the pacing was a bit wonky and it lost focus halfway through. Not bad though!
I love this! I have been wanting to find something like this! I love Pinkie Pie but she can be inconsiderate at times, although I feel this may be out of character (being inconsiderate not the story). Pinks only cares for the happiness of others and I don't think she would act like that
. It was mean of her to laugh at Fluttershy, so she deserved this
. But I feel her pain and don't want her to feel so hurt
love the story! Hopefully this will redeem her character from "filly vanilli" for me.
(that's what this reminds me of was that what you were going for?) Also Pinkie is my favorite pony, hope she is redeemed for her actions.
Yay! It seems this is promising! I was right! love this so much!!!!
Thank you for writing this!!!!
My reaction to this chapter-
Fluttershy why are you so angry? I could understand you being sad and scared but... You may have deserved it remember the "Getting too complicated for your simple little brain pinkie pie?!" and the "Oh and What are you you passionate about?! birthday cake?! Party hats?! I can't believe the two most frivolous ponies are trying to tell new Fluttershy how to live her life, when they waist their lives on helpless pursuits that no pony gives a flying feather about!!!" Yeah although it was mean and not right you kind of deserved it. You totally have issues
Pinkie! Don't change yourself, your reflection is right you shouldn't change that much!!! I love you the way you are! (minus the "Aww but I'm so good at being ridiculous") Please just be considerate like you used to be and get over this!
After rereading this story, I love it so much more. It's a wonderful story, and all I can say is, that either than those few moments where you had the wrong words used, I loved it!
Finding out at the end that this Pinkie wasn't the real Pinkie, and that whole relfection thing....well, it came out of nowhere and isn't really related to the story, but it's incredibly interesting, and I'd love to see you write a story expanding on that!
Also, that'd be a concept that would get A LOT of views....trust me.