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*Sees it's a Berserk crossover*
HOLY FUCKING SHIT!
I MUST READ THIS!
*Sees thumbs down*
HOLY FUCKING SHIT!
IIIIIIIIiiiiii'llll wait on this one.
Please tell me if it's good.
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Fagget.
On more important matters author, holy fuck a Berserk fic! But ,before i get too excited let's talk about your writing style. it's too descriptive, and while you could argue that a story coming out of Berserk could demand it (for it needs to be dark and edgy here an there), an excess of it could be overbearing. my advice would be to focus the story int "strong" actions and conversations, let Gatsu's character speak for himself instead of adjectives that you get going in the background . But, You story is in no way helpless. I liked the overall narration; it was fun to read on the voice of the narrator in the English dub.
By the way check your grammar, man errors are unforgivable.
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Uuuuuh. Are you talking to me or the author?
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to you both.
You are the only fagget tough.
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In my defense, I posted that when I saw it was 0 likes to 2 dislikes with no comments. Obviously, I'm gonna tread lightly until I see the comments saying whether it's actually good. It's how I roll.
Celestia supports Femto/Griffith? Once again , she proves she is worst pony.
It seems decent, but like others have said, too much description on the background. Not enough on the dialogue or the action. For example, the fight between Griffith and Guts. They have an exchange.... and then Guts wins? Griffith was kicking his ass before hand. Also, what happened to the new Band of the Hawk that Griffith had on him? Did Guts kill them?
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Thank you for taking your time to comment. I'll try and correct the excessive detail in the next chapter when I get around to finishing it.
When you say 'mang errors', what is it you mean?
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I do have a problem writing dialogue. Whenever I do it always feels clunky and awkward, but I just need practice I suppose.
Would the intro have been better if I had expanded on how Guts had got to Griffith?
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Have you actually read the story yet?
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Guts wins?
What about the fact that if he gets too close then his brand shoots out blood and basically paralyzes him in pain?
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Well he's wearing the berserker armour isn't he. The cursed armour that causes him to ignore pain and fixes broken bones at the cost of various effects, such as losing his taste, exsessive bleeding etc.
With that I'm pretty sure the pain from the brand doesn't matter too much. I'm in the process of rereading the manga, but I believe Schierkes teacher also put a talisman over the brand which reduces the effects, and in my mind it's not enough to completely remove the pain it stops him from being completely paralyzed by it.
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Alright.
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There is also another reason Griffith didn't fight back fully but I'm not going to say why yet.
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Okay. As long as there will be a good reason that this all is happening, I'm game.
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kay, i just put a little coma and used an actual word.
please do forgive my cryptic ways.
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It's fine, I was just a tad confused. As for my grammar, I do have an editor, who is currently away, but I unfortunately failed in getting myself a proofreader.
i.imgur.com/VAZMOH5.png
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I love it!
first things first
1. Cadence saying damn threw me off big time, seriously. OOC shit right there.
2. I cant help but feel that the attitudes are a bit watered down, but i guess thats just from not being the author of Berserk.
3. Reading the comments i noticed you said that youre in the process of reading the manga i cant help but feel you should read the 333 chapters that are there before writing the story.
4. Regarding the 333 chapters and the series being on Hiatus/Discontinued (i still dont know after a year or so), making a story beginning with the two fighting just doesnt feel like it should happen. The stage was never set, their powers never reach full peak, no special skills learned or magical whatevers, etc etc have happened in story so far that could give Guts a fighting chance against griffith and the other whatever-theyre-called gods.
5. Which brings me to this last point. Im just suggesting (dont HAVE to) that you scrap the idea with griffith in the story and make this a side story arc in the series like (SPOILERS) after he kills the sea god.
thats about it.
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1) I'll remedy that later.
2) I'll try and fix that in the next few chapters. What was it that made them seem watered down?
3) I've already read the thing twice. this current reread was to refamiliarise myself with the characters.
4) As for the setting I took the current characters and sent them into the future, so no Guts didn't have a chance at killing Griffith, there is reason he didn't.
5) Although I can see that being a good idea I'm not going to use it. I already know what I am aiming for with this and getting rid of Griffith would cause me to have to rethink the entire story.
I know it's not but the title pic reminds me of the Buster Sword
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I've heard of that somewhere...
>le google
Ah Final Fantasy. I can see the resemblance (but this one is more badass).
Write more please i really like Berserk and guts in my mind is the best charertar the anime has so please write more
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I'm in the process of writing the first chapter and am thinking of rewriting it, so it could be a while before the next chapter depending on how often I can sit down and write.
I'm going to have to read this. I actually have a Guts and Griffith figurines on my desk, next to Nightmare Moon and Octavia.
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I'm so jealous of you. I think I'm going to have to find those.
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54.org/go/ul6v1DQ
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Those look bloody marvelous.
guy/female whatever you are. when i found your story it was just after the months of me getting over that i got all the way caught up in berserk manga and anime wise. then i find this and its done pretty well so far so i cant even use that to let this one go. so out of desperate fan rage for more. YOU SONUHVAH BITCH YOU DRUG ME BACK INTO THIS NOW GIVE ME MOAR! GIVE ME MOAR RIGHT FUCKIN NOW! (sry dude)
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On the bright side, Berserk is back after a long hiatus and chapter 334 has been released. As for the fic it'll be another month or so before I have the time to finish writing the next chapter. I want to try and spend my spare time now making sure I know where this fic is heading.
4258834 ...well holy hell didnt ralize that! now thats some damn good timing! so uh yeah take your time now and keep up the good work and all that!
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If I had known I would have tried to finish the next chapter in time with the release but that didn't happen.
4259086 FUCK YES! the most awesome prostitutes ever are back! and yeah that would have been pretty kickass
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I will do, I just have a few bad habits when it comes to committing myself to things. I will get more of this written, I just can't promise when. I will however try to do it sooner rather than later.
And thanks for the favourite.
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I'm going to continue this but I haven't been writing anything for it recently, I've been pretty distracted and have been given a fair amount of college work to do during the holidays.
So be a little patient and I will try to get another chapter done in the near future.
very good and this story has great potential.
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I just need to actually continue writing it.
cool
is this dead
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More or less yeah. It's something I may get back to but I am horrible at disciplining myself, so no promises. Sorry.
6036196 damn im a Berserk fan
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So am I. Which is how I noticed the lack of crossovers Plus I'm a general fan of dark fiction and have a few cravings for it. I hope to do a lot of writing done during the next school year so who knows, I may come back to this. Probably editing the first chapter since now I know how gryphonia/falconia (been a while since I've read the most recent chapters) looks I can write the first scene how I originally intended without fear of it being contradicted by Miura.
6082597 wish you luck
Is there more coming? Because this was a fun read.
This is dead...
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This is even MORE dead if I commented a YEAR ago and nothing has changed in that time.
Dead for 10 years