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Luna is a second year student at the Equestrian International University. As a recluse with no friends she heads through life hardly paying attention to it. That changes when, at the start of the year, she gains a new roommate named Twilight Sparkle. Despite initial hostilities the two grow close, and set out to accomplish their dreams with music.
TwiLuna shipping.
NOTE: The cover art was made by and belongs to bannanamilk from deviantart.
This is off to an intresting start. I can really see Shining Armor fussing over twilight like a mother hen given the situation. Though what promieses to be most intresting is how Twilight and Luna's first meeting plays out. I wouldn't be surprised to see Celestia drop in durring the middle of it and further complicate matters. Also Discord should be intresting to watch as well.
>>475919 I agree. Discord would be really fun to hang around with, but I have to carry over their enmity from the show somehow. As for RariDash, I'm more of an AppleDash fan, but I have no plans to include Applejack at the moment. I'll consider it.
>>475979 I currently have two other stories I'm working on, one of which I'm more dedicated to than this and other. However, I have a schedule for my writing now, so updates shouldn't be too far off. With the exception of this one's very next update. Sorry for making you wait, but I have to stay organized to keep myself producing. I'm also happy to have inspired you.
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i think ill hold back on getting a solid opinion on this story just yet, however, i have to say; i have been waiting for this and the opening chapter did more than just fulfill my expectations, good job!
i have a few questions about how things work in this world, like a lot about alicorns and discord. but i guess ill get my answers soon enough
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i already managed to get the 'i.want.MORE!' feeling for this one as well, and its only the first chapter
... looking forward to see the next chapter of this!
>>476576 I'm really happy this first chapter pleased you. Because it was basically introduction I wasn't sure how it would be taken, but the response has been more positive than when I first started True Colors. I hope the future chapters will please you. On Discord and the alicorns, however, I intend to remain vague. I don't want to do TOO much world-building for this. Most everything will take place at EIU, and unimportant details will usually be only partially explained. Sorry if that disappoints you.
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i was thinking along the lines of how some things work in this universe, specifically:
how aging work for alicorns and discord? and if different than normal; how old are luna, celestia and discord?
how luna's and celestia's respective talent work? i mean, do they still raise the sun and the moon?
does discord have any magic and if he does how it work? why is he the only draconequus if he isnt the spirit of disharmony and chaos?
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these were just the questions that came to the top of my head, the only really important ones to me are the ones about luna's and celestia's ages and their talents
>>476826 It'll be told later, but it's not a big secret so...Celestia is 27, Luna is 21, and Twilight is 15. Alicorns are mortal, and Discord is still a reality-bending asshole, if not quite as powerful. Celestia and Luna do not raise the sun or moon, and I have no excuse for their cutie-marks in truth. Discord is also mortal. Hope that answers all your questions.
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yes it does, many thanks. on the part about their talents though; maybe you could have them talented in the magic that belongs to each celestial body (i cant think of anything for the sun right now; but the moon is usually associated with dream and illusion magic). or you could just skip explaining it and hope no one notices!
This is actually a pretty interesting concept. Seeing our favorite ponies in an alternate universe kind of school setting. It's going to be fun seeing how their new roles play out! Consider me hooked.
That being said, I'm also a little hesitant with TwiLuna having such a big age gap. Twilight is 15 but is being shipped with Luna whose 21? Now I'm not an expert when it comes to relationships, but having such a big age gap between our ponies feels odd, personally.
But now I'm reminded that pretty much every TwiLuna ship has the obvious age difference to the point where it's ridiculous... But that's kind of in a fantasy setting type deal. This story feels like it's attempting to strike a more realistic, down to earth sort of tone.
It's nothing story breaking or anything (heck, it's only the first chapter, I shouldn't be so quick to judge.) But I am curious to see how it's dealt with.
Keep at it!
>>477455 The age gap is actually on purpose. Twilight's underage, so their eventual relationship wouldn't exactly be welcomed by most. It's an obstacle to be overcome. I'm glad you're interested, and I hope that future chapters meet your standards.
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This interests me, but I have to say: I found myself skipping over some of the chunks of descriptive text like Discord's, which is sizeable and rather dry. Even if you don't want to shorten things down to the dialogue describing his appearance in the show, I would suggest trying to have more fun with the narration and breaking some paragraphs down into smaller chunks for ease of reading.
A general rule regarding paragraphs is that a paragraph should cover a single thought or subject; Celestia's relationship with Discord, his physical appearance, etc. This is good, because it generally means never delivering any information important to understanding the direction of the scene more than a few sentences into a paragraph. That way if someone does reach their point of saturation regarding the details of Discord's handsome features or a scene of students milling about halfway through, they can safely assure themselves that they "get the idea" and move on to the next "thought." It may seem silly to cater to someone who would do that, but more than anything it aids readability and will actually prevent it by reducing reader fatigue if done well.
DISCORD SHOULD BE A SCIENCE PROFESSOR AT THE UNIVERSITY.
Except in his class, every experiment mysteriously goes haywire, each in its own special way...
Two students separately perform the experiment and follow the directions perfectly, and instead of the correct result, one beaker explodes and the other turns everypony it touches into potted plants! CHAOS ENSUES!
And Discord, being Discord, gives them both an A+! THE ONLY WAY TO FAIL IS TO SUCCEED, FOALS.
Hey!
Gotta say, much of the fun from this chapter comes from seeing what roles the mane 6 and the various characters are placed in. So it's always a treat to see another character revealed. As for the chapter itself I thought it was some nice world building going on. We got some initial impressions of what Twilights relationships will be like with much of the student body.
Can't wait for the next chapter
awesome chapter! it's very entertaining to see the characters interact with each other so differently; they seem to have their "normal" personalities, but the circumstances creates different situations than what would normally happen
im interested in finding out what twi meant by "pills" and "the issue of keeping her alive", if those two are connected like i think; we have a very dramatic situation brewing!
luna's and celestia's respective personalities are awesome so far as well; especially luna's.
dont have much more than that to comment on; as you said, not much really happened this chapter. don't get me wrong though, loved the stuff that did happen!
Now that perks my curiosity slightly... Twilight also getting angry was not a good thing. I wonder if she is like the Hulk? 
On a more serious note, I have to wonder if the pills are to keep her powerful magic under control? If Celestia was never there to teach her how to control it, how much damage would her first magical surge have caused?
That is enough wild guessing for now.
Late or not, it was still a fun chapter. Rainbow Ass... I mean Dash and Gilda are going to be causing trouble I just know it. 
Also, Pinkie Pie is Pinkie Pie no matter what the world is like. It is just one of those laws.
I'm not bothered at all about the "lack" of things happening in this chapter. After all, this is only the second chapter, and you're still introducing characters and setting the stage at this point. You effectively portrayed Twilight as being a *lot* younger than most of the other students around her. So hooray for that, and keep it up! I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
When i seen this Updated i was all like
>>566162 But Rapidashes suuuuuuck! 
Seriously! If you ever caught one in the old games you'd see their stats are low as shit. Fluttershy is more powerful than Rapidash.
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Hmm, well I can see that things are going to start getting more turbulent for Twilight. Rainbow Dash and Gilda will be sure sto spread the word about the undersized egghead, as are most of the beings she has classes with. i don't think they'll all be malicious but still having someone so young there is bound to raise a fuss especialy if the University invited her. Throw in luna being a rather mood room mate I can tell that things will only get more intresting from here. the only bad news is the wait for the next chapter, ah well I'll have true colors to keep me company till then.
>>592630 Ah, Quilly. She's a good friend. I'm glad you're liking this, and I hope you'll continue to enjoy it. Also, Luna appreciates your consideration. Sadly, she likes a smiley to properly express her emotions. So Twilight will do it instead. 
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>>593356 Sorry but it'll be a while. This week I'm starting my third story, Big Sister. Next week I'm updating True Colors again. THEN I'll update this. Then True Colors. Then Big Sister. I believe the pattern is apparent. Sorry for making you wait, but, hey patience pays off sometimes.
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>>670479 It's Mr, and I am. However, I am going on a trip from tomorrow to late sunday, and I find myself unable to finish this in time. Don't worry though, I will update this next week instead of True Colors. After all, I am updating that more often, and I can afford to skip updating it to get a big chapter for this out, and, yes, current plans are that this next chapter will likely be big.
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>>758761 Glad to hear you liked it. The thing is though, Rainbow didn't intend to cause Twilight's little episode there. So how is she gonna react to it? That'll be the real tell about her attitude...Though, yeah, she is kind of bitch in this one.
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Well, it was more the act they did. They wanted to embarrass Twilight in front of the entire campus (well, most of it) and make her leave. Pretty much in the same style as Carrie.
There is being a jerk and then there is being the kind of bully that the bullied eventually snaps and murders in a fit of rage...
But as you say, RD's reaction will be the telling point if she has crossed the moral event horizon or not.
>>758939 That's true, but you never know what someone else has been through in life. Twilight did provoke the prank. Even if she did so unintentionally. I'm not defending Rainbow Dash's actions by any means, but she did have more of a reason than simply bullying Twilight to perform the prank.
>>758946 A fairly good point. 
For convenience let us simply say...PLOTHOLE! Sorry for the pun, and, yes, Rainbow Dash shall receive an earful from Rarity. She should be far more afraid of Luna, though.
>>758968 I'm fairly certain there's no such thing as detention in college, but rest assured they will pay.
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Honestly, I want to know how Celestia is going to react to this. I mean, the life you've been put in charge of nearly dying because of two idiots would probably push many a person over the edge.
Beyond that, great story. Looking forward to the next update in a few weeks.
>>759104 I'm not sure how Tia's gonna react yet, but considering Luna's gonna be pissed now that her and Twi are friends I think they're screwed. Two pissed off alicorns make for dangerous enemies.
>>759060 No it wasn't. I was having trouble coming up with a prank, so I asked a friend of mine for an idea. He suggested dumping blood on Twilight, so that's what I did. It worked out well.
Also, isn't it awesome when that happens?
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d'awesome chapter! or, at least the end, everything else was just plain awesome
i was kind of afraid that luna wouldn't warm up to twi for a long time there but in a convenient turn of events, RD and gilda actually helped out there...they still gotta pay thought...but at the same time, im already beginning to feel sorry for them, i bet nothing earns you enemies like nearly killing a filly (she's not really that young, but you get my point) in the middle of a party where everyone is supposed to have fun; especially when said filly is friends with two alicorns and your roommate...
>>759459 Oh yeah. Rainbow's got a lot to make up for. She and Gilda are going to have no peace for a good long while. On the flipside Luna and Twi are friends now, and you'd have to be crazy to think Luna's not gonna be protective of her after this.
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