When Rainbow's private property ends up in Rarity's hooves. The fashonista becomes dead set on finding the owner and Rainbow Dash tags along.
Now she has to get it back, while keeping everyone from finding out it's her's. Because Rainbow Dash does not play with dolls.
Sorry if it's crummy first MLP fanfic which also happens to be a rough draft. There shall be Twidash!
Really like it so far! Keep up the great work! (BTW, CLIFFHANGERS... )
TWIDASH?! Count me in on this ride!
TwiDash on.
~Ava
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I concur my fellow twidasher.
I must say that twidash most always catches my attention, and like our frozen friend here your first story is shaping up to be promising.
If this is what we can expect from the future then the future is looking good.
Liked and fav, I'll be waiting
3988138 Well, fancy seeing you here my friend.
Anyway, you just earned your first follower.
Wait... WHO DISLIKED THIS STORY?! I WILL RIP OUT THEIR THROAT WITH MY TEETH!!!
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I do believe I will follow as well.
As for ripping their throat out, since your avatar is luna you should probably go nightmare moon on them.
Her teeth are sharper.tee hee
3988414 Now Now there will be none of that
Pinkie needs every available piece to make cupcakes!
Yes well...
I will allow her every available piece I can find if it will keep her away from best pony
i really like it! hope u write more soon
3988649 defeat the stupid thing I say you should not do!
I'll be sure to follow this, for I am deeply intrigued by Twilight's sly wink at the end...
Just realized my iPhone browser shakes the text box when I type in it...
I like it. I'm always up for some good ol' TwiDash, especially when Rainbow is being cute.
I did notice a number of errors that mostly involved commas, but also a few other punctuation problems and a couple capitalization issues. A quick look through it again to clean it up and it'll be fine. Keep up the good work
3988649 I love my crazy friends. So. Freaking. Much.
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See my previous comment.
Well Rainbow, it could be worse! It could be that Lyra plush doll. (You all know which horrible, soul scarring one.) Unless Mini-Twi has the same...functionality.
I've now disturbed myself.
More please!
Lol 69'th like
If Twi does know something, she's being very coy about putting the doll out in the library, instead of offering to whip up a "return to owner" spell at some later hour. And I'd like to know how she figured it out and Rarity, who is generally very good with reading body language, didn't - Rainbow is not exactly subtle.
So maybe this is a version of Twilight who is socially aware enough to be playing little headgames with Dash?
3989472 may you never speak of that again *shudders*
3989472 Actually there is at least one Twilight plush doll (a rather large one, life size you might say) that does have that functionality. There was a youtube vid of it.
3990209 Did it involve tiny bandage gear and a heaping helping of serious undiagnosed mental illness? Because I saw that one and definitely thought "This will be People's exhibit A in a murder trial".
3990224 I don't know about bondage gear, maybe, it was a while ago that I saw it. I think the guy who made the vid was trying to sell it, that's all I really remember.
3990239 Then it's not the one I was subjected to. It was the same guy who freaked on ship fiction writers that used Twilight Sparkle because he was "married to her on an astral plane" or something.
Then effectively released a sex tape/photos. It was super heavy Chris-Chan flashbacks.
THE FACT THAT WE'RE BUSY TRYING TO DIFFERENTIATE THESE DEGENERATES IS HORRIFYING TO ME AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA
3990324 It shames me to admit but I think I know who you're talking about, that dude that posted ton of pics of him and Twilight doing shit together right? And he said about how he likes to get sexy with her but "only what she feels comfortable with" or something?
I dunno, it was weird and disturbing none the less.
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Aww we love you so much we could just eat you up...
Hmm... Nah
Nope I can't relate to this story. I don't have a Rainbow Dash plushie sitting beside me as I type these words.
3990458 Yeah there was a lot of creepy waifu going on. I'd love to see that kind of stuff referenced/lampooned here.
3990190 That is an excelent question. One that I just came up with the solution to five second ago
Chapter 2: The return of Metal Gear Dash.
This offended me.
3991391 Might I ask how.
I don't see anthro/human tag.
Who's dead set.
This feels off... try:
Now she has to get it back, and keep everyone from finding out it's hers.
One period missing at the end here!
So far, the description alone is scaring me off...
TwiDash... That needs a period at the end!
And MLP is an abbreviation, so it needs capital letters.
Fine, read later list it is, then...
3991419 Thank you for the help. I'll make these corrections immediately
Too much, punctuation, interrupts the; flow.
Very nice premise, I like where this is going
You should change it to "Fuck me"
They're, there, their - there's a difference!
There are a lot of mistakes in this, but I enjoy the premise of it, and I'm going to fave it for now, so I can keep an eye on it. It's funny, really. I recently wrote a TwiDash in which Rainbow had a plushie of Twi she'd made. She kept it hidden in a cloud.
3991711 Wait Oh no Rookie mistakes I'm so ashamed. Anyway I'll correct them
3991701 I'll have to work on that.
3991735 I'll say it again I need to find a proofreader
3991812 I do proofread for people, and I'm typically pretty active. I'm taking a short break from writing, so I suppose I could do that for you...
Only thing is I'll be just about completely inactive from March 11-March 18.
3991826 That would be great, if you could proofread. I shall be forever in your debt
3991856 I just sent the whole thing in a PM, completely proofread.
It wasn’t that she really needed the d
you actually wrote that
3990324 Oh, that guy, no I didn't mean him (I only heard about him, never saw any vid about him). No this vid just showed off a full size Twilight sex plush and I think he was trying to sell it.
Just a tip, get yourself an editor. It's not hard to find one, there are whole groups dedicated to helping writers get editors. The extra set of eyes will help.
Anyway this story is as cute as it sounds, I can't wait for more. There are some mistakes I saw when reading, I'll try to write them up when I'm not on a phone.
Read the description already love this fic
3992515 I find it hilarious that after reading that I searched for it and found that it has been changed to the do-
Yet there's no Princess Twilight tag
Hahaha. Well done.
Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
This is the most adorable thing since the bouquet of kittens.