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  • E Diary of a Silent Tyrant

    Encased in stone, Discord observes the events around him and reflects on his life
    3,162 words · 6,639 views  ·  661  ·  7
  • E Apple Ninjas and Other Vital Concerns

    Big Mac shows Apple Bloom that the farm can be a blast, even when her friends are all busy for the day.
    3,725 words · 1,287 views  ·  170  ·  0
  • E Checkmates

    After finding a chess set in the library's storage closet, Twilight is eager to play a few games and turns to Applejack and Rainbow Dash. Teaching the two most competitive ponies in Ponyville a new game should be a snap, right? RIGHT?!
    3,673 words · 6,220 views  ·  461  ·  5
  • E Diary of a Pliant Tyrant

    When Fluttershy finds out that Discord used to keep a mental diary while imprisoned in stone, she begs him to continue it. Grudgingly, he promises to document his thoughts about his new life among old enemies
    16,437 words · 8,030 views  ·  822  ·  13
  • E Cheerilee's Thousand

    Cheerilee goes on one thousand terrible dates.
    70,161 words · 5,011 views  ·  627  ·  9
  • E A Door Jam

    Twilight, Applejack and Fluttershy end up on an adventure when Pinkie develops a strange obsession with Sugarcube Corner's back door.
    10,904 words · 3,998 views  ·  263  ·  6
  • E Easy As Pie

    In which Pinkie Pie battles a rogue kitchen.
    7,385 words · 4,494 views  ·  234  ·  5
  • E The Carrot Dog Fight

    Spike just wants to eat his delicious carrot dog, but Manehattan's birds have other ideas.
    3,570 words · 1,057 views  ·  102  ·  1

Blog Posts439

  • Saturday
    Update and Errata

    So the new story is coming right along.  It's about a third of the way through an editing pass, and so far only one or two major things have come up.  I have gotten from just about everyone that it's pretty dark, though, and that's disheartening.  The Dark tag is the kiss of death, in my opinion, but I don't want to lie to readers.  If it's dark, then it is.  I'll just have to live with that lower view rate.

    This is the hardest time for me as an author.  I love writing.  I love publishing.  I really, really hate editing.  You take this thing that you think is really great and give it to other people, who then tell you why it's not so great.  I find it to be demoralizing.  And then I get angry at myself for being childish, but it's a process.  I get feedback, then I enter into a small depression for a couple of days.  After that, I'll use the feedback to hopefully make the story better.  It's always helped in the past.  My stories have always come out better and stronger, yet I sit here and feel down about the whole thing for a few days.  That drives me up the wall.  I hope to one day be past that.

    I got the art back for the story, and I'm fairly pleased with it.  The artist screwed a few minor details up, but it's still pretty nice.

    Also, I'm not sure why I'm a sucker for stories with ridiculous sounding premises, but I am in the worst sense of that word.  I always look at these stories and think, "Wow, that sounds shallow/unworkable/like a terrible idea. There's no way an author would do that unless he or she had some way to really make that work in a way that's fresh and original."  It never is.

    Not true!  Skywriter's Shipping Sickness is a great example of a stupid premise that was awesomely done, but it's the rare exception, it seems.  This is probably news to no one but me.

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  • 1w, 5d
    The Tsunami

    Gah! So much to do! I have too many stories to write!

    I've just finished one, and I'm staring down the barrel of at least ten more. I don't know where they all came from. Luckily, I'm feeling pretty energized. I really like how my new story came out, and that will probably evaporate once my editor gets back to me with a thousand items, but for now, I'm feelin' fine. I'm already thinking about a sequel to that story, but we'll see how it's received first. I love it, so it'll probably fall flat on its face.

    I'm still struggling to find art, but I sent out some new requests that I've got high hopes for. The story won't be ready for public consumption for probably another month or so anyway, so I've got some time.

    But the next order of business is definitely going to be updating Cheerilee's Thousand and Taking a Job for Granite. I've sat on that stuff for too long while I worked on this new Big Mac story and First Steps. Then we will see about some collabs people have been asking for.

    And speaking of collabs, The Album 2 is seriously lagging. My Pinkie Pie chapter will never be seen! This is where I'd put the bawling Rarity emoticon, but we don't have it in the blogs, I guess.

    And how about this snazzy update? I'm liking it overall, though I'm still struggling to understand some of the choices. I can't see the lifetime performance of my story anymore? Just a monthly breakdown?  Uh, okay...

    15 comments · 91 views
  • 2w, 1d
    New Story Rough Is Done

    Ah, that 'Just finished a story' afterglow.  There's nothing quite like it.

    So I've finished my story about Big Mac being a boxer, and boy did it go off in a direction I didn't anticipate at the beginning.  I'm pretty pleased with it, though.  I had a good time writing it.  For the next few days, I'll probably be doing some editing, but does anyone want to pre-read it?  I'm always interested in hearing opinions on how a story is coming together.

    Now if I could just get the art settled.  WHY IS IT SO DAMN HARD TO GET ARTISTS TO RESPOND?!  I've never understood this about artists.  I tried for several years to get comic books together, and I'd meet with these artist who were totally on board.  Then they'd suddenly disappear. Six months later I get an email apologizing and telling me that they'd still like to work on the thing if it's still available.  Then they disappear again.  It's so frustrating. I'm trying to give them money to do the thing they like to do! Why is this such a complicated arrangement?

    Sigh.  Well, I'm going to contact another artist tomorrow, probably.

    0 comments · 42 views
  • 2w, 4d
    Sisyphus Triumphs (Kinda long and self indulgent)

    So a little over two years ago, I was in the full-on throes of brony madness.  My wife and I watched the show constantly, and I could never get enough pony.  The characters ran through my mind all the time, and I needed something to do with them.  It was in this time that I had this strong mental image of the girls on a door, sliding down a snowy mountain, and then looking disgruntled as they stood on it while traveling down a river.

    This was how A Door Jam was born, though I didn't use any of the scenes I'd originally thought of.  The 'door down the mountain' thing did end up as a chapter of Cheerilee's Thousand, though.

    I'd never written anything really, but I loved these characters, and I wanted more.  The idea of them with this door for some reason just kept coming back to me.  So I spent a quite a few hours writing it up, and you know what?  By the end, I was really liking it.  I was proud of my little story, and even more proud when I uploaded it here and it made quite a little splash for someone that no one had ever heard of.  

    Obviously, I was a savant, and the masses needed more.  A Door Jam was EQD bound.

    But a funny thing happened on the way to the community hub.  My story got rejected.  It was a really interesting wake up call to get that response saying, "Uh, nice little story, but you could learn a lot about story-telling, not to mention grammar."  I mean, they didn't say it like that, but that was the thrust of it.

    One strike for me, and I'm afraid I'll have to admit that I was pissed off.  I mean, just look at the response my story had received!  It was great.  Nuts to those guys!  I'd spiff up my story and resubmit.  No way were they going to defeat me!  It became my number one goal to have that story on EQD.

    Strike two, and I started sweating.  Maybe I wasn't quite the savant I thought I was.  Plus, I'd released Out of Fashion to almost no response.  Yikes.  So I really started boning up at that point.  I started reading grammar textbooks and asking for help.  I backburnered A Door Jam so that I could work on my skills.

    Fast forward about a year, and I'd had something like three stories on EQD.  I was really getting this writing thing, and I thought it might be about time to accomplish my number one goal.  I went back to the drawing board and completely re-wrote A Door Jam, taking it from six thousand words to ten thousand, adding description, eliminating telling, revamping dialogue.  It got a massive tune-up, and I loved the hell out of it.

    And no third strike!  It wasn't accepted, but it was sent back without a strike with a note to fix five things and it would be ship-shape.  I was over the moon!  I corrected those errors and resubmitted.

    Third strike.  The reviewer basically hated the story and pointed out several errors no one else had caught.  Now my story was done and I'd never achieve my number one goal.

    I was super mad.  I can't even express how angry I was about this.  I was pissed off at that review, but I was even more angry at myself.  I'd wasted two strikes when I was very inexperienced, and I hadn't caught these typos before I'd sent it back for the all-important third chance.  I'd failed, and I had a large portion of that to deal with.  Not all of it.  I still feel like I was screwed somewhat in that exchange, but there's no denying that it was my job to make sure the story was square before I sent it in, and I didn't do that.

    So I swallowed it, vowing to use that angry and sadness as a tool for motivation and learning.  It was still a pretty good story, even if EQD didn't accept it, and I'd learned a lot writing it.  I closed the book on it and wrote about Trixie and Discord.

    Then, one fine day, everything changed.

    EQD decided to get rid of the strikes.  Stories could be resubmitted until they passes, and all permanently rejected stories were given new life.  I could still achieve my dream, and I got back to work.

    Strike four.

    This was actually a good thing.  I got a response back full of "Hey, here are a bunch of typos, oh,  and you might want to think about these particular problems.  They are systemic in your writing."  This was great for me.  I got to view the story in a whole new light, and thus, all of my stories.  This is why I like working with a multitude of different editors.  I learn a little something new from each one.  This time, it was about my overuse of participle phrases and my tendency to shift needlessly into multiple character perspectives to the detriment of the story.  

    So I got to work again, and that's what I've been doing for the past few weeks.  Going over A Door Jam over and over and over.

    I sent it back in yesterday.  Today, it was accepted.

    I can't properly express how delighted I am.  I mean, you can probably see by the length of this post what it means to me, but I thought I'd never have a chance at getting my story up there, and somehow it happened, and it happened because I worked incredibly hard at it.  I happened because I had a lot of help from a lot of really great people, and if you are reading this, chances are you were part of that learning process in some way.  I've had a tremendous amount of support from all of you, and I'd like to personally thank everything who has taken the time to help me learn or to give me feedback.  It's the most valuable thing we have on this site.

    EQD is not the place it once was.  My stories there rarely get thousands of views the way they once did.  A Door Jam probably won't really benefit all that much from being there.  But, to me, it means the world.  It means that I fought and fought and fought, and at the end, I actually won.  At the end of the day, the boulder reached the top of the mountain, and I can finally rest if I so choose.

    I'm not sure where this leaves me as an author here.  I have no plans for quitting, but I don't really have that many goals left.  I've always been a goal-oriented person, and it's hard for me to just write for the joy of it.  I really do like it, but I'm generally doing it because I want to achieve something.  Maybe it's time to really re-evaluate that stance and learn to just create for the fun of creation.  Is that a new goal?  Probably.

    28 comments · 138 views
  • ...

Dreams are such delicate things, and Scootaloo’s are more fragile than most.

But in Equestria, dreams are protected.  Sometimes a filly just needs a helping hoof to learn how to hope again.

Edited by Knight of Cerebus

Cover art by Joemasterpencil.  Go check him out!

First Published
16th Mar 2014
Last Modified
16th Mar 2014
#1 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

This is such a a awesome story!:pinkiehappy:

#2 · 31w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

If I'm lucky, I'll be able to read this after work today

#3 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

>>4092018 Glad you liked it!

#4 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·


Well, I liked it already in it's pre-realese state, and I can't imagine how awesome it is now!

Oh, and by the way, I was very honoured that you sent me a pre-realese copie of the story!:twilightsmile:

#5 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

>>4092078  Well, I don't think a whole lot has changed since then.  That was the third draft that you saw, so I just made minor changes after that.

#6 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

>>4092058  I hope you love it!  :pinkiehappy:

#7 · 31w, 3d ago · 1 · ·


Well, it's still amazing! Where do all this stuff come from?

Anyway thanks and thanks again for letting me read it before the release! Your stuffs amazing, so please update you stories soon!:pinkiesmile:

#8 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

So many feels, I loved it! :twilightsmile:

#9 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

>>4092107  I have no idea where it comes from.  I just think a lot.  My mind is always coming up with stories.  I'd write more, but I'm kind of busy.  I write around my other life stuff.

Cheerilee's Thousand will have a lot of updates soon.  I have half a new chapter written, and Eakin has two back to back chapters in the wings after that.

#10 · 31w, 3d ago · 4 · ·

>>4092112  Thanks for reading it.  I really felt like Scootaloo needed a little bit more help than she received in Flight to the Finish, so this is what I came up with.

#11 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

I really liked this story, xjuggernaughtx. While I like all of the CMC, Scoots really resonates with me. She's got perhaps the deepest implied backstory of the three, and perhaps of the entire main cast, and I think you did a good job filling out some of the details. I like what you did with the character.

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#13 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

>>4092123 Well, you did Scootaloo justice! :scootangel:

#14 · 31w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

>>4092126 Thanks!  I'm really happy that you liked it.  I feel like Scoots needs a little more help than they give her in the show, so I wanted to show her as vulnerable. I really wanted somepony to care for her more than "Well, maybe you'll fly or you won't  It doesn't matter."  Of course it matters!  She might have to deal if she can't, but it matters!

#15 · 31w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

My heart wasn't ready for the feels!:heart::raritydespair:

#16 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

>>4092360 Hold on, hold on.  You've been preparing since yesterday!  How was your heart caught unawares?

#17 · 31w, 3d ago · 1 · ·


I know, but what Scootaoo did at the end surprised me!:raritycry:

#18 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

Is that a spot in the feature box I see? Why yes, yes it is! I knew this had the potential for it. Congratulations, man, you deserve it! :pinkiehappy:

#19 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

>>4092411 Wait, huh?  It is?  

Time to go turn on the Mature filter...

#20 · 31w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

>>4092411 Why, it is there!  YAAAAAAY!  :yay:

Thanks, man!

#21 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

This is a great Scootaloo one-shot, one of the best ones I've ever come across. I think it's a good interpretation that really captures a lot about her that the show leaves unspoken.

#22 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

>>4092488 Thanks!  The show has kind of left her in this weird limbo where she has all these difficulties, but she's just as chipper as the rest of the gang.  I just don't believe that could be true.  I wanted to show that she's struggling, on some level, but that there is help, and hope, for her.

#23 · 31w, 3d ago · 1 · 7 ·

Okay, the ending is--- horrifying. Tragedy tag or no tragedy tag, leaving the result of her jumping off the cliff uncertain implies the worst.

Either add a sentence where she gets airborne, or change the cliff to something slightly safer.

#24 · 31w, 3d ago · 8 · ·

>>4092525 The cliff is over a lake, close enough to the water that she can see the bugs that the fish are eating.  She's not in any danger.

#25 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

Who knew Luna was such a talented psychoanalyst?

#26 · 31w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

>>4092550  I figure that anyone who spends her time in dreams must intimately know the pony mind.

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#28 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

>>4092638 Well, I don't really have an idea for a sequel, but I'm not against the idea or anything.  If one hits me, I'll write it.

#29 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

>>4092648 Oki-doki-loki! I'll wait!

#30 · 31w, 3d ago · 2 · ·

Beautifully done! I really liked this, and I feel that you did a wonderful job with it. Your story descriptions worked out very nicely, too. :twilightsmile:

When I read the ending, this video instantly came to my mind. This is how this story made me see Scootaloo's first flight. Plus, the video rocks. Totally my head-cannon for Scootaloo, now.


Okay, the ending is--- horrifying. Tragedy tag or no tragedy tag, leaving the result of her jumping off the cliff uncertain implies the worst.

Just my own opinions, but: The ending in this case is truly interpreted by you as the reader. There is no definitive end, so the ending is not horrifying unless you believe it to be so. But consider this: Luna spent the entire story helping to convince Scoots that her problem was not that she couldn't fly, but that her depression and fear and outlook made it true despite the fact that she was born to fly. She simply needed someone to believe in her and care about her enough - and perceptive enough to see her problems for what they were - to show her the truth in a way she needed. But ultimately she still needed to make a leap of faith.

#31 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

... And then Scootaloo died....:trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright: haha nahh, good work.

Scootaloo's aunt seems a bit mean but I can understand since she didnt want a child to begin with. Come an Rainbow take her in, look how cute she is:scootangel:

#32 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

>>4092648 And I will await your decision with great intrest!

#33 · 31w, 3d ago · 2 · ·

>>4092884  Aww, thanks!  You guys really helped me out with the descriptions.  I'm so bad at them.  It was a good idea to run them by you guys.

And I think once Scoots gets into the air, she's going to be a speed demon to rival Rainbow.  She's going to be hungry for that feeling!

#34 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

>>4092901 Yeah, I wanted her aunt to be a sufficient source of angst, but not crazy over the top evil or anything.  Just enough to hurt Scoots and make her wish for something better.  

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#36 · 31w, 3d ago · 1 · 2 ·

Awaken, Scootaloo
Arise, Chicken
It had to be said.

#37 · 31w, 3d ago · 3 · ·

>>4093063 It's nice that there are so many people out there that want to see some positive stories with Scootaloo.  It always seems like I see just piles of misery heaped on that poor filly.  It makes me smile that there are people out there that want to read about her life getting better instead of worse.

#38 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

>>4093182 yeah, kinda feel bad for her past in my story, but in her Future she will be a beacon of hope! ;) no real spoilers there

#39 · 31w, 3d ago · · 1 ·

...And then she died!:pinkiecrazy:

#40 · 31w, 3d ago · 4 · ·

>>4093264  Don't make me have Rarity whap you on the head with a rolled-up magazine!  

#41 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

>>4093173 I just felt it was the proper thing to do.  Feels good, man!

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#44 · 31w, 3d ago · 2 · ·

>>4092525 Um... RC? Even if she can't get lift, she still has wings. She could glide to safety in the worst case.

:twilightsmile: Everything is certainly fine.

#45 · 31w, 3d ago · 5 · ·

At first, I thought this felt like a subversion of the lesson from Flight to the Finish, because Luna's approach is incredibly different from Rainbow Dash's.  But when you think about it, it actually reinforces the lesson in a unique way.  Scootaloo should listen to both of her mentors and take their words to heart.  Love who you are, but strive to be better.  Don't fly because you want to be like everypony else; fly because it's what you want to do.  And honestly, I couldn't agree more with that sentiment. :scootangel:

This was a beautiful piece of work that showcased Scootaloo's psyche and Princess Luna's abilities as Equestria's ultimate psychoanalyst.  Scoot deserves a hug, Luna deserves a salute, and you, my friend, deserve a round of applause.  Well done. :moustache:

#46 · 31w, 3d ago · 2 · ·

It's great to see this hit the featured box!

Luna takes on a great role in this. To help mold and reshape Scoots into what she needs to be. To (hopefully) transform her into a fully fledged pegasus. It's like a motherly role, a sister, something in that realm.

It's great to see this look into Scootaloo's mind. How she is/was angry and afraid. and is now overcoming that. She is making the leap of faith.

Great job.

#47 · 31w, 3d ago · 4 · ·

>>4093454 My take on it is that Rainbow's solution is practical.  That's fine, but it doesn't help Scootaloo's emotional need.  I wanted to show how somepony would deal with that side of the struggle.  It's just not as easy as "don't worry about it, we still love you no matter what."  I think that would be incredibly frustrating advice to receive, even if it's correct.

I wanted Luna to be able to help her with that emotional struggle, and together with Rainbow, they're working to make a whole Scootaloo.

#48 · 31w, 3d ago · · ·

>>4093700 That's what I wanted.  Scoots already has a sister, so I wanted someone in her life that would be more of a mother.

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