• Member Since 2nd Feb, 2014
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Fryguy


.................I'm Fryguy, and I like writing and stuff, I love making friends.

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Crysalis had grudged against Celestia for many years, and after her failure in taking over Canterlot, she was hostle against her, but when enemies march towards her kingdom to attack, she thinks having Equestria as friends can help them defend themselves, time is running out, and Celestia thinks Crysalis is bluffing. Can Crysalis convince Celestia to help her before her kingdom, and possibly Equestria, become ruins?
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This is My Entry to the Everfree Northwest FanFiction Competition, I hope you enjoy!

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 7 )

Even my grammar is not that fatal

The genre should be "Comedy"
:rainbowlaugh:

4014753
I was, but a error had happened while creating the story, and it made things really complicated. :derpyderp2:

But I'm glad you thought it was funny, because I like being a clown.:pinkiehappy: Like some...thing I know, What is that blob in my room?:rainbowhuh:

4014753
But I'll fix it.

I applaud you for having the gumption to enter the contest, and to have written in the first place, but I won't be casting a positive vote for this.

I hate to be blunt about this but with a good thirty more fics to read and vote for this one needed a good amount of work to make the grade. I wouldn't mind coming back and rereading it later on if it happens to get rewritten. Until then, the grammar issues and lack of compelling storytelling have me leaving it behind.

My apologies.

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That"s alright, I mean, I really think if I continue writing, I'll get better, I even said in my first blog, my first stories were not always the best. It's okay if you disliked this, I will get better in the future, you seem to be a nice fellow, I'll follow you.:pinkiehappy:

4117557
You won't get much out of following me, honestly.

I'll keep an eye on you to see how you progress. I'm curious like that.

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